Natalia DeMortes First Weapon Attack.

Thu Apr 11, 2013 7:34 pm

Name Of Character: Natalia DeMortes
Link To Character Profile: https://www.platinumhearts.net/t9168-natalia-de-mortes-approved-4-3#56972
Reasons For Upgrading: special circumstance During her own training session.
What Are You Upgrading: Chaotic strike: Heaven and hell barrage!: This attack will cause Natalia's energy to flair up anmd turn black with a white flamrish type look to it. She then takes her sword into her hands and mutters a few words under her breath. "From the deapths of heaven and hell we will strike you down with everything we are! Chaotic strike! Heaven and Hell Barage!" As she stated this the energy and her would seem to vanish as it it had never really existed in the first place. The vanishing trick is cause of a weak version of time and space manipulation. ITs basis is of the energy of darkness and light createing a form of chaotic warp in the time and space of the area of the attack. so when she enters the effected area it appears that she has vanished complete. REi all traces of her dissapear entirely. untill she reaches the desired point that has her exiting said area of effect.

The area within the meter resinance of the star being created is a form of broken reality caused by the merger of the two elements thats said to be immpossible to merge. Natalia herself does not create this space willinginly upon her times useing it untill its mastered. Its a form of time and space disruption from the massive energy colision of the two elements of darkness and light. Sense normally the two appose each other with them being forced together withing the attack it causes an unbalanced distortion within the fabric of reality within the enclosed space of the target that the distance is said down below. The tear in the fabric of reality only lasts while the energy is being forced to merge in order to create said attack in the first place. the end result is the fabric of time and space is altered within the field of the attacks raidus only given the extremely unstable energy used that ends up being focused upon her said target at the time.

Ever so often she will appear in random diffrent areas all around the person in spacific area's around the persons body. Her body posed with her sword in diffrent varrying poses. she would soon reappear back in the spot she started with her sword aimed at the target. Natalia will then slam the swords tip into the ground with a surge of energy comeing from her blade to the ground. multiple lines would quickly appear on the ground. The lines would cross each other at one point. thats point would be right under the target she is attack. it would create a alternate version of a 10 point star that extends 3 feet outword from the person she is attacking. After the symbol completely lights up a flame of Darkness and light will engulf the area within the mark and shoot upwords sending the target upwords with a powerfull surge of energy. the energy will spiral around movein in various dirrections. all while hitting the target with blades of darkness and light in differing areas upon the body untill the energy charges to the ground slamming the target with brute force to the ground. The blades of darkness and light are an outword extension of the attack she preformed to create the markings on the ground that led to the attack.

Sense the markings all mead to said target its a physical showing of the damage they take useing the energy focal point of the attack its self. The drain will be great upin natalia when useing it for the first time at least. The drain will slowly decrease the more she uses it and gains more control over the ability itself.
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Thu Apr 11, 2013 8:05 pm

Mmk, here's what I need from you to add to this.

First
What is the size of this star, exactly? How wide is it?

Second
I imagine for a four tier that this technique would be IMMENSELY tiring, possibly even resulting in falling unconscious from the sheer amount. Please mention the massive energy draw.

Third
Please define what "swords of light and dark" do when they hit someone. As you can imagine, it would be quite confusing if you got hit by swords of light and dark and they just passed through you, as they are only shadows and absence of shadows!

Fourth
You need to say that she can't do anything while flashing in these different poses, as you don't define that.

Fifth
What does it mean by "vanish"? Does that mean her spiritual pressure and everything disappear? Or is she just kinda warping around?

Writing Tip
You can use line breaks... I recommend using one in the middle of this so it is easier to read. That's just structure stuff, but it will help in your communication with others.

Thu Apr 11, 2013 8:26 pm

does that help any?

Thu Apr 11, 2013 9:17 pm

That's much better, but for one thing...

I'm sorry, but a 4 tier cannot use the sheer amount of energy it takes to make forces like that affect the fabric of time/space/reality.

Mon Apr 29, 2013 10:25 am

♣ WHAT'S GOING ON WITH THIS ♣

I'm going to be moving this into the Work In Progress section because there has't been any sort of updates from JJ or Natalia.

Tue May 14, 2013 8:11 pm

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Aivee Moving Services!

Due to this application being in WIP for over 2 Weeks, I've moved this application to Old WIP! You can still edit and work on it in that section and if you finish? Just post in This topic. Right.. that'd be the usual.. but this topic.. what.. dunno.

Fri Sep 13, 2013 4:13 pm

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Not sure how this got here but i will be moving this to denied upgrades due to this looking more like a denied upgrade then a old wip application

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