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Wed Apr 18, 2012 8:23 pm
Enja Iramasha James59Chocolate

Kade. I'm tired of this. I really, really am. All you did was give up on your old character and make a new one, which was exactly the same. I do see you changed some things. However, you even haven't changed the things I told you to in some places from my last check, such as that one that "Is hurt by bankai level" Just for this, having me repeating what I said before. That's what makes this so tiring. There are easily some shikai on the site stronger than bankais. However, this time I'm moving it to WIP. When it is truly, honestly fixed, I will review it again. That is all I have to say by this point on Enja.




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Mon Apr 23, 2012 4:48 pm
Application Checklist
  • Name [X]
  • Appropriate Age [X]
  • Gender [X]
  • Appearance Present [X]
  • Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
  • 10 sentences for personality [X]
  • History is of appropriate length [X]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [O]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [O]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
  • Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[X]
  • RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) [X]
  • RP Sample is 10 sentences [X]


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100% True Lord of War Rage: The birthright and gift from the witch leader Haggis his birthday present so to speak. This is something like a rage power up mode, Enja would have to beaten badly for his form to activate. Enja's eyes will dissapear and the color of his reiatsu to turn blood red. The rage power will be unleashed. The rage power bulks up his muscles, increases his speed and sharpens his claws yet the power up only lasts for a limited time. Enja can only use it a desperate situation when he's beaten or someone bad has happen to him. Yet that is the only damn time when the power up become active so he can use it. One flaw with it.....Water attacks can cancel it out the power up completely. Talking helps too... ( Need the post limit)

Augmented Pyrokinesis Abilities: Kain Bashara actually taught Enja the many ways to use the fire power known as pyrokinesis. Which can use it create an assortment of attack & defnse fire types from his hands. During his battles with dragons, Enja learn vast knowledge into pyromancy using fire to create some attacks/defenses or enhanced some of attacks and some abilities.(Explain what all he can do with the ability )

Full Demon State: Kain's yōkai blood takes over anytime when his life is in danger and the sword Tessaiga is out of reach. Kain first transformed when a demon, Goshinki, broke the demon sword with its fangs. When transformed, Kain's irises and sclerea turn red, and his pupils turn blue and become elliptical-shaped, similar to that of true full breed yokai's form. Ragged purple stripes appear below his eyes, he develops thin black marks around his eyes, and his fangs and claws become more pronounced. Once transformed, his physical abilities are roughly doubled. However, when he is in this form, his demon blood causes his human soul to decay, causing him to become overwhelmed by a mindless, savage bloodlust that drives him to kill anything in his path. With each transformation, this form becomes easier to trigger and harder for him to come out of. After years of training, Kain finally mastered the form controlling of the inner yokai.(Take out the doubled part)

Yokai Wolf Form: Kain's true form is a giant white demonwolf dog with markings similar to the ones he has in his human form. In the anime, he transforms surrounded in a bright red/pink aura or has a tornado circling around him. His sclera becomes red, and the pupils blue; the yōkai marks on his body widen and become more apparent: the stripes on his cheeks which are usually smooth become jagged and change into a somewhat fiercer color.(Take out the Anime part and fix it)

Control: The control that Enja has over the ziamichi is an 8. Their agreement to help other take down their enemies yet they are some bad times. When the ziamichi will take control when Enja lost control, hurt or it greatly wounded.(Last i checked control is given by app checker when approved)

Fix this then we will move on to the rest of the app


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Tue Apr 24, 2012 5:55 am
When he was a cat demon, Enja could only sense spiritual pressure from his tail and cat eyes. Which his tail would alert him by tapping on his backside if the bastard was strong or a threat was coiming. Now this ability been enhanced so the demon can sense spiritual pressure like a normal captain shinigami or espada. To mainly detect people or see how powerful the bastard or people are.

(When the hell was he a cat demon

Fireball Blast: A ball of fire energy blast. A medium weak attack if he wants to catch people off guard. It be charged into stronger fireball attack but it can dodged or blocked however. He can only use this attack once every 1 post, and it has the strength of a Cero.

(Make it the strength of a bala)

And fix the grammar please


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