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  • Name [X]
  • Appropriate Age [X]
  • Gender [X]
  • Appearance Present [X]
  • Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
  • 10 sentences for personality [X]
  • History is of appropriate length [X]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [X]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [X]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
  • Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[X]
  • RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) [X]
  • RP Sample is 10 sentences [X]


Comments/Notes: Mainly giving this tier for leader purposes
Tier: 0-2


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Vandesdelca Iramasha [APPROVED 0-2+] Empty Re: Vandesdelca Iramasha [APPROVED 0-2+]

Sat Jun 09, 2012 12:36 am
HOLD IT

I have noted some problems not all down below, I shall list more once the current list is fixed. So till than moved to WIP


“The molecules move so rapidly that the kinetic energy is through the roof compared to average fire or energy-enhanced fire. The temperature average can get much higher than 5000 degrees Fahrenheit rather easily. Van has easy manipulation over this fire as he's been using Maikeru for millennia, being able to control it the way he imagines it. He can generate a pretty-much infinite amount of this white-hot holy fire from Maikeru, a testament to his control over it. It also has increased damage to demons (not demon Iramasha, but actual demons), as it is holy fire and demons are naturally evil/dark creatures. By covering Maikeru in this Holy Fire, he can increase the Seishin Buki's overall damage output. When he strikes things with metal or ice on them, he can melt both with one strike. By slashing the air, he can create blasts of Holy Fire similar to the way Ichigo Kurosaki creates waves of energy with his Getsuga Tensho ability. ”

You list here that Van can pretty much summon forth a endless amount of these flames with ease. You state that there about 5000 fahrenheit which is akin to napalm, which wouldn't be so bad if it was more limited, but since you said that the kinetic energy is thought the roof, and gave no real example for it, you're pretty much summoning a endless amount of enhanced napalm at once that can harm demons even more, with again no real example of how much damage increase for that damage atop of everything else. And as you state you say he can pretty much destroy all forms of weapons as most of them are made of metal, and people with very strong ice powers, such as those Rihiku who whole powerset is swords and ice, meaning you can melt all of his ice attacks with one blow. And there is no visible drawbacks listed here, or how much energy it takes to use such a move.

“Wisdom, Experience, Knowledge, and Intelligence: As stated in his personality, Van is a very wise man, partly due to the high amount of years he has spent living, and also because of his innate personality to be very good when it comes to giving advice. Also, as an Angel Iramasha, he has a natural affinity towards deducing the inner nature of those around him. Along with gaining a vast ocean of knowledge throughout his long life, Van has also accumulated quite a bit of experience from his various ventures. During World War II, he was in Europe, helping wandering souls make it to Soul Society. This is when he truly experienced the pain war can cause, forcing him to realize there was no good reason for combat and killing. He has experienced the pure destructive force of Touketsu, Ender, and Kin Iramasha as well. When he isn't busy, Van will read books from his humongous library consisting of over 10,000 books of various genres and origins.”

Alright, this is the sort of thing that goes into personalty, and a lot of this is run on’s, just to make your app longer, you could of saved space just by keeping this in personality than saying its a power.

“Physical Prowess: Although Van is primarily an energy-based fighter, when he fights physically, he hits hard. He gives up speed and mobility for pure power, and can unleash bone-crushing blows with Maikeru. He has trained himself to not only be extremely strong, but also pretty enduring as well. He can not only give damage, but also take a considerable amount from his enemies too. He has demonstrated his strength on multiple occasions, mainly when he was doing miracles on Earth, such as saving people from crashes, and even moving entire cruise liners so they wouldn't crash into an iceberg or something similar to that type of situation. His speed, while given up for strength, is still relatively high, giving him an advantage over slow fighters weaker than him”

Normally I wouldn't mind people with high physical power, but you state that he is extremely strong, as most energy fighters give up speed and physical power for their better damage output. which while okay examples, you gave no real examples of what he really do, can he punch out a mountain? How much can he take at once before falling down, etc. You state that he is high in speed, meaning you're contradicting yourself, since you gave no real example, other than saying he faster than those weaker than himself, his tier is near max being 0-2+ which means he going to be extremely fast regardless.

“Healing Abilities: A big part of Van's arsenal of abilities is not even his offensive capabilities; no, it's his healing powers. Due to being an Angel Iramasha, he has a natural affinity to healing techniques. He can heal even those near death, and can fully heal minor injuries quickly and easily without needing to consume even a moderate amount of energy. When he was on Earth performing miracles, he was healing many humans, quincy, shinigami, and others. If someone needed his help, he healed them. “

Again no real visible drawbacks other than saying he uses an small amount of energy. meaning you can save those near death with no real side effects, while decent power, atop of everything else he can already is a bit overpowering.

“Blade Skill: Through years and years of hardwork and training, Van has become an extremely formidable foe with his Seishin Buki and short swords in general. While he mainly uses energy attacks in battle, he is very skillful with a blade. He can fight on par with those of equal strength that are skilled with blades as well, and can even go on the offensive with his sword. A big part of his fighting style with his sword, is using Maikeru to bash and destroy with his own tremendous physical strength; he is not a swift sword fighter. Instead, he prefers to land heavy blows on opponents. “

You state he is skillful with a blade, yet no real examples, or sword techs he can do, yes you did state that he uses heavy blows, but that isn’t a style to go off of. And stating that he can fight on equal level of those in blades. Meaning your saying he can fight grand masters despite relying on energy attacks.

“Light Control: As an Angel Iramasha, Van has a natural affinity for light. However, with all of the miracles he has performed and his growth as an Angel (including the use of his unlocked forms), he has gained total control over the element of light. Whether it be natural light or artificial light, it lies in the domain of Vandesdelca to be controlled. He can even generate physical weapons made of light particles that can slice through objects as though it's a solid blade, and because of the speed of light particles, a tremendous amount of kinetic energy is generated as well, which can cause burns and scorch objects, etc. He can erect barriers made of light as well, and pretty much use light for almost any purpose. In his words "The world is my canvas...and light is my paintbrush." Basically, he has learned to alter light in such a way that when he thinks of something, he can make it out of light. By generating light, he can still fight with it in extremely dark places and can even override opponents' abilities that cancel light. Van can completely remove all light from any given area, which could have a few side effects. One thing he could do after that is make it extremely bright in said area to blind the person on a high level, giving himself an advantage. Or, he could remove all the light in a large area, and then manipulate the darkness element to make it so only he could see inside the area, giving him another advantage. “

Youre stating that you can make anything that Van can think of can be formed from light, which is impossible, and no this isn’t like the green lantern which a power ring that can generate a variety of effects, sustained purely by the ring wearer's imagination and strength of will. The greater the user's will power, the more effective the ring is, however they had to use three factors, willpower, imagination, and knowledge, and even then they are limited to certain forms, since they can’t truly make everything they can think of.And near the end you state you can remove light in the area, and then control DARKNESS, so far with everything he has is to much.

“Tokugi: These are his weakest spells in his arsenal, though they are still extremely powerful compared to standard Iramasha spells. With Radiant Blade, he covers Maikeru, his Seishin Buki, in energy, and then thrusts forward, sending the energy towards his opponent at a moderate speed. His other spells include basic healing spells, as well as Cero-like abilities he has mastered over years of use.”

You state spell’s meaning a lot more than that is listed here, you said mastered over the years, we need a full list of what he can do. not very vague info.

“Increased Holy Fire Control: While in his Angelic Release form, Van has even more control over the fire created by his Seishin Buki Maikeru. Not only can he increase the temperature to even higher levels, but he can also control it's movements and form much easier and on a higher level now. He can make creatures and people made of this holy fire. An example would be him making a large winged dragon of holy fire or even something smaller like a cheetah or lion, and control the 'creatures' very skillfully”.

Again no visible drawbacks, this needs drawbacks if your doing something this complex.

“Solar Flare: By combining his light energy control and his holy fire he can generate through use of Maikeru, he can create a massive blast of power that combines both the radiant energy of light (including its high kinetic energy potential) and the intense flames from Maikeru. This blast is extremely bright, able to blind spectators, as well as extremely, extremely, hot, as the particles move at insane speeds, increasing the overall heat used. This blast can be manipulated like a whip, with Maikeru used as the focal point for manipulation. The whip is 5o feet long and very powerful. The energy required to sustain this isn't much for Vandesdelca since he can manipulate light at high levels and has an insane amount of Holy Energy anyway.”

You state very powerful, but hardly any cost for it? this needs more drawbacks in order to be used more effectively.

“Divine Right: This is the only new ability Van gains access to when he enters his Awakening Divinity form, though, arguably, the only one he would ever need in this form. Divine Right is a rather interesting ability, and can either be extremely weak, or extremely powerful and useful, depending on how it's used by Vandesdelca. Basically, he can manipulate pretty much everything around him to a high extent. To go more into detail, I'll describe a few things. This ability is based on his Absolute Energy, which he uses to change and control his surroundings. Say there is dirt on the ground. He can use that dirt to create entire skyscrapers made of steel. How does he do this, you ask? Since Absolute Energy can use any element, he takes it a step further to make it so he can use virtually any material known to him to chance the form of one material to another. Essentially, he can change one object to a different object of a different material as he sees fit. The larger the transformation, the more energy is required, however due to his massive reserves of energy already, he doesn't really need to worry about large transformations unless used in rapid succession. The major downside to this ability is he needs something to get started; basically, he needs a base. To create that building, he needs the dirt for the base. This doesn't mean he needs an entire buildings worth of dirt, but depending on the size of the building, he will need a relative amount of the dirt to begin with. He can't make the empire state building with a fistful of dirt. He could, but he would be so exhausted afterwards, he wouldn't be able to fight at all.

Creation of 10, 000 Blades: As the name implies, this technique includes creating roughly ten thousand or more various weapons from the surrounding terrain and various objects around Vandesdelca. The more he uses, the more weapons hes able to make and use. The weapons can vary in size, but they are usually just thousands of swords, whether they are long or short swords doesn't really matter. After creating all of these swords, who's blades/etc are hardened and empowered by the energy that formed them, can be used for various purposes: Van could make a huge shield/wall of them to protect him, or he could launch them all at his enemy at once as a sort of "Hail Mary" all-out attack.”

No, just no, This is shimura whole powerset, something which Kendall/Agito/Shirou. stated countless times in Xat for his character, a character that which as a long history with the site, and reasons she has that power as well. then the 10,000 blades is too much like Gilgamesh powerset. Which again is something that Kendall said in Xat countless times.



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