Momo Hinamori [APPROVED, 0-4]

Just gonna say that Rav did NOT make a new app for this, and so if you'd like to adopt this character, please either post the RP sample in /here/ OR make a new application for her. Posting this simply to clear up any misinformation.

Two weeks after her visit, Momo was sitting once more at her desk in her office, sighing. Two weeks! It shouldn’t have taken more than a couple of hours to deliver a basket of amanatto, but still hadn’t gotten back to her.

Did he forget? Was he just busy?

…She paused to consider the probability of the last one, before shaking her head. No no, he always told her. There was nothing for it but to be patient.

But as the scratching of her pen was the only sound in her room, she was once more dragged into a daydream. Her wandering thoughts included what Toshiro was up to, what he was up to, but perhaps most of all whether she should inquire her captain about installing a music box of some kind in her office. Whilst she was rather appreciative of nature’s sounds from the veranda to her right, it might be worth knowing what her captain enjoyed.

Scritch scratch scratch she went, endlessly trying to distract herself from her possessive thoughts.

"Hey, Momo, I took the package to the captain.”

She squeaked a little in surprise at the sudden address and nearly jogged her pen, before the memory of the voice's owner surfaced.

"Byakurai-kun!" she said with some relief, raising her head. Her subordinate appeared to be well as he was in an outfit of leisure, a blue kimono like garb. But he didn't seem to be injured at the very least...but it was difficult to tell.

But then she huffed a cheek, pouting. He could've knocked! Not to mention he was seeing his lieutenant without his uniform on.

"N-Next time could you knock please?" she mumbled, disliking reprimanding him, before remembering he said he visited Toshiro. "B-But thank you for visiting him!"

She glanced to the aside worriedly as she thought about the white-haired captain, her lip wobbled.

"Was he...okay?" she asked hesitantly, big brown eyes looking uneasily up to him.

The shinigami walked up to her desk at her question, and he lowered his voice. Glancing behind him Momo saw the door was open, but she appreciated the secrecy.

"So, he was a bit cold, yet understandable. We had a little discussion and he was grateful for the gift. He sure seemed depressed, any idea why?”

"Depressed?" repeated Momo, eyes wide. Her shock was geniune, why on earth would Toshiro be that way? Sure, they hadn't spoken a lot lately, but he knew she was well now surely? That meant it couldn't be about her, so was something else troubling him? "I have no idea...I'm worried."

She began fiddling with her fingers anxiously.

"Being a bit cold is just like him though," she managed an awkward laugh.

But she bowed her head, staring at her hands.

"What should I do..." she mumbled, more to herself than anything.

[mod]The above attempt is denied.

So first of all, you'll need a different dialogue color for Momo if you do end up getting her in the future. That is nigh-unreadable in its current state.

The main issue with the sample is that it feels as though this was written with a specific incident in mind when it comes to Hitsugaya. However, there are no hints to this situation so it comes off as though they're distant lovers. Hitsugaya is mad, Momo thinks it's towards her, but is too shy to ask. In another sense, it's like she's thinking he's cheating on her.

There is also an issue with how Momo is portrayed maturity-wise. This is 400 years in the future.
While Momo may be somewhat stuck in the past, this sample feels like 2017 Momo, not 2417 Momo.
This doesn't read like a Momo who has experienced any of the major changes that happened during the PH timeline.

Think about how some of the changes PH has made would affect her—how would she be after the Gotei has been nearly destroyed 3 or 4 times over the past 400 years, how she'd be after the Gotei 13 was reformed into the Gotei United, etc.

With that said, you are not barred from applying for Momo again. You may try again in 2 weeks' time, on September 10.[/mod]

Four hundred years...it almost felt like yesterday that Aizen was defeated after the events in Karakura
Town. Momo can still remember the time she tried to save Rangiku from hallibel's fracciones and declaring her once beloved friend and captain Aizen an enemy, she wanted to see the good in him but that was beyond remorse everything he's done to not only herself but her friends was beyond repair.

After the confrontation with Aizen and the living world safe she thought everything would go back to the way they were...but oh was she wrong...dead wrong

The recent attacks on the Soul society were an unpleasant one, these new creatures weren't the traditional hollow or arrancar they seemed more and came within the hundreds maybe even thousands.
It was fortunate that they were able to hold them off for a while until reinforcements arrived.

Despite a few a few good things have happened in the last hundred years for one the Gotei she once knew was now combined into one singular organization called the Gotei United, a place in which focuses on preserving the soul cycle and helping all members even the Vizards a group in which was frowned down upon in the past.

However through the course of years she's grown accustomed to it and it's great to dwell in the past but for now a bright future is ahead.

Since then momo has been training with her zanpaktou tobiume for many years learning new techniques and incorporating stronger, more efficient Kido to subdue her foes.


Momo waited until everyone was asleep and sneaked out utilizing a hell butterfly to ho to the human world... heading off to Karakura town, it would be punishable if any of the captains found out she was running around in the human worked without permission; but Momo had to test her worth see how much she's grown over the years.

The beautiful karakura city, the streets were filled with people of all ages,sizes, and ethnicities the cars blaring and the beautiful city landscape made the view look more tremendous.

Momo's ears twitched as she could hear a growl of hollows and began rushing towards the area the hollow had an ape-like appearance nevertheless these were hollows that needed to be purified. Momo just looked at it straight in the eyes without any glimpse of fear, before her mind drifted as she recalls shio academy...the time when Hisagoi was in trouble and she had to play the hero and save go back for him before being cornered by a dozen huge hollows with her friends Renji and Izuru beside.

The sudden fear rattling throughout her body absolutely petrified and just stood there like a coward, but now things have changed and she was going to show how much she's grown.

"Snap Tobiume!"

As her zanpaktou was surrounded in red energy transforming into a straight-edged blade with two prongs along its length. The hollows howled as they began rushing towards momo with immense speed, but she wasn't phased and with that she uttered the words.

"Tobiume Scream!"

And with a swing of her zanpaktou she summon three large fireballs heading directly towards the hollows as the sounds of a seagull could be heard.

However her attack had no effect as the smoke cleared seeing the hollow's silhouette as the speed at which the hollows began allowing for his once short arms to extend beyond a normal animal. The hollow began charge up it's reiatsu, the mouths were taking in excess reiatsu from around her.

The Ape hollow released a massive cero toward Momo, the cero blasted out from the hollows mouth. Momo dodged to the left, but felt the cero start tearing through her body. She could feel her body give way under her own weight.


But she remained vigilant as she got up and since the hollow has relatively strong attacks but slow speed she can immobilize the hollow so she can land a finishing blow.


"Honō no rūtsu!"

Before the hollow could finish her off
Momo twirled her sword above her head, and the blade is engulfed in flames. She then used the flames from her sword to slam tobiume into the ground, causing it to shake, and multiple fire-like roots began to shoot from the ground at various angles trapping the hollow.

The hollow screamed as it attempted to release itself from the roots but to no avail the roots began to get tighter and tighter until they were completely immobilized.

Using what little strength she had left Momo finished it off with a kido spell

Ye Lord! Mask of blood and flesh, all creation, flutter of wings, ye who bears the name of Man! The scorched Earth bears the mark of your bane. The demon waits at the end of the twisted halls of pandemonium, eyes filled with furor, in the torrents of Hell!

Hadō number 48 Onkyō Shakkahō!

Momo's left hand fired a screeching arrow-tip shaped blast of crimson flames leaving a scorching trail in its path. Once the arrow made contact with the hollows chest it exploded.
Causing immense smoke to cover the area...as the smoke finally cleared, Momo's breath began to become more rapid sweating beading down her head as that was the final attack she could use to finish it off...

Momo performed a Konso on the hollows head using the bottom portion of Tobiume handle.

The plus soul residing within the hollow was that of a teenager with blue jeans and a striped-shirt. The soul of the teenage boy thanked her for saving him.

Then Momo watched as the soul began heading towards the sky and into the Soul Society where he'll live a better life.

The battle was over, the hollow purified and sent to the soul society and Momo was utterly exhausted to the point of losing consciousness...she chuckled before laying on the ground staring up into the night sky gazing at the vast array of stars and the beautiful moon.

"Looks like i still have some work to do"

[mod]After reviewing this...
You are approved!

This does seem more like a Momo who has endured the past 400 years.

However, you will need to make a new application. This one is unreadable.

This one will be placed in approved until a new one is made.[/mod]

[adm]Moving this to archives, as there is a new one in place in Approved and Active Canons.

https://www.platinumhearts.net/t18500-momo-hinamori-approved-0-4#118848[/adm]