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J. Saionji Zanpakuto Upgrade
Sun Aug 13, 2023 6:20 am
UPGRADE INCOMING
I. Upgrade Information
» Character Name: J. Saionji
» Character Application: Link
» Upgrade Details:
I’m changing his zanpakuto to something I actually like for the character.
New Zanpakuto:
I. Zanpakutō
» Zanpakutō Name: Zuijin. [随刃, Attending Blade]
» Zanpakutō Spirit:
In many ways, Zuijin’s temperament mirrors J’s. He is a level headed man with very little to say. He holds to a strong moral code that he shares with J, most easily described as “protect the weak, but you are not one of them.” In most cases, the two of them get along. However, where the two differ is that this is definitely a master-servant relationship. Zuijin holds a deep respect for his master and will obey him, but only if J does not compromise what they work towards. If J ever falters, he will have to earn that respect back or Zuijin won’t comply.
» Inner World: J’s inner world is a perfected version of his family home. It looks like a traditional Japanese manor with a flowered courtyard and a large surrounding wall. The wall has no exit, though he can see buildings outside of it. This inner world represents J’s rigid focus about his family’s status. If there ever comes a time that he changes this focus, the gate may appear and open. Right now, his zanpakuto spirit is also confined to this area, which helps Zuijin keep to his beloved routines and avoid the chaos outside of the gates.
» Sealed Zanpakutō Appearance: J’s zanpakuto is a normal sized katana with a black sheath, dark purple handle wrappings, and an ornate silver guard. The sheath is plain, but the guard is decorated with small carved leaves.
I. Shikai
» Shikai Release Phrase: Cut Them Down
» Shikai Appearance:
» Shikai Abilities: The core of Zuijin’s power is to penalize those who oppose its master: J. Saionji. Each time Zuijin’s blade touches an opponent that J has designated as an enemy, the physical weight of every weapon they wield increases by 2x. The maximum that Zuijin’s blade can increase the weight of a weapon is 20x. The effect of J’s shikai ends when he has re-sheathed his zanpakuto.
I. Bankai
» Bankai Name: Jouju Zuijin. [成就随刃, Realized Attending Blade]
» Bankai Appearance: See his shikai image. No change.
» Bankai Abilities: All abilities from Zuijin’s shikai carry over to bankai, but with this change: the weight increaser extends to 3x and the maximum increase extends to 30x. Zuijin also gains the additional ability of applying stacks of the weight increase at a range equal to his Spirit Classes maximum range, at a rate of one stack every two posts. Upon release, a single stack I automatically applied to those in range. These effects can be ended by exiting the range of Zuijin’s bankai or through the sealing of it. J can only reset the area of effect range after bankai has been sealed.
» Supporting Material: N/A
I. Hazard Rating Information
» Power: N/A
» Influence: N/A
» Resources: N/A
» In-Character Summary: N/A
I. Additional Information
Thank you for checking this!
END OF UPGRADE
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Re: J. Saionji Zanpakuto Upgrade
Mon Aug 21, 2023 9:01 am
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Approved.
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- Initial Grading:
Alright so, after giving these a read over, i've determined it's pretty difficult to understand the trigger and effects of this Shikai and Bankai. I'm just going to ask you to simply and give better clarity to both descriptions that makes the subject, trigger, and effects easier to understand on a read over. We can progress w/ the grading after that.
Approved.
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