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Mon Apr 22, 2019 3:33 pm
Race Spec Here:
https://www.platinumhearts.net/t10328-the-official-ph-shinigami-racial-specs

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THE SHINIGAMI TEMPLATE

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I. Basic Information


» Name: Tetsuya "Shukiri" Gioranta
» Title: None
» Age: 23
» Gender: Male

» Association: Gotei United

» Appearance Written: Standing at one meter and eighty centimetres tall Notte appears to be of normal or slightly taller than average at his age. Although he might already be seventeen and at the barrier of adulthood, Notte's facial features carry quite an adult feel to it having a strong jawline and a forever creased face contradicting his quite light personality by giving him an angry expression, whether it's. Even looking into his cold grey eyes to can see the warmth seems to suggest that despite the way he looks he accepts his reality and takes it on with outgoing view.

His hair is a Matte pink colour, and more often than not left in combed back style with various spikes, His mood is usually defined by that kind of hairstyle he has and he goes with it, but he is nearly always seen having a bandanna around neck. For Notte's age his body is quite well defined not in the sense of it being bulky but in the sense of someone who frequents parkour; lean, good core strength, upper body strength and the good of a good balance meaning he's quite well-developed for his age. No question that something he was always bullied for was his pink hair his childhood friends always picking on him for it but eventually he got pretty much used to it and fell in love with it at some point.

His clothing style seems to alter between which kinda of job and situation he's in, In the soul society and or training he can be seen in the classic Shinigami robe, Black, White outline with a White rope securing it from opening up, However his more casual style is consists of fashionable brands however most of the time he's only seen in tracksuit bottoms, 80s style puffy tracksuit tops and some sneakers.


» Appearance Image:



I. Personality


» Personality:

Generally
The first thing you'd most likely notice about Notte is the expression on his, always looking angry and not in the mood for anything in the first place, however, in reality, this doesn't reflect how Notte truly is. Being raised without a mother and within Gotei academy it quickly dawned upon him that people weren't really the best and made it his personal goal to be as polite as he can. Despite that drive within him he still has moments when all the stress in his life build up and he loses his cool for a while becoming extremely emotional and easily aggravated.

View on life
Being raised in an environment which can either help or hire, protect or destroy he had to toughen up quite quickly and learn how to fend for himself, along the way of getting older he had made friends outside of Gotei that made him who he is and developed his view and how he thinks about things, One of the main things that defines who he is that he always has a Negative positive relationship with life. He figured that if he always thought about the worst possible situation he would never lose, If something bad happened he was prepared for it and if something good happened he would enjoy it even more

Towards Friends
Notte's friendships can be complicated most of them actually started from him being bullied about his hair but once he stopped thinking about his hair as a liability, he started to combing back and make it look "Cooler". Once he did that he gained a spark of confidence making fun of his own hair and agreeing with the bullies. Essentially taking the fun out of it for them and left a bit of respect for himself in them.

b[]Towards Himself[/b]
Notte is quite hard on himself. Always seeing himself as a liability, Always thinking of others more than himself.


I. History


» History:
Notte was born to Anbi Giornata. Anbi Giornat was a high ranking Gotei associate specialising in Sealing and Healing, but she really shined in Sealing- She was one of the best in her art. Eventually after years of serving for the Gotei, she decided she wanted to settle down with a man and have a few children; however, after years of concentrating on her craft and serving the Gotei, she never stopped to consider the option of meeting someone to HAVE a child with. After a few months of looking she found a man known as "Ginire Abanosha", He was specifically chosen because of his mediocrity and not having an important job within the Society.

Nevertheless, Anbi go married Ginire and all was well, the pair seemed to go together like petals to a flower, yang to her yin. The time came where the pair decided to have a child which was pleasant news to both of them. Anbi was walking along the street to get her monthly checkup when she felt drowsiness in the air, an overall ominous feel. Behind the door stood the doctor preparing himself to tell Anbi the news. She was Barren. She felt as all her hopes and dreams fell before her, she felt a strong feeling of self-hatred blaming herself for waiting too long or stressing herself out too much. She couldn't face herself so she wouldn't dare face Ginire. She ran out of the checkup area to the only place she felt safe, a small cave on the outskirts of the town which she kept a small toy teddy bear that gave her comfort with the only person in her life that she could trust, Her Zanpakutō. She took a meditative pose and went into his inner world.

When she left she knew what she had to do. Birth by Zanpakutō, The name of her Zanpakutō was Honzo over the years the had grown close; not in love but to the point where they had become nearly one and the same. Honzo explained due to the fact that they were close they were extremely compatible, His physical manifestation had the best chance to conceive with Anbi, He continued telling her that the likenesses of it working was low but it was the best chance she had to continue her bloodline.

Anbi knew the consequences of what she would be doing, she knew if she gave into her selfishness and narcissism, her child's life would be hell and or she would be executed. All her life she had to give in to orders and put aside her own pleasure for the greater good; she wasn't going to allow that anymore. She had discussed a plan with her Zanpakutō to modify a concealing to hide the child's spiritual energy, however, that would probably cause suspicion if she fully hid the child energy so she had no choice but to hope the modified spell would hide her child from a life of hell.

During the nine months that it took for her to conceive the child, the progress was going extremely well. Honzo's idea was working; for the first time in years she felt happy with herself, she felt satisfied with the decision she had made for herself. Now came the hard part- the seal. She couldn't link it to a sort of object child, because what if it was removed? That would reveal the child's true nature. She had no choice but link it to the child's Asauchi and hopefully future Zanpakutō. Using her rank within the Gotei she easily Infiltrated The Shio Academy and stole one of the countless Asauchi they had.

7 Days and 6 Nights of non-stop concentration were what it took to put the seal on the Asauchi, Nearly sucking out every bit of spirit energy she had to finish the seal but it was done. It was designed to mask the Half Zanpakutō essence of the child, however like everything in life she couldn't make it last forever; it would only last until the child had reached the age of 18. She didn't know how many Half Zan's there were in the world but his own kind was most likely the only people he could trust. The final modification for the spell was that only Half Zan's could detect the child; The Spell was complete.

On XX/XX/XXXX a happy and healthy half human half Zanpakutō baby boy was born. Since her Zanpakutō didn't really have a family name; she gave him her family name Giornata. Since the child was born within a cave surrounded by mist she decided to give the child the name Shukiri (主霧) She sensed a strong spiritual energy within the child and knew he would do great things; She took the child held it close to bosom, her maternal instincts physically stopped her from doing what she needed to do.


XXXX the year a fragile pink haired baby was left on the doorstep of the Gotei with a handcrafted scabbard with an Asauchi within tied to its fragile back. A woman in a cloak perching on a nearby building gave a smile and a tear as the child wasn't killed but instead taken in. Shukiri was named Tetsuya by the Gotei as they didn't know his birth name. Ever since Tetsuya was a child and to this day he never let go of this Asauchi, ever. It was his only link to his past that he was never gifted the experience of. Tetsuya quickly started to ask questions about what he had and the Gotei happily provided him with that knowledge. By the age of 15, he had already gotten to a high level of spirit energy control where he could create a surprisingly sized spirit ball. By the age of 20 he had decided he had gotten bored enough to join the Shin'ō Academy when he first joined the academy he had never been surrounded by so many people his age and older. He felt something different about himself compared to others, He looked at others and they looked physically like them but he could never fully relate to them he always felt like the outsider, in the chaos of that he kept his head down and tried his best, and by the age of 23 he had graduated, which when considering how old he was pretty early.

After graduating he went back to his old residence at Gotei which is where he's up to now slowly trying to feel out the world he's in and trying to find what he is himself.


I. Equipment


» Equipment: [If your Shinigami has any equipment? Put it here. If they don't, skip this section.]

I. Racial Techniques/Abilities/Skills


» Racial Abilities: [You can put any customized racial skills/abilities/techniques in here. These can range from shunpo, kido, zanjutsu and anything else you want to add. Feel free to skip it if you don't want to fill it out.]

I. Sealed Powers


» Zanpakutô Name: Daiguru

» Zanpakutô Spirit Appearance: Daiguru appears in human form, he stands around 5'11. Donning a train conductors hat and blue bathroom robe. One feature that will always resonate in the minds of whoever has the misfortune of seeing him is his smile. a constant within his ever-changing body language an ominous huge smile that leaves the victims who look at it scarred.

» Inner World: Daiguru's Inner world is a void, consisting of 2 chairs.

» Zanpakutô Appearance: Daiguru is a Uchigatana

I. Shikai


» Shikai Release Phrase: Draw a blank!, Daiguru.

» Shikai Release Action: Tetsuya strikes his head.

» Shikai Appearance: Daiguru transforms into a Tantō. 15" Long. Pink case and handle.

» Shikai Abilities: Daiguru is a sharp blade with only one ability, Excluding Tetsuya, unless you are looking at directly at Daiguru you completely have no idea it exists. Any knowledge that is gained about Daiguru is forgotten is retained but only when the person is looking at the said blade.

I. Bankai


» Bankai Release Phrase: Consign to oblivion, BANKAI.

» Bankai Release Action: Tetsuya stabs himself with Daiguru then a blinding light, in turn, is created.

» Bankai Appearance: Tetsuya gains a bandana that flows in a wind that doesn't seem to be there. A dark green yukata that seems to perfectly contrast his hair that seems to be more pastel pink than usual. He gains a second Tanto that grows to 20".

» Bankai Abilities: Tetsuya gains the ability of Daiguru. Unless you are looking at directly at Tetsuya, you completely have no idea he exists. Any knowledge that is gained about Tetsuya is forgotten; The knowledge is retained however the person only remembers this information when person is looking at Tetsuya.

I. Shikokai


[NOTE: This form is restricted until 0-3, and is not usually granted upon approval. This is ONLY for pureblood Shinigami! Refer to the racial specs for more information]

» Shikokai Release Phrase: [What is your shinigami's release phrase?]

» Shikokai Release Action: [Does your Shinigami do any physical action to release their Shikokai? Feel free to remove this.]

» Shikokai Appearance: [What does your Shinigami look like when released in their Shikokai?]

» Shikokai Abilities: [What abilities does your Shinigami attain in Shikokai?]


I. Skill Sheet


(To Find Out about what these skills are for, please READ THIS THREAD before you try doing anything to it. After you have read it, do not fill your skills out until a staff member has graded your thread. The staff member checking your app will also give you Will Skills in which you can add to your app when approved. Click the spoiler below to see what tier gets what kind of skills.)

Spoiler:

General Skills
  • Durability: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Trained/Beginner/Untrained
  • General Speed: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained
  • Strength: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained
  • Weapon Skill: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained


Shinigami Skills
  • Hoho: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained
  • Kidō: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained
  • Zanjutsu: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained
  • Hakuda: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained


Will Skills
  • Willpower/Determination: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained
  • Mental Deduction: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained
  • Focus: Elite/Advanced/Adept/Beginner/Untrained


I. Role Play Sample


» Roleplay Sample:

The hallways smelt musky, similar to the smell of boiled cabbages while crossing the barrier towards the smell of burnt tires. Both sides stood doors one after the other seeming to go on forever, Step after step. Breath after breath, Tatsuya's was able to see his own breath concluding that he was outside; but that thought grew another question that for a reason he could never understand why, Why it wasn't the first that crossed his mind.

Where is he?

He could feel the lactic acid build up in his muscles, he wanted to stop running but he felt it in his body, his soul that he shouldn't stop for any reason what so ever. Naturally, any form of life has the capacity to feel fear, the concept known as fear changes from person to person. But there's always a constant; always one thing that no form of life can change. The fear of the unknown.


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« Application Checklist »

• Let's Get Down To Business •

  • Name [X]
  • Appropriate Age [X]
  • Gender [X]
  • Appearance Present [X]
  • Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
  • 10 sentences for personality [X]
  • History is of appropriate length [X]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [o]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [o]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
  • Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[X]
  • RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) [X]
  • RP Sample is 10 sentences [X]


« The Willsheet Checklist »

• And Comments/Fixes •

  • Willpower/Determination: N/A
  • Mental Deduction: N/A
  • Focus: N/A

  • Comments/Fixes:

    Overarching Recommendation: Overall, I would recommend fleshing out your personality further, as well as going in-depth on some of his personal achievements in his history. While both conform to the guidelines on site, you don’t really give much to go off of to gauge the character based on their past, which is often taking into consideration when giving out the final tier. Furthermore, some of the historical events present while not unapprovable could have negative repercussions to your character on site. For example, while half-shinigami/zanpakuto are present on site, typically they are looked down upon in the IC world, while this doesn’t need to be changed, I would recommend possibly revising this part of the history.

    I would also recommend going further in-depth on his abilities as a shinigami, while it’s fine to have only a single ability for each release, typically a portion of tier is decided by what the character is capable of doing, having only a single ability means we will have to gauge more critically what that single ability does.

    Shikai Ability: This ability needs to be reworded as currently, it falls under the umbrella of “absolutes” which are not allowed on site. I would recommend restructuring it to scale based off either mental deduction (his versus his opponents) or a hybrid system that works in tandem off of both focus and mental deduction, as these would be the specific site stats that would affect any ability similar to the one you have created. I would also recommend going further in-depth on how the ability does what it does because you haven’t given me enough information to quite grasp how he can make people unable to remember that his blade exists. Finally, This would fall under the scope of out of character thread permission abilities which means you would have to get the approval of the person you are Roleplaying with before you could use this ability, due to how it functions being prone to be easily abused. All in all, this ability as is wouldn’t be approvable, and serious revisions are needed to it.

    Bankai Ability: Much in the same vein as his shikai ability, serious revisions are needed, and this needs to require the permission of the character you are rping with before use. You need to explain how this could feasibly be done and give us parameters in which the ability goes off of so that it is fair for other individuals on site, as again, absolutes are not allowed. For what revisions need to happen to this ability, refer to the notes I made for the shikai version of this ability, as all the revisions necessary for this ability are the same as the ability this character has in shikai.

    All in all, I would recommend taking some time to revise this app and flesh it out further, the premise of the power set is interesting but will require some serious tweaking before it could be usable on Platinum Hearts. If you have any questions on how to do this, I will be more than happy to give you feedback on abilities as you are working on them. Feel free to shoot me a DM on the discord with questions as you need to do so.


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