Valentina Abbaracciabene [Approved 2-3+ || 1-4]

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» Name: Valentina Abbaracciabene
» Titles: N/A
» Race: Demon/Human/Ziamichi
» Age: 18
» Gender: Female
» Affiliation/Rank: Loner

» Appearance Written: Valentina's appearance is that of a normal human girl of her age, while her choice of clothing may be a little different. Starting with her bodily attributes, Val isn't particularly fit or unfit. There is no real mass on her body, as just about everything is average in size. From her height to her weight to her chest to her hair length, everything is about average for a girl her age. Her appearance is nothing special. With a body that makes up for its lack of chest with a promptly plump lower half and curves that are often hidden beneath a beautiful blue flowing dress, Valentina gets practically no attention whatsoever due to the way she hides herself behind a conservative dress and long flowing scarf. She makes sure of it. This isn't because she never wants any attention, but rather that she would rather not attract the eyes of those who she deals with in her supernatural sort of life. Should something happen to her, Valentina would rather be that her appearance is the last thing on others' minds.

Which is why her dress flows long and hugs her body somewhat loosely. The only real attractive part of her body, at least as far as she thinks, is her lower half. This is why her dressbecomes much more loose and free starting just above her waist. The dress itself is long and reaches halfway down her shins and is often worn underneath a blue vest. This blue sleeveless vest is tied around the middle with an obi. Valentina also wears a coin on a string that falls off to her side. This dress is what she wears most everywhere, except to places that require a strict uniform if she ever cares to venture around those kinds of places. More often than not, with her normal attire that is, she is wearing two long gloves that extend to her elbow. These gloves are held up by a single gold ring on her middle fingers and are wrapped in a green ribbon on her left arm, and a blue ribbon on her right.

Valentina's head is often only partially visible, as she will purposefully keep a yellow scarf on her to hide the lower half of her face. No one needs to see her sharp, elongated canines. It's best to blend into society as much as you can, for who knows whether you'd be recognized otherwise. Since she wears a scarf (and is relatively lazy) Valentina prefers to keep her hair tied in two wavy ponytails that are held up with two double beads. In front of these beads rest a series of four butterfly hair clips that run down either side of her head. If, on the off chance Valentina doesn't have her hair held up in these ponytails, she prefers to keep her long, naturally wavy hair down behind her. It can become a hassle to keep held up, and she would rather not put the effort into it unless she has to like with her scarf.


» Appearance Picture:

Valentina's Appearance:

or this if the image doesn't work https://i.imgur.com/moNlbEm.jpg


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» Personality: Valentina's personality can be a rather dull one at times. More often than not, she would rather be sleeping elsewhere instead of having to work or participate in normal life affairs. Truthfully, Valentina doesn't really like to do anything most of the time. It is quite common that she will complain about having to do anything, including getting up and moving five feet to either get something or simply move because she has to. Any physical activity really isn't Valentina's forte. That is, outside of the spiritual realm. In a normal realm of everyday life, Valentina just looks like the everyday slacker. Hardly gets her work done, if at all, grades are average despite being pretty intelligent, and her house always has some kind of mess somewhere. It'll get done someday for all she cares. If lazy and carefree don't go hand and hand then Valentina doesn't know what does.

Valentina thinks more like a guy does than a woman, where men think about goals objectively and women think about their goals emotionally. She also prefers thinking on a much more logical level than most people. When she needs to get things done, she tosses all other thoughts aside and thinks how to achieve her goals in a straightforward manner. While calculating, she is not neccessarily cold by any means. If anything she has a very warm heart despite all the calculating, mathematical thoughts. Valentina sees it as a bit of a burden sometimes, but she can't help but feel her emotions in times of peril, stress, or generally some kind of struggle. If someone is in trouble, she'll help that person to the best of her abilities. She may not sacrifice herself for someone, but she will help them otherwise. Valentina just doesn't think she's ready for any big commitment, especially self sacrifice for another person. It's either too much effort or she just doesn't think she's ready to give it all away for something else.

Most of the time, Valentina can be seen acting like quite the teenager. She only recently turned into an adult, but she still has plenty of youthful personality left in her. Immaturity is common in this one, as is her extreme affection for animals. She easily gets attached to animals, humans less so, and may or may not get obsessed with them in a very short span of time. It's not rare to find her immaturely refusing to do something simply because she doesn't want to, or because she's too lazy to get up and move. She also isn't very good with money and will often spend quite a bit of it buying whatever catches her fancy. Most of these things she tends to buy include sour candy (her favorite candy), large amounts of food (mostly meat like steak, pork, chicken, etc.), and other little things that help her pass the time.

Valentina isn't without her negatives though. Laziness and a lack of care in most situations is already quite bad, but her complete disregard for 95% of human beings is also quite a bad trait as well. When she wants to help someone, it's often because she's friends with them or they're important to her goal. If the person doesn't fit into either of those categories, they're either special because Valentina still cares about them, or she doesn't care about them and just pretends they don't exist. Another thing is that unless you're of some kind of actual worldly importance, Valentina will actually ignore you when you try and talk to her. She understands it's rude, but she absolutely hates human interaction. There's only one person that Valentina talks to consistently, and even then their chats are brief. That would be her Ziamichi spirit Mikhail.

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» History: Valentina's life was relatively normal for the first 12 years of her life. She was born 18 years ago to two loving parents in a small town in Italy, which inspired her parents to give her an italian name. It fit perfectly with their already italian surname. Valentina grew up going to school, being taught about the rights and wrongs of society and whatnot, and how to be a normal person. You know. 'Cause her family wasn't really anything special. She however, was more than special. Her parents looked normal, yes, but they weren't by any means what you would call the average citizen. valentina's mother was a demon, and her father was a human with a long convoluted past involving ancient spirits that were no longer around. One of those spirits, however, was sealed away in Valentina the moment she came out of her mother's womb. The only reason this didn't take a massive toll on her body was because the spirit was laid in a dormant sleep many many years ago. The seal was successful and Valentina and her parents lived their lives normally afterwards.

Growing up wasn't a struggle for Valentina whatsoever until she was about 12. Once she hit the age of 12, Valentina started experiencing many many strange events. Puberty was one, but there was something else that was happening within her. You could say it was a second puberty caused by the spirit that was placed within her. When this age hit her, Valentina's body started growing from the normal puberty, but at the same time she found herself able to start using strange powers. At first she was very afraid, but once her parents figured out that the spirit inside their daughter was starting to awaken, they let their child know everything. They educated her about what spirits were like, what all the different races were, what spiritual affairs were like, so on so forth. The two parents made sure to teach their confused child at a slow pace. They knew it was very strange and sudden, but they showed their daughter proof every now and again to make sure she knew it was all real.

Around the age of 15, Valentina's canines started growing and elongating as a result of the spirit inside of her awakening more and more. Eventually it got so bad that she couldn't talk without exposing her unnatural looking teeth, and so her parents bought her a scarf that she wore everywhere she went that wasn't home. Eventually she grew attached to it and wore it even when she didn't need to, just because she adored it that much. For the next two years, she made sure to keep it with her as much as she could, even while put in situations by her parents that might've gotten it ruined or destroyed. Ever since Valentina discovered that there was some kind of spirit inside of her, her parents started taking her out and teaching her to fight for some reason. Armed, unarmed, even in using her demon powers she was trained, and she even managed to kill plenty of Hollows in the process. What she didn't understand, was how powerful she was becoming even without her training.

At the age of 17, Valentina's life took a very dark turn. While fighting a Hollow, Valentina and her parents who were watching her at the time were suddenly transported to the Demon Realm. This happened without warning and set both her parents and her off. The next thing she knew, she was on the ground gasping for breath with a sharp pain in her chest, and her parents fell to the ground with heads severed. This sight alone was more than traumatizing enough to get stained into the girl's memory. That exact image does more than haunt Valentina to this very day. It's been over a year since then and now she's found a tolerable, normal life as she finishes the last year of school. Her spirit, without warning, simply started talking to her one day in a tone of voice that was deep and implied he had seen more than enough of the world.


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All Demon powers are pulled from this https://www.platinumhearts.net/t5393-the-new-demon-template . (Also pulling out the natural abilities from this part and just collectively writing them up in the Ziamichi natural abilities section.

» Unique Demon Abilities:
Driven to Act: Valentina can, when she activates her demon powers and releases her reiatsu, completely erase her laziness to the extent of just not having a lack of will to do something. This is only usable when she releases her reiatsu, which is why she doesn't use this all the time. It also causes her to want to do something constantly. This gets to the point where she'll always have the will to move and act even when afraid or when she's supposed to be emotionally traumatized. This is to overpower any emotional shock or similar experiences despite whatever the feeling is. The reason this is a thing is so if something is made to paralyze her with fear or some other emotion, she can still act and defend herself. The downside is that she still feels the emotion in its entirety, so sometimes she may do something rash. Sometimes her spirit can help her decide if her mind can't decide what to do, making this always in effect even if something should try and overpower her still.

Affinity for Blood: A trait she inherited from her mother. While she doesn't quite enjoy it, blood does not faze her at all. In fact, it powers some of her personal Demon abilities.

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»Intoner SIX : Valentina is what she calls an "Intoner". An Intoner is literally a person whose being reflects being in tune with certain things around them. In each mode, Valentina gains a new affinity towards a specific concept or type of object, but loses her affinities from previous forms unless she reverts back to that form. In short, she only has the affinity of the form she's in at the time, not the ones previous despite retaining all other powers from previous forms. When in Intoner SIX mode, Valentina has no added visuals and looks exactly the same as she normally would. Her only power is to use Shadow Movement in bursts to travel short distances at such speeds that it looks like teleportation (only in bursts, similarly to a Shunpo, except that it has the traits of Shadow Movement more. I.E. Valentina could possibly travel farther based on her skill with normal Shadow Movement) . This is instantaneous and happens so fast that Valentina cannot attack while doing so. More often than not, it will break whatever she's using if she tries to attack while doing this. While in this mode, Valentina is in tune with kinetic energy and can sense all kinetic energy in the nearby vicinity. She can single out certain instances so as to keep her mind from being overwhelmed from sensing too many instances of kinetic energy. This range reaches about 50 meters, meaning most of whatever she senses is likely to already be on top of her.

»Intoner FIVE: While in Intoner FIVE mode, Valentina has the ability, in addition to the abilities she's had previously, to grow snow white scales on her body in various places on a whim. The drawback is that she can only grow scales in one place at a time and it takes time for the energy to transfer somewhere else for her to grow scales. These scales prevent her skin from being penetrated by anything that is as strong as her durability or less and grow stronger the more her durability is. Exceptions could be judged on a case by case basis depending on if something has extra cutting power or if someone has the ability to increase sharpness as a power. An example would be if someone had the ability to sharpen a weapon that couldn't normally cut through these scales, allowing it to possibly cut the scales and cut away at them until they exposed Valentina's skin. Whereas if a weapon cut things easier because of fire or some similar reason, it wouldn't exactly work as well because the scales are heat resistant. At the same time, cold will slow the process in which Valentina can transfer her scales to other parts of her body. The most she can cover is a single limb at a time. While in this form, Valentina has a small roman numeral 5 imprinted on the center of her forehead.

»Intoner FOUR: Valentina now has an affinity towards fire and heat, allowing her to sense individual instances of heat or flame as well as the intensity. Using this affinity, she can enhance the fire based powers she gained from her Ziamichi spirt to gain more specific control over the flames she generates (which is a separate power she gained from her spirit). The heat and intensity of her flames also increases, and she can generate fire at a much faster rate than before. In this form, a small roman numeral 4 imprints itself on the center of Valentina's forehead.

»Intoner THREE: Now with an affinity for the air around her, Valentina can sense disturbances in the air and determine the size and shape of whatever it is that she's sensing. Meanwhile, Valentina also has the ability to manipulate the wind around her. She can create concentrated bursts of wind, constructs from the air around her, and even remove the air from a space if she so desired. The possibilities are limited by Valentina's control of her demon powers as well as her imagination. In this form, a small roman numeral 3 imprints itself on her forehead. At the same time, a pair of wings whose wingspan reaches out twice the length of Valentina's body. Each wing is about the length of her. These wings are also as durable as the scales that Valentina generated before and can block attacks if need be. These wings look exactly like her Ziamichi spirit's wings and allow her to fly in the air. The energy drain for this form has not been perfected, and as such, makes this form especially draining on Valentina. It's difficult to keep this form for elongated periods of time. More specifically, the longest that Valentina has held this form was about 15 minutes. Afterwards, she passed out from extreme exhaustion.

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» The Spirit's Name: Michael
» The Spirit's Race: Dragon
» The Spirit's Gender: Male
» The Spirit's Age: ???

» The Spirit's Written Appearance: Michael, named after the Archangel who, in the bible, has fought wars with Satan and his armies, takes the appearance of a massive white dragon that is over two stories tall. He could easily dwarf any human or human looking creature due to his size. Michael's horns and claws are the color of pure gold, while his scales are pure white everywhere else but his black underbelly. The tip of his tail takes the shape of a curved axe-like blade that seems to be sharper than any other weapon.

» The Spirit's Pictured Appearance:

Michael:

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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YcYL0VgtbKk&feature=youtu.be&t=2m38s = Michael's voice

» The Spirit's Personality: Michael is a fickle, almost greedy creature that seems to prioritize his and Valentina's existence only. Anyone else literally might as well be dead to him. It's hard to put into words why he only cares about himself and Valentina, but the way he treats her is like a long time friend that he's known his whole life. Except his life is far longer than Valentina's may ever be. His manner of speaking is that of someone who is well versed in language and often uses more "advanced" words that Valentina may not even understand. Still, this doesn't stop him or his incredibly expansive vocabulary in the slightest.

Michael also dislikes talking about his past or his race. He hasn't even stated what race he is but he will reference some of the lore and history of it on occasion. This, however, is very rare to find. It's almost like he'd rather his race not go down in history or be remembered at all. In some situations he even seems ashamed of what his race has done, but he is still full of pride and honor. He finds pride in being one of his own race, possibly the last existing one as well, and makes sure that he finds honor in his life so that he may at least die with a feeling of purpose in life one day.

The relationship between Michael and Valentina is a strange one. Usually a Ziamichi's spirit may get along with them or rebel completely against their host, or even try and take them over. Michael doesn't do anything. At all. That's why Valentina doesn't NEED to control him. Because he has no reason to rebel against Valentina. If he does and successfully escapes, he dies. Michael cannot live outside the seal on Valentina's body. Even if the seal is broken, he has the option of just straight up leaving or staying, but he will die no matter what if he leaves. There is only one exception.


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» The Spirit's History: Michael's origins and birthplace are unknown, as well as how long he has been alive. In some situations it's implied Michael doesn't know either because he simply stopped keeping track. Age was meant to be relative to the stages one's body would go through over time, but Michael found himself at a stand still at some point. He was growing older, but his body wasn't changing. It was there that he decided to simply stop keeping track of his own age. All he can do is reference events he's been through to give himself a rough estimate of how old he can possibly be. The start of World War 3 was a more recent event in Michael's life, but he remembers being alive long, long before that.

During the war, Michael resided in a secluded area underground on Earth, a place he had dug out in a place far away from any form of civilization. He would leave and fly around in the nearby vicinity in order to find food, mostly in the form of meat, in order to continue living on. What he was doing down there was... well, it was nothing. Quite literally. He was simply sitting and waiting for something to happen so he could finally have a reason to leave his hole. The sudden appearance of what looked like a dragon in the world wouldn't exactly be welcome with open arms. It had never been welcomed in the past for Michael, and people hadn't exactly changed that drastically in the past, so why would humanity just give him the okay to start wandering around towns?

It wasn't until one of the very last conflicts did Michael get into the war. Having finally decided that enough was enough, Michael found his way into the warzone, having actually been near the site of it, and started slaughtering anything he didn't recognize as one of the races that were defending earth. Starting with the smaller infantry, Michael released flame and destruction upon them all, destroying whatever he could find en masse without hesitation. This got the attention of several of the more powerful demon leaders in the vicinity, who all encircled Michael and, in what he could have only described as a sudden lack of energy, drained him of whatever power via some sort of ritual. It was intended that he was to be sacrificed, but something happened shortly after him passing out that interrupted the ritual.

When he awoke, he was a spirit locked away in what felt like a cage, but there was only black. The feeling of grogginess was what kept him from suddenly breaking out, along with his clear lack of whatever power he had before. Over the course of the next few years, Michael watched Valentina's inner world form. It was created on what Michael only assumed a mix of his and his host's personalities and psyches, as opposed to just Valentina's like it would have been had he not been there. It eventually grew more and more expansive until finally, part of it was closed off by what looked like a door. Michael could only assume this was a metaphor for the seal keeping him inside Valentina's body. Normally, Michael would have been livid about being sealed in some human's body, but he knows that he isn't powerful enough to live outside of his host. His soul was wounded in a way in the process of having his powers stolen. While being sealed within Valentina, a small portion of his soul was fused with hers, allowing him to live while giving the rest of his "wounded" soul time to heal. Years after finally coming to terms with his new existence, he decided it was past time to exchange a few words with his host. And thus began the intricate relationship of lazy, careless hybrid and wise, stern, almost stuck up beast.


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» Ziamichi Spirit Powers:

• Utter Control of Fire: Michael has the ability to manipulate fire in all its forms and states telekinetically. This includes but is not limited to breathing fire, generating heat from thin air, spontaneous combustion of an object or the air, and controlling ANYTHING that is even remotely classified as fire. Despite this control, he can only generate normal fire, but the intensity and heat can reach levels that would make people melt from a mile away. That is, once he gets his old powers back. This however, is limited by his ability to control his powers. Ever since he was sealed in Valentina, he has become much weaker than he once was, but he was at some point able to combat the likes of the world's strongest warriors. The stronger Valentina becomes, though, the stronger he becomes, and he realizes that he is slowly reaching the threshold of power he was once at. Michael can only technically control the fire he makes, or fire that was not created by someone else's reiatsu. The person with the higher tier (it would be the one with higher power control, if they're the same tier) will be able to take control of the natural fire, in a situation where two natural fire users are trying to control the same inferno.
  
  
• Devouring Heat: Michael can literally eat heat or sources of heat to restore his reiatsu. The more the better. This includes the ability to eat literal fire, and even lava if need be. He can eat lava, fire, or any source of heat that is generated from reiatsu, absorbing the reiatsu in the process as well. The issue is that only 40% of it is eaten, and the other 60% is left to burn away at his body.
  
  
• Impermeable Scales: Michael's scales are near impermeable. The stronger his durability the stronger his scales, and he can only be pierced by things of higher power than his durability. There are exceptions of course, but those only go by on a case by case basis.
  
  
• Flight: Michael has wings. He can use those wings. You know, to fly and stuff. His speed in the air is judged by his general speed, but he doesn't have any fancy speed boosts like a shunpo or shadow movement. He just flies. This is why his Impermeable Scales are so important.
  
  
• Endurance of a Dragon: Michael can take A LOT of hits, regardless of endurance unless it pierces him and strikes his organs or causes a lot of internal damage. Then whatever attacks his opponents use on him are either nigh useless or have to be incredibly powerful.
  
  
• Dimensional Tear: Michael is capable of passing through dimensions on a whim without any effort. In a desperate move to save Valentina's life on one situation, he also used this ability to create portals near Valentina in order to protect her from attacks by extending a wing for defense. He's learned to use this ability to extend limbs from these portals to attack enemies as well. He can even stick his head out from these portals to bite at anything nearby or even to breath fire. More fire than Valentina could hope to generate herself. These portals are temporary and only Michael can move through them. They can also only be spawned near Valentina's body but only about a few feet away at most. The most Michael can do is extend a single limb or body part from these portals, and they also drain Valentina's reiatsu by a notable amount. This power uses both Michael's reiatsu and Valentina's reiatsu, actually, making it so Michael can't take over Valentina once she gets too tired, since he too will be too tired. Overuse of this results in both having to pull away from a fight. The most that Michael can do this is five times (varying on the place and situation, as well as how long the portals are open (usually a few seconds so Michael can do something and then pull away)) in a one hour span in rapid succession before both Valentina and him are almost incapable of fighting.
  

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» Unique Traits:

• Increased Metabolism:When using her powers for too long, Valentina's metabolism rockets sky high and causes her to need great amounts of sustenance in order to not starve to death. Though this might just be Michael's massive metabolism affecting Valentina's sometimes, as while it happens more often after using powers for too long, it also happens randomly whether she's used her powers or not.
  
  
• Heightened Senses: Valentina's senses are greatly increased, and she can manually turn this on and off as well to prevent any damage from attacks directed at her senses. At some point she could possibly detect someone from over a mile away with just her sight, smell, or hearing. Maybe even her taste as well if she develops the ability to taste the air like a snake, but it's doubtful she ever will. It's just a measure of how powerful her senses could possibly get at higher tiers.
  
  
• Heightened Physical Attributes: While not strong or fast enough to outmatch someone who's powers specifically heighten their physical abilities, Valentina is definitely well above those who's powers don't do that. This is relative to tier though, of course.
  
  
• Fire Manipulation: While she is not incredibly skilled with this like Michael is, Valentina can create and manipulate fire using her own reiatsu. The downside is that she has limited control over it and cannot really do too much with it. She can't form shapes very well, but she can generate and fire enough of it at a fast enough speed for it to do a lot of damage though.
  

» Forms:

• True Intoner: Valentina doesn't use this mode often for how it works. It's difficult to use and she just doesn't like the mechanics of it. Mainly the requirements TO use it, is what she dislikes. In order to activate True Intoner mode, Valentina needs to be covered in an ample amount of blood. Ample meaning excessive amounts of blood, be it her own or someone else's. As long as it's blood, she can use this form. When in this form, Valentina gains insanely increased physical abilities and insanely heightened senses. Anything of the same rank will have incredible trouble keeping up with her new abilities.
  
• Takeover: Michael can take full control of Valentina to give her a massive power boost. At the same time, Valentina's body will be forced into her strongest Intoner form available (excluding True Intoner mode) and she will constantly be drained of her reiatsu in the process. It's very nonoptimal but it can be used as a last ditch effort. Michael's skill sheet will replace Valentina's skill sheet for the duration of this form. In this form, in addition to whatever other visual additions she has, Valentina's eyes will change to look much more reptilian in both color and appearance.
  

» Drawbacks: Either form will constantly drain reiatsu from Valentina's body, and she will be very drained afterwards. These are to be used as a last ditch effort, because otherwise it leaves Valentina very much open to be attacked afterwards.

» Control: 0

Michael will die if he rebels against Valentina too much, so she literally doesn't need to try. He can, however, temporarily take control of her body whenever he wants as a result, but he's often polite about doing so unless Valentina is in great peril.

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NOTE: Ziamichi's will have three to four skill sheets possibly. One for general skills, one for racial skills, one for the host's skill and possibly one for the spirit's skills if they are a different race.

Click here for skill sheet
Ziamichi General

» Ziamichi Host Class:

» Ziamichi Spirit Class:

Skills:
0 Tier is allowed 1 Master, 2 Advanced for each section
1 Tier is allowed 2 Advanced for each section
2 Tier is allowed 1 Advanced, 2 Adept for each section
3 Tier is allowed 1 Adept for each section
4 Tier and below only get beginner.

General Skills For Host

• Durability: Adept
  
• General Speed: Beginner
  
• Strength: Adept
  
• Weapon Skill: Advanced

Ziamichi Skills For Host

• Skill Of Ziamichi Powers: Adept
  
• Control Over Spirit: Beginner
  
• Seal Strength: Adept
  
• Sync-Rate: Advanced
  

Demon Skills

• Za Koa Skill: Beginner
  
• Demon Magic: Advanced
  
• Shadow Movement: Adept
  
• Akuma Kyōdo: Adept
  

Will Skills For Host

• Willpower/Determination: Beginner
  
• Mental Deduction: Advanced
  
• Pain Endurance: Adept
  
• Focus: Adept
  

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General Skills For Spirit

• Durability: Advanced
  
• General Speed: Adept
  
• Strength: Advanced
  
• Weapon Skill: Adept

Ziamichi Skills For Spirit

• Skill Of Ziamichi Powers: Advanced
  
• Control Over Spirit: Adept
  
• Seal Strength: Adept
  
• Sync-Rate: Advanced

Will Skills For Spirit

• Willpower/Determination: Adept
  
• Mental Deduction: Advanced
  
• Pain Endurance: Advanced
  
• Focus: Advanced
  

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» Role Play Sample:(Show us what you got by posting a sample of how you role play. Any previous thread or new material is accepted!)

Here have some equipment:
https://www.platinumhearts.net/t13995-valentina-s-equipment

Intoner SIX

Shunpo is technically the name for the Shinigami-specific high speed movement. You should probably call it something else, or look at the "Shadow Movement" that demons naturally can have. Additionally, I'll need a range on the kinetic sense with a reasonable range as it's very powerful.

Intoner FIVE

Can you give me a more descriptive estimate to how durable these scales are?

Intoner THREE

This feels like it needs a higher energy drain than the other forms. The things you can do with this are very dangerous, so you should point out that it requires more energy output than the others.

» The Spirit's History: Michael doesn't say.

Absolutely unacceptable. This isn't a novelization and we're not playing the foreshadowing game... I'm going to have to ask you to write out the history of your Ziamichi Spirit.

Utter Control of Fire + Devouring Heat

This is dangerously close to an absolute power, and in order to not make it like such, you need to address how this power interacts with others who manipulate fire or elements related to fire. Being able to steal away their fire isn't an impossibility, but a reasonable system needs to be in place, or otherwise you aren't able to mess with foreign fire at all. Similarly with Devouring Heat, how do you not make it completely unfair to other fire users?

Dimensional Tear

From here on out, staff are going to be taking teleportation and other types of instantaneous travel more seriously as a combat mechanic, and cracking down on it. What this means is that it is going to have much less of an impact in fights, and are going to be more restricted (This is not just about you, it's going to be for everybody eventually). What you're going to need is give it a drastic drawback, such as a large cooldown, or a very slow rate of opening a portal, or otherwise not be able to use it in combat at all.

Fixed Intoner SIX, FIVE, and THREE.

Added Michael's history.

Limited "Utter Fire Control" to his own fire and fire that was not created by someone else's reiatsu.

Devouring heat eats 40% of the fire of an attack while the rest does damage to him.

Dimensional Tear can be used at the most seven times in an hour span before Valentina AND Michael are utterly drained. This would cause Valentina to have to revert to a previous form to conserve energy, and Michael couldn't take over and use his energy instead of Valentina's because he too is drained significantly.

Limited "Utter Fire Control" to his own fire and fire that was not created by someone else's reiatsu.

This still runs into the problem of needing to deal with someone else who can control natural fire, actually. What happens if there's a nearby inferno, and both of you try to utilize it at the same time. If you don't want to try and be super creative, this can easily be fixed by just adding in a clause that the person with the higher tier takes the majority of the fire, depending on the difference between tiers.

Dimension Tear

Let's for with five for now. You may improve this skill later on in the future if you're daring but, as for now we're going to be a little on the safer side.

Fixed. :V

• Name [O]
  
• Appropriate Age [O]
  
• Gender [O]
  
• Appearance Present [O]
  
• Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [O]
  
• Appearance is Not Claimed [O]
  
• 10 sentences for personality [O]
  
• History is of appropriate length [O]
  
• Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [O]
  
• Powers are described reasonably enough [O]
  
• Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [O]
  
• Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[O]
  

• Willpower/Determination: Beginner
  
• Mental Deduction: Advanced
  
• Pain Endurance: Adept
  
• Focus: Adept
  

• Willpower/Determination: Adept
  
• Mental Deduction: Advanced
  
• Pain Endurance: Advanced
  
• Focus: Advanced
  

Comments/Notes: I actually do think this warrants separate tiers for Ziamichi and Host because of the powers.
Tier: 2-3+
Ziamichi Tier: 1-4