Verathius Mischevang [APPROVED, 0-2]
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Re: Verathius Mischevang [APPROVED, 0-2]
Sun Jul 17, 2016 2:14 pm
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The Creator has left the Site.
I envy because of the heart.
I glutton because of the heart.
I covet because of the heart.
I am prideful because of the heart.
I sloth because of the heart.
I rage because of the heart.
Because of the heart...
I lust for everything about you.
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I glutton because of the heart.
I covet because of the heart.
I am prideful because of the heart.
I sloth because of the heart.
I rage because of the heart.
Because of the heart...
I lust for everything about you.
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Re: Verathius Mischevang [APPROVED, 0-2]
Tue Dec 27, 2016 3:50 pm
Please bring him back for me to use when able
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Re: Verathius Mischevang [APPROVED, 0-2]
Tue Dec 27, 2016 3:57 pm
[mod]Unarchived by request.[/mod]
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Re: Verathius Mischevang [APPROVED, 0-2]
Mon Feb 12, 2018 2:36 am
[mod]
I'd ask you just remove that part, if only because there's a fairly wide spread of what Bankai can do, flatly saying "Bankai" isn't a useful indicator.
This entire ability needs to be rewritten or simply removed. As it stands, the idea of simply lighting someone on fire without them noticing would require a lot more explanation, and the current explanation is fairly difficult to understand.
While I believe these two are fine as they are in terms of functionality, they will both need some clarification. As it stands, they seem to be fairly straightforward auras of heat/fire, which he is able to manipulate. If this is correct, then that should be fine, and like I said, they just need to be rewritten a bit so that's more clear. If that isn't correct, let me know.[/mod]
Extremely Durable: ...He's able to take Bankai's and remain unharmed for the most part...
I'd ask you just remove that part, if only because there's a fairly wide spread of what Bankai can do, flatly saying "Bankai" isn't a useful indicator.
Cero/Bala Incinerar:
This entire ability needs to be rewritten or simply removed. As it stands, the idea of simply lighting someone on fire without them noticing would require a lot more explanation, and the current explanation is fairly difficult to understand.
Resurreccion and Segunda Etapa
While I believe these two are fine as they are in terms of functionality, they will both need some clarification. As it stands, they seem to be fairly straightforward auras of heat/fire, which he is able to manipulate. If this is correct, then that should be fine, and like I said, they just need to be rewritten a bit so that's more clear. If that isn't correct, let me know.[/mod]
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Re: Verathius Mischevang [APPROVED, 0-2]
Sun Apr 15, 2018 8:38 pm
[adm]Moving to Mass Archival WIP, as there have been no updates to this for a month or more.[/adm]
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Re: Verathius Mischevang [APPROVED, 0-2]
Fri Jun 15, 2018 4:03 am
[mod]Putting this in the archives since Crow already has another WIP put up for him.
https://www.platinumhearts.net/t19306-verathius-mischevang-2018-revamp[/mod]
https://www.platinumhearts.net/t19306-verathius-mischevang-2018-revamp[/mod]
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