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Thu Feb 20, 2014 9:52 am
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Fri Feb 21, 2014 6:15 am

«CHECKING THIS ENTIRE THING FOR YA»

Alright, where should I begin with this one? I suppose I'll start with the quoted subject below and we'll go from there.

Immortal Demon Overlord Strength: The strength of a True Demon. Eric's physical strength is really shocking and immensely superior fierce of such an unbelievable level that even his actions cause greater destruction and deadly damage. Very stronger/powerful attacks might hurt him but they wouldn't have power of defeating him, Eric can actually block attacks depending on their strength. He's able to overpower an person's bankai and other powerful attacks with his one punch/hand slap yet it hurts when does but thanks to his ultimate strength. With mad brute force behind it, he's able to break or destroy through the walls to destroy buildings and structures with his true demonic rage.

Well it's fine that he all this boosted strength in this form, but can you define a very powerful attack or stronger assault? I mean, depending on the person's Bankai abilities, I doubt he can just lolnegate all of them with it. So I think a better example is in order; such as when I saw Eric level a good chunk of Golden Coast with his strength or destroying a city wide radius in his fight with Mana. So I'd think in order to illustrate a point, you can possibly say he is able to hold off something like a Grand Ray Cero with his bare hands; potentially even leading to a Cero Osucas, although he'd feel the sting.

Demon Overlord Stone's Durability: Due to many enhancements & demon armor fused within the demon body. Eric has an unstoppable strong resistant to damage

Remove that unstoppable bit as I don't allow anything unstoppable on the site. Just say he has a high durability in general, m8.

Blood Devil Sharingan Powers: The mad one was able to create an unique power from the blood eyes they manipulated the power of wrath and vengeance. He had to experiment with his blood eyes through tests to unlock this power. This works as the same as the Eternal Mangekyou Sharingan

Uhhhh, can you remove reference to The Eternal Mangekyou Sharingan? That's just awkward because it's from another show basically. The same thing goes for this line....

Very same but demonic abilities like the Mangekyou Sharingan

In fact, if you possibly can, just try to re-name anything with Mangekyou or Sharingan in it to something else. It's just a horrible rip-off and terrible name. The abilities themselves from that power are alright, though.

Hell Amaterasu: The technique cannot be blocked because it will keep on burning into the target is completely burned yet. The deadly attack can dodged depending on the enemy speed or running power.

The unblockable part isn't really allowed. I'd just say there is an extremely difficult chance of it being stopped due to it's high potency of energy and magic.

Also, with True Fallen Legend, there is one thing wrong

He'll have many demon abilities and iramasha abilities while in this form and great power over the flame magic.

He can't have Iramasha abilities as a Demon unless you officially make Eric some sort of Ziamichi. Therefore, I'd suggest saying that he can MIMIC them, but not actually have them.

Furthermore, I suggest making NPC Profiles for Zorin and all the others now at this point so there is official documentation of them.

That's about all the corrections I need.



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Sat Feb 22, 2014 11:51 am

«CHECKING THIS STUFF RIGHT NOW M8»

Everything is starting to look good, but I'd also like to request you change the name of Susanoo and Rinnegan as I believe we have names like that on the site and just the whole clusterfuck from Naruto just leaves an iffy taste in my mouth. So just re-name it to something else.

As far as the last form goes? Save that stuff for that form only so he isn't just casually using it in his base form. I'll also allow for the first approval towards him having a GM in Pain Endurance as he seems pretty ready for it in my opinion. I'll also deal with the NPC's in separate applications. As I noticed you made them all into one app, when they should be separate applications. So make different profiles for these people and you'll be good.

1/2 for GM in Pain Endurance & GM Strength.


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Sat Feb 22, 2014 4:54 pm
2/2 for GM in Pain Endurance and in Strength.



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Sat Feb 22, 2014 8:27 pm
Got one problem mate, CPK has that FC 'Six Sage Tobi' reserved. Either find a new one or talk it over with CPK himself.




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Sun Feb 23, 2014 3:58 am
Just giving my OK on the two of us sharing the Tobi face claim. It's only Hiroge's Ress, but I just wanted to make sure that he wasn't trying to claim it just for himself and would be willing to share it. Didn't want my org leader to get screwed out of an FC was all.

He may go ahead and claim Six Sage Tobi and then I will make a Shared Claim once S Hiroge is approved. Be sure to link back to this thread to avoid any confusion, though, Kade. Thanks for contacting me, bud.


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