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Inami's Upgrade. [Frost Check Only Due to D.E Skills]
Wed Jan 01, 2014 11:08 am
- Name Of Character: Inami Asthavon
- Link To Character Profile: https://www.platinumhearts.net/t10403-inami-asthavon-0-5-base-0-3-ppqx-demon?highlight=Inami
- Reasons For Upgrading: I am adding in D.E skills which would be sensible because she is a asthavon in the sister hood. Also i would like a GrandMaster In Zao Ka , because as Asthavon's go, they have heightened skills as stated in the team thread. Her Heightened Racial Skill would be her Zao Ka.
(D.E Skills Below in app format. )
DE Class:
DE Powers:
World Eater: World eater a power of death that is used by Inami Asthavon, is an ability that devours tangible essence when in use it comes in many forms. The attacks essence itself is intangible, meaning it can take on almost any shape. The only thing is world eater is a serious ability which causes the ground itself to turn against the enemy. By animating the ground itself with the control and understand of the dead granted by DE’s vast knowledge. Doing this it literally causes for the ground in a decent radius to be charged with the souls and bodies which had been slain by her in years past, Hollows Bodies, The damned that she keeps on her. They become released during the time that World Eater has been activated. Meaning that what world eater is , is quite literally a reincarnated offensive weapon, it can form weaker bodies from it which would generally have low tiers. Or it can form weapons become a shield, or even turn into wild animals like dogs and cats, it has many properties, which are hard to understand.
Primarily World Eater is a ability that takes its toll not on the user but everything in the vicinity, this violently powerful Death Energy power as the name aptly suggests, is devouring the ground and matter in a given area. Potency and self- Sustainability are further one of the things world eater is good at, The thing is though that when world eater is in use it is also a type of energy, which utilizes the destructive properties of death. Causing Dementia and Dysfunctional attacks, it’s not a parasite, instead it actives in a relative tier range to the users tier. Such as Inami Being 0-5 then world eater itself would be 1-1. The thing is though world eater is a large entity type power, rather than something that you normally would just wield. It is also an arsenal of death, such as being able to do multiple things, it is in many ways a cursed artifact. It was given birth from D.E locked up for 100 + years prior to it awakening , that D.E increased in power and eventually gave shape to an abomination, Which is why World Eater is known as the Puppet of Gods.
When it’s on the battle field though the interesting side-effect is that any other puppets generated become instantly destroyed; as well it only works in base state, say she was in her released state, she might be able to summon world eater, but at the same time she wouldn’t be able to control world eater. This is because of the fact that world eater functions similarly to a secondary path, it works in harmony with her but not the puppet god state itself. Given world eater has equivalent energy and is considered the True form of her final release when it’s not activated within her body. Hence the fact that world eater is the true essence of her Dark Threads, and energy given life by the death energy found within her own body. Which is why of course world eater unlike most dolls conjured is not a push over, its innate power is sustainability and independent action. Quite literally world eater is described as a “Tangible Force Which Acts Without Prompt “. Making it unpredictable, as world eater will turn on the user if she is in a state of sadness or fear. It is the type of power which constantly pushes on a persons will power and eventually will ruin them.
Finally though, World eater is not an impossible to bear force. It can be destroyed if you can override the energy keeping it in contact. Primarily though the trick is to have higher Focus then the user themselves. Such as if you had focus above Inami’s that would be one way to destroy it. The other would be something simple, like focusing the power which is normally generated on certain attacks and just annihilating the World eaters physical shape, as while it is intangible. Meaning without shape once it takes shape it does have a hard time fully functioning, making it vulnerable and able to be killed like anything else. So annihilating the physical shape itself is enough to banish World Eater for the rest of the thread. Which is why it’s not precisely as strong as you may think it is, as it can be destroyed and its power is dependent on the tier level of the person who is using it, meaning it may be insanely weak, or insanely strong, it quite honestly depends on who is using it.
Walking Dead- The Skeletal Call: Inami Asthavon has more than World Eater at her side, she also has at her generalized beck and call in times of great stress the ability to summon the dead anew. They may be weak spiritually they are roughly 6 tier. But these beasts are incredibly fast and strong, being able to function with enough force that while they are weak collectively they carry true strength and sheer numbers. Dependent on the urge and need these skeletal minions are called forth by mass Necromancy. During use the Bones of the damned can take on multiple blows from 0 tier opponents without dying. Incredibly strong physically and pretty dense to spiritual or physical attacks, the mass of minions can be shattered and broken without a problem but pack a real wallop if they get a hold of a person.
The Vice Like Strength that the Walking dead possess is very fierce being able to destroy buildings, they have unholy strength equivalent to that of the Advance Skill level, while they have no spiritual capacity. These Damned also do not need weapon skill as they use no weapons, they are moderately fast, they are strong, and they are durable. Not immortal but they do take time to kill which is why these incredibly strong physical but insanely weak spiritual beings rove in massive packs when summoned. They kill in numbers with brute strength and possess a primitive intelligence at best. Which is why when they are in use they take control mentally generally speaking to guide them ,if not they run amok and will attack anything in sight. Or rather in the strange sensory range they have which allows them to mercilessly go after opponents.
Despite the Strength They are not very smart , that’s one of the down falls for using them in battle, the intelligence they have is primitive at best, more like a wild animal. They don’t have the ability to block or fight like modern day warriors. They don’t need it because once they are destroyed they end up going back into the earth. Until then though, these forces in normal situations can reach around 1,000 of these intense dead. However in wars the amount of them varies due to the unnaturally high amount of death, the same in the demon world, in those area’s vaster amounts of the undead can be at her beck and call. However in worlds like hueco mundo , and even earth. The undead themselves are sluggish around adept in speed, and in The Demon world, these undead pack a wallop, having around advanced in speed, they run with deadly accuracy and precision when in combat.
So Despite all the short comings of the dead, such as lack of intelligence, the other problem is that. She cannot use this unless she is in her aware state, which is the comparison of what someone would call true intention and emotion, it happens when she embraces her death energy and the blood inside her, that’s generally when she is enabled to use this ability. Otherwise she generally cannot make use of the Walking Dead, because they require specific intent, and guidance, if they don’t get clear cut orders they again run amok and can even attack the person who called them from the grave without mercy. Making them a highly lethal yet unpredictable Factor to a fight, generally meaning they are only used in situations which it has become absolutely needed.
DE Merge Appearance:
DE Merge Powers:
Shadow Manipulation: Inami Asthavon In Her DE merge, has gained a affinity for the manipulation and control over shadows in a generalized radius. The strength and control over said shadows, widely varies, however when in use these can be used offensively , defensively, and even in certain situations as a means of traveling from one location to another. Literally the manipulation of shadows enabled by merging with the energy of death Latently Found inside her body allows her to become in tune with the Essence Of Shadows, what makes them up, and what dictates how they function. These actions enable for the shadows to be changed, altered and manipulated, meaning she can create and cause within a given reasonable distance, [Tier Based Reasonably ] For the shadows to be able to move at her generalize beck and call. In this way the shadows can do multiple things, but below I’ll explain what they do in more specifics.
One of the useful things that shadows enable her to do is rather entertaining , by manipulating shadows she can imbed the properties of death and her own abilities to launch them elsewhere. Even to do things like create actual tangible weapons out of the shadows, these things all are enabled by the function to partially animate and give the shadows a reasonable state of hardness. Which is why the shadows themselves can form walls which can block attacks within reason, and at the same time can change and form limbs, or even wings that the user can use. Since the shadows pull with her mental commands, it enables her also to fuse her shadows into attacks. Or even for her in certain instances to be able to move through the shadows themselves to avoid attacks. This capacity greatly enhances the ability to fight. And it enables her to travel long distances without much of a problem if she absolutely has too, primarily this is the reason that the Shadow Manipulation is quite dangerous, it takes into consideration the natural functions of the shadow and then again is altering them with something in mind. Such as altering them to become harder for defense, or stronger for offense, or connecting them for travel, its possible thanks to her fundamental understanding of shadows and generally speaking how they function.
Finally though the shadows themselves can be altered in a manner which will form barriers, or even these can be used in some instances as threads. Like if she’s cut her wound could be sewn up by a thread made of her natural energy, or the shadows she is using. These also can be used to extend the radius of her energy attacks partially by fluidly linking shadows together and then using them as a kind of dispersion device spreading energy out in a wider radius, or throwing someone off of the original signature by directing energy through the shadow and releasing it in a different location. So practically speaking it is very diverse, Enabling many functions to take place and do so with relative success when it comes to actually having it work properly like its supposed too, that’s pretty much what it does.
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Re: Inami's Upgrade. [Frost Check Only Due to D.E Skills]
Wed Feb 26, 2014 11:20 am
I have Frost's permission to check this, so don't worry you're in good hands. ;]
Let's go ahead and take this from ability to ability.
Most of this part is fine, just the fact that it being intangible has nothing to do with it being able to take any shape. Also, better explain what a "tangible essence" is, or replace the word essence with another word, because I'm unsure if you mean just any object or... idk. Essence is not a good word.
All abilities take a toll on the user. Reword that. She's not going to use an ability like this and not be fatigued by it.
"Such as Inami Being 0-5 then world eater itself would be 1-1."
That doesn't really explain anything. Use an example besides the source, because I'm confused.
A lot of grammatical errors that make this hard to read. Which will lead to confusion if anyone tries to read it in the future.
I thought World Eater was an intangible essence? Contradiction or a typo?
Add "depending on their skill level." to the end of that paragraph.
I just got thrown off by that last part. Who else would use it besides Inami? So wait... is this scaled to a tier level of her prior foes? If so, I missed that part.
Overall, the skill isn't that bad. It just needs to be proof read and put across a bit better. The drawbacks are good, just she needs to have some sort of physical or spiritual fatigue from using it because when you use any type of energy it doesn't just get replaced instantly.
"During use the Bones of the damned can take on multiple blows from 0 tier opponents without dying. Incredibly strong physically and pretty dense to spiritual or physical attacks, the mass of minions can be shattered and broken without a problem but pack a real wallop if they get a hold of a person"
Wait, wot? You're contradicting yourself here. First you say they're durable then you say they're not.
They need to have a spiritual capacity or they won't be able to do anything. Death Energy will be their spiritual capacity. So change the six tier reference above to 5 tier. Once again you said they're durable.
Don't compare them to wild animals if they are primitive. Animals are far more intelligent than you think, or at least chose a specific animal that you know for a fact is dim-witted.
Ok if there can be 1,000 of them... Then that is like something an 0-3 or an 0-2 could produce. Either drop the durability or drop the number to 100, because if they can withstand some hits from a 0 tier then this will just mutilate anyone that Inami has trouble with. I see this ability being something that is just going to prevent her from losing battles. Which, I know that is what all abilities are for. Just that's a bit ridiculous.
If this ability is something that is used only in dire situations then what effect does it have on Inami? How much does it take for her to pull off such a feat?
Ok, I know this is anime and Bleach RP, but is there any science to this? How can one manipulate a shadow? Shadows can be defined as absent light. So there needs to be some sort of light removal in order for it to work. So unless you can better explain this then I'm going to deny this skill.
Besides that, though, there is a lot of other things that need to be addressed here, as well. How far is one location to another when it comes to traveling from shadow to shadow? Shadows can't solidify, exactly so you'll need to explain this, because if you were able to form anything out of the shadows it would be just be a field with no light that would be two-dimensional.
I think what you're going for here is like a dark matter manipulation. Shadows can't become solid, as they are two-dimensional. So you can make it to where through shadows she is able to create dark matter... or something to that extent. Also, shadows cannot be created without removing or blocking light, so this is just impossible.
Let's go ahead and take this from ability to ability.
World Eater: World eater a power of death that is used by Inami Asthavon, is an ability that devours tangible essence when in use it comes in many forms. The attacks essence itself is intangible, meaning it can take on almost any shape. The only thing is world eater is a serious ability which causes the ground itself to turn against the enemy. By animating the ground itself with the control and understand of the dead granted by DE’s vast knowledge. Doing this it literally causes for the ground in a decent radius to be charged with the souls and bodies which had been slain by her in years past, Hollows Bodies, The damned that she keeps on her. They become released during the time that World Eater has been activated. Meaning that what world eater is , is quite literally a reincarnated offensive weapon, it can form weaker bodies from it which would generally have low tiers. Or it can form weapons become a shield, or even turn into wild animals like dogs and cats, it has many properties, which are hard to understand.
Most of this part is fine, just the fact that it being intangible has nothing to do with it being able to take any shape. Also, better explain what a "tangible essence" is, or replace the word essence with another word, because I'm unsure if you mean just any object or... idk. Essence is not a good word.
Primarily World Eater is a ability that takes its toll not on the user but everything in the vicinity, this violently powerful Death Energy power as the name aptly suggests, is devouring the ground and matter in a given area. Potency and self- Sustainability are further one of the things world eater is good at, The thing is though that when world eater is in use it is also a type of energy, which utilizes the destructive properties of death. Causing Dementia and Dysfunctional attacks, it’s not a parasite, instead it actives in a relative tier range to the users tier. Such as Inami Being 0-5 then world eater itself would be 1-1. The thing is though world eater is a large entity type power, rather than something that you normally would just wield. It is also an arsenal of death, such as being able to do multiple things, it is in many ways a cursed artifact. It was given birth from D.E locked up for 100 + years prior to it awakening , that D.E increased in power and eventually gave shape to an abomination, Which is why World Eater is known as the Puppet of Gods.
All abilities take a toll on the user. Reword that. She's not going to use an ability like this and not be fatigued by it.
"Such as Inami Being 0-5 then world eater itself would be 1-1."
That doesn't really explain anything. Use an example besides the source, because I'm confused.
A lot of grammatical errors that make this hard to read. Which will lead to confusion if anyone tries to read it in the future.
When it’s on the battle field though the interesting side-effect is that any other puppets generated become instantly destroyed; as well it only works in base state, say she was in her released state, she might be able to summon world eater, but at the same time she wouldn’t be able to control world eater. This is because of the fact that world eater functions similarly to a secondary path, it works in harmony with her but not the puppet god state itself. Given world eater has equivalent energy and is considered the True form of her final release when it’s not activated within her body. Hence the fact that world eater is the true essence of her Dark Threads, and energy given life by the death energy found within her own body. Which is why of course world eater unlike most dolls conjured is not a push over, its innate power is sustainability and independent action. Quite literally world eater is described as a “Tangible Force Which Acts Without Prompt “. Making it unpredictable, as world eater will turn on the user if she is in a state of sadness or fear. It is the type of power which constantly pushes on a persons will power and eventually will ruin them.
I thought World Eater was an intangible essence? Contradiction or a typo?
Add "depending on their skill level." to the end of that paragraph.
Finally though, World eater is not an impossible to bear force. It can be destroyed if you can override the energy keeping it in contact. Primarily though the trick is to have higher Focus then the user themselves. Such as if you had focus above Inami’s that would be one way to destroy it. The other would be something simple, like focusing the power which is normally generated on certain attacks and just annihilating the World eaters physical shape, as while it is intangible. Meaning without shape once it takes shape it does have a hard time fully functioning, making it vulnerable and able to be killed like anything else. So annihilating the physical shape itself is enough to banish World Eater for the rest of the thread. Which is why it’s not precisely as strong as you may think it is, as it can be destroyed and its power is dependent on the tier level of the person who is using it, meaning it may be insanely weak, or insanely strong, it quite honestly depends on who is using it.
I just got thrown off by that last part. Who else would use it besides Inami? So wait... is this scaled to a tier level of her prior foes? If so, I missed that part.
Overall, the skill isn't that bad. It just needs to be proof read and put across a bit better. The drawbacks are good, just she needs to have some sort of physical or spiritual fatigue from using it because when you use any type of energy it doesn't just get replaced instantly.
Walking Dead- The Skeletal Call: Inami Asthavon has more than World Eater at her side, she also has at her generalized beck and call in times of great stress the ability to summon the dead anew. They may be weak spiritually they are roughly 6 tier. But these beasts are incredibly fast and strong, being able to function with enough force that while they are weak collectively they carry true strength and sheer numbers. Dependent on the urge and need these skeletal minions are called forth by mass Necromancy. During use the Bones of the damned can take on multiple blows from 0 tier opponents without dying. Incredibly strong physically and pretty dense to spiritual or physical attacks, the mass of minions can be shattered and broken without a problem but pack a real wallop if they get a hold of a person.
"During use the Bones of the damned can take on multiple blows from 0 tier opponents without dying. Incredibly strong physically and pretty dense to spiritual or physical attacks, the mass of minions can be shattered and broken without a problem but pack a real wallop if they get a hold of a person"
Wait, wot? You're contradicting yourself here. First you say they're durable then you say they're not.
The Vice Like Strength that the Walking dead possess is very fierce being able to destroy buildings, they have unholy strength equivalent to that of the Advance Skill level, while they have no spiritual capacity. These Damned also do not need weapon skill as they use no weapons, they are moderately fast, they are strong, and they are durable. Not immortal but they do take time to kill which is why these incredibly strong physical but insanely weak spiritual beings rove in massive packs when summoned. They kill in numbers with brute strength and possess a primitive intelligence at best. Which is why when they are in use they take control mentally generally speaking to guide them ,if not they run amok and will attack anything in sight. Or rather in the strange sensory range they have which allows them to mercilessly go after opponents.
They need to have a spiritual capacity or they won't be able to do anything. Death Energy will be their spiritual capacity. So change the six tier reference above to 5 tier. Once again you said they're durable.
Despite the Strength They are not very smart , that’s one of the down falls for using them in battle, the intelligence they have is primitive at best, more like a wild animal. They don’t have the ability to block or fight like modern day warriors. They don’t need it because once they are destroyed they end up going back into the earth. Until then though, these forces in normal situations can reach around 1,000 of these intense dead. However in wars the amount of them varies due to the unnaturally high amount of death, the same in the demon world, in those area’s vaster amounts of the undead can be at her beck and call. However in worlds like hueco mundo , and even earth. The undead themselves are sluggish around adept in speed, and in The Demon world, these undead pack a wallop, having around advanced in speed, they run with deadly accuracy and precision when in combat.
Don't compare them to wild animals if they are primitive. Animals are far more intelligent than you think, or at least chose a specific animal that you know for a fact is dim-witted.
Ok if there can be 1,000 of them... Then that is like something an 0-3 or an 0-2 could produce. Either drop the durability or drop the number to 100, because if they can withstand some hits from a 0 tier then this will just mutilate anyone that Inami has trouble with. I see this ability being something that is just going to prevent her from losing battles. Which, I know that is what all abilities are for. Just that's a bit ridiculous.
So Despite all the short comings of the dead, such as lack of intelligence, the other problem is that. She cannot use this unless she is in her aware state, which is the comparison of what someone would call true intention and emotion, it happens when she embraces her death energy and the blood inside her, that’s generally when she is enabled to use this ability. Otherwise she generally cannot make use of the Walking Dead, because they require specific intent, and guidance, if they don’t get clear cut orders they again run amok and can even attack the person who called them from the grave without mercy. Making them a highly lethal yet unpredictable Factor to a fight, generally meaning they are only used in situations which it has become absolutely needed.
If this ability is something that is used only in dire situations then what effect does it have on Inami? How much does it take for her to pull off such a feat?
Shadow Manipulation: Inami Asthavon In Her DE merge, has gained a affinity for the manipulation and control over shadows in a generalized radius. The strength and control over said shadows, widely varies, however when in use these can be used offensively , defensively, and even in certain situations as a means of traveling from one location to another. Literally the manipulation of shadows enabled by merging with the energy of death Latently Found inside her body allows her to become in tune with the Essence Of Shadows, what makes them up, and what dictates how they function. These actions enable for the shadows to be changed, altered and manipulated, meaning she can create and cause within a given reasonable distance, [Tier Based Reasonably ] For the shadows to be able to move at her generalize beck and call. In this way the shadows can do multiple things, but below I’ll explain what they do in more specifics
One of the useful things that shadows enable her to do is rather entertaining , by manipulating shadows she can imbed the properties of death and her own abilities to launch them elsewhere. Even to do things like create actual tangible weapons out of the shadows, these things all are enabled by the function to partially animate and give the shadows a reasonable state of hardness. Which is why the shadows themselves can form walls which can block attacks within reason, and at the same time can change and form limbs, or even wings that the user can use. Since the shadows pull with her mental commands, it enables her also to fuse her shadows into attacks. Or even for her in certain instances to be able to move through the shadows themselves to avoid attacks. This capacity greatly enhances the ability to fight. And it enables her to travel long distances without much of a problem if she absolutely has too, primarily this is the reason that the Shadow Manipulation is quite dangerous, it takes into consideration the natural functions of the shadow and then again is altering them with something in mind. Such as altering them to become harder for defense, or stronger for offense, or connecting them for travel, its possible thanks to her fundamental understanding of shadows and generally speaking how they function.
Finally though the shadows themselves can be altered in a manner which will form barriers, or even these can be used in some instances as threads. Like if she’s cut her wound could be sewn up by a thread made of her natural energy, or the shadows she is using. These also can be used to extend the radius of her energy attacks partially by fluidly linking shadows together and then using them as a kind of dispersion device spreading energy out in a wider radius, or throwing someone off of the original signature by directing energy through the shadow and releasing it in a different location. So practically speaking it is very diverse, Enabling many functions to take place and do so with relative success when it comes to actually having it work properly like its supposed too, that’s pretty much what it does.
Ok, I know this is anime and Bleach RP, but is there any science to this? How can one manipulate a shadow? Shadows can be defined as absent light. So there needs to be some sort of light removal in order for it to work. So unless you can better explain this then I'm going to deny this skill.
Besides that, though, there is a lot of other things that need to be addressed here, as well. How far is one location to another when it comes to traveling from shadow to shadow? Shadows can't solidify, exactly so you'll need to explain this, because if you were able to form anything out of the shadows it would be just be a field with no light that would be two-dimensional.
I think what you're going for here is like a dark matter manipulation. Shadows can't become solid, as they are two-dimensional. So you can make it to where through shadows she is able to create dark matter... or something to that extent. Also, shadows cannot be created without removing or blocking light, so this is just impossible.
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Re: Inami's Upgrade. [Frost Check Only Due to D.E Skills]
Fri Mar 28, 2014 12:59 pm
Giving you two days to make the adjustments to this, or it's being denied.
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Re: Inami's Upgrade. [Frost Check Only Due to D.E Skills]
Thu Apr 03, 2014 3:29 am
Five days later, nothing.
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