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Tue Jan 22, 2013 12:52 pm
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Okay, here's a little something for you 'cuz I'm not impressed.
Before I throw up the checking - Super Strength, Speed, Eye sight AND two element manipulations, on top of basically negating a race downside? Woah woah WOAH buddy, slow down. I suggest you take DOWN a few power pegs ; it's like you're making a super powerful Mary Sue. So lemme know when you've thinned DOWN all the exaggerations, considering she is not getting a 0 tier like you wrote her abilities for her to have.

Lemme know when this is done.

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Sat Jan 26, 2013 7:52 am
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Good, but not good enough just yet.
I know I'm being harsh on you, but I'm sure you understand right? So, here's a quick question ; do you not see a problem with a character that's both fast, strong, able to see super far and able to hear very well? It'd be nice, but all of these are at the level that ''oh she's mastered them.'' so I'd suggest mentioning better then average, but not ''extremely remarkable'' types. Also, not happy with the complete immunity. Resistance? Sure, but complete immunity? No. You can mention because she trains herself to, she can withstand the sun longer then the average Sueki.. but not lolsunimmune.

And I just read the history. No. Change that right fuckin' now. First off ; you tried making her something site changing without reason. (First ruler of Antartica? How, what why? VAmpyre? No. Get out.) and master of guerilla warfare in Japan? (what? How? If she's ruling Antartica she wouldn't have time for such tripe as fighting in another country that has no relations.) and if Sueki don't feed, they DIE. no exceptions pretty much. No sort of Underworld vampire slumber, or whatever. So I suggest you bring that history into re-works m'dear.

And I'm done being harsh now. XD

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Wed Feb 06, 2013 9:33 pm
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This is going to the BULLSHIT Archives
you know exactly why.
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