Lami Ikane

Name:
Lami Ikane

Age:
239 (looks 19)

Gender:
Female

Orientation:
Serves loyally under Ashlei.

Appearance:

Lami prefers to keep her black hair long, so when she is hiding or sleeping, she can cover her face with it, however she has a short fringe so her hair doesn't interfere when fighting. Lami wears her cloths in tatters, yet they are always clean.

Her soul hole is literally never shown unless her clothes are severely torn, or she takes them off, as it is in the very centre of her breasts, she also has a scar from her right shoulder down to the bottom of her ribs on the left side. Her bone fragment is draped around her neck, as a necklace, it is a tooth of her hollow self, joined by some sort of chain linked bone.

Personality:
Lami is one of the smarter arrancars. When out of battle she day dreams a lot and seems to be mental, as she talks to her zanpakutou a lot. She likes to interfere with others conversations, arguments, games and sports, she doesn't care who it is, she'll interfere with arrancars, shinigami, vizard, quincy or human affairs she doesn't care. Despite this she is also one of the most aggressive she takes time before getting too stuck into the fight. Taking the time to find her opponents weaknesses before playing on those weaknesses this makes her a very tricky foe to beat. She claims to have an unmatched sonido and be the fastest bala thrower ever, although she speaks very highly of herself, she is commonly found practising hard. When people ask why she is practising when she is so super already, she merely turns away screams its none of their business and sonido's away to train somewhere else.

Lami likes to be clean, her cloths are normally in tatters but never have a single stain on them. She likes to sleep a lot, which is why she has a cape with a hood and long black hair. Although she likes to sleep, she serves Ashlei loyally, and what ever Ashlei commands Lami will execute as quickly and as perfectly as she can.

Abilities:
Lami normally uses her staff as both an offensive weapon and a shield,she increases the size of the charm on the end, which blocks all physical attacks and most cero and bala type attacks, however it is only able to block one attack at a time, and slows her down so if she were to be attacked from both sides unexpectedly she wouldn't be able to dodge very well or block both attacks.

Copy Cat
Lami is able to copy almost any ability of an enemy, but to do so, she must make herself almost completely vulnerable and take the attack directly to her body, thus preventing her from learning such things as grande ray cero. once she has taken the attack directly, she meditates for a moment in which time her staff begins "singing" normally Lami can only learn two abilities at a time before sleeping and forgetting them.

Slithering Friends
Lami starts chanting to her charm after a few seconds. Three electrical snakes drop out of the charm. Acting as pets for Lami, they obey her completely doing anything she commands.

Sealed Zanpakutô:
Lami's zanpakutou is a staff with a blade at one end and the other what seems to be a charm, she is often seen stabbing her staff into the ground and sitting, or standing talking to the charm, as if asking for comfort and directions.(Same as in description) When she enters her resurrección the charm on the end forms around her neck as a sort of pendant, so she is never away from the voice of her zanpakutou.

Skill Level: Hierro: Beginner/Adept/Advanced/Master
Skill Level: Pesquisa: Beginner/Adept/Advanced/Master
Skill Level: Sonido: Beginner/Adept/Advanced/Master
Skill Level: Cero/Bala: Beginner/Adept/Advanced/Master

Release:
Shock Orochini.

Resurrección:
A bright light engulfs the area during the transformation. This makes it harder for Lami to be spotted.
Once finished, The arms get covered in snake like bone that spirals down to her hands. The tips are pointed and at about 30cm long each, these are used as melee weapons and are retractable so they go into her hand when not needed. The shoulders have large spikes that take in electrical energy from the atmosphere. Electrical charges run down the bones and allow this to create long vines of electricity that pulse brightly. Once at desired length, it is thrown much like a rope and tangles its target then shocks them. While this is Lami's full form she also has a flight ability where electricity streams from her shoulder blades creating wing like limbs that give her the power to fly at high speeds.

Electrifying Snakes
Lami summons electrically charge snakes from her shoulders, which do not detach, they act more like ropes entangling enemies and restricting their movement.

Strangulating Electricity
The snakes that lami forms from her shoulders lunge at the enemy, they coil themselves like a lasso, aiming for the neck, once they hit they tighten around their throat and hoists them into the air, squeezing tighter and sending jolts of electricity down their bodies.

Orb Lightening
Lami is able to conjure orbs of electricity on the end of her shoulders she can fire them at the target which can either pursue the target or be shot just as a distraction. Once they collide with the desired target they cause a fairly large explosion, but also send out bolts of lightening in all directions.

Electrical Charging
Lami forms the orbs of lightening on her shoulder spikes and charges at the opponent, both impaling them and delivering a large amount of electricity to their body.

Deus ex Segunda:
Lami doesn't lose much of her previous resurrección form, she gains 3 inch long fangs which pulse yellow, and send jolts of electricity between each other on occasions when Lami is angry. She also gains a snake like tail, which can also generate her orb lightening from her previous resurrección. The last difference is that her wings are formed permanently out of electricity.

Orochi Storm
Lami summons a storm cloud above the area she is fighting in, it begins to rain and lightening starts to strike, when the lightening makes contact with a solid surface they become electric snakes. The snakes lunge at the nearest target, wrapping themselves around them, delivering shocks of electricity and prevent the target from moving.

Orochi Barrage
Lami starts chanting to her charm necklace. Six electrical snakes lunge out of the charm. Attacking everyone and everything around, including Lami's friends, the only person they do not attack is Lami herself.

History:
While Lami was still alive, she wasn't very well off, her parents worked two jobs each just to try and pay the rent, so she would be left alone for very long periods of time, but she was never left to starve, she loved her parents as much as any other child does. She had friends too, they were all better off than her, but they didn't care she was poor, hell she was the life of any party, always cracking jokes and planning tricks, everyone loved her. Then one day as her parents were on their way back from work, a building collapsed on them. No one could explain how the building could have collapsed. The only evidence was a set of three claw marks along the width of the building, where the building had collapsed from.

Lami returned home the night of the accident from her friends, to find an empty house apart from a mysterious wrapped parcel addressed to her sat in the centre of her living room. Lami cautiously unwrapped the parcel to find a beautifully crafted princess/magicians staff with a purple gem on the tip. Tucked in just underneath the staff was a little note, which read. "To our darling princess, we know you don't often get the things you want, but that will change from now on, we promise, love you always mummy and daddy."

Lami heard the door open, thinking it was her parents she ran for the door, as she entered the hallway, she stopped immediately. All she could feel was an icy could chill in the room, it was strange because the sun was just setting and it shouldn't have been this cold already. The door was wide open, but no one was there as Lami tried to retreat back to the living room, she fell on her bum when she looked up she could see a strange blurry outline of some kind of creature. She tried to scream but no sound escaped her wide open mouth. The last thing she saw was the blurry figure dart at her, the next she was standing in her living room holding her staff and a strange chain connected to her chest between her breasts. The room was empty, no furniture, no wallpaper, nothing. She spent a few years wondering around her house and the derelict surroundings till one night, as she was in the corner of the living room crying, she heard the door open, she jumped up with her staff in her hand, rushed to the door, only to be confronted with that same icy air, this time see couldn't just see a blurry outline, she could see the entire body of a grotesque two legged creature with a white mask. Lami lunged straight at the beast but it was too fast, it dodge and yanked the chain out of her chest. Lami fainted again this time when she awoke, she didn't have her staff, she didn't recognise any of her surroundings. She was in some sort of desert, the sky was black, and there were strange crystal like tree's everywhere. This became her new home, she found more of the same type of creature that had killed her, she made it her game to hunt them down and kill them, hoping she would one day find a way back to her mum and dad.

Before Lami became an arrancar, she fought many battles against the shinigami and quincy races but managed to elude detection when things got bad. She spent many years hunting, killing and eating every single hollow she could find, gaining more and more power with each meal, she quickly gained so much power she started to change shapes, with each new shape, she could kill and eat more and more hollows and even hollows she was previously afraid of would run at the sight of her. Before long she became an adjuchas. She didn't stop here how ever, she continued to devour other hollows even hunting down other adjuchas both for the pleasure of the fight and the boost in power. When Lami finally became an arrancar she learnt to wield a sword quickly. After a while she sought to learn bala and cero, she was close to learning the grande ray cero when she heard voices in her head complaining that cero's were useless and a waste of time she went on to try something else, she would venture out for days on end into the menos forests killing hollow's increasing her speed, bala and her heirro. While Lami trained one day, she thought about fighting shinigami to hone her skills and see how strong she had gotten. She went to the human world to find an opponent and quickly cut down a few low ranking shinigami. She was unpleased with her results and returned to the menos forest for more training. On one of her training days she felt she could do much better then before, but she trained to hard and for too long, when she stopped to rest a hollow lept at her in a surprise attack and penetrated her heirro, thus reducing its effectiveness.

RP Sample:
It was a usual sandy night in the deserts of Hueco Mundo, Lami was sat leaning against her staff asleep, when the ground started shaking and woke her up. "What is it now Jusou?" She paused as if listening to her staff,. "I see I best go check it out." With this she stood up, brushed herself off, raised her hands above her head stretched far, picked up Jusou and disappeared. About a mile away a battle was under way between two adjuchas that were trying to become vasto lorde one was a crocodile shaped hollow, the other seemed to be a flying snake, both were at least 10ft long and 7ft tall. As the crocodile was about to take a chunk out of the other with its huge jaws, a staff got impaled into the bottom of its mouth, and was sticking out of the top of its jaw. Lami had appeared just in time to have some fun, she left her staff impaled in the adjuchas mouth and used her sonido to appear above the second adjuchas, as it was about to fly up towards Lami she started firing a barrage of bala from each finger tip she fired about 25 before seeing that the flying snake had disappeared all that was left where it had been were circular holes in the sand. "Oppsie I think I went a bit over board, oh well, I'm hungry." She then spotted the crocodile adjuchas. "You will do nicely." The adjuchas tried to run away, but being so large and having Lami's staff sticking out of its mouth, it failed within a few steps, Lami appeared on its nose, ripping her staff out of its mouth along with a chunk of its lower and upper jaw, she then proceeded to eat it, before falling forwards and fell asleep.

I have noticed through this entire app, you use comma's instead of full stops. Please go through and deal with those because it just looks like your not giving us a breather between sentences and makes the app look very noobish. After all, the app is one of the most important parts of a member

Name:
Lami Ikane

Age:
239 (looks 19)

Gender:
Female

Orientation:
Serves loyally under Ashlei.

Appearance:

Her soul hole is literally never shown unless her clothes are severely torn, or she takes them off, as it is in the very centre of her breasts, she also has a scar from her right shoulder down to the bottom of her ribs on the left side.(see heirro skill for reason) Her bone fragment is draped around her neck, as a necklace, it is a tooth of her hollow self, joined by some sort of chain linked bone.

Even though you have given an image, try to add yet another paragraph to describe her clothing, eye colour, hair style etc. This will at least make your Appearance more described than if you left it with just her body features. You could even say what she thinks of her own appearance to boost it a bit

Personality:
Lami is one of the smarter arrancars. When out of battle she day dreams a lot and seems to be mental, as she talks to her zanpakutou a lot, she likes to interfere with others conversations, arguments, games and sports, she doesn't care who it is, she'll interfere with arrancars, shinigami, vizard, quincy or human affairs she doesn't care. Despite this she is also one of the most aggressive she takes time before getting too stuck into the fight, and takes time to find her opponents weaknesses before playing on those weaknesses this makes her a very tricky foe to beat, she claims to have an unmatched sonido and be the fastest bala thrower ever, although she speaks very highly of herself, she is commonly found practising hard, when people ask why she is practicing when she is so super already, she merely turns away screams its none of their business and sonido's away to train somewhere else.

Turn this into at least two paragraphs with 5 sentences in each. To improve your chances, add more to the paragraphs to make them longer and more descriptive. Try looking at approved applications for ideas as to how you could add more to this

Abilities:
Lami normally uses her staff as both an offensive weapon and a shield,she increases the size of the charm on the end, which blocks all physical attacks and most cero and bala type attacks, however it is only able to block one attack at a time, and slows her down so if she were to be attacked from both sides unexpectedly she wouldn't be able to dodge very well or block both attacks.

Copy Cat
Lami is able to copy almost any ability of an enemy, but to do so, she must make herself almost completely vulnerable and take the attack directly to her body, thus preventing her from learning such things as grande ray cero. once she has taken the attack directly, she meditates for a moment in which time her staff begins "singing" normally Lami can only learn two abilities at a time before sleeping and forgetting them.

Sealed Zanpakutô:
Lami's zanpakutou is a staff with a blade at one end and the other what seems to be a charm, she is often seen stabbing her staff into the ground and sitting, or standing talking to the charm, as if asking for comfort and directions.(Same as in description)
Is this lost during Resserecion?

Skill Level: Hierro: Beginner/Adept/Advanced/Master
Skill Level: Pesquisa: Beginner/Adept/Advanced/Master
Skill Level: Sonido: Beginner/Adept/Advanced/Master
Skill Level: Cero/Bala: Beginner/Adept/Advanced/Master

Release:
Shock Jusou.

Resurrección:

A bright light engulfs the area during the transformation. This makes it harder for Lami to be spotted.

Once finished, The arms get covered in snake like bone that spirals down to her hands. The tips are pointed and at about 30cm long each, these are used as melee weapons and are retractable so they go into her hand when not needed. The shoulders have large spikes that take in electrical energy from the atmosphere. Electrical charges run down the bones and allow this to create long vines of electricity that pulse brightly. Once at desired length, it is thrown much like a rope and tangles its target then shocks them. While this is Lami's full form she also has a flight ability where electricity streams from her shoulder blades creating wing like limbs that give her the power to fly at high speeds.

Strangulating Electricity
The "rope" that lami forms from her shoulders are thrown at the enemy, like a lasso, it tightens around their throat and hoists them into the air, squeezing tighter and sending jolts of electricity down the ropes.
Well this could hit any part of the body so don't just direct it at their throat.

Orb Lightening
Lami is able to conjure orbs of electricity on the end of her shoulders she can fire them at the target which can either pursue the target or be shot just as a distraction.
What happens when they collide? Explosion? pulse of electricity etc?

Electrical Charging
Lami forms the orbs of lightening on her shoulder spikes and charges at the opponent, both impaling them and delivering a large amount of electricity to their body.
Be Careful with this as the description you have given is very close to god-modding material.

Deus ex Segunda:
This can be left empty if you want

History:
Before Lami became an arrancar, she fought many battles against the shinigami and quincy races but managed to elude detection when things got bad. She spent many years hunting, killing and eating every single hollow she could find, gaining more and more power with each meal, she quickly gained so much power she started to change shapes, with each new shape, she could kill and eat more and more hollows and even hollows she was previously afraid of would run at the sight of her. Before long she became an adjuchas. She didn't stop here how ever, she continued to devour other hollows even hunting down other adjuchas both for the pleasure of the fight and the boost in power. When Lami finally became an arrancar she learnt to wield a sword quickly. After a while she sought to learn bala and cero, she was close to learning the grande ray cero when she heard voices in her head complaining that cero's were useless and a waste of time she went on to try something else, she would venture out for days on end into the menos forests killing hollow's increasing her speed, bala and her heirro. While Lami trained one day, she thought about fighting shinigami to hone her skills and see how strong she had gotten. She went to the human world to find an opponent and quickly cut down a few low ranking shinigami. She was unpleased with her results and returned to the menos forest for more training. On one of her training days she felt she could do much better then before, but she trained to hard and for too long, when she stopped to rest a hollow lept at her in a surprise attack and penetrated her heirro, thus reducing its effectiveness.

For your history, try your bets to make it at least 4 paragraphs of 5-6 lines each. Think of how they lived as a human and how they died. Then you could go on about their life as a hollow and then into hueco mundo. Everything can be described very well in the history if you can think of things to add, even if its just to say the character used to be a good skateboarder or something

also, look at your spelling

RP Sample:
It was a usual sandy night in the deserts of Hueco Mundo, Lami was sat leaning against her staff asleep, when the ground started shaking and woke her up. "What is it now Jusou?" She paused as if listening to her staff,. "I see I best go check it out." With this she stood up, brushed herself off, raised her hands above her head stretched far, picked up Jusou and disappeared. About a mile away a battle was under way between two adjuchas that were trying to become vasto lorde one was a crocodile shaped hollow, the other seemed to be a flying snake, both were at least 10ft long and 7ft tall. As the crocodile was about to take a chunk out of the other with its huge jaws, a staff got impaled into the bottom of its mouth, and was sticking out of the top of its jaw. Lami had appeared just in time to have some fun, she left her staff impaled in the adjuchas mouth and used her sonido to appear above the second adjuchas, as it was about to fly up towards Lami she started firing a barrage of bala from each finger tip she fired about 25 before seeing that the flying snake had disappeared all that was left where it had been were circular holes in the sand. "Oppsie I think I went a bit over board, oh well, I'm hungry." She then spotted the crocodile adjuchas. "You will do nicely." The adjuchas tried to run away, but being so large and having Lami's staff sticking out of its mouth, it failed within a few steps, Lami appeared on its nose, ripping her staff out of its mouth along with a chunk of its lower and upper jaw, she then proceeded to eat it, before falling forwards and fell asleep.

The RP sample isn't a very important part of an application but it does give us an idea of how you would roleplay. What has been done here is not to RP standards. Make it more presentable with paragraphs, colors etc

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