Kaleb Seiger
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- GuestGuest
Re: Kaleb Seiger
Tue May 15, 2012 5:03 am
Okay so what changed from your previous application?
- GuestGuest
Re: Kaleb Seiger
Thu May 17, 2012 2:10 am
Moved to WIP for Throurough checking.
I hope if other's characters were used in your history, they were cleared to be.
Delete that line. Or edit it. Just no.
change that line too. Since those states no longer exist.
No. your tier and at least half of your energy gone. Since this is a high rank demon, a clone of your character, you better be paying goddamn good drawbacks for summoning it.
I thought this was Kade, not Exodus. o.O
So you can't muster enough energy to life big things, but somehow have enough energy to completely stop in momentum medium things? No. Change that wording.
No. Considering you have massive strength already, increasing it more? Adjust your numbers and make a separate one for speed and strength.
Again who the fuck is Exodus?
If they dodged it, they dodged it unless the lighting current is exterior and not interior like you described. Change that.
Elaborate more. Does it move around? Does it home into attacks? It is a 360 whirlwind around his body or just from one direction?
lolno @supersonic speed. Re-adjust that technique.
No. Again, you're buffing MORE? Take that out.
ARG WHO IS THS EXODUS YOU KEEP COPYING FROM?
No. First : if it's countered, it's up to them to decide if they are still damaged or not. Second, you don't mention if you can use all the time instantly after that one invocation, or if it has to be done each time. Also provide a cool down of use.
No. Remake that into something better. As is, it's denied.
All three of these need a cooldown duration.
Rework this. It's OP the way it is now and denied. So change it.
Twice in one app? First off that state no longer exists, this is Kaleb, not Dark Kaleb and it has a shoddy explanation. Please, re-work this.
Again Kaleb, not Dark Kaleb.
.. what is this? X.x IT's an ax but a spear but a sword? Make up your mind. Also Muko doesn't exist and it's not Dark Kaleb. At least try to copy paste less shamelessly dammit.
Dark Kaleb? DARK EXODUS? WHAT THE FLYIN' 'ELL.
This line.. what the hell.. x.x
OKAY JUST NUKE ALL MENTIONS OF DARK KALEB IN YOUR ABILITIES APART FROM SUMMONING HIM. SAME WITH THAT EXODUS DUDE.
No. Rework that, denied.
What the fuck is this? So confusing for one, and unrelated to his forms or abilities in another. Like srsly, what the fuck.
Also.
IF ANY OF THESE CHANGES ARE NOT DONE WHEN YOU REPLY TO THIS SAYING EDITED, THIS IS DENIED. THANK YOU.
I hope if other's characters were used in your history, they were cleared to be.
However these demons are as strong as him but his supreme summon demons are a bit stonger then him.
Delete that line. Or edit it. Just no.
The former mecha demon has control of his shishi mudo, satsugai tsuru and muko jotai which mecha demon powers.
change that line too. Since those states no longer exist.
Dark Kade tier is 1-1 . The demon summoner's will fell medium-high fatigue if summoned him also 1/3 of his blood will be gone
No. your tier and at least half of your energy gone. Since this is a high rank demon, a clone of your character, you better be paying goddamn good drawbacks for summoning it.
A medium weak attack if Exodus wants to catch people off guard.
I thought this was Kade, not Exodus. o.O
Can't lift big objects like trucks, big sized boulders also it completely stop a medium sized attack coming his way.
So you can't muster enough energy to life big things, but somehow have enough energy to completely stop in momentum medium things? No. Change that wording.
The demon's strength is about 100% more stronger than his original form with this strength he can destroy anything coming his way even an weak opponent's attack.
No. Considering you have massive strength already, increasing it more? Adjust your numbers and make a separate one for speed and strength.
However, Exodus can be defeated if some was stronger also with keen intellect may have skills necessary in defeating him in battle.
Again who the fuck is Exodus?
The attack can be dodged if the timing is right. But the lightning current will still hurt the opponent.
If they dodged it, they dodged it unless the lighting current is exterior and not interior like you described. Change that.
3) Dark Pain: The ultimate defense when a sword then a black barrier will appear around the use blocking any kind of attack coming his way Stronger enemies can destroy the barrier. The defense will require a little blood from the demon fingers to make it work. Which the sword will return back in his hand.
Elaborate more. Does it move around? Does it home into attacks? It is a 360 whirlwind around his body or just from one direction?
4) Reaper Cutter: By pulling down his sword at high speed, Kaleb shoots a large destructive shockwave moving at supersonic speed. It causes great damage to his opponent even if it barely grazes him, and is a technique powerful enough to shatter a person's body. But it does have a weakness if the shockwave is attacked by a stronger attack or strong rock attack then the attack with just be like a small earthquake.
lolno @supersonic speed. Re-adjust that technique.
Final Attack) Final Devil: An red aura will appear englufing the demon increasing Kaleb's speed and strength the sword will glow dark black. He quickly rush at his opponent to shreds with his sword slashes but also with the sharp gusts of wind he creates. The attack can be destroyed if hit a strong flame attack then then the aura will dissapear and attack is over with.
No. Again, you're buffing MORE? Take that out.
Exodus can only use this about ten times because everyone it hurts it skin was he's healing
ARG WHO IS THS EXODUS YOU KEEP COPYING FROM?
Dark Fate: Creates a small volcanic explosion right beneath the target. The attack can destroyed by an strong water attack but the enemy with still feels the effects from it. It takes some energy to create the attack. It takes 1 posts to complete the invocation for spell. Then the user can attack instantly with.
No. First : if it's countered, it's up to them to decide if they are still damaged or not. Second, you don't mention if you can use all the time instantly after that one invocation, or if it has to be done each time. Also provide a cool down of use.
Dispel: An anicent black energy which can destroy an enemy attacks or anything harmful coming the user's way. The attack starts with just with a thumbs up hand gesture then the black energy is summoning which will destroy or go after an enemy's attack or abilities. If the enemy's is stronger the user the dispel will only block of the attack.
No. Remake that into something better. As is, it's denied.
Deadly Firewall: Creates a wall of flames which size and shape can be changed at will by the user. It can also be used as a defensive spell as the ascending currents of hot air created by the wall can dissipate gaz or mist based spells.
Painful Tears: Shoots ice missles that explode upon contact with the target into hundred of sharp shards. The attack be blocked by the natural enemy of ice is fire. Stronger Fire abilities will destroy the attack completely. It can create two hundred of sharp shards.
Healing: By summoning a green energy called Avalon, the user can heal them instantly but it takes a person some time to heal. About 1 post to heal limbs or wounds. It takes 3 posts to create a healing spell to heal the whole body. But it takes energy to heal meaning the user would show signs of fatigue.
All three of these need a cooldown duration.
Deathadder Spiral Blast: The technique is a very powerful laser beam created by Kaleb to kill his enemies.The move is performed by touching the index and middle fingers of one hand to the forehead and charging enough energy to attack. Its speed changes to the demon energy of the person performing the move. When ready, the fingers are extended forward, the attacker shouts the name of the attack and two thin energy beams are unleashed from the fingers. One remains straight while the other coils around the straight beam. The resulting beam is quite powerful, drilling through most targets, and exploding on the ones it can't. It can also be used with only one arm. The weakness is can be blocked to dodge if the enemy had faster speed or great defense.
Rework this. It's OP the way it is now and denied. So change it.
Augmented Strength & Speed: In his Muko Jotai state, Dark Kaleb has his strength and speed increased within his transformed muko state. All due to thhe knowledge of other demons. He a bit stronger against a captain of Gotei 13 or stronger espada however this form would to be the best for fighting for people like vice captain, unseated members or Arrancar with resurrecion, bounts and maybe quincys.
Twice in one app? First off that state no longer exists, this is Kaleb, not Dark Kaleb and it has a shoddy explanation. Please, re-work this.
Going into a fight, Dark Kaleb put his full strength and muscle into his axe so cuts and attacks can be quick and deadly.
Again Kaleb, not Dark Kaleb.
Metalbone Razor's Axe: This legendary Razor Axe was taken and used to kill its former master during the Battle of Acre. In his Muko state, Dark Kaleb used the Grimorum Arcanorum to resurrected a demon version of the axe. The axe can change into a straight, spear-like form, or collapse into a blade on Dark Kaleb's arm. It can also grow and shrink at will because of the skull demon living inside the blade. It was made from a metal dinosaur and metal demon bones, the blood from humans was used to sharpen the blade. To enemies it felt a slash of horrible pain to weaker opponents to stronger opponents it causing dizzyness and minimum damage.
.. what is this? X.x IT's an ax but a spear but a sword? Make up your mind. Also Muko doesn't exist and it's not Dark Kaleb. At least try to copy paste less shamelessly dammit.
Augmented Demon Combatant: He has repeatedly shown great agility and coordination in his attacks. In addition to having powerful & stronger kicks and punches, Dark Kaleb has also shown proficiency in counterattacks, takedowns, and body locks. Now as Dark Kaleb all that knowledge had been past in the demon's mind as he can put his demon strength his old fighting style. Dark Exodus's hand to hand strength is triple and better then his original state, he maybe stronger then a shinigami captain's hand combat strength.
Dark Kaleb? DARK EXODUS? WHAT THE FLYIN' 'ELL.
He created this attack for killing purposes when demons were becoming bothersome and he wanted to kill them on bad ass attack.
This line.. what the hell.. x.x
OKAY JUST NUKE ALL MENTIONS OF DARK KALEB IN YOUR ABILITIES APART FROM SUMMONING HIM. SAME WITH THAT EXODUS DUDE.
Once he fires it, it leaves a shot black trail of energy behind before it hits the target, very easily causing a nuke-sized explosion that destroys everything caught in the explosion. Enough to destroy half a town which a long while(4 posts). Enemies under 2-3 will greatly hurt from this attack
Stronger enemies of 0-5 or 0-1 rankings can block or destroy the attack
No. Rework that, denied.
☨ Drawbacks: Kaleb Seiger has a specialized power called the Nephilim Devil Heart. The Nephilim Devil heart is placed well embedded on his right hand almost like a black gauntlet. Which considers of Six rubies which he must choose which power to attack with against enemies. (3 Abilities and 6 Attacks which he must choose) He would have to wait one day to change his attack patterns. Another drawback is he would have to for wait to win or be defeated in battle to change the attacks within the Devil's heart. This also the cause when he transforms too giving him but he's allow to have 4 more attacks when in his transformed states. Also for vampiric reasons, Kaleb can't stand garlic the scent of it causes his arms to get numb. He thought maybe a vampire flesh was edge into his well being. But garlic is something he can't stand which is why he might send a summoned demon to get rid of him. Cold/Ice Attacks in his normal state can weaken him for a while but if he transforms or shifts then the ice numbness will go away.
What the fuck is this? So confusing for one, and unrelated to his forms or abilities in another. Like srsly, what the fuck.
Also.
IF ANY OF THESE CHANGES ARE NOT DONE WHEN YOU REPLY TO THIS SAYING EDITED, THIS IS DENIED. THANK YOU.
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Re: Kaleb Seiger
Sun Jun 10, 2012 8:29 pm
- GuestGuest
Re: Kaleb Seiger
Wed Oct 10, 2012 4:59 pm
Okay moved into Archives!
If you want it back, feel free to ask! It's just been sitting around way too long so yeah.
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