Rizuki Yamato (Finished)

Tue Mar 08, 2011 9:52 pm

S H I N I G A M I

B A S I C I N F O R M A T I O N

Name: Rizuki Yamato
Gender: Male
Age:1435
Appearance:

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P E R S O N A L I T Y

Personality: Rizuki is a Quiet yet intelligent shinigami. Rizuki would stay in his room during the shinigami academy to study and learn more about the history of the worlds. He would skip class and walk around the seireitei exploring. Most importantly everyone notices his love of cats. He loves Cats but hates every other animal known to man. Rizuki hates the other animals that disturbs his friends(a.k.a The Cats). During the academy Rizuki would be seen with his pet neko and would get in trouble for it. Other than being with his cats he is always in the library studying or in his room asleep with Neko. In every exam he would pass with an average grade. In his whole class he is known as the quiet smart guy or Neko Guy.
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B A C K G R O U N D

History/Background: Rizuki Yamato once was alive like everybody else. Rizuki worked at his family's pet shop. He loved it there he wouldn't work anywhere else in the world. The Yamato Pet Shop was known as the best place for Pets in the whole city. Rizuki wasn't very popular and was known as the Lonely kid on the block. His true best friends was his pet Cat Neko. Rizuki was pushed off a cliff one day when on vacation with his family. A kid he knew that hated him just ran up at him and pushed himself and Rizuki to the bottom. They both died on contact. And his family only thought he ran away.
His life in the Rukongai wasn't that special either. He was a dirty kid who lived on the streets and fed off of scraps. When bullies picked on him they would run away from him in fear. Even those that still fought him lost either way. One day when he was walking on the streets he pumped into a shinigami. That shinigami was friendly and gave him some money so he could buy food. After that day Rizuki dreamt of becoming a shinigami.
Two years later that same shinigami helped him get into the Shinigami Academy. Rizuki after so long found what he wanted to do with his life. He passed with average grades and loved reading books about the shinigami history. He also loved to spar with fellow students with his practice sword. He was one of the best academy students of his year. In his final year of the Shinigami Academy he was one of the best there was and most likely to succeed out of the group.
When he finally became a Shinigami Rizuki became a 4th seat on squad 5. He completed many missions with his squad especially assault missions against hollows. He hated hollows worse that anything he could have ever imagined. One of the hollows he killed was the kid that had pushed him off a cliff killing him. Rizuki enjoyed his missions and also enjoyed his squad. His squad were the only people he ever knew that respected him and didn't make fun of him.(You will write about their life on earth, then their history as a shinigami here. 3-4 paragraph's)

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Zanpakutô Spirit Name: KageNeko
Appearance:

Inner World: Giant Japanese Castle.
Sealed Zanpakutô : An Average Zanpakto with a Charm of a cat at the End.
PhatomTech: None

Release: Litter this World With Darkness, KageNeko
Shikai Description: A Glove type weapon with Blades Coming out of Each Knuckle on one hand and a Small Dagger in the other.
Shikai Abilities: This Shikia is multi-Elemental, The Bladed Glove is Earth and the Dagger is Lightning. The Glove can crush the Ground and causes damage and can severly injure. The Dagger if Made contact with the enemy it can Shock Enemies and sometimes immobilizes them for a couple seconds.
Bankai Description: (This does not apply until you learn Bankai)

Bankai Abilities: (This does not apply until you learn Bankai)

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R P S A M P L E

Roleplay Sample: Rizuki was laughing as he shot bullets at the Arrancar.Then Rizuki pulled out his chain and threw it at the enemy.He soon would wait for the Arrancar withering on the ground as he cringed at his pain.
Please show us how you role play by either posting a previous post from another site or creating a new one. We do this so we know your RP skill. If you already have an accepted, you need not do another RP sample)

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S K I L L S H E E T

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General Skills

Durability: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
General Speed: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Strength: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Weapon Skill: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner

Racial Skills

Hoho: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Kidou: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Zanjutsu: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Hakuda: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner

Wed Mar 23, 2011 6:21 pm

Application Checklist

Name [X]
Appropriate Age [X]
Gender [X]
Appearance Present [X]
Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
10 sentences for personality [X]
History is of appropriate length [X]
Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [X]
Powers are described reasonably enough [O]
Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[X]
RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) [X]
RP Sample is 10 sentences [O]

Comments/Notes:

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Wut?

Ok, first off, start with describing your powers a bit better. The way you have them written is pretty vague. Also, please describe your inner world a bit better. A "Large Japanese Castle" is also very vague. Try to be more descriptive and let us know important info. For instance, how long does the electricity stun for? Is the time they're stunned effected by their tier? Tell us.

Second, try to beef up that role play sample. We need at least 10 sentences for that, not 3.

When those changes are made, I will check this again.

Tier: Incomplete

Wed Apr 13, 2011 11:03 am

Inactive WIP

Mon Apr 18, 2011 1:55 pm

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