James Raven remake [APPROVED 1-3]
+4
Chao
MaidInAmn
Kitty
Nickcca
8 posters
Page 1 of 2 • 1, 2
- NickccaEstablished Member
- Joined : 2010-06-04
Posts : 198
Age : 36
Member Info
Platinum Points:
(0/0)
Tiers:
James Raven remake [APPROVED 1-3]
Sun Feb 27, 2011 4:44 pm
Human Template
General Information
Name:
James Raven
Age:
416
Gender:
male
Overall Appearance
Personality:
James and stein person and keep himself to himself since his body his mostly hollow bone armour he does miss the old days with his friend and family before he turn into a hollow knight true form. This is unknown to the group he founded 350 years ago he curry a book he ready he place for the order to find it which mean hw show how wise he as kind he is. He knew full well if introduce his evolved self to them soon they end up killing him out right and ask questions later. James his type of person when know when it a time to act or think thing thought out of all the things he been thought like first time Wonderer trying to make chaos into the world, Azains attack which resulted it a lot of hollows of coming and left with him dealing almost all by himself and many other event that followed.
He also care still about his order since he still had pure family members even though there his great great great garn children he tries helping them out form the shadows make sure the order stay alive and well. He never shown his face to old friends in years since he not how react to him changed now he little afraid they will hate for what he is ichgo orhime and other old school friends. He is kindness know no limet he hlep out anyone eve na stanger in anyways whats so ever but sometiems his kidness can a crul kind aswell he know when to do to set them on the right path.
He rogth when some training himslef or anyone that he takes under his wing he know how far and when it time not to push them he wise in knowing thier limts. He is wise as well as he been alot of things he will bestorw the wise thing to do in battle or in life in getnal. Even he does come with this stangeness like his food taste it like orhimes he cook stange food that few people like and aswell atfer all those year he get shy when likes a girl he knows. He also stabben as hell aswell at times when let his age get ohis head and let stay back soo he deal with the fight he hate see people get hurt that he make back he let anyone into a fight even tought he some wont able to control if they do or not.
Appearance:
Height: 5.9 ft
Weight: 16 stone
Natural Abilities
James powers they much more powerful than before he become one of ancaer that also still liveing his armour is made form his own hollow bone that be manifest any time now and that took him year to master. He also gain great powers as well that far surpass any humen in the world most he oldest human alive to unique powers but he never live in the human world but can visit. Thought with great power can gain greater weakness. what makes stanger still he can remove his maks and show his human face but hie his body dies he trun into a full acncaer which there is no telling.
:Ongoing powers:
:Hollow bone armour:
This armour power can be turn on and off anytime like ichgos bankai the armour and how writhe and without cracks states how much spiritual pressure he has or how powerful he is. Also this gives him protection ageist direct and projectile attacks in any way thought it can break in time. There are types of kiudo that does effect him at all like most binding kiudos will not works as well as very low level one but very high level explosive or blade kidos can make a nasty dent. Note wind attack can not damage the armour at does mean it can not harm him if you hit the right place. With great armour there is a hauliers heel this armour as a small hole on the side of his helmet that where his head due this a hollow based power he can be hurt and will make him feel much pain.
But dude to this it will give him Naturally super sength and speed and high endurance.
Power Stats
Weakness: hight level blade and expolding kiduos
Iumamuety: most binding kiduos and low level
Rechagre time: ongoing
attack Power: none
Definive power: high
Speed: medium
attack Chagre time: none
:The hollow Cannon:
The hollow cannon in on his left arm act as range attack that fire either a red and black huge cero bream that do deviating damage to his foes it sometime kill them if there very weak but can cause damage to most powerful for if hit direly but even if not the still extreme damage to whatever limb it will hit. But this beam will need charging it does not take that much time but it will lower his spiritual pressure temporally makes a great opening. Or he a less cost but weaker method her can fire quickly blue ceros like a gatling gun even thought it fast and cost very low cost of power to using it. There is a cost of less damaging effects and less aim even he made hug damage if hit a lot by ceros. He make more damage by giving sort of intense burst of blue cero like a mischance gun to get more power and aim into his shoots. This cannon also act as a powerful shield that take on most attacks.
Weakness: If useing a chagre attack it laves him open to attack
Iumamuety: none
Rechagre time: if a chaged attack 2 post
attack Power: weak if shotting weaker shot hight if charged
Definive power: low
Speed: very fast to slow if charged
attack Chagre time: none with weak 1 post if charged
: Regaining spiritual pressure:
this power allows him to regain power at faster rate then he sucking spiritual particles form trees, and other objects and so on around him to regain his power slowly but effetely to regain his spiritual pressure so the opening form his red and black cero attack will keep open to attack for long and quickly regain his power but this does not heal him. If near water or ice his power will speed up.
Weakness: none
Iumamuety: none
Rechagre time: ongoing
attack Power: none
Definive power: none
Speed: medium
attack Chagre time: none
:Ice and water boost:
This when ever he battling near water or ice he power get stronger by a little but fighting on give a much more boost in powers or other powerful powers he has and more so on his on going powers dude his element of his humans powers conersponds with his hollow powers.
:Battle powers:
Powers that need to focus on to use them.
: Ice/Water bending:
Yes he has the power to bend and shape ice and water to whatever from he likes he even turn ice to water and vice visa. He can even turn water to mist and reform to water or ice or even powerful snow storms he has to manipulate it how ever he wanted to make it disappear and reaper as long there trace of water into anything. He most self liked move he mostly known for is to make a ice sword eve tougher than diamonds to a nearly unbreakable point. If does break however he reform to water and back to ice again. This power alone makes even most worthy of foe weary of him.
Weakness: High level heast to make the water dissaper and tunder
Iumamuety: ice / water
Rechagre time: ongoing
attack Power: medium
Definive power: medium
Speed: medium to fast
attack Chagre time: none
:Ice age:
This power is very different due how to does compare to bending power this he turn the vipzire water in the air into unseen tiny bits of ice make the heat of the aura drop to low to very degouos levels. He turn area to a winter wonder land to an aypoclice ice age freeze what he wants in its wake this power can lower spiritual pressure and lave an opening for a while and attacks will be weaken temporally.
Weakness: some wit hthe possaite power to make into a vlocainco or agian tunder if the snow truned to water by high heat
Iumamuety: ice/ water
Rechagre time: 4 posts
attack Power: none
Definive power: none
Speed: solw to hight depaning how strong a snow strom he makes
attack Chagre time: none
:Judgement Day:
This power is same as Shinigami zanputos power to purify and send to the SS or send them to hell if committed to sin in their past live. This is a both ongoing power and a battle power depending on how he uses it if get hit by his element power if get killed the Shinigami side of that power kick in. But found there a another way to use it in attack he calls Judgement day. This is a last resort attack if nothing else works due to this can drain all his power and lave variable for open attack for the rest of that day. This attack make a bright light around him make a ball this will take time to charge he make a ball big enough about the side of a huge ass wreaking ball.
He will then make small into no bigger than a gold ball then will exdolpe all around him make like a bright light nuke any sprit if killed by it will purify the more send to hell or the SS humans can other living being can not be harm by this like also mod soul can’t be as well. This power will bring James to his knees after wards.
Weakness: this power ca nweaken him uttly and most of his powers uslesss and hightly powered kiudos if that hit the power will back fire and hurt hi malot more
Iumamuety: one chaged olyn thign that can stop this is a highly powered ikudo attack
Rechagre time: 3 threads 2 freesyle one training
attack Power: very high
Definive power: high
Speed: very solw
attack Chagre time: 5 posts
:Call of the hollows:
James is a new breed of human he like a hollow man dude to his share power like an anrcaer he call hollows to his side to do battle for him or beside him he even call 1 menos grande to his side. Tough he will risk that soul life if emery killing attack will not purify the hollow.
Weakness: zanpotkos as for all hollows
Iumamuety: none
Rechagre time: 3 posts
attack Power: weak to high depeaning how many
Definive power: low
Speed: somewhat fast
attack Chagre time: none
[center]Background/Roleplay Sample
Background:
:The real Mother and Father:
No one know who James real mother and father are even James does since they died when he was a child and only a very blur image of what they looked like in his memory. James real is Jinko Vamp who was a Shinigami in the S.S an ex 5th seat of 10th squad until he left due he became a virzaed and disagreed with the vales of the soul reapers. With that he was banished never to be seen again by the soul reapers so he set his life on earth working with the group of virzaed and was happy for sorry amount of while. Even so later on when he hi 150 years old he found something with them that he was uneasy about their vales with and left them look for a great important in life. He was only wondering around earth in a geai body until he meet Mira a human girl working in a café who serve him every day as time until on they grew in likening each other company and later on fell in love.
Soon they got married when Mira turned 31 and on their honey moon he confused to her who he really was even then Mira did not care she felt he was not all who he is. Even then she still loved them h knew he was a good man that all what matter with her and on that night they made love and convicted James. When James was born Jinko was worried he might turned into a hollow or worse so he went to old friend of his to test him to make sure James did indeed had a inner hollow. Within that day the test Jinko’s friend stat that he had a inner hollow but he uttley iumme to it taking over eyes because most children how who are born with a inner hollow and end up having stangre instead of having a zanpkto. But sadly it was meant to be for the lover to see both of them grown up when Nickcca turned 6 and James just born his mother and father was killed and eaten by a powerful hollow, Nickcca was killed but not eaten he soul was sitting there wondering why they mom and dad was laying there not moving.
As he despaired and the hollow was about to eat him up a Shinigami save his soul life by killing it in one hit Nickcca did not notice he forever sacred by what happen to his mom, dad and himself. The women Shinigami tired to send him to S.S but it was not use it seem he refuse to go so she grab him and drag him into the doors and wipe his memory of that day. When she finally got into the S.S Nickcca was angry and upset he was not sure why the lady Shinigami tired to rehome him but no one wanted due to his troublesome nature and strange spiritual pressure. She did not want to lave him be so she choice to rise him as one of her own adopted the child with this start a challenging chapter of Nickcca life learning how to love and care again.
As for James he left laying there crying unnoticed by anyone until the homeless took him in and rise them for one of their own feed him stealing milk for him to keep the baby alive.
: Childhood friends to teenage lovers:
As James was growing form a baby to a child the homeless he lived with in England he rise to polite and smart as he could be by stealing book for him and stuff to get for world. But sadly it all fun, games and learning for him when he hit five the homeless he was raised by where murdered by thugs and James nearly beaten to death. But as they thug left him to die a little girl name Rose found him and took to her mansion like home in London her mother and father never approved at first then came apceet due they rise to have a helpful nature.
As James awoke form knocked out state Rose sat next nurseling him back to heath he gave s shy slime and ask why he was in her home then he remembered what happen he stumble stood and did want impose any father. He then fainted and rose caught him just about and ask her father to help James back to bed and a book a hard to read book on his lap even his father don’t he could even read. The next day James awake no one was there and saw and starting reading it sight away it a book on how to be a doctor in a advance level. He always read books on medical things of all sorts. As Rose enter with a little bit of Illness and could what she was suffer and James ask her father if a certain medince he should use to make her better and said about the systems.
Rose father was impressed with James keen mind on this subject and brought him his own home and bought a carer who was also his patrive touter when he was old enough he take him under his wing to make him his doctor for a pative hospital. In exchange all that James ask for to meet his saver Rose and become friends with her. In that time Rose and James grew up as very good friends allcey the best friends they you could ever seen but when 13 and hit secondary school. They both had a first kiss form each other it seem they feeling for each other and form that day they become lovers and mad a cutest couple until the age of 14 when Rose and her mother and father where eaten by hollow and James nearly got killed again but this time as woke he gain his powers. When he hit 16 a friend of rose father who live in Japan took into his country and made attended school where Ichgo went to make forget his pain.
: The Rise of the Hollow Knight:
As time went on James did make friend he stay silent almost all mean while he work I serest to make an armour to protect and cancoil his indemnity at the same time he working on using his powers. As hit 16 his master some of his weaker power and armour protype was ready for use and he was ready for action on the first try out of armour and first night as the Hollow Knight. This at the same Night Ichgo gains his Shinigami powers James was kill his first few hollow at the same protecting a few souls and a Shinigami did see one k night but he quick to get away but he become famous among soul reapers in one night unsure of his friend of foe stats. But James knew the armour his power need more this can be done but trial and error but doing more of this but as night go on he was the hollow knight his fame among soul reapers.
As days went James become lonely and without knowing he start to make friend with ichgo and the others in his class but hiding the fact he was the hollow knight and he was almost homeless was kept form them even when start knowing they know he was homeless. Meanwhile they most Ichgo and his friends made the first concat form the slinet Hollew Knight at night as both side the hollow hunting but he always ran since they did want to know who he was when chased he had make back off by acting asstagive. This confused matter with the Shinigami more wanted to know that was threw Hollow Knight was friend or foe. Thought in time they found out that he was the Hollow Knight this made thing hard for James at first but he was shocked of how apceet they where and would keep his secret since squad 12 where after to know what made him tick.
Since then they became to eye only true friend he had and allies that could ever trust and with help of ihcgo and his new found friend they hope the a code x to help others who have James powers to rise to become heros aswell. This when James hit 25 he made an order when he had kids himself and he knew other like him out there and he need to train his kids this the beginning of whole new Order .
: The Order of Hollow Knights/ The Transformation:
As time went on and James got older and updated his code x with inmation form other races and how to deal with them form other adventure and miss he got into alone and with Ichigo and the other and being reunited with his Shinigami blood Bother Nickcca. He keep in concat with friend form Japan his order became alive with people with inner hollows and powers and train he become heros. Even thought only his blood can become Order master as James go older they number where few but there are growing but he keep then underground his dream is when come in concat with Shinigami they make friend so to speak.
Tought as yaer went he knew he will to see that day even he was un able t osee what going to happen when hit the age of 85 he transformed his powers become much more powerful his he could use his armour anymore. He earns new power like the hollow bone armour and his weapon become just a normal blade but replace with very advance version of his powers. He now a real Hollow Man he the knew type of human and regain his youth to him this was a ugly transformation and knew he no be in the world of the living and made himself disappear without a trace. And with that wrote and last update version of code x but no clue where to went or what in other he keep his change silent he knew no one was ready for this part to know.
The Order ask only people that knew James Ihcgo and others in a sneaky way to look for James butt hey had no luck it like he disappeared to thin air has no luck and tought of him to be dead. As years went James was in Herco Mucho training and making himself stronger so when time for son or daughter to become what he is he make disappear as will while withering a whole new call the Domenus Hollowius for when order is ready they will know thought this book and he will come back into the living world and go to the soul reapers and make peace. With them with his power he see per longs human life till how long he does not know but now he had three other like him who have slimmer but all together different powers. James is about to make the return to the Human world and the hollow Knight how will they react to his new look would some of his old friend even know who he is only time will tell.
Roleplay Sample:
James was all alone and jump the hollow could and fall down and made himself float to ground genteelly landed how long had it been since he came to world of the living last. He came walking to was winter time the seem there no snow at he felt in kind and happy mood he use his power to make snow genteelly turning this place into a winter wonder land foe the kids to play in the snow with. He knew everyone he knew must of pass away since then he never see any of them again before he restart his hollow hunting days all over again he come to look to see how much this place as change. But at the same he knew he make his hollow armour disappear not make any normal humans jump dude they can see since he somewhat human himself he wears a coat around his body to keep himself warm and walked around.
As he did he found the old school he slime remembering the fine days of the past of friend how much he miss ichgo and the others then felt a strange spatial pressure and change back into armour quickly to see who there and form the snow into a ice sword to see whos there.
Re: James Raven remake [APPROVED 1-3]
Fri Mar 04, 2011 4:14 pm
- Name [x]
- Appropriate Age [x]
- Gender [x]
- Picture/Equivalent Sentences for Appearance [x]
- 10 sentences for personality [O]
- History is of appropriate length [x]
- Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [x]
- Powers are described reasonably enough [O]
- Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [x]
Comments:
Your personality is very vague, you need more detail in it. Right now I see a bit more history in your personality description than actual persoality, so please fix that. Describe the sides of him. If one aspect of his personality is kindness, talk about how he is kind, tell us what he would to to show this est.
For your natural power, your not describing it, your praising your character. Describe all apsects of your ability, it's limits est.
I have an issue with your Judgment ability....I'll have another staff look at it, if they accept it, then it's fine.
Maybe you might consider changing his race...Maybe to a hollow or arrancar?
If someoen else has something to say or wants to reevaluate this app, by all means.
||Kitty's Characters||
____________________________________
- NickccaEstablished Member
- Joined : 2010-06-04
Posts : 198
Age : 36
Member Info
Platinum Points:
(0/0)
Tiers:
Re: James Raven remake [APPROVED 1-3]
Sat Mar 05, 2011 5:19 pm
ok ieidt hte pertialy i stand by his age and race dude if read his history James is petty still alive his tranmation was not just spirtual it was all apcdet makeing him a whole neew breed of humen he a hollow man. so if not dead cant a hollow or anrecaer he a stange type of humen
any as the pwoer itought i did but see what i can do i put they limts and weakness then them i tought lie kthe armour had a hole in then hit i nit hurts like hell and strong kiduo blast spell will evetauly blow his armour away if hit contiay with it... which i think idid put in
any as the pwoer itought i did but see what i can do i put they limts and weakness then them i tought lie kthe armour had a hole in then hit i nit hurts like hell and strong kiduo blast spell will evetauly blow his armour away if hit contiay with it... which i think idid put in
Re: James Raven remake [APPROVED 1-3]
Fri Mar 11, 2011 6:25 pm
Application Checklist
- Name [X]
- Appropriate Age [O]
- Gender [X]
- Appearance Present [X]
- Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
- Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
- 10 sentences for personality [X]
- History is of appropriate length [X]
- Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [--]
- Powers are described reasonably enough [--]
- Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
- Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[X]
- RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) [X]
Comments/Notes:
Denied.
Alright, I've looked this over more carefully and Idk how I missed this but your age. He's human, if he were to be 400+ years of age he would be in a wheel chair uinable to move, dispite abilities. His body is only human, which puts limitations to his age. I can accept a bit over 100 but 400 is pushing it a bit.
All your hollow abilities= Nope. Humans dont have/ cant control hollows~
If your going to have hollow abilities like this make him a hollow or an arrancar.
I find for a human he has TOO many abilities, abilities best suited for a differnt race.
All in all Nick, if you want to keep him a human, take out some of his powers or just make him hollow or arrancar alltogether.
I have had another staff look this over, and those were the general concernes about it this app and our verdict.
I am moving your Application to WIP for now.
Tier:Nothing yet.
||Kitty's Characters||
____________________________________
- NickccaEstablished Member
- Joined : 2010-06-04
Posts : 198
Age : 36
Member Info
Platinum Points:
(0/0)
Tiers:
Re: James Raven remake [APPROVED 1-3]
Fri Mar 25, 2011 7:11 am
I change the race kitty
- MaidInAmnSeasoned Member
- Joined : 2010-11-25
Posts : 1317
Age : 36
Location : New England, United States
Member Info
Platinum Points:
(5/100)
Tiers:
Re: James Raven remake [APPROVED 1-3]
Fri Apr 01, 2011 10:05 am
Nickcca,
You have only chanced the name of your race. What Kitty meant by was changing the template to the Arrancar Template rather than keeping it to the Human Template.
You have only chanced the name of your race. What Kitty meant by was changing the template to the Arrancar Template rather than keeping it to the Human Template.
|
- ChaoQueen Of The Sands
- Joined : 2010-06-03
Posts : 3408
Age : 30
Member Info
Platinum Points:
(60/100)
Tiers:
Re: James Raven remake [APPROVED 1-3]
Wed Apr 13, 2011 10:41 am
Inactive WIP
- Akemi★Seasoned Member
- Joined : 2010-06-07
Posts : 1138
Age : 34
Location : ~Anywhere~
Member Info
Platinum Points:
(0/0)
Tiers:
Re: James Raven remake [APPROVED 1-3]
Fri May 06, 2011 1:46 am
~Archived : Locked~
• ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • Akemi's Character of The Month • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ •
Emer McLoughlin's Theme
• ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ Other Goods ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ •
Emer McLoughlin's Theme
• ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ Other Goods ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ •
- Akemi★Seasoned Member
- Joined : 2010-06-07
Posts : 1138
Age : 34
Location : ~Anywhere~
Member Info
Platinum Points:
(0/0)
Tiers:
Re: James Raven remake [APPROVED 1-3]
Tue May 31, 2011 8:51 am
~Moved back to Character Apps for a re-read~
• ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • Akemi's Character of The Month • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ •
Emer McLoughlin's Theme
• ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ Other Goods ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ •
Emer McLoughlin's Theme
• ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ Other Goods ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ • ⁞ •
- MaidInAmnSeasoned Member
- Joined : 2010-11-25
Posts : 1317
Age : 36
Location : New England, United States
Member Info
Platinum Points:
(5/100)
Tiers:
Re: James Raven remake [APPROVED 1-3]
Tue May 31, 2011 12:52 pm
After Nickcca's explanation and the negotiation in Skype...
Approved and will stay in the Hollow Section due to being appropriate with the materials presented.
Tier 1-3
Special Rules
1. You are only recognized as a Hollow, so expect severe opposition if detected.
2. Your homeland is Hueco Mundo, so expect opposition from the Arrancars and Wild Hollows.
3. You're a Stand Alone, so very few Hollows would be your allies; if NPC, only up to 3 Hollows.
Approved and will stay in the Hollow Section due to being appropriate with the materials presented.
Tier 1-3
Special Rules
1. You are only recognized as a Hollow, so expect severe opposition if detected.
2. Your homeland is Hueco Mundo, so expect opposition from the Arrancars and Wild Hollows.
3. You're a Stand Alone, so very few Hollows would be your allies; if NPC, only up to 3 Hollows.
|
Page 1 of 2 • 1, 2
Permissions in this forum:
You cannot reply to topics in this forum