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Wed Nov 27, 2019 3:50 pm
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THE SHINIGAMI TEMPLATE

Contract of the Guardian


I. Basic Information


» Name: Hayden Cemplus
» Age: aproximately 120 years
» Gender: Male

» Association: Gotei United, Fourth Squadron

» Appearance Written: He stands at approximately 6 feet tall, and his build is of an average proportion for his height. His body is rather toned, however, each muscle constantly appearing to be slightly flexed, although that not being the case. His facial structure is Germanic, featuring a strong jawline on an oval structure. His nose isn’t more pronounced than average and typical for Germanic, and his lips are slightly thinned. His darker brown hair is fairly short, not over 2 inches anywhere, and fashionably unkempt. His chocolate-colored eyes are an almond shape, with longer eyelashes, and with moderate eyebrows. His hands are slightly longer than average, and slightly more slender. Overall, he isn’t abnormally attractive or handsome, but does have that average charm to him. He wears the typical shihakusho and sandals of the Shinigami.

» Appearance Image:
[Spirit Class 8] Hayden Cemplus Hayden10

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I. Personality


» Personality: Hayden is headstrong, focused, and fairly disconnected from people. He's confident in his abilities to their extent, but not much further. Because of this, he tends to avoid fighting opponents much stronger than him, accepting his chances of defeat under more wide gaps in skill and power. When he does get involved, he keeps himself in front of his allies as much as he can out of a desire to protect, feeling personally responsible for people's safety if he can protect them. However, he is generally emotionally distant out of social anxiety, preferring to keep to himself as much as possible. He simply has a hard time connecting with people. Because of the introverted nature, he doesn't speak up much in groups larger than 5, unless he feels what he has to say is important or is comfortable with the people in the room, although is perfectly fine in smaller groups. Due to this, he's had a harder time making friends, most of his relationships being nothing more than acquaintances. He doesn't have any hatred towards hollows, arrancar, or other kinds as a whole, knowing that they are likely just stuck as their kind due to circumstances, however he does have a strong distaste for the residents of hell as most would. Aside from those traits, he is otherwise a fairly run-of-the mill man.

I. History


» History: Hayden Cemplus was born in Athens, Greece, in the year 2000. His father was a Greek native, ancestry in the country dating back to before Alexander the Great. His mother, on the other hand, was a Germanic/Japanese migrant to Greece, and his facial structure took more to the Germanic side of the family. His childhood was relatively peaceful. An introverted kid, he took an interest in literature and music most of all, spending much of his free time indoors with a book. His highschool years were spent in the United States as a foreign exchange student, and he did well enough to at the very least not be removed from the program, Band and an AP English class keeping his GPA above the waterline. But he eventually returned to Greece and served in the Hellenic army for four years, going on several deployments and even qualifying for special forces training during a portion of it. But he had other plans, finding the job more trouble than it was worth, and instead didn't sign an additional four years, returning to his home

With the death of his Grandmother on his mother's side during his time in their army, he inherited a house in Japan just outside Tokyo, and had moved in there simply to begin living on his own a short time after he left the military, leaving as soon as the paperwork to migrate went through. He lived for a couple years in a relatively simple life, going into the city every other day to work in an office. He stayed secluded and distant to most people, as normal, but eventually worked up the courage to ask a woman out and even go on a few dates. He had eventually learned her father, who she was still living with, was abusing her, and in a state of rage never before seen from the man, marched right over to confront his lover's abuser, and a certain protective instinct awakened inside of him from the pure anger he felt. Hayden was much stronger than the father, but was entirely caught off-guard, shot and killed by the man in a single instant. The father was excused in court as it was deemed self-defense, and what he was doing never came to light in the courts.

Hayden stuck to the woman he had fallen for, following around and becoming a Tsukirei. He lasted years, over time becoming so aggressive he even attempted to fight off the first shinigami he had met, a lower powered one without a shikai, and won (albeit unable to kill him). It wasn't until the father was dead after 4 years, in an unfortunate "accident" that he accepted moving on to the soul society, finding himself in one of the western districts of the Rukongai for a few years before eventually beginning a journey to become a shinigami. He achieved the threshhold in a slightly faster time frame than normal souls, and joined as soon as he possibly could.

His training itself was not very hard. He developed a more defensive style of fighting in order to combat the aggression of hollows he had heard about, typically using a reverse-grip to hold the sword against his forearm and block strikes, and did well enough as far as melee combat went. However, he was only passable at kido, at the very least able to cast without it blowing up in his face, albiet to little effect. But this didn't bother him, swordsmanship was his forte and he would stick to it. He didn't graduate the shinigami academy at the top of his class, but he passed nonetheless, performing average overall. There wasn't much notable to speak of during this time, as he mostly kept to himself as much as possible, making no enemies or true friends that would stick with him past this time. He only focused on himself and what he needed to do to complete his courses and training. he communed with Praetorius soon after his graduation, and the two formed a rougher relationship.

He was much younger when his powers first awakened, but continued to focus on training instead of officially joining the Gotei 13. After this brief period of leave, he rejoined the now Gotei United, originally joining Squad 8. His initial time in the organization was mostly uneventful, until recently. After the events in Africa had kicked off, he had a change of resolve, and now find himself transferring into the ranks of the fourth squadron.
I. Equipment


» Equipment: [If your Shinigami has any equipment? Put it here. If they don't, skip this section.]

I. Racial Techniques/Abilities/Skills


» Racial Abilities: [You can put any customized racial skills/abilities/techniques in here. These can range from shunpo, kido, zanjutsu and anything else you want to add. Feel free to skip it if you don't want to fill it out.]

I. Sealed Powers


» Zanpakutô Name: Praetorius

» Zanpakutô Spirit Appearance: Praetorius takes two forms. He is either a large stone obelisk, made from a material that looks like marble, unmoving and with a more booming voice that echoes throughout the spirit world. Or, he is wearing armor like a Greek hopolite, colored black. He wields a gladius sword, and a large coffin-shield. The physical build changes, and when the helmet is removed, the face and hair are whatever he want himself to be. His voice is always the same as when he is a monolith while the helmet is on, but when the helmet is removed, he can sound, again, like whoever he wants.

» Inner World: The inner world is an large forest, trees the size of skyscrapers, with a canopy that only lets enough light through to be dimly lit on the ground. Tall, imposing, the trees seem to be indestructible, the bark rough and sharp enough to cut. The space between trees is only about 6 meters. give or take a couple in some spots. The green grass on the ground runs partially up the trunks of the trees by a few feet, and in contrast to the bark, is gentle, almost relaxing to touch.

» Zanpakutô Appearance: The blade is a single-edge damascus steel straight blade approximately 1 meter long. The handle adds another 15.2cm in length. The sheath fits the blade and is 3cm longer, and flushes perfectly with the handle. The handle and sheath are constructed out of birch wood, giving them a light color. Their cross section is 4.8 cm in length, and 2.8 cm in width, with an uneven fillet that leads to an almost oval shape, with about about 0.8 cm flat on the front and back and 1.8 cm flat on the side. When he unlocks/unlocked his bankai, the handle and sheath change, sporting golden inlay, from top to bottom that resembles vine growth, lined up perfectly where the sheath and handle meet.

» Sealed Zanpakutô Power: The sword has increased durability, increasing the upwards strength range in which it can take hits from, being two classes up. The kinetic energy is all still applied and he does feel all that the sword itself is not carrying, so if he were to block an elite-strength blow while he's only adept, he will still suffer from the kinetic energy continuing through him that he could not take himself.

I. Shikai


» Shikai Release Phrase: Defend, Praetorius

» Shikai Appearance: When released to shikai, it becomes a black circular shield, with a diameter of about 0.6 meters. On the front face of the shield there is a metallic cyan greek fret pattern running along the radius, spaced about one centimeter from the edge, and being 4 centimeters. It also lacks any straps of visible anchoring to his body, seeming to just stick to him.

» Shikai Abilities: The shield's strength comes from Hayden focusing his energy into it's defensive capabilities. While kinetic energy is slightly dispersed along the surface of the shield (about 15% efficiency), other energy (thermal aside) is dispersed along the surface perfectly (though any kinetic energy received alongside it remains to its own dispersion), splaying out enough so it is protecting him and anything almost directly behind him (farther away behind him, the more clearance there is). It can be thrown, and will return to him upon the clench of a fist, where it will accelerate to the highest velocity during it's throw until it returns to him. It lacks a strap due to the ability to move around his body, sliding according to his will. Shikai provides no bonuses to Hayden himself aside from what would typically come with releasing into shikai, and he is restricted from using kido while in a shikai state.

I. Bankai


» Bankai Release Phrase:

» Bankai Appearance:

» Bankai Abilities:



Shikokai


[NOTE: This form is restricted until 0-3, and is not usually granted upon approval. This is ONLY for pureblood Shinigami! Refer to the racial specs for more information]

» Shikokai Release Phrase: [What is your shinigami's release phrase?]

» Shikokai Release Action: [Does your Shinigami do any physical action to release their Shikokai? Feel free to remove this.]

» Shikokai Appearance: [What does your Shinigami look like when released in their Shikokai?]

» Shikokai Abilities: [What abilities does your Shinigami attain in Shikokai?]


I. Skill Sheet


(To Find Out about what these skills are for, please READ THIS THREAD before you try doing anything to it. After you have read it, do not fill your skills out until a staff member has graded your thread. The staff member checking your app will also give you Will Skills in which you can add to your app when approved. Click the spoiler below to see what tier gets what kind of skills.)

Spoiler:

General Skills
  • Durability: D
  • Speed: D
  • Strength: C
  • Soul: D


Shinigami Skills
  • Hoho: Beginner
  • Kidō: Beginner
  • Zanjutsu: Adept
  • Hakuda: Beginner


Will Skills
  • Willpower/Determination: Beginner
  • Mental Deduction: Beginner
  • Focus: Beginner


I. Role Play Sample


» Roleplay Sample: Anhur had raised the arm of his mech swiftly, trying to keep himself calm as he let the bronze-colored armor tank the blow of the sword. The shining green blade of the Titan he was facing, taller than the mecha he was piloting by several feet, had embedded into the appendage, but that was a good thing, as the adaptive armor of the vehicle would simply adjust to make the weapon a non-issue from that point on. A much appreciated feature of the God of War. He glanced to the left for a split-second in the direction of his wife and her own battle against a more nimble opponent, looking at her through the viewing screen that surrounded him in the cockpit, though unable to do anything to interfere. His eyes back towards his own opponent as the bright red eyes of his mech began to charge up for an attack.

He was afraid of this species, large hulking bipedal lizards of silver skin, and was unsure how much strength he could match in the vehicle without the use of the rage burning. This was their own technology turned against them, he thought to himself, but it was millennia old, there was the possibility of it not holding up against their kind's advancements. And that was what he was afraid of. He only hoped his robotic namesake was capable of handling these adversaries.

Nonetheless, the charge time had been maximized to only a split second in its years of service, the bridge of the nose opening up the moment the weapon was let lose in a wide arc. He had aimed the weapon right at his opponent's scaly, but inadequately armored throat, and it did not even last a half a second, clearing through everything in its path until it hit the atmospheric barrier of the planet that annihilated everything. But this wasn't any time to stop, he needed to back up and let his eyes finish smoking before he was struck by another, so his immediate reaction was to press his feet down and command the mech to lift off from the ground. Three seconds of action from the impact to the lift-off, just like he had practiced in the former war against the Persian Nation, but he was on a much more even playing field now.

END OF THE POST



Last edited by Arxfiend on Fri Aug 23, 2024 2:02 pm; edited 25 times in total (Reason for editing : https://docs.google.com/document/d/1nCT9DU6NvryIVCByiuAKenJZDwbfyCWnP-H6SdF6wtA/edit?usp=sharing)
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Sun Dec 15, 2019 12:44 pm
[adm]Moving to unchecked apps to be checked in the next 24-72 hours.[/adm]


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Sun Dec 15, 2019 8:19 pm
[adm]
Arxfiend wrote:]» Shikai Abilities: The shield itself is completely indestructible, impervious from any attacks be it kinetic, thermal, or based around any sort of energy. While kinetic energy is slightly dispersed along the surface of the shield (about 30% efficiency), other energy (thermal aside) is dispersed along the surface perfectly (though any kinetic energy received alongside it remains), splaying out enough so it is protecting him and anything almost directly behind him (farther away behind him, the more clearance there is). However, it provides no bonuses to Hayden himself aside what typically would come with shikai. While the shield is indestructible, he is not, so if a blow is landed and delivers enough kinetic energy through the shield that his arms are not capable of handling, he will be injured accordingly. Not only that, he is restricted from using kido, and if he tries to attack someone, with or without the shield, while in shikai it shatters and reverts into its sealed form, the blade in three pieces, leaving him without a truly functioning zanpakuto until he gets it repaired, and he takes a greater (about three times) injury to the one he dealt. He must also go into a meditative state for a full day after its repair to commune with Praetorius, either fighting or talking with his spirit to atone for misusing him, before he can use his shikai again, or even to utilize the enhanced durability of his sealed state, the sword but a plain shikomizu until the meditation is completed.

I'd re-word this to let it be near indestructible. I don't mind if it's absurdly durable since this seems to be his gimmick, but we have a rule of absolutes on the site that doesn't allow for stuff like this. [/adm]



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Mon Dec 16, 2019 9:28 pm
THEFROST wrote:-snip-

This look better or should I tweak it down some more?
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Tue Jan 21, 2020 1:43 am

THROUGH THE POWER INVESTED IN ME...
« Application Checklist »
  • Name [X]
  • Appropriate Age [X]
  • Gender [X]
  • Appearance Present [X]
  • Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
  • 10 sentences for personality [O]
  • History is of appropriate length [X]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [O]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [O]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
  • Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[X]
  • RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) [X]
  • RP Sample is 10 sentences [X]


« The Willsheet Checklist »

  • Willpower/Determination: N/a
  • Mental Deduction: N/A
  • Focus: N/A




« Final Verdict »

  • Comments/Notes: First off, you are two sentences short for the personality. They don't have to be terribly long, but they do have to be two sentences.

    Next,
    Arxfiend wrote:The shield itself is extremely durable, the kinetic energy required to break it being so intense that most entities are incapable of causing so much as a scratch, and only the very strongest of beings capable of bending or breaking it, requiring an absolute absurd amount of kinetic energy that only those of grandmaster strength are capable of producing.
    Having a shikai at his level, which he won't, would no way be durable enough to withstand everything but a level of power that a small percentage of PCs on site have. This is going to have to be reduced by a lot. I feel like Elite would be more realistic because all it does is protect because it's just a shield but, again, he still won't be able to use it out of the gate. Just a bit of future proofing.

    Arxfiend wrote:the blade breaking into three pieces, leaving him without a truly functioning zanpakuto until he gets it repaired, and he takes a greater (about three times) injury to the one he dealt. He must also go into a meditative state for a full day after its repair to commune with Praetorius, either fighting or talking with his spirit to atone for misusing him, before he can use his shikai again
    I'm all for trying to make things balance, but I feel like this is an overkill drawback that is not needed for the abilities you lay out. I would recommend you either change it to something more simple by removing a few of these or by changing it altogether. This is optional but do note that this won't be fun for you to do as it will be incredibly boring and tedious for both you and your character to do.

    Arxfiend wrote:The kinetic energy is stored (20% efficiency, the rest carrying through as normal)
    Why is it stronger in Shikai than Bankai? I understand that you're wielding both a sword and a shield now, but Bankai is supposed to be an upgrade not a downgrade. Lower the Shikai to 15% and raise the Bankai to 25%.
  • Tier: N/A




« Final Final Verdict, Hazard »

  • Overall: N/A
  • Power: N/A
  • Influence: N/A
  • Resources: N/A





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Tue Jan 21, 2020 7:23 pm

THROUGH THE POWER INVESTED IN ME...
« Application Checklist »
  • Name [X]
  • Appropriate Age [X]
  • Gender [X]
  • Appearance Present [X]
  • Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
  • 10 sentences for personality [O]
  • History is of appropriate length [X]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [O]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [O]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
  • Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[X]
  • RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) [X]
  • RP Sample is 10 sentences [X]


« The Willsheet Checklist »

  • Willpower/Determination: Adept
  • Mental Deduction: Beginner
  • Focus: Beginner




« Final Verdict »

  • Comments/Notes: Looks good to me.
  • Tier: 4-3




« Final Final Verdict, Hazard »

  • Overall: E
  • Power: D
  • Influence: E
  • Resources: E





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Thu May 28, 2020 8:50 am
Edited due to power rework
https://www.platinumhearts.net/t21356-praetorius-rework
Changelog in Edit notes
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Mon Dec 06, 2021 8:52 pm
[mod]Archiving for inactivity. Please speak to staff if you would like this unarchived.[/mod]
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Thu Dec 30, 2021 12:32 am
[adm]Reapproved at the same tier and skills.[/adm]
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Sat May 27, 2023 8:55 pm
[mod]Yo, here's your quick regrading.

Bankai
As he does not have the required skill level to possess Bankai. Please remove this section until such a time that it is more appropriate for him to apply for the upgrade. It can be posted in the general board or kept among your own personal files for safekeeping.

Once that's done, I see no issues and he can be reapproved.

Spirit Class: 8
Hazard Ratings
Power: D
Resources: E
Influence: E
Overall: E

Grading Note: The crossed out bankai has not been graded, and requires future approval in an upgrade regardless of whether Advanced Zanjutsu is acquired or not.

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