Mass Pandemonium [Complete]

Aether Magic Template

Name Of Spell: Mass Pandemonium
Type: Essential Aether Magic
Class: Immaterial
Skill Range: Advanced
Effects: This spell is something that can only be used by Hybrid Iramasha that have some sort of basis in chaos. Due to the effects of this spell it's range is limited to about one hundred meters, though it can be larger or smaller depending on the persons mastery in Aether Magic. The amount of energy that this requires is totally dependent on the target of the spell; if the user is simply attempting to target the NPC's within the area then it simply require approximately five percent of their total energy. This, however, is drastically increased when they aim to effect player controlled characters. In order to successful effect these characters the person's Mental Deduction and Focus must be lower than that of the casters Aether Magic. In addition to this it would require twenty percent of his energy, as well as the exclusion of NPC's from his target; this, however, can be negated if the person has Mastery in Aether Magic.

When this spell is cast on a crowd of NPC's they are seen as losing control of their own sense; this is to say that they enter what could only be described as a berserk state; a state where everyone is considered an enemy. It is due to this that they will mindlessly attack the first person that they see. This is the pandemonium that chaos is able to unleash in a crowd. Those that are caught in this also gain an additional ten percent damage output. This lasts for a total of three posts and has a cool down of four posts.

When this spell is targeted at a Players character then it is not an area of effect, but simply a targeting spell. Assuming this spell is completed successfully then they will begin attacking those that they deem allies; this is the same sort of effect as with the crowd. While they can attack the caster, if there are allies near by they will attack those first. Accompanying this is an increase to the damage which they are capable of; while this effect is active the players strength increases by ten percent. This maintains the same duration and cool down as if it were to be cast on a crowd. In order for this to be effective against player characters, however, there must be some form of physical contact between the two.

[adm]This seems convoluted in the way it's written because of the fact it goes way around the way to get to what the ability does. You should try and address that in the first paragraph and not beat around the bush with your wording. Since you say "this is to say" too much for my taste.

With that said, is this essentially an ability that targets a person's mental health and makes them attack their allies in a berserk rage? And this rage lasts for three post as well, right? If so, I feel this should be something that has a direct hit on it. The wording was odd, but I'd assume he fires it off through his energy and that is suppose to induce the effect, correct? If so, I'd prefer it be closer range. Something that is done through his fist, a weapon or tool of some kind and that thing is fired off at the opponent instead. [/adm]

[adm]Approved.[/adm]