Ryou Bakura/Zorc (Yami Bakura) - (WIP)

Name: Ryou Bakura

Gender: Male

Age: 16/16

The Host Race: Human

Personality: Usually a calm and quiet boy, Bakura is not very talkative and is usually quite shy. He is the epitome of the quiet school boy/girl that has very few friends. He tries very hard to get friends, but usually, his OTHER personality gets in the way. Most of the time, Bakura means very well, but his other self often twists and perverts his completely innocent intents.
Bakura often speaks in a very honorable tone of voice, refering to people he doesn't know as Mr., Mrs. , Miss or Ms. and those he does with an honorable title at the end of their name, like san, or sama.

Appearance:

Background/History: Bakura was born 16 years ago. His dad, a world renouned explorer once went to Egypt. While he was there, he managed to get ahold of the "Millenium Ring". Heading home, with his son's 10th Birthday fast approaching, he decided to give the Ring to Bakura as a present. A few weeks later, Bakura's Ring began to do strange things. Bad things. Terribly Horrible things.

The Ring itself was possessed by a 3,000 year old spirit. This spirit, being more powerful than Bakura, overtook Bakura's body and slaughtered his entire family for his own purposes. When Bakura Awoke, his entire family was dead, with the blood of each of them on his hands. So he ran...he ran as far and as fast as his legs could carry him. When he stopped to rest, he heard the voice of the spirit. 'I can bring them back....for a price'

'Anything,' Bakura replied, eager to see his family again.
'There are six more items like the one you wear around your neck....if you can get them all; Puzzle, Eye, Necklace, Rod, Scale, and Key....I can bring back your family....'
'But....what if I get attacked?' Bakura questioned, scared.
'Don't worry about that....You'll be fine....I'll take care of that...'
Bakura agreed and began his search for the other six Millenium Items, using his Millenium Ring's ability to find Millenium Items. Six years have passed and so far, nothing.

Ziamichi Spirit: Zorc: True Form-
While Possessing Bakura-

Zorc, sometimes refered to as Yami Bakura ('Yami' meaning 'Dark'), is completely opposite of the sweet innocent boy he inhabits. Cruel and Sadistic, Zorc enjoys seeing others in pain a misery. Zorc is completely aware of the presence of Spirits, unlike his 'host' as he so 'lovingly' refers to Bakura as. Bakura wants nothing more than to destroy the world entirely. He's not the kind that just says he will and waits for things to happen, he gets shit done. He will go after his purposes,no matter the cost. Whenever it would appear as though Bakura would get in trouble, Zorc would take over. Then again, Bakura is rarely in control of his own body anymore. Zorc is an amazing actor, able to mimic Bakura's mannerisims and voice perfectly to fool unsuspecting victims.

Ziamichi History: Originally, Zorc was 2 entities: Zorc and a Self-proclaimed 'King of Theives', whose name was also Bakura, both of which were in Ancient Egypt. Bakura, after seeing his entire village slaughtered by the Pharoah's men as a young boy, decided to gain revenge agains the royal family, swearing to kill them all. Over the years, Bakura had learned to summon a spirit called 'Diabound'. Zorc Necrophades,a priest of Zorc, following the orders of his God, required the Millenium Items to summon his God into this world. The two eventually made their way into the palace. Bakura managed to retreive all seven of the Items in order to assist Zorc Necrophades Destroy the current Pharoah.

Zorc had summoned his God to the world,at the cost of his own life for sacrifice, but the Pharoah, wishing not to cause any more harm to his people, sealed his Soul into the Millenium Puzzle and sealed Bakura and Zorc into the Millenium Ring. The Two who were in the Ring merged into one being, forming the spirit that inhabits Bakura now.

Ziamichi powers: Zorc Really only has one MAIN ability, Ouija Board. This ability summons a Ouija Board that only Bakura can see. However, what it spells is seen by all. Bakura can use 26 attacks through the Board, one for each letter of the alphabet.
The Board has 2 major flaws: Once one word is spelled, the previous word's effec disappates and There is a 50% chance that the word being spelt is not HIS word. The spirits do not make docile servents, if displeased, they will turn on Zorc ( If Zorc loses his previous battle, the opponent decides on 5 words and effects for them that could be misdirected by the spirits). Each Letter takes one turn to form (I.E. Attack: Turn 1-A, Turn 2-AT, etc.)
-ATTACK- A Beam of Reiatsu shoots from the Ring
-BLACK- This allows Zorc to manipulate shadows to attack.
-COLD- This allows Zorc to emit an Icy touch, which can freeze any inanimate object on contact and causes Frostbite or Extreme Cold to living creatures.(Frostbite only occurs in characters of a lower tier than Zorc)
-DOMINATE- This allows Zorc to take the battle to the opponent's inner world.
-ESCAPE- This allows Zorc to manipulate any attack being thrown at him in order to dodge it nearly perfectly, escaping with some damage but not as much as the full brunt of the effect
-FLAME- This Allows Zorc to set nearly anything ablaze, causing burn wounds in weaker opponents (Burns on lower tiered characters only).
GHOST-This allows Bakura to temporarily become intangible for a time, allowing him to be untouchable to Physical attacks(Based on tier-1 turn at 4 tier, 2 at 3, 3 at 2, 4 at 1, and 5 at 0)
HOLLOW-This allows Zorc to summon a single Hollow Under his control ( Level based on tier-Low at 4 and 3 tier, Menos at 2 and 1, and Adjucha at 0)
IMMOBILIZE-This immobilizes weaker opponents allowing Zorc to gain some time to gain the upper hand
JUNGLE- A small forest sprouts out of the ground, confusing Zorc's opponent and giving Zorc the advantage.
KAZE- Summons a small windstorm which has the capibility to slash gashes into the opponent's skin
LACERATE- Causes lacerations all around the opponent's body, thought this can be focused to one area, I.E. the opponent's sword hand
MAIM- This attack brutally injures an opponent, but only at limbs, nothing Vital.
NECROFEAR- Summons a Blue Demon known as Dark Necrofear, which can easily overwhelm weaker foes (Lower tiered chars), however, strong opponents can easily match or over power Necrofear (Higher tiered chars)
OCCULT-This generates a random effect that not even Zorc will know.
PAIN- Inflicts Pain upon the opponent in one area (Head, Leg, Arm, Chest, Groin, etc.)
QUALM- Forces Mental Conflict upon the opponent with another spirit close to them (I.E. Zanpaku-to, Inner Hollow, Ziamichi Spirit)
REFLECT- As the name says, Redirects attacks until the word's effect wears off
STONE-Summons a stone wall infront of Zorc for defense
THIEF-Steals one ability from the opponent. This goes hand-in-hand with the USE attack
USE-Uses the Ability stolen by THEIF.
VIOLENCE- Creates a state of Berserk on the opponent.
X-RAY- Allows Zorc to analyze an attack the opponent just used in order to find out it's weaknesses.
YAMI- Shrouds Zorc and his opponent in a cloud of darkness, creating a 'Fog of War', blinding both combatants
ZORC-Pulls Zorc's true self to the surface, allowing him to use 3 Ouija boards at a time, but only once a week (Once Per thread)
Unique Traits: Ouija Board and Spiky Hair
Skills:
0 Tier is allowed 1 Master, 2 Advanced
1 Tier is allowed 2 Advanced
2 Tier is allowed 1 Advanced, 2 Adept
3 Tier is allowed 1 Adept
4 Tier and below only get beginner.
These are set in STONE unless Frost, Kenshin or Tsubine say otherwise.

Forms: 0. Zorc could take over at any given moment
Control: 1

Ziamichi Class: (Ranging from E to the weakest and A to the strongest; With S being a special class of demons. Don't do anything to this, the staff will decide how strong your demon will be from how good your application is and how good your role playing skills are.)

Drawbacks: None. Bakura is not in control most of the time. However, After ever battle, Zorc must devour a soul, so a battle with Zorc may be your last
Roleplay Sample: His Ring pointing him in the direction of a powerful soul, Zorc wanted a quick meal. Zorc, posing as Bakura, ran in that direction and found a girl. The girl wasn't very hard to defeat. He had befriended her as Bakura, fooled her into an Immobilization and knocked her out. As he devoured her soul, Zorc thought, 'Shame, she's a pretty one....I could have kept her around for other...'purposes'....' As he finished her soul, he looked at her cold, lifeless body, he smiled and thought, 'Pretty or not....she was delicious....' He raided her house, searching for anything that may have helped him find the Millenium Items. Nothing. As he exited the house, it exploded in a firestorm of Horror, with Zorc merely smiling all the way out.

Jon Soki wrote:Name: Ryou Bakura

Gender: Male

Age: 16/16

The Host Race: Human

Personality: Usually a calm and quiet boy, Bakura is not very talkative and is usually quite shy. He is the epitome of the quiet school boy/girl that has very few friends. He tries very hard to get friends, but usually, his OTHER personality gets in the way. Most of the time, Bakura means very well, but his other self often twists and perverts his completely innocent intents.
Bakura often speaks in a very honorable tone of voice, refering to people he doesn't know as Mr., Mrs. , Miss or Ms. and those he does with an honorable title at the end of their name, like san, or sama.

Appearance:

Background/History: Bakura was born 16 years ago. His dad, a world renouned explorer once went to Egypt. While he was there, he managed to get ahold of the "Millenium Ring". Heading home, with his son's 10th Birthday fast approaching, he decided to give the Ring to Bakura as a present. A few weeks later, Bakura's Ring began to do strange things. Bad things. Terribly Horrible things.

The Ring itself was possessed by a 3,000 year old spirit. This spirit, being more powerful than Bakura, overtook Bakura's body and slaughtered his entire family for his own purposes. When Bakura Awoke, his entire family was dead, with the blood of each of them on his hands. So he ran...he ran as far and as fast as his legs could carry him. When he stopped to rest, he heard the voice of the spirit. 'I can bring them back....for a price'

'Anything,' Bakura replied, eager to see his family again.
'There are six more items like the one you wear around your neck....if you can get them all; Puzzle, Eye, Necklace, Rod, Scale, and Key....I can bring back your family....'
'But....what if I get attacked?' Bakura questioned, scared.
'Don't worry about that....You'll be fine....I'll take care of that...'
Bakura agreed and began his search for the other six Millenium Items, using his Millenium Ring's ability to find Millenium Items. Six years have passed and so far, nothing.

Ziamichi Spirit: Zorc: True Form-
While Possessing Bakura-

Zorc, sometimes refered to as Yami Bakura ('Yami' meaning 'Dark'), is completely opposite of the sweet innocent boy he inhabits. Cruel and Sadistic, Zorc enjoys seeing others in pain a misery. Zorc is completely aware of the presence of Spirits, unlike his 'host' as he so 'lovingly' refers to Bakura as. Bakura wants nothing more than to destroy the world entirely. He's not the kind that just says he will and waits for things to happen, he gets shit done. He will go after his purposes,no matter the cost. Whenever it would appear as though Bakura would get in trouble, Zorc would take over. Then again, Bakura is rarely in control of his own body anymore. Zorc is an amazing actor, able to mimic Bakura's mannerisims and voice perfectly to fool unsuspecting victims.

Ziamichi History: Originally, Zorc was 2 entities: Zorc and a Self-proclaimed 'King of Theives', whose name was also Bakura, both of which were in Ancient Egypt. Bakura, after seeing his entire village slaughtered by the Pharoah's men as a young boy, decided to gain revenge agains the royal family, swearing to kill them all. Over the years, Bakura had learned to summon a spirit called 'Diabound'. Zorc Necrophades,a priest of Zorc, following the orders of his God, required the Millenium Items to summon his God into this world. The two eventually made their way into the palace. Bakura managed to retreive all seven of the Items in order to assist Zorc Necrophades Destroy the current Pharoah.

Zorc had summoned his God to the world,at the cost of his own life for sacrifice, but the Pharoah, wishing not to cause any more harm to his people, sealed his Soul into the Millenium Puzzle and sealed Bakura and Zorc into the Millenium Ring. The Two who were in the Ring merged into one being, forming the spirit that inhabits Bakura now.

Ziamichi powers: Zorc Really only has one MAIN ability, Ouija Board. This ability summons a Ouija Board that only Bakura can see. However, what it spells is seen by all. Bakura can use 26 attacks through the Board, one for each letter of the alphabet.
The Board has 2 major flaws: Once one word is spelled, the previous word's effec disappates and There is a 50% chance that the word being spelt is not HIS word. The spirits do not make docile servents, if displeased, they will turn on Zorc ( If Zorc loses his previous battle, the opponent decides on 5 words and effects for them that could be misdirected by the spirits). Each Letter takes one turn to form (I.E. Attack: Turn 1-A, Turn 2-AT, etc.)
-ATTACK- A Beam of Reiatsu shoots from the Ring
-BLACK- This allows Zorc to manipulate shadows to attack.
-COLD- This allows Zorc to emit an Icy touch, which can freeze any inanimate object on contact and causes Frostbite or Extreme Cold to living creatures.(Frostbite only occurs in characters of a lower tier than Zorc)
-DOMINATE- This allows Zorc to take the battle to the opponent's inner world.
-ESCAPE- This allows Zorc to manipulate any attack being thrown at him in order to escape from harm
-FLAME- This Allows Zorc to set nearly anything ablaze, causing burn wounds in weaker opponents (Burns on lower tiered characters only).
GHOST-This allows Bakura to temporarily become intangible for a time(Based on tier-1 turn at 4 tier, 2 at 3, 3 at 2, 4 at 1, and 5 at 0)
HOLLOW-This allows Zorc to summon a single Hollow Under his control ( Level based on tier-Low at 4 and 3 tier, Menos at 2 and 1, and Adjucha at 0)
IMMOBILIZE-This immobilizes weaker opponents allowing Zorc to gain some time to gain the upper hand
JUNGLE- A small forest sprouts out of the ground, confusing Zorc's opponent and giving Zorc the advantage.
KAZE- Summons a small windstorm which has the capibility to slash gashes into the opponent's skin
LACERATE- Causes lacerations all around the opponent's body, thought this can be focused to one area, I.E. the opponent's sword hand
MAIM- This attack brutally injures an opponent, but only at limbs, nothing Vital.
NECROFEAR- Summons a Blue Demon known as Dark Necrofear, which can easily overwhelm weaker foes (Lower tiered chars), however, strong opponents can easily match or over power Necrofear (Higher tiered chars)
OCCULT-This generates a random effect that not even Zorc will know.
PAIN- Inflicts Pain upon the opponent in one area (Head, Leg, Arm, Chest, Groin, etc.)
QUALM- Forces Mental Conflict upon the opponent with another spirit close to them (I.E. Zanpaku-to, Inner Hollow, Ziamichi Spirit)
REFLECT- As the name says, Redirects attacks until the word's effect wears off
STONE-Summons a stone wall infront of Zorc for defense
THIEF-Steals one ability from the opponent. This goes hand-in-hand with the USE attack
USE-Uses the Ability stolen by THEIF.
VIOLENCE- Creates a state of Berserk on the opponent.
X-RAY- Allows Zorc to analyze an attack the opponent just used in order to find out it's weaknesses.
YAMI- Shrouds Zorc and his opponent in a cloud of darkness, creating a 'Fog of War', blinding both combatants
ZORC-Pulls Zorc's true self to the surface, allowing him to use 3 Ouija boards at a time, but only once a week (Once Per thread)
Unique Traits: Ouija Board and Spiky Hair
Skills:
0 Tier is allowed 1 Master, 2 Advanced
1 Tier is allowed 2 Advanced
2 Tier is allowed 1 Advanced, 2 Adept
3 Tier is allowed 1 Adept
4 Tier and below only get beginner.
These are set in STONE unless Frost, Kenshin or Tsubine say otherwise.

Forms: 0. Zorc could take over at any given moment
Control: 1

Ziamichi Class: (Ranging from E to the weakest and A to the strongest; With S being a special class of demons. Don't do anything to this, the staff will decide how strong your demon will be from how good your application is and how good your role playing skills are.)

Drawbacks: None. Bakura is not in control most of the time. However, After ever battle, Zorc must devour a soul, so a battle with Zorc may be your last
Roleplay Sample: His Ring pointing him in the direction of a powerful soul, Zorc wanted a quick meal. Zorc, posing as Bakura, ran in that direction and found a girl. The girl wasn't very hard to defeat. He had befriended her as Bakura, fooled her into an Immobilization and knocked her out. As he devoured her soul, Zorc thought, 'Shame, she's a pretty one....I could have kept her around for other...'purposes'....' As he finished her soul, he looked at her cold, lifeless body, he smiled and thought, 'Pretty or not....she was delicious....' He raided her house, searching for anything that may have helped him find the Millenium Items. Nothing. As he exited the house, it exploded in a firestorm of Horror, with Zorc merely smiling all the way out.

I think the number of abilities, I think is too much.
I have issues with the abilites I highlighted in red, they seem a bit G-mod to me. With the abilities, I think you should put some limitations to them, or change them.
If you can, I think some more history is needed.

Drawbacks: (What are the drawbacks if you're character loses control or use too much of their power and what are the after-effects of an episode where they lose control?) What are the effects on Bakura? Since the spirit is in control most of the time, how does this effect him?


More detail is needed, especually for the abilities.

I say once it's fixed, Tier 3-2
If anyone else has anything to say or think the tier should be otherwise, go for it.

Also...REMOVE WIP FROM THE TITLE.

Moved to Denied seeing as how it's not been worked on