Redonse

John rededn the musicain wrote:

SHINIGAMI

Name: Redonse

Gender: male

Age:19 looks 20

Personality: He is a good guy just dont miss with him he is looking for the one who killed his brother

Ok what is this? Im sorry but i don't know anything about your character. How does he act in specific situations? What does he like? Does he have any morals? Details Details Details. At least a paragraph?

Appearance: (just put a scar over left eye)

Zanpakutô Spirit:(red with russian letters carved in it just a silent killer for persontnaily is a long skinny blade


in what world is a spirit a knife? What's the spirits spirit world like? What is the spirit's personality? Details!

Sealed Zanpakutô : A knife

A sealed zanpaktou is always a sword, this can be your shikai appearance but not your sealed zanpaktou.

Shikai Description: (me i look the same but sword arm has dark energy sword is same but golden hilt and russian letters glow)

Shikai Abilities: it shift time and makes more of me


This is ridiculous. First you can't shift time. Thats God modding. Second makes more of you how? What is this? Its unacceptable. No.

Release:(DAVOLSA)
(You CANNOT fill the skill levels in until your tier is assigned. )
Skill Level: Kidou: Beginner/Adept/Advanced/Master
Skill Level: Swordsmanship: Beginner/Adept/Advanced/Master
Skill Level: Shunpo: Beginner/Adept/Advanced/Master
Skill Level: Hand-to-Hand: Beginner/Adept/Advanced/Master

Bankai Description: pure gold

Bankai Abilities: it tears enemys to sherds when they are stuck with it


This app doesn't deserve a bankai. And my dog can tear things to shreds. Make more sense of that.

History/Background: lost his story in shadows of Death

UNNACEPTABLE. Everyone has a history, 2 paragraphs. Make it. Everyone has a past. And we have to know it.

Roleplay Sample: *sit on a pole as they aruge about food thinking "the stupid fools if only -" cut short from a scream * what the hell was that *jump down and run to the soruce * *a hollow has a mortal in his hands my body reacts before my mind and i withdraw my sword and cut the hollow's hand od and when it trys to hit me with other i jump on it's arm and bring my sword on it's head and watch it dissolves and jump on the roofs and disapper *


That is not how we role play, this is a chat rp style of rp. Not a forum.

Various men were sitting on a pole as they argued about food. Thinking "The stupid fools if only -" But the man could not finish his sentance as he noticed a gush of blood falling from his neck. Only then had he realised he had been cut, as he burst into a gory and anguish filled scream.

That's the basic idea, fix your rp sample