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Horus the Shinku Nikuya [APPROVED, 2-1+]
Fri Apr 12, 2013 2:27 am
"What's wrong with accepting madness?!?"
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» Name: Horus Sariel
» Titles: Shinku Nikuya(Crimson Butcher)
» Appearance Age: 16
» True Age: 216
» Gender: Male
Affiliation/Rank: Currently rouge, though he is becoming interested in The Monsuta organization.
» Appearance Description:
Height: 5' 8"
Weight: 168 pounds / 76kg
Eye Color: Golden/Bronze
Hair Color: Red/Crimson
Skin Tone: Caucasian/Slightly Tanned
Build: Average/Athletic
Overall:
Considering his two hundred and sixteen years of life Horus still appears quite young. To be exact Horus still possesses the body of a sixteen year old teenage male. His blood-red hair is normally wildly spiky or a shaggy/spiked style. Horus's golden/bronze eyes display the depths of insanity that have afflicted his mind, as well as the murderous aura and joyous thrill within. Horus stands at an average height of five foot eight, and weighs a heavier set one hundred sixty-eight pounders, quite a bit heavier than one usually is for his body type.
His tanned complexion is littered with scars of varying sizes from training, torture, and battle alike. In the center of his chest a faint circular scar can be noted, the ridges of it barely casting a shadow. The males fingertips end in sharp animalistic claws, as if Horus had sharpened his own nails. And finally on his back, more precisely the shoulder blades rests a pair of golden angelic wings, one on each shoulder blade.
Daily Wear
Horus's daily choice of clothing is always black in color. Normally he prefers jeans, and a t-shirt or sleeveless shirt. Though at times he will opt for a heavier shirt, or a hoodie of sorts. Most if not all of Horus's clothing has a patch of fur running from below the left shoulder, before going up and over. Some are simply collared with the white fur instead. Beneath this wear Horus also wears 75lb weights on both arms and legs, and finally a 100lb weighted shirt. Some accessories include black shades, black gloves/fingerless gloves, and the occasional watch.
Formal Wear
Once again Horus's choice of clothing is darker in color, blacks, reds, crimsons, and darker violets. Almost all choices of his formal clothing happen to be tux's, or the occasional casual suit. Usually this choice of dress is topped with a black bowler hat , black shades, and dress shoes.
Combat Wear/Gear
Funny enough, Horus's combat gear is identical to his daily clothing aside from a few differences. The first, he doesn't wear his weights. Second, each piece of clothing is interlaced with armoring. Third, he now wears a pair of black steel-toed combat boots, and an armored mesh shirt.
Training Wear/Gear
Horus's training gear is simple. A black pair of hakama, a black gi, a pair of white socks, and wooden sandals. Topping off his training gear is a set of 100lb weights, totalling 500lbs(legs, arms and weighted shirt).
» Appearance Picture: Horus the Shinku Nikuya
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» Personality:
Lack of Gilt/Remorse
For Horus, the ends justify the means. Unwilling to let anything stand in his way Horus will do what he must to achieve his goals. Theft, murder, dealing, etc, Horus feels no remorse nor gilt at any of these things, let alone anything else he does in life. Simply put, Horus just doesn't care about the results of his actions.
Need for Stimulation
A kind of 'high' for Horus he always lives life on the edges of life and death, danger and safety, insanity and sanity. If its not something crazy, a fight, or something Horus finds himself enjoying, its not stimulating enough of an experience. Those who know Horus have come to expect the common verbal outbursts, or physical punishment occasionally used to fill that 'need'. If it brings a rush, Horus can be caught doing it; be it sex, drugs, money, power, etc.
Bi-Polar/Impulsive Nature
Although he always smiles Horus's moods can change faster than the direction of the wind. One moment he could be enjoying a fight, and not even a second later he could be in the deepest pits of his rage. Other instances see Horus going from his insane self, to seemingly normal, etc.
Horus is also quite impulsive, rarely thinking about how his actions or choices will impact others around him. Though that matters little as Horus feels he is above all others, though in the face of one much stronger Horus is no fool.
The Insane & Murderous Mind
Whether it be flickering through emotions like wildfire, or thoughts always voicing themselves, or how about the voices he hears? No? What about his manic laughter? How he talks to himself? His constant smile? Or how little he cares for others? Of course there's always how protective he seems to be... Get to know Horus and one comes to the conclusion that the male is insane, what kind of insane... who knows... Horus doesn't... nor does he care... He just knows his insanity will always be there.
Now add in Horus's murderous tendencies and well, you now have a psychopathic killer on the loose. He doesn't care what someone has done, or if they have family, or if their a figure head... Horus simply loves to kill, the sound of flesh ripping, the victims screams, the blood... Horus is a killer through and through... Though the occasional torture doesn't hurt..
Always Smiling
This is possibly one of the odder things about Horus. No matter his mood, no matter the situation Horus somehow manages to almost always to have a insane smile on his face. The edges of his lips twitch in a manic manner, his tongue sliding along his lips every-so-often. Simply put, most find this smile of Horus's quite disturbing, especially after never seeing it leave his face.
Extremely Protective
Although a man who loves to kill, butcher, maim, torture, and simply spread fear... Horus still has managed to keep some of his humanity. His will to protect that which is precious to him is perhaps the only thing keeping him human so to speak. When something precious of his is threatened Horus fights like a demon, caring for nothing but protecting that which is his. His protective urges quite often border a level of possessiveness if not surpassing said border.
Cause Pain First, Plan on the Go
When it comes to a fight, or really anything Horus does there is one simple process. Cause pain, fear and chaos first. Plan, move, and escape later. Horus tends to jump into things head-first, and only thinking about his actions, further plans, and escape routes later.
Passion for Sugar
Gum, candy, chocolate, honey, icing, and anything else sugar. This is probably one of the best ways to get onto Horus's good side. Why? Because its the only thing not a person or goal that he cares about, period. Horus + Sugar = A calmer, happier Horus. Though a calmer, happier Horus doesn't always mean less killing.
Alcohol, Women, Drugs, and Money..
The three vices, and that which controls the material world. Horus may be a living ... er.. dead.. breathing.. vizard, but he always shall enjoy the three vices, and how easily money brings power and control. In the world of the living Horus uses money to get whatever and whoever he wants... Alcohol is just a pass-time, something that Horus drinks as if it were water. Women, be it a personal connection, or a simple fling, Horus loves having women around him. One warning though, if a woman is precious to Horus, don't fuck with her. And then drugs... When Horus came upon these, it just made his life that much more enjoyable.. Whether he does em, or traffics them Horus always has something on him. Though, of all things Horus himself prefers good old THC and a blunt here n there.
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» Zanpakutō Name: Tamashī no Kyōki(魂の狂気 , Souls Madness)
» Zanpakutō Spirit Appearance: The spirit of Tamashī no Kyōki is a mysterious one. Almost always covered by his cloak, or a shroud of reiatsu particles forming clouds/vapour around him. The skin of its being is more ashen-blue in color, appearing almost scale-like. His eyes glow a toxic green and appear to hold great power unseen to the naked eye. As far as Horus can tell Tamashī no Kyōki being has no mouth, leaving the lower portion of the face flawless. Tamashī no Kyōki also wields a staff which reiatsu can be released from the ends of to create a dual sided scythe. Additionally Tamashī no Kyōki will use its weapon form. Anything and everything worn by Tamashī no Kyōki is a deep black in color, some seeming to have faded from actual colors themselves.
» Appearance Picture: Zanpakutō Spirit
» Zanpakutō Spirit Personality:
Silent and Mysterious
Appearing in the shadows, fully clothed in black Tamashī no Kyōki comes of quite mysterious. Especially when one considers how little Horus even knows about him, even if he's gained Shikai. Tamashī no Kyōki is usually silent unless in training, or he has something to say.
Patient and Wise
A patient spirit Tamashī no Kyōki knows one day it will get through to Horus and force him to realize his humanity. This patience also leads into training, life, meditation, watching nature, and many other things. Tamashī no Kyōki is also wise beyond his years, its mind holding eons worth of knowledge, though most of it is useless to Horus.
Passionate
In everything he does, be it training Horus, meditation, or simply living life Tamashī no Kyōki does everything full of passion. No matter what there is always a passionate fire behind his eyes, the same passion usually managing to bring some humanity out of Horus when they speak.
» Inner World: A world in which nature appears to have begun to overrun civilization. The inner world of Horus is a place that appears to have once been home to an advanced race, eons older than humans them selves. Yet nature had taken over the place, or appeared too have. Horus's inner world has always looked as such, thus the bustling civilization that could have been, or the slow encampment of nature never were. Structures, some still standing, others falling apart, are spread out everywhere. In some areas appear waterways creating circles around some areas, or continuing to others. All in all a beautiful place, and home to Tamashī no Kyōki.
» Appearance Picture: Inner World
Sealed Zanpakutō Appearance: The sealed form of Tamashī no Kyōki appears to be a pair of simple tanto. Each tanto is roughly 18 inches long, the blade of each being 12 inches of the total length. Both are colored a dull black as if to absorb all the light coming in contact. The handles are white and wrapped in black material. The blades are each one sided, and easily sharp enough to cut through wood, stone, and even steel. Horus wears the tanto's of Tamashī no Kyōki either on his waist, or within each of his boots.
» Appearance Picture: Sealed
» Release Phrase: Spread insanity and murder! Infect the soul! Tamashī no Kyōki!
» Shikai Appearance: The shikai state of Tamashī no Kyōki is a pair of trench knives. Said knives are designed so that each finger slips through a hole in the handle, thus acting as a guard and a set of brass knuckles. The blades of the knives are slightly curved, and are roughly fifteen inches in length. The color of each knife is a pure black, the only difference in color being along the silver-steel colored sharpened blade-edge. Each blade can easily slice through steel, and diamond, and can even damage a Zanpakutō.
» Appearance Picture: Shikai Pic #1 , Shikai Pic #2
» Shikai Abilities:
Reiatsu Scalpel
A simple ability in which Horus is able to surround his hands, arms, feet, and legs, or any combination of the mentioned, in his reiatsu. Doing this he then can create an ultra fine cutting edge around his own body allowing him to extend his physical attack range, and ability to wound. The cutting ability of this reiatsu ability is so great that Horus could peel the skin from a tomato with ease. The only true limits this ability has is Horu's lack of knowledge in using it defensively, and that its a constant drain to use longer than two posts in a row. This ability can be used even out-side of shikai, though in shikai Horus can apply lightning to the technique to cause burns, and nervous system interference, along with extending the range further. The Reiatsu Scalpel can at most, extend Horus's range by a total of ten inches when using Shikai, otherwise the range is only increased by six inches.
Reaitsu Telekinesis
Another simple ability, though this one does require Shikai in order to be used. Tamashī no Kyōki allows Horus to control anything less than 100lbs in weight, and up too 150 meters away from him via a thin sheet or coating of reiatsu allowing him to 'telekineticly' control them. Horus is able to control up to ten objects at a time using this, the more objects controlled the less control and vice versa. A full ten objects controlled move at the speed of someone two tiers lower, while a single object controlled can move at the speed of someone a tier higher. Finally, Horus can only switch control between different objects once per turn, and when doing so can only switch control of up to five objects. When controlling one to five objects Horus can maintain control for up too four posts, six to eight; three posts, and 9 or 10, a mere two posts.
Defensive Branch: Telekinetic Barrier
A defensive branch of Horus's reiatsu telekinesis. Horus can create a shield/barrier/forcefield of sorts in order to block, or disrupt attacks. The skill can withstand a normal cero, or equivalent Kidō/technique from an equal tier foe. Weaker foes will find it will take stronger attacks, or several in quick succession. While stronger foes will find no issue aside from the occassional weaker attack being blocked. This can be used twice per post, or four times per three posts..
Gigavolt Storm
This ability requires one post in order to be built up. Once built up Horus releases a massive amount of reiatsu into the sky, roughly 50-60% of his current max. Once this is done he is then able to call down an immense storm of power in the form of five bolts of lightning. These bolts are a brilliant white in color due to both the energy contained in them, and the heat given off. Each bolt contains roughly 1 to 5 million volts of electrical energy. A foe struck will be out of the fight for sure, unless they a) are a stronger tier, in which they may take moderate->serious injury. b) they have a powerful enough technique to counter. Or c) they can dodge it. This ability does have its drawbacks, first Horus can only use it once per thread at a cost of 50% of his current reiatsu levels. Second, Horus himself suffers second and third degree burns when discharging the energy into the air. And finally, Horus is left in a semi-paralyzed state leaving him open to attack(weaker foes: this lasts two posts, equal; a single post, higher; only affected for the post they are hit in).
Vajra
Vajra is a technique that combines the use of reiatsu manipulation along with electrical energies to create a swirling mass off reiatsu/electrical energy. At first it appears blood-red/black from Horus's reiatsu until the electricity is added in which gives a golden yellow glow. This technique is shot like a beam, said beam is able to pierce through stone and steal like butter. At the cost of high reiatsu and electrical consumption this technique packs enough power to do heavy damage to a tier above, and moderate to two above. This technique can only be used after a single post of merging energies, and cannot be used more than twice per five posts, or five times a thread. Has a range of 150 meters.
White Fang
An ability in which Horus focuses the lightning element around his blades. When he strikes into a foe he discharges the electrical energy, causes a bolt of lightning to rip through the wound, and further into the foe. Initially the simple cutting wound is slightly cauterized before the discharge tears it apart before piercing through the flesh. Third degree burns will be caused to the area, if not fourth degree, while most of the wound will be cauterized. What isn't cauterized will bleed profusely while the burnt nerves sent sharp pain through the wounded area.
Extended Attack Range(Passive/Selective)
An offensive gift from Tamashī no Kyōki. Horus is able to extend his natural attack range and that of his weapons via a sheet or cloak of reiatsu over whatever he is using. Depending what's being used this sheet may be blunt or sharp. Additionally this happens instinctively whenever Horus attacks, and can be paired with the Reiatsu Scalpel technique to empower it further. Though Horus is also able to disengage or re-engage it whenever he wishes to conserve reiatsu. The extended range of this ability is only four inches, when combined with reiatsu scalpel the range can be increased to 10 inches or 14 in shikai.
NulShock(Passive)
A gift from Tamashī no Kyōki, NulShock is an ability that grants Horus resistance to electrical energies. An equal tiered electrical based attack will only have 80% effect, lesser tiered 50% and higher tiered full effect. This resistance was given to Horus by Tamashī no Kyōki via an electrical current of Tamashī no Kyōki's reiatsu flowing through Horus's body/soul.
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» Inner Hollow Description: The Inner Hollow of Horus, or as it prefers to be called, Arashi Nikuya(Storm Butcher) appears to be a cross between a dragon-like form, and a goat. The most notable goat-like features being his goat-like head, and cloven hooves. His entire body appears to be covered in an armor-like substance that is colored a darker grey-green and covered in crimson designs. From his back sprout two wing-like limbs, and an orange tail. Arashi Nikuya towers over Tamashī no Kyōki and Horus, standing at a massive thirteen feet tall.
» Appearance Picture: Inner Hollow
» Inner Hollow Personality:
Insanity and Hatred
Much like Horus the Inner Hollow is insane, possibly more-so than Horus himself. Additionally, it hates everything, especially Horus and his Zanpakutō, even if it helps Horus from time to time. It especially hates humanity and shinigami alike, and would love to see all wiped clean from existence.
Twisted Help
Horus's Inner Hollow doesn't mind helping him.... As long as it causes harm, fear, panic, and madness. When it comes to anything else though, and Horus can expect nothing, less it works in its favour. At times it even tries to help in ways that will allow it control.
Aggressive and Quick to Anger
Infinitely more aggressive than Horus himself, the Inner Hollow lives, breathes, and revels in battle, blood, murder, and chaos. It always wants to fight, kill, and maim. And it is almost never not angry. When not angry, even the slightest hint of action against it, or doing something it dislikes send it into a raging state.
» Inner Hollow Powers:
Aside from its own powers the Inner Hollow is also able to use all of Horus's currently known abilities.
Corrupt Grasp
The Inner Hollow's telekinetic power is able to do the same as Horus's as well as an additional property. One being held or hit by the IH's telekinetic power will also suffer the same corrupting properties as the Corrupt Vajra possesses.
Corrupt Vajra
Identical to Horus's vajra ability, aside from a few main differences. The first, this one appears only golden and black in color. Second this vajra invades and corrupts the body rather than piercing and burning. nd finally, this variant can be used more often due to its Hollow nature. The corrupt vajra will eat at ones reiatsu, causing an imbalance and preventing the use of reiatsu based abilities. The electrical property will slowly corrupt and destroy the nervous system; first causing misdirected actions, then preventing them, before complete paralysis. 150 Meter range. Reiatsu based affects take two posts before showing, while the nervous system damage will appear right away, worsening every two posts. One can flush the reiatsu from their system via two methods, a strong enough burst(ie going into shikai/bankai) or flooding their own reiatsu through their system.
Shocking Appetite
The Inner Hollow is so much more intune with the electrical elements that unlike Horus and his Zanpakutō the Inner Hollow is able to consume electrical energy. It is then able to use this energy to heal wounds or empower itself. Consuming a weaker foes attack will reward the IH with the healing of minor wounds/bruises/fractures, and a momentary increase in power. A equal foes will result in a slightly better result while a stronger foes will result in; healing of major wounds aside from organ damage, and a gain of a partial tier in power.
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- Hollow Mask:
» Vizard Powers:
Hollow Scalpel
Identical to the Reiatsu Scalpel aside from one thing. The addition of Hollow reiatsu has given the ability the chance to infect the foes own reiatsu, slowly eating away at it. Initially the foe will feel no effect, but after 5 posts their techniques will be 20% weaker, 40% after 10, etc. Multiple hits increase the effect, 2 hits for example causes each stage to hit a post sooner, 3 hits 2 posts sooner, etc. It would take 6 consecutive hits for the drain to take effect right away at a noticeable rate.
Cero Pulse
Horus creates a inner shell/ball of reiatsu, before coating it with the energies of a cero. Horus then creates an outer shell to hold the hollow energies while small whisps of reiatsu escaping from the center cause the orb to spin faster and faster. When thrown this technique detonates, causing an 10 meter diameter explosion, the outer shell expanding with it to prevent the energies escaping. Then the second stage takes place less than a second later, the internal reiatsu explodes outward causing both energies to fire off in all directions in the form of small needles or blades. This is an indiscriminate attack, and is capable of piercing most foes. Any foe with strong enough defensive abilities can escape injury, the same if you can dodge. Other than that this does equal damage to all foes, a simple piercing wound clean through the body.
White Fang Bala
Horus forms hollow reiatsu around his blades, before adding electrical energies causing the black and white energies to converge. Horus then releases the energies from his blades, they strike forth in the form of a black and white lightning bolt. A foe struck by this will suffer 2nd->4th degree burns depending on tier, and will more than likely suffer a large piercing wound unless they can defend/block/evade.
Cero
A normal cero, although colored black with a white and crimson outline. Able to do moderate damage to equal tiers, lesser to higher foes, and heavy to lesser foes.
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- To Be Added if Ever Obtained:
» Resurrección Appearance: (What does your character look like when they transform into their Resurrección state?
» Resurrección Abilities: (When a character ascends to this state, they at their peak power. As such, you will need to post at least 5 paragraph's describing their powers.)
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» Background:
Birth of a Soul Arc
Sometime after the discovery of Deus Ex Machina, roughly two hundred and sixteen years ago, a soul was born. Unfortunately the soul while destined for power, was also destined for madness, or so it would seem. The male child bore golden eyes, hinting at madness from his birth. He was born to a murderous Vizard for a mother, and an insane and power hungry Shinigami for a father.
At the age of five the child was abandoned, left by his parents so that they could escape the hands of the law. Horus Sariel would be taken in by a human family, though this would not save him from the madness and sorrow to come. At the age of six Horus began to open up to his new family, speaking with them and spending more time together. At the age of seven Horus experienced his first hollow attack, surviving with but a scar. But the damage had been done, Hollow reiatsu had leaked into his system, awakening his latent Vizard genes. Thus began the creation of an Inner Hollow, one which would be more insane than Horus himself.
Two years later, at the age of nine, Horus experienced further loss. His foster mother had been killed in another Hollow attack, it had also now been confirmed that Horus's own reiatsu was attracting them. This pushed his growing insanity further as he placed the blame unto himself. Horus now began to look down upon others, caring only for himself. When and if Horus caused someone harm he seemed to lack all signs of guilt. Additionally he began to speak too himself.
Gift of Insanity Arc
At the age of ten Horus is now alone. The cause, himself. He had killed his father in an insane fit of rage. Something that had been occurring often recently. The rage had initially been caused by his inability against a Hollow. Insanity increasing further Horus also now always sported a smile on his face, even his frowns etc seemed to become smiles.
Fifteen years old Horus had begun to indulge in killing tendencies. Shinigami, Hollow, and Human alike were beginning to fall too Horus's hands. Before this had begun Horus had obtained a soul-less Zanpakutō, now using it for his deeds. At sixteen Horus had also begun trafficking drugs, stealing, and outright breaking the law simply for the thrill.
Fourteen years later at the age of thirty Horus has lost most if not all mental stability. He also has now become a feared serial killer world wide. Additionally four years ago Horus had tapped into his reiatsu, forming his sealed Zanpakutō.
Sixty four years later Horus has grown further in power. He is now fully able to utilize his reiatsu, and electrical energies. Horus has yet too hear his Zanpakutō's voice.
Quest for Power Arc
At the age of one hundred Horus has gone into hiding. His goal, to train, further his power, and live in peace for now. Ten years later Horus meets his Inner Hollow, it calls itself Arashi Nikuya. It hinted at his Zanpakutō spirit, but nothing more. Horus also barely survived a gruelling fight with the Hollow, surviving on both skill and insanity. Twenty four years later Horus and Arashi Nikuya have come to a slight agreement. It will help him if only it aids him somehow, or Horus is indulging himself in his usual ways. Finally at the age of one hundred and fifty Horus has begun hearing his Zanpakutō's voice.
Becoming a True Monster Arc
When Horus had reached the age of one hundred and sixty the Deus Ex Engine came into existence. When Horus reached the age of two hundred he exited his isolation. Both his power and insanity have increased greatly, and he has begun forming bonds with both spirits within him, whether they be good or bad. Horus also managed to obtain Shikai in a vicious confrontation between himself, Arashi Nikuya, and his Zanpakutō. In the same conflict he had also learnt its name, Tamashi no Kyoki. The result of gaining Shikai was also realizing he still contained some form of humanity.
At the age of two hundred and five Horus has nearly completely accepted who and what he is. He has successfully accepted the fact that he possesses an Inner Hollow, albeit they don't quite get along. He has fully accepted his insanity, and has even begun to accept the shred of humanity that remains causing a protective side of him to emerge. Although, Horus's murderous tendencies have returned completely if not more so, he now spares no race and has become a true monster.
Shinku Nikuya Arc
Age two hundred and six, Shinku Nikuya or 'The Crimson Butcher' is born. The name began to spread in the underground, the weaker beings began to fear it. Horus's power increased every so much more, having learned more of his abilities and powers. Four years later Horus has become slightly interested in the Monsuta after hearing about them. Currently Horus now wanders the globe, searching for a purpose, a balance, and his 'heart',
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- To Be Added if Ever Obtained:
» PhatomTech: (Does your character have a PhatomTech brain installed? If so, you'll be able to qualify for upgrade at the Cybermind or add other Cybernetic parts to your character to make them stronger. Click here for more information about Phantom Tech)
» Phantom Tech Abilities: (What can your character do with his or her's add-ons? This applies to any upgrades your character has gotten from places like The Cybermind as well.)
» Phantom Tech Powers: (This refers to things outside of Add-ons unlike Abilities. What Phantom Tech Powers are, in a sense, is basically what kind of power did your character gain from having a Cyberbrain? For example, Shadin Yuudeshi gained Imaginary Computation with his Cybernetic upgrades and has the ability to bring tangible things into existence with his computers Quantum Calculations.)
_____________________________________________General Skills
- Durability: Advanced
- General Speed: Advanced
- Strength: Adept
- Weapon Skill: Advanced
Racial Skills
- Hoho: Adept
- Cero/Bala/Kidō: Advanced
- Zanjutsu: Adept
- Hakuda: Adept
Racial Skills from Viz General ThreadRacial Skills
- Power Augmentation Adept
- Cero: Advanced
- Mask Protection:: Adept
- Hollow Control: Adept
Will Skills
- Willpower/Determination: Advanced
- Mental Deduction: Adept
- Pain Endurance: Advanced
- Focus: Beginner
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» Role Play Sample:
The following sample is from a recent thread of mine on Ultimate Shinobi, under the username 'Red Storm' Iori.
- Sample:
'Red Storm' Iori wrote: IORI THE RED STORM
From the interior of a nearby building the Head Guard spotted the new face... or in this Shinobi's case a mask. The only real distinguishing features he could make out on the teen was his crimson and gold hair, something that definitely was not common in Kumo. Walking up too the buildings door and opening the Captain roared out, "Genin! In here now!" Before slamming the door shut and taking a seat behind his desk.
Outside said Genin heard the voice yelling as he was about to pass the building by. Shrugging his shoulders Iori figured it had too be the guy in charge, and went into the building, seeing said guy sat comfortably behind his desk. Amethyst eyes piercing through his black mask Iori starred at the man, assessing him before deciding to speak. "You wanted to see me? Iori's voice came across calm and cold while he spoke. The Captain himself was also assessing the Genin but found that his attire have little to go off of. One thing he did note was the Genin's cold amethyst eyes and his tone. The kid seemed colder than one should at his age, but it mattered not, what mattered was putting the kid to work while he could.
"Damn right I do! Your going to be patrolling along the inner gates. If anyone needs to be replaced elsewhere you will go there. Now get moving!" The 'Captain' barked out, waiting to see how the Genin would react. Too his dismay he got absolutely no reaction aside from a cold, "Will do Sir" and the hint of venom at the use of Sir. It seemed this kid already too his life seriously, unlike most fresh Genin. Hearing the door close the Captain got back to his work, deciding he may keep an eye on that Genin.
And so, with orders received Iori made his way through the dull light of the night, and eerie glow of torches towards the Inner Gates. Along the way making sure to note where guards were positioned, and how many there were. For now the night seemed calm, a calm Iori found himself enjoying now. Yet at the same-time Iori found himself anxious, wishing something would happen during this night. Looking too the tree's Iori watched the leaves ruffling in the gentle night breeze. Allowing himself a smile Iori arrived near the Inner Gates. Coming out of the shadows into the torch-lit area Iori called out to the guards already there, "The 'Captain' sent me."
Not waiting for a response from the guard Iori walked up too a nearby wall, leaning against it. Iori kept his gaze directed towards the outer area, occasionally glancing around too check on everything. Keeping his senses open, and himself aware Iori was prepared for hopefully anything that may occur. His body tense yet relaxed Iori began too hum a tune to himself before it slowly died down as he allowed himself to become one with the shadows. Amethyst eyes and a golden bolt of lightning were all that could be seen aside from the faintest hint of crimson. Sighing too himself Iori hoped the entire night wouldn't be as boring as it was now.
Thus far there had been little travellers through the gates, nor any actual happenings. In the past while Iori had been asked too grab some coffee and food for himself and the other guards on duty. Suffice to say that had been the most Iori had gotten to do at this point, aside from the occasional glance up towards the village, or out towards the fields or mines. Stifling a yawn the crimson haired teen stretched out, and wetting his face with some cold water too keep himself aware. All in all it seemed this night was going too continue at the rate it was currently going. The only noise aside from the guards or noise from the village came from insects and animals alike.
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- GuestGuest
Re: Horus the Shinku Nikuya [APPROVED, 2-1+]
Sun Apr 14, 2013 5:20 pm
Aivee Check Incoming!
Reiatsu Scalpel: Not much wrong with this, accept a range on how far it extends would be nice! There's some inferring to a touch range, but I'm not sure.
Reiatsu Telekinesis: I'd suggest reigning in the range a bit right now, and also trying to leave a how long it can be used at once for, since it would probably be draining to use on so many objects right? As for the defensive one; it's twice per post, with a maximum of four total uses in three posts, correct? Just making sure I understood that one right.
Gigavolt Storm: The semi-paralyzing state; does it last for the rest of the thread, or just a certain amount of time? Just making sure, pretty interesting technique.
Vajra: Hyperbeam ahhoy! Naw I kids. I'd suggest adding some range into this one too; how far does it reach? That'd be very useful to know x3
Extended Attack Range: A bit like the issue with Reiatsu Scalpel; the range on it's extension would be nice.
also, lol@ NulShock. <3
Corrupt Vajra: My only question here is the time frame this would happen in. You mighta forgot to add it like you did in Hollow Scalpel. So that would be something to mention. Also, if someone flushed out their Reiatsu, would that get rid of the effects?
Apart from those light issues, everything seems to be in order. Pretty nice app too <3 Moving to pending as well x3
Reiatsu Telekinesis: I'd suggest reigning in the range a bit right now, and also trying to leave a how long it can be used at once for, since it would probably be draining to use on so many objects right? As for the defensive one; it's twice per post, with a maximum of four total uses in three posts, correct? Just making sure I understood that one right.
Gigavolt Storm: The semi-paralyzing state; does it last for the rest of the thread, or just a certain amount of time? Just making sure, pretty interesting technique.
Vajra: Hyperbeam ahhoy! Naw I kids. I'd suggest adding some range into this one too; how far does it reach? That'd be very useful to know x3
Extended Attack Range: A bit like the issue with Reiatsu Scalpel; the range on it's extension would be nice.
also, lol@ NulShock. <3
Corrupt Vajra: My only question here is the time frame this would happen in. You mighta forgot to add it like you did in Hollow Scalpel. So that would be something to mention. Also, if someone flushed out their Reiatsu, would that get rid of the effects?
Apart from those light issues, everything seems to be in order. Pretty nice app too <3 Moving to pending as well x3
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Re: Horus the Shinku Nikuya [APPROVED, 2-1+]
Sun Apr 14, 2013 5:38 pm
Edited, and yes you are correct, Reiatsu TK can be used twice per post, or four times per three posts.
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Re: Horus the Shinku Nikuya [APPROVED, 2-1+]
Sun Apr 14, 2013 6:03 pm
Do not worry nya! The Pawesome Aikuko-Nya is here!
This applications is minesh, nya~! So's let's get down to the ameowzing checking nya!
Applicashion Checklist nya~
- Namezies Nya~ [X]
- Appropriateded Age Nya~ [X]
- Gender Nya~ [X]
- Appearancu Presented Nya~ [X]
- Appearancu Described-nya in Appropriateded Lengthzies OR Picturies is Visible Nya~ [X]
- Appearancu is Not Claimeded Nya~ [X]
- 10 sentencus for personalites Nya~ [X]
- Histomi is of appropriateded lengthzies Nya~ [X]
- Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered Nya~! [X]
- Powers are described reasonably enough Nya~! [X]
- Application/RP Sample is not in First Person Nya~ [X]
- Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow) Nyaaaan~ [X]
- RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) Myan~? [X]
- RP Sample is 10 sentences Myan~! [X]
Will Skills
- Willpower/Determination: Advanced
- Mental Deduction: Adept
- Pain Endurance: Advanced
- Focus: Beginner
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[list][*][b]Willpower/Determination:[/b] Advanced
[*][b]Mental Deduction:[/b] Adept
[*][b]Pain Endurance:[/b] Advanced
[*][b]Focus:[/b] Beginner
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Comments/Notes: Myan~! Welcomes to the site desu and like nya and haveth funzies mya~!
Tier: 2-3++
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Re: Horus the Shinku Nikuya [APPROVED, 2-1+]
Sun Aug 24, 2014 5:43 pm
Adjusting tier & skills as per the upgrades I have purchased.
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Approved Upgrades and the purchase of said upgrades.
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Re: Horus the Shinku Nikuya [APPROVED, 2-1+]
Sun Dec 14, 2014 10:19 am
Archiving this character due to inactivity.
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Re: Horus the Shinku Nikuya [APPROVED, 2-1+]
Tue Dec 23, 2014 10:32 pm
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Re: Horus the Shinku Nikuya [APPROVED, 2-1+]
Fri Jan 01, 2016 1:21 am
Tier upgrade for Horus. 2-1 to 2-1+.
https://www.platinumhearts.net/t15090-upgrade-for-horus-before-the-new-year#98061
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Re: Horus the Shinku Nikuya [APPROVED, 2-1+]
Mon Dec 06, 2021 8:18 pm
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