Nemu

Alrighty this crazy mofo is ready and waiting for checking, please be nice he took forever ....... it was hell. i'm just putting this post down so he at least goes up the WIP board good luck Kuro my friend .,... we shall need it.

Here are some changes to be made, nyan!

Yin Surge - 2000 meters? Are you crazy? And with all those effects? I suggest you reduce the range / clarify what Silence/rest of the effects mean as well. a little more clarity would help a lot.

Hate surge - again, the range. 200m is hella long for an attack.

Why is there Chaos Blast and mentions of chaos energy in your app, when you are Human with a Demon Ziamichi? You should probably remove those [and add in the human race skill sheet too. Just sayin'.] Demons just use Zoa Koa and what not ; Chaos Energy is Iramasha based.

Hell Bringer State : No. The way this is written right now is a no. I suggest looking it over, re-writing and clarifying stuff into it.

Let me know when you're done editting <3

my bad bout yin surge meh accidentally added to many 0s ... didnt even notice so i just removed it, hates been cut down in distance. Also changed him to a Iramasha i thought somthing was a miss when i put Demon. updated hell bring added alot more description some more downfalls a distance and feel like an idiot making aviee reads the shite but now alls fixed up ill hand it back over to meh favourite app checker

Chaos blast - 100m in length and width? Woah. I suggest you cut down one of the mesurements ; like you can keep 100m in length or width but hella reduce the other one.

Hell Bringer State : okay let me clarify. Manipulating the other's senses in a 30km range? No. Manipulating someone else's senses is not right ; it's GM because the user doesn't need to give their stamp for you to nilly fuck with their character ; ie? Making them blind, deaf, etc. permanently without permission. So I suggest you fix that ; it was the initial ability that I was nope at. I'd like for you to find something else if you can. Sorry if I wasn't clear enough.

And it's kay Lio, I dun mind reading it. xD I'm here to help after all >w<

Alright i've done a complete rework of hell bringer and made it weather control which seems much simpler i've also lowered the width of chaos blast and am ready for the next comments as so naturally proclaimed COME AT ME comments - love lio <3

Chaos blast - collecting energy chaos energy from the worlds core itself kuro stores this energy allowing it to build then releasing it out in a massive black energy blast focusing the Chaos energy towards his opponents. this has a 1 post charge and has a strike radius of 100 m in length and width in the area in front of him.

IT'S STILL THERE. :CCCCCCC @too much width


Also, one last question, almost there ; for the weather control, what if a main element user or other weather control come sto try to interrupt his circle? Would it work if they're stronger, or what not? I'd love for that to be clarified. Also a list of weather changes would be nice, but isn't needed.. I'd just prefer one. XD

hkkhjhewjkfhwekf ..... i seriously thought i fixed that damn thing, i'm sorry aivee i shall go sit in the naughty corner for this failer. i have added something to do with that pre much saying that they have rights to it if they stronger so yeppers and ...... ill do list later, meh lazy right now. yet again i must thank you aivee you are lios saving grace or soothing like that