Darren hokaido (redesigned as shinigami)[APPROVED, 4-3]

Shinigami application

General Information
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Name: Darren hokaido
Appearance Age: 16
True Age: 15
Gender: male

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Overall Apperance
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Appearance: he is about 5ft9 with small toned muscles, his attire is usually the normal shinigami attire, with a few adjustments, the neck lines are gold, not white, and the waist is also gold, the arms are ripped to shoulder length instead of elbow length, parts of his uniform are stained with blood, as if he's never stopped wearing the same outfit, since he got his shinigami powers. he wears a big black and red cape, with a hood over his outfit the cape is tied together with rope

he has blue hair and his fringe is covering the left side of his face, his eye colour is green, he has no facial hair. he has tanned skin, but its sometimes pale. he has a dark red aura, in the form of flames,he has a scar coming from his left side on his nose in a downward angle, from when the hollow scratched the left side of his face off, he, his left eye mostly isnt in view, but, on occasion, the remains of his left eye will be slightly visible.

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Personality
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Personality: he is aggressive , but when in battle he always has a calm attitude. he always has a greater motive to his actions, no matter how evil he may look, he does it for the greater good. he is unsociable, he can barely speak to people after getting traumatized from the attack, he also seems to be thinking about something most of the time, he's always thinking about how a whole village burned up and he couldnt stop it.

he has a fear of burning ruins, he will freak out when a building explodes, he is always reminded of his past,

he never got the left side of his face healed, to remind him to never forget, the day he got the scar.

he has learned to control his emotions, but when he gets caught up in a battle he's losing, he starts to lose his cool and starts to get more aggressive with a hint of sadness and with each swing of his sword he will shed a tear , he's vowed that he wont give up, he's vowed to fight on in the memory of his village.

Zanpukuto
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Zanpakutō name: kai

Zanpakutō spirit appearance: an aura of darkness with just the upper body visible his face is that of a 25yr old with stubble, his hair colour is blue with tints of dark red, his hair is long and wavy, he wears a white and gold, long-sleeved t-shirt, with a black leather jacket over it, the jacket had golden buttons and the jacket was torn in several places, he wore black and red gloves.

Zanpakutō Spirit Personality: he is more calm and he judges a persons battle ability cautiously, he also only fights if there is a reason behind the fight, he doesnt give his power up easily, he demands a true battle between shinigami and zampakuto to give his shikai to darren.

Inner World: the inner world looks like a small village, that resembles his old village. but the area is mostly coloured dark red, with black and grey around the area,
Sealed Zanpakutō Appearance: the zampakuto is a normal sized katana with a deep crimson hilt, the handle guard is dark gold, and star shaped, and the blade is also a dark gold.

Release Phrase: speed up, kai

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Shikai Information
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Shikai Appearance: the shikai resembles a seppuku katana, the hilt and the handle guard are the same, the blade has a light cyan finish around the edges.

Shikai Abilities: abilities of shikai, the blade can absorb most energy based attacks, when it does the blade grows bigger and longer, and you can release the energy out in an energy attack right back at the enemy, it also allows for the ability of speed, its whole form is compressed into a tiny container allowing you to go slightly faster than normal, but his speed also depends on how much energy his blade has absorbed. if no energy is absorbed he will not gain speed, when he gains speed the amount of energy absorbed drops rapidly. if the zampakuto is dropped it will lose all energy it has absorbed,
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History
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Background:he was born in the human world, but as a shinigami, his mother died giving birth to him, he was found by humans with abilities, he was living a fairly normal life, until age 10: his powers started slowly leaking out uncontrollably, hollow attacks were getting more frequent over the years in his area. by the time he was age 15 his village had been destroyed his friends and family had died to save him. in the attack the left side of his face was scratched by a hollow claw, he lost his vision on the left side, but he managed to escape its grasp. he fled, without looking back he ran from the burning ruins of village, but where ever he went the hollows still followed. when he got to the third area he had ran to, the hollows attacked evermore violently, and he realised, the hollows were following him. all the attacks on the nearby areas and the deaths of all the people caught up in the hollows violent chase, were caused by him, he stopped running, and turned to face it, as the hollow went to strike him, time seemed to have slowed down, he looked into his right hand as it was glowing bright blue, the glowing faded slowly to reveal a katana, in his hand, time seemed to resume normal speed, in the spur of the moment he blocked the hollows attack, jumped into the air slicing the hollows face in half, the hollow faded away. he resumed running. whilst he ran from place to place, he met up with shingami, who brought him to soul society, where he was accepted as a new shinigami, to this day he still cant see through his left eye, and he isnt part of a squad, and chooses to only use his power to fight incoming enemies.
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RP Sample
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Role Play Sample:
in the middle of fighting between darren and mysterious enemy:
darren: darren shunpo's off a ledge, straight into the enemy's face, he goes to stab him.

enemy:the enemy blocks the attack and slices darrens chest.

darren: darren stumbles back abit, with blood coming out of his wound, he goes to slash the enemy slightly more aggressivly.

enemy:the enemy blocks, feeling the force of his swing he pushes darren away.

darren: he shunpos into his face again, swinging his blade down towards the enemies right shoulder.

enemy: the enemy manages to evade, but not without taking damage, to his right shoulder and upper arm, blood comes out.

darren: goes to stab enemy, but slips on combination of his own and the enemies blood.

enemy: he gets up, shunpo's above darren going to stab his stomach,

darren: pushes the enemies blade away and grabs his legs trying to pull him over.

Alright, good try, but you need to look over our rules first.

First off, make sure all parts of your app are appropriate length.

Second... A shinigami can't have an arrancar/hollow like spirit as their zanpaktou.

Third, if you read the rules, you don't start of with resserection and most of that is overpowered. I recommend erasing that for now and making a much better one later when you have more experience.

Until you fix up those, this app is moved back into WIP. Post in this thread when it's fixed, and have a good day~

old app post... plz ignore this ...

Again, you cannot have a zanpaktou named hollow's ally. The Zan would have come before the hollow, meaning it couldn't be based off a hollow, and you would be outlawed for such a zanpaktou normally. I suggest you just rethink your zanpaktou and its abilities.

Your RP Sample should be at least ten sentences, in third person.

You should use periods in your appearance, it's only 2 sentences.

And lastly, if you post this up here again without telling a staff member and just reposting, we will most likely have a problem.

AND MOST OF ALL, PLEASE, PLEASE, JUST READ THE RULES!

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• Appropriate Age [X]
  
• Gender [X]
  
• Appearance Present [X]
  
• Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
  
• Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
  
• 10 sentences for personality [X]
  
• History is of appropriate length [X]
  
• Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [X]
  
• Powers are described reasonably enough [X]
  
• Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
  
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Comments/Notes:

Alright, for your RP Sample... just remember that we don't take it in turns. We do it as if it is a story, from one characters point of view, attempting to do things to another. Then, in the next persons post, they react, and try to do things to your character. If you can remember to do that, then I'll call this APPROVED.

Tier: 4-3

• Willpower/Determination: Adept
  
• Mental Deduction: Beginner
  
• Pain Endurance: Beginner
  
• Focus:Adept
  

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