Jawz Mutsuki

• Name [X]
  
• Appropriate Age [O]
  
• Gender [O]
  
• Appearance Present [X]
  
• Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
  
• Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
  
• 10 sentences for personality [O]
  
• History is of appropriate length [X]
  
• Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [O]
  
• Powers are described reasonably enough [O]
  
• Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
  
• Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[X]
  
• RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) [O]
  
• RP Sample is 10 sentences [-]
  

Tier:
Comments/Notes:
WHERE TO BEGIN.

First of all, your gender is either:
MALE, FEMALE, INTERSEX, OR NONE
Not "/windwalker" or ANYTHING

Your personality needs to be ten sentences, not three words.

Jawz is a windwalker a race that can control any time of wind and also use wind at will !

Nope. Nope. Nope. You can't control any "time of wind" (which doesn't make sense).

☨Powers☨- Wind ,Jawz is able to control particles of wind to use in a type of pressure

Wind isn't a particle. I recommend reading this. The too long; don't read version is this: Wind is the flow of gases on a large scale. On Earth, wind consists of the bulk movement of air.

Wind Push- A charge of wind that can blow an object away

Wind grab- A wind technique that can grab an object that has mass and be moved at will[Takes alot of stamina to use this]

Wind Lift - A air type move that is wind projected into a flying
movement,can keep a windwalker in the air for a limited amount of time


Wind Charge- A wind technique that charges the windwalkerz strenght and stamina! Only can be used in the Resistance state.

FIRST OF ALL, DON'T USE "Z" INSTEAD OF "S."

Next, there should be some more description of the powers.

Wind breaker- A move where the windwalker can make an aura that can
project a shield to block an attack for a certain amount of time.

Again, there should be some more description of the powers.

Wind
resistance- A form where if the windwalkerz stamina is to low it
activates its rage and charges its body to produce negative wind,causing
the windwalker to be overwhelmed with power for a certain amount of
time,but once this state is over the windwalker will be to tired to do
any more attacks

Adjustable State Benefits:
The windwalker is very powerful at this state and most moves are either fatal or very power in this state

Again, more description and I don't quite understand "negative wind." Go into detail about that.


You neglected to provide a roleplay sample, you need to have that.

Tsubine wrote:

Application Checklist

• Name [X]
  
• Appropriate Age [O]
  
• Gender [O]
  
• Appearance Present [X]
  
• Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
  
• Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
  
• 10 sentences for personality [O]
  
• History is of appropriate length [X]
  
• Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [O]
  
• Powers are described reasonably enough [O]
  
• Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
  
• Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[X]
  
• RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) [O]
  
• RP Sample is 10 sentences [-]
  

Tier:
Comments/Notes:
WHERE TO BEGIN.

First of all, your gender is either:
MALE, FEMALE, INTERSEX, OR NONE
Not "/windwalker" or ANYTHING

Your personality needs to be ten sentences, not three words.

Jawz is a windwalker a race that can control any time of wind and also use wind at will !

Nope. Nope. Nope. You can't control any "time of wind" (which doesn't make sense).

☨Powers☨- Wind ,Jawz is able to control particles of wind to use in a type of pressure

Wind isn't a particle. I recommend reading this. The too long; don't read version is this: Wind is the flow of gases on a large scale. On Earth, wind consists of the bulk movement of air.

Wind Push- A charge of wind that can blow an object away

Wind grab- A wind technique that can grab an object that has mass and be moved at will[Takes alot of stamina to use this]

Wind Lift - A air type move that is wind projected into a flying
movement,can keep a windwalker in the air for a limited amount of time


Wind Charge- A wind technique that charges the windwalkerz strenght and stamina! Only can be used in the Resistance state.

FIRST OF ALL, DON'T USE "Z" INSTEAD OF "S."

Next, there should be some more description of the powers.

Wind breaker- A move where the windwalker can make an aura that can
project a shield to block an attack for a certain amount of time.

Again, there should be some more description of the powers.

Wind
resistance- A form where if the windwalkerz stamina is to low it
activates its rage and charges its body to produce negative wind,causing
the windwalker to be overwhelmed with power for a certain amount of
time,but once this state is over the windwalker will be to tired to do
any more attacks

Adjustable State Benefits:
The windwalker is very powerful at this state and most moves are either fatal or very power in this state

Again, more description and I don't quite understand "negative wind." Go into detail about that.


You neglected to provide a roleplay sample, you need to have that.

Sorry i meant type of wind now time!thanks for the cnc

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