Mia Caelin! Finished App!

S H I N I G A M I

B A S I C I N F O R M A T I O N

Name: Elysia 'Mia' Leanne Caelin!
Gender: Female of course!
Age: 69! Looks 22!
Appearance:

Spoiler:

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P E R S O N A L I T Y

Personality:

Mia has multipule personality disorder.

First persona:

Cheerful! Clingy! Kind... - When Elysia meets someone, the painting depicts a fine young woman who respects and loves everyone. She's known in Seiretei for being the 'cute little sister' thats perfect for everyone. Her cheerful smile is adored by men and women alike. Her soft voice flows a river of gentle words and phrases on a spring eve.

Morale Raiser! - Elysia can raise morale with a single 'Aye!!' causing all of the Shinigami around her rivers vicinity to shout 'AYE!'

Trouble Magnet - She's a pro in trouble making. Self Proclaimed 'Myrmidon of Trouble.'

She's A 'Hugger' - Anyone she knows is hugged at least once a day! Even her enemies... it does confuse them a bit at least. Few have ever escaped a hug from her. Enemy or Friend, doesn't matter.

Crybaby - Elysia is easily upset or hurt when she's in this Persona. Thus, she crys as soon as she's alone. She crys everynight since no one really likes her and she hasn't made any friends.


"Who Elysia? HA! She's just a 'Stubborn bitch of a Cheerleader' who needs to have herself a beating."

Second Personality:
Rude - Elysia is a very... disrespectful and rude person in this Persona. She is concerned only with herself unless she's truly needed. Her mouth is exceedingly unlady-like and her personal mantra is, "I hate everyone. They all lie. They're all traitors. I can do just fine on my own! They can all die!"

Self-Absorbed - Everything Elysia does is to get herself higher up and more powerful. Not caring who she has to knockdown to get there. If there's nothing in it for her then its not worth her time.

'The Strong Devour The Weak' - This Persona belonging to Elysia is a firm believer of these words. If your weak, she'll throw you to the ground behind her and if your strong she'll take you down after a while.
Her 'Little Sister' self is the dominate Persona.

Both Persona's:

Sexist Towards Men - Elysia... is extremely sexist and extremely scared in all ways of men. After the events of her forgotten past, the scars and bruises of bullying still exist. She always hides behind another woman if a male is passing or to close to her thats really scary looking (Kenpachi).

Sparring Nut - If another being that has a blade she asks to spar. No exceptions. She dreams to become the best sword fighter and chases people down to spar.

Excitable - Elysia becomes excited very easilly and this increases her hugging strength. Her boyfriend almost sufficated... but he's alright! Sometimes doing backflips in mid-air...


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B A C K G R O U N D

History/Background:

Background:
-Aiming for at least five paragraphs.-
Years:
1 - 5 -
Mia was born in Arlington, Texas to a teenage prostitute of 15 only to be abandon in the woods three months later by her Mother. Her mother's Pimp had followed them and lifted baby Mia from the ground speaking to her. "I've been Pimp`n for fifteen years little one. I think its about time I stopped, and since you need a home, your stuck with me. Let's PIMIP YO LIFE, baby. Hm. I'll name you after mah good 'ol ma! Elysia Leanne Caelin... now about that paperwork..."

- Growing up,Mia could see spirits. The first shinigami she saw was an afro-guy whos name is never remember. Right then she was two years old, playing with a bouncy ball. At the time she was watching him run from a 'masked black thing' and threw her ball at the 'thing' as hard as she could. Good idea, right? No. Now Elysia was 'playing tag' with them until the 'afro-guy' cut the 'thing's' mask, making it poof away.
Entering school wasn't fun for Elysia as she was bullied and beaten daily by older students.

6 - 14
Bulling continued into junior high and her father was notified that an ambulance took her to a hospital for two broken legs and a cracked skull. For two months she would be in a wheel chair and her Father signed her into a private school to start after summer break. With a month and a half left in school she returned in a wheelchair. Only for it to repeat. Her last year in Junior High School ruined. Her body and mind Traumatized. The same students that had bullied her... raped her at 12. Beaten and broken, the school called the police on the two 14 year old teen's that had committed this act. She went into a came home from severe head injuries, her arms both being broken, 4 broken ribs, a broken neck and head trauma.
The two teens were sentenced to 65 Years, with chance of parole after 44.

15 - 20
Mia no longer went to school, as her father hired toutors for her to learn at home. Her studies were hard bbu t she passed them all. During one summer, Mia started playing videogames alot, mainly ones including Fantasy and swords. Finally deciding she wanted to use a sword to help people, she began learning how to wield a longsword. Quickly proving she was a natural, she entered many tournaments until she was eighteen. The final Tournament was held by a Bounty Hunter's group. After an hour long final round, she won and was recruited for a two year contract. They were a group of Hollow hunters, getting paid to take Hollows out in certain places. Her Boss fell in love wih her and her with him, dating for 7 months before he asked for her hand in marrige at 19 and 19. Six months after the wedding Mia announced to Ike that she was indeed pregnant. This made thier lives joyful for a time. But then... that mission happened.

-2nd Year. 20-
Mia's death

Mia. The Myrmidon of the group was alone. Her husband and two companions slain by the Vasto Lordes standing before her, though they were inform that this mission was a low class hollow. Her tears fell as she knew she was going to die on her birthday. The left white hand clamped on her throat, the other holding Mia's heart before her very eyes. Squeezing it as the blood filled Mia's throat, unable to breathe she died of blood loss and suffocation. Her baby dying in her womb as the mother stopped moving.

Mia Caelin would never awake alive, she died in her slumber. Hoping it was just a dream.

Waking up in her Inner World, she prayed she was in heaven.


-After Death-

Mia had awoke in a lake in the Soul Socsiety's general area, someone was pulling her to the shore before she drowned. It was an Arrancar oddly enough. Name... Kanda Yu. His long blue hair wet as he pulled her out of the fringed water. He told her she was a "Dammed idiot for falling into a lake."

He left her there, only for her to call out. "See ya again sworn big brother!"

Kanda twitched, apparently not liking the name but left the soul society quickly. Mia heard someone calling out to her afterwards, it was her husband Ike who had wide eyes looking at her stomach.

"That's... it.. passed on with you..?" Mia and Ike embraced as she noticed her stomach near time for birth. The joy kept them going to the Shinigami Academy, were they joined to be a part of the service of Soul Reapers.

During her first 15 days, Mia went into labor while in her Zanjustu class. Rushed to the Medical Ward, the birthing process began. Ike hlding her he- I'm skipping this part D:
Mia had a baby girl, Ike rested his hand on her head as Mia passed out. (typical) Four hours later, Mia was awake and holding little Colette in her arms. They stayed that way for the entire night.

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Kimmi raised Colette until she was ten and then her husband Ike took care of her while Mia became a Shinigami,. In ten years she had become a full fledged shinigami, meeting both her Zanpakuto spirits and only knowing one of there names. Avalon of the Artic.

Upon leaving the Academy, she left for home again and Colette was now 20 but looked 5. Eventually Colette wanted to become a Shinigami too but Mia said no and they stayed home while Ike was inducted into the 11th Squad for his fighting style.

Letting Colette watch when she trained for Shikai, Colette began to practice with a wooden sword her father Ike had given her. copying her mom and dad until the stopped. Mia training against Ike and his Aether. Mia training with her shikai-less Zanpakuto.

Colette was watching when Mialet loose a large spiritual that wave knocked Colette out and Mia dropped her Zanpakuto along with Ike and Ran over to her.

Colette's eyes were dizzy as she stood up slowely, "Wawawawawhat hahahappened Mama?"

She was fine, but her powers were awakened, as a sword was at her side on the ground.
Side Notes:
Multiple Personality Disorder came from her head trauma, along with the memory loss.
RP Sample and photo below.

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Inner World!

Zanpakutô Spirit Name: The Black Spirit Rena and The White Spirit Avalon!
Appearance:

Rena!

Spoiler:

Avalon!

Spoiler:

Inner World: (What is your Zanpukto's inner world like?)

Sealed Zanpakutô Apperance :
A double edged longsword, currently belted on Mia's Appearnce.

Sealed Zanpakutô Abilities:





PhatomTech: Sure Don't Boss!


Release: "Spar, Heat and Cool them off! Rena and Avalon!"

Shikai Description:
none



Shikai Abilities:

[strike]Bankai Description: (This does not apply until you learn Bankai)

Bankai Abilities: (This does not apply until you learn Bankai)

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R P S A M P L E

Roleplay Sample:

HIYAH!!!

Her first misson and she was estatic. The chest length violet hair blew as a spring wind flew by her jumping body. Mia Elysia Caelin was on her first Hollow hunt as a Bounty Hunter. Leaving the dull office doors, she turn left to the garage to get her horse. An orange speed bike with a sword in a sheath belted to its seat was sitting in the back left corner of the white 2,500 square foot garage area, with a stone driveway leading out, and a few pillars holding the ceiling. Jumping onto her bike, Mia thrust the key into the ignition and it roared like a dragon waking from its nap... rudely. Speeding onto the drive way, the bike slid into left turn and the gas was burned. She reached the intersection of Green Oaks and Park Springs, were Mary Moore Elementary stood and sped on to the school while unsheathing her Silver Longsword with her left hand from the sheath between her legs. Grinding to a halt, Mia kicked the stand down and stood beside her bike. School was letting out and children were running out to their parents. Little girls stopped to stare at Mia like they admired her.
Mia, taking notice spoke, "Hi! I'm Mia! A Myrmidon! Where your principle kiddy? I need to- OH! Hugs first!"

Mia had forgotten the girl was the principles daughter, and proceded to pull her into a gaint life squeezing hug.

"Mia... please don't suffocate my daughter Kiki... again." a monochrome voice said behind Mia. Mia turned still hugging the child to her, but were she could breath and smiled at client. "Kay~!" was her cheery reply. She followed the Principle into her office and took it in AFTER sitting on her desk... still hugging Kiki to herself. Not that Kiki minded a bit. Mia was like her big sister.

The red carpet stained the floor while white walls casted around the small room. A few painting were of the wall of Mrs. Lebuea's friends, Mia being weirded out a bit cuddled Kiki closer. Now, with her poker face, Mia became serious.

"Alright Lyndis LeBeau, where's the Hollow?"



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S K I L L S H E E T

{Please do not fill out the following until your character has a tier}

General Skills

• Durability: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  
• General Speed: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  
• Strength: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  
• Weapon Skill: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  

Racial Skills

• Hoho: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  
• Kidou: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  
• Zanjutsu: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  
• Hakuda: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
  

OTHER THINGYS:
Strengths: Mia is all about using her sword and speeding around as a Myrmidon usually is. Her strength matches that of an average male. Speed is very high for a new Soul Reaper. Her hand to eye cordination is as excellent as her speed. But her eye to foot is... dangerious to a mans health. Her swordmanship is very well trained because of her 'affection' of swords during her life. Her stamina is above average at least.
"I'm destined to defeat the Flash Goddess herself! I just know it!" is what she usually says.

Weakness: Kido is not her strong suit. While she CAN use it... shes only good enough in it to be used as paralor tricks. Mia's durability is also an issue, she can't take big hits very well and less than an average amount of damage will throw her out of the match or fight. Hand to hand would be her worst area before her *COUGHADHDCOUGH,* she has almost no hand to hand combat training besides basic Akido and Judo for self defense.
Her lack of an attention span can get her into trouble quickly and possibly injured.

Mia's Gigai! -

Spoiler:

Height: 5' 7"
Weight: 114 Pounds
Physical Traits:

Clothing:
Whats she's wearing now in hrr photo is what she always weres but with a stolen Squad Captain jacket dyed 100000% Jet Black over it to serve as her uniform! The sleeves are cut off completely....
Completely

Gigai: Her photo's outfit.
Accessories: Elysia carries a pencil bag, notebook and sketchpad inside the folds of her clothes. She also carries around a First Aid Kit in the folds of her clothes. Lots of pockets.

Fighting Style


General Fighting Style: Akido. 'Slamming people into the ground' is what Elysia answered on her entrance exam.


Strengths:

Zanjustu - Elysia has great flexability and she's very short making her a bit harder to hit with most. Though... this backfires alot...


Weaknesses:
Kidou, Shunpo and Zanjutsu
Clumsy - Elysia is very concentrated but her clumsiness comes naturally... forcing alot of extra cuts, injuries, and bruises.

Likes:
Training - Elysia spends most of her time practicing Kido and Zanjutsu. Its a Fav on both Persona's Favorite Things To Do List, thus if shes bored she'll be in the forest.

Reading - 'Little Sister' Elysia loves Reading books. Romance, Action, Sci-Fi anything. There's hardley she'd rather do then read under a tree.

Kido - Both Elysia experiments with Kido alot, though she's still training it... Its fun for her since she feels like a magician. Its her favorite subject in class, right below Zanjustu.

Fears/Weaknesses:
1. Boys, Men or Males - As much as she hates them, Males scare Elysia more than anything else. The way they tower over her, the way they grin like idiots put her on edge, the way the talk, the depth of thier voice. Everything about them kind od unnerves her a bit. Mia's still friendly of males but shes much more untrusting.

2. Kittens. Why? Elysia's not sure, but its in her memories somewhere. The adorable eyes filled with so much innocense entrance her. The cute pink, soft paw pads. The way they 'Mew' it can stop Mia in her tracks to cuddle them. A hollows mask would twist into a 'WTF?' look.

3. Kenpachi Zaraki. Creepy as a demon, Elysia would faint if Zaraki was infront of her. She dreams of kicking his ass for Squad 11 Capitan's Position.

Mia's Motorcycle:

Spoiler:

Mia's Victory Pose!


Mia going "That way Ike! I jkust know it!"


Sleep Walking Ilyana xD


Mia with her freinds Soren, Mark, Lyndis, Hector and Eliwood! Chess Match! D:<

Mia Controling Lightning!


The starry night sky!


Colette!

I'm not going to use the template just yet, I'm going to outline a few issues here.

Morale Raiser! - Elysia can raise morale with a single 'Aye!!' causing all of the Shinigami around her rivers vicinity to shout 'AYE!'

While your intentions are good, forcing anyone to do anything under any circumstance is godmod. Sorry, that's how it is.

'The Strong Devour The Weak' - This Persona belonging to Elysia is a firm believer of these words. If your weak, she'll throw you to the ground behind her and if your strong she'll take you down after a while.

Is.. is this a power? Or a trait? Or.. what? This isn't explained nearly well enough for standard. Please rethink this.





Next, onto powers. The first issue I have is the fact that "Sealed Zanpakuto Abilities" means Kido, and stuff like that. Your zanpakuto CANNOT have abilities before shikai, it's called "SEALED" for a reason. The reason being that ALL ITS POWER IS SEALED. You CANNOT use abilities like you have in a sealed state. And even if you could, there are issues here.

Heat Wave! - Mia runs or uses Shunpo to speed around the enemy while draging her blade going faster and faster. Th friction from the dragging heats the blade to high levels and makes it easier to cut with. This also creates large amounts of heat inside the circle, roasting anyone inside as a whirlwind of heat rotates inside the cirle

You NEED to specify not only HOW hot it gets, but how it would effect people of the same tier, lower tiers, higher tiers, and so forth. She won't be "roasting alive" any 0-2s that get caught in there, methinks.


I know shikai isn't actually enabled yet, but I have some issues with the powers you DO have down.

Molten Blade! - The white sword, Avalon heats up to extreme levels. Enough to cut throw solid rock with as strong enough stroke! The blade aquires a bright orange glod to signafy its max tempature!

Again, you need to specify how hot it actually gets, or this is pointless. We could assume it's about as hot as a candle, and it'll be >Cool story bro all day.

Frizzard Blade! - The black sword Mia weilds is Absolute Zero in tempature and slashing with it throws sheets of ice at the target. Slashing the enemy directly chills that small area so much the it goes numb, if three strikes him the same area... bloodflow can freeze.

... Yeah. You need to specify how the slashes effect different tiers. Slashing a 5-5 three times will have a WAY different effect than slashing a 0-2 three times. It's important.

Complete Lightning Manipulation-
Mia can control lightning completely. This can be turned into small spheres to throw for small explosions of thunder and lightning or even razor sharp blades. These can be created within a 100ft distance from Mia. Mia does tend to randomly name them... (Max of two currents controlled at once.)

You really do need someone to go through here with you and help you word this better. It sounds completely mundane as it is. You don't specify voltage, attack power, strengths, weaknesses... Anything.




Other than this, I only have 2 other issues with this app:

The history is.. a bit scary, especially human life. I try not to judge, but damn.

Also, you need Genpaku's permission for all mention of Kenpachi Zaraki in this app.


Until these issues are fixed, or at LEAST worked on, I can't see this app getting approved.

Archived because of banning-ment.