Shinigami: Oshime Enshoku

Unlocked and moved back, I'll be helping Rukia out in this app.

Alrighty~ I'm going to start off with taking a few steps at a time to avoid confusion just in case you forget something out.


First up,


Her friends even take care of her if her shikai is overused, to which she is both embarrassed about and grateful for.

This was found in Personality. I'm sorry but we don't allow auto-shikai here which basically means you need to train your character in threads and stuff to gain shikai.

Secondly,

. Her spirit, despite not remembering her time on earth like all pluses, had the image of the Shinigami that sent her embedded in her mind, who she later came to know as Rukia.

You don't have to change this but in future reference, you can't include a canon character or such in you're character's history unless you check with the person that owns it. For example, Admin Kyle owns Rukia. But I've already spoken to him and he said it's fine. So that's for future refrence.

Once you have changed these what I have listen I'll go on to the more serious parts you need to alter/change.

Alright. Thanks. Ignore Frost, he's just jelly~!


Except not Rukia, of course, and she's wearing orange instead of pink. As well, the design on the bib is little hourglasses, as opposed to flowers. Her zanpakuto takes the form of the rattle seen above (minus the ribbon, and orange as opposed to red). As well, due to Oshime's choice of thicker diapers, it's very obvious that she's wearing one, even though she's wearing a onesie over it. Plus, an orange pacifier with a mouthguard shaped like an hourglass (aka exactly like the handguard of her unreleased zanpakuto) appears in her mouth.

Shikai Abilities: Mannenshinzou is meant to be swung as a melee weapon, like a very light, unspiked flail. However, it's meant to be swung like this in order to catch the enemy offguard with its real abilities. Every time the rattle makes its sound, which it of course does when it's shaken, aka every time it's swung or hits something, the rattling sound will cause the listener to slowly mental regress to infancy each time they hear it, with stronger affects the closer the listener is to the origin of the sound. Due to this, the shikai will affect everyone within listening radius, although her opponent is likely to be closer to the sound and will thus be more affected than those in audience of the battle. Despite having a very very strong resistance to the effect of her own shikai, she is not immune, and has been known to end sparring matches or even real battles with the mind of a baby, having to be taken care of by her close friends until it wears off. Oshime is able to restore the minds of those affected instantly if she desires, however this does not work on herself. If she chooses not to do it herself, or can't because she herself is fully mentally regressed, she effect will wear off after a couple hours.



Alright.

Now on to the serious side, these abilities.
Are a big no no.
I don't want to yell or shout at you like others are doing because I want to help a member like when I began at this s ite no one gave up on me.

But. This is a little out of it~

Every time the rattle makes its sound, which it of course does when it's shaken, aka every time it's swung or hits something, the rattling sound will cause the listener to slowly mental regress to infancy each time they hear it, with stronger affects the closer the listener is to the origin of the sound

You may have to change the powers all together. I mean, this is God-Mod and a little of, "WTFHAPPENED HERE?" God Mod where you can't just change someone else's mental shit and stuff like.

So, the best I could say. Is remove teh shikai. I shall personally help you make a new one when you have trained your character to get to that standard.

Alright, I changed the colour of the text. Cut around the girl so you have a seperate image in a program and put Shikai under spoiler with a message above it.

Next is your RP sample. You can't be in a squad yet, you need to speak to the squad captain's first then sign up so please change it~