Diablo Cortar

not being brought back

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Approved due to being approved before.

Tier reassigned: 0-5

Chaozi...


Blood control is forbidden according to Tsubine's Application Guideline

Tsubine's Application Guideline wrote:YOU CAN NOT CONTROL OTHER PEOPLE'S BLOOD

Ravana's Diablo wrote:After becoming a hollow, this rare disease manifested itself in a very unique power, the ability to “control” blood

Reason: This was used loosely and as such, it counted as GENERAL, meaning that it can affect self and other people. If Ravana want to use Diablo, he will have to specified which way; self or others.

-Ok first off I have no real problem with your powers. However, I believe that you need to explain your powers more in depth. The fact that your using blood as your main power means your going to have to create a better explanation for it. All that you have done is tell us what your powers are, but as you can see, there are small details that people don't seem to understand. So here are some things I I think should be added:

1. Explain how your body can regenerate body at such an accelerated rate

2. If your using your blood during battle that means that your stamina in battle itself will be severely reduced. Since your blood brings oxygen throughout your body and your using the blood that is suppose to circulate the result would be that your ability to fight would be reduced.

3. because your blood is being used in attacks the amount of oxygen getting to your brain is decreased as well, this would cause all your combat movements to be slowed. Basically are you saying that during battle your body is constantly replenishing blood. Because from you flaws you said that he can't fight long periods of time because your using blood, but because your using blood as your attacks it would cause these side effects. That would mean that your body would need to constantly replenish blood during battle. However, if that were the case then your flaw for your powers wouldn't make much sense.

4. I think you need to have more flaws period. Considering your character is using his own blood would mean that the flaws that I pointed out in 2. and 3. should be addressed.


Your using your own blood and because of this your going to need alot more explanation to truly get the point across. I think that is the biggest problem with this app is there is not enough explanation about this particular power. Also, if there was anything that I missed I will return to it. I am human and there will be things I missed, so if you fix everything that I said and I find something else don't be mad about it.

In any case this is what I see that needs to be fixing for it to be acceptable.