Exodus Ash

Denied is it

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• Name [X]
  
• Appropriate Age [X]
  
• Gender [X]
  
• Appearance Present [X]
  
• Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
  
• Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
  
• 10 sentences for personality [X]
  
• History is of appropriate length [X]
  
• Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered ]O]
  
• Powers are described reasonably enough ]O]
  
• Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
  
• Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[X]
  
• RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) [X]
  
• RP Sample is 10 sentences [X]
  

Comments/Notes:I see too many problems with this app. First things first is that the history appears to clash against Demon World and Sinfall. In regards to the site's history, Satan is inside of a boy name Haruko currently, and unless he is completely unaffiliated with Touketsu and Sin Fall, he is unacceptable as a demon, especially if he uses any of the demon spells. I am not certain if it is permissible to fully serve Satan, especially presuming that you never comversed with Frost about this.
Second, I see that he devoured people in the history. That too is not acceptable. Even in history, no character can eat other characters to gain any power whatsoever. That is not welcome, sorry.

Lastly, Byakuya is mentioned in the history. You must ask the current owner of that character (Kylekaottic) permission in order to use him.

Next is the powers themselves, which are not only vauge, but are potential for God Moding.


Tier:

Demonic Witchcraft Magic: Something with took decades to learn from reading books even the Necronomicon. Exodus was a novice warlock at first practicing spells. Then he became some of an expert after taking the wizard's test and started learning herbalism, healing magic, poision magic, creation different kind of potions and fire spells.

You specify a whole lot in a small amount. That will not do. I would like for you to list EVERY Potion, Fire Spell, Poison, Herb, etc, that he can make, so you don't pull off some bullshit during a battle. Please remember not to be a master in making all of these items, neither, keep the quantity at a reasonable level, ESPECIALLY since he has a great gamut of abilities to use, other than this.

Necro Barrage: These are a combination of many green energy waves fired at a very rapid rate, which causes a lightning speed effect. It is effective for quick, widespread, and massive amounts of damage, but it is very draining on one own demon's energy level. However, if they are powerful enough, they are able to avoid the energy drainage effects of this combination technique.

You must explain this ability more, especially since it appears to be quite devastating. explain the EXACT speed of the projectile, the EXACT quantity of waves, and its effects against other characters (based on tier or endurance rank.) Be sure to state the time it takes to do all this, as well as the firing rate and EXACT level of consumption.

Darkness Energy: A newfound red energy that was bestowed upon him after finishing the task of killing Bashin. Death can create powerful energy attacks, weapon empowerment attacks, energy bombs & powerful energy defenses with this newfound power. But however the power does have one limit it can't be used to attack other demons because of the Death's servitude to the dark lord. So whenever he attacks a demon with this power the attack itself will just vanishes. It can provide a powerful defense against kido if it was used the devil energy it just absorb it like it was nothing.

Explain each and every last attack aforementioned in this ability, including speed, fire rate, cost, power, weakness, etc. PLEASE explain "Devil Energy." You mean the energy of Satan? How can this energy be obtained? Can it be used to stop even a Cero Oscuras, or a barrage of Gran Rey Cero's?

Necro Lightning Bomb: Exodus places his hands forward as if he were going to do a strong Necro Bomb attack, only he forms a sphere of deep black/green energy that has another gray sphere inside it that turns black in the center and has blue electricity flowing around it. If he charges the attack for a few seconds, it seems to take on a decagon shape, but most commonly looks like a circle. Once he fires it, it leaves a shot black trail of energy behind before it hits the target, very easily causing a nuke-sized explosion that destroys everything caught in the explosion.

Can it really destroy EVERYTHING?! It better not... Please change that to specify what it cannot destroy (IE: someone with a Master Hierro, a 0 tier's Zanpaukto. A powerful energy shield. etc.)

Necrobomber Rage Blast: First, Exodus puts his hand to his side and forms a green energy sphere. Then, he brings his hand forward and fires a green energy wave at the opponent, inflicting a huge amount of damage. Exodus used this attack during the battle against an shinigami, but it proved ineffective against the Vizard or espada.

Define what exactly you mean by "A huge amount of damage." Does that mean Fatal? Able to penetrate a strong barrier? Can it render hierro useless? Explain more. Be sure to include the speed, size, and fire rate, along with damage.

Demonic Kinetic Energy: This refers to moving objects from one place to another without using physical contact. It also means re-shaping of objects using the mind's energies. This starts when Exodus focus on something with his right hand then a weird lightning energy picks up the object and throws it.

Can he move and reshape other people? He better not... Please explain the exact range of this ability, and the greatest extent it can be used, the size of the object thrown, the power of the telekenetic force, etc.

Mukō Jōtai Appearance: Exodus in his Muko Jotai, he takes the form of an Nephilim grim reaper which clearly has a human appearance. He wears a black robe and has a skeletal physique. He is commonly known as the Grim Reaper and is separate to the Angel of Death Azrael. Exodus's Name in his Muko Jotai state is known as Death. Like the one of the Devil Horsemen of the apocalypse. Death who has long hair, a skull-like mask, and of course, his scythe. Death has pale skin he may look human but being having a grim reaper appearance, he must look the part when dealing with enemies. His nails are completely black almost like a goth but something of a demon statement.

ಠ_ಠ You do know that there is already a key plot character that goes by the name of Death, right? I do not mind if the name is simply a nickname or a title others give to him, but if he is THAT kind if death (the 0-0 character Frost intentds to make eventually for the plot.) You CANNOT have that title. Please fix that.

For his Muko Jotai, Death wields the Devil's Scythe, taken and used to kill its former master during the Battle of Hell Lords. It is now currently owned by Death. The scythe can change into a straight, spear-like form, or collapse into a blade on Death's arm. It can also grow and shrink at will. Death used fallen souls to increase the power within the scythe, and each time Death chooses to condemn souls or demons, the scythe grows stronger as well as its unholy powers

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No... Flat out no. That is even worse than devouring others to obtain their power. He CAN'T have that ability, sorry. Other than that, please explain the EXACT size the scythe can grow? It better not be large enough to be able to slice a mountain range in two.

Demonic & Undead Creation Summoner: Because of the demons he's absorbed into him his gained vast unknown abilities. One of them was from killing a demon soul necromancer. Death had the ability so summons demons to attack, amusement or provide something of distaction. However these demons are as strong as him. They can die easily because Death hasn't fully learned this ability. Mental powers wont work on his creatures because of a dark ruby on Death's hand with is like a spawning control system of his creations.

PLEASE EXPLAIN EVERY LAST SUMMON. Explain their weaknesses, their abilities, how many of them can be summoned. Is there any way to bypass the anti mental-control ability? (Even if mind contol is a banned power on this site.)

In short.

HE THE SAME CHARACTER I have he's in the inactive character I may add

>My face when the app is gone

~Archived~