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[Spirit Class 6 | Hazard E] Sabertooth Striker
Sun Apr 03, 2022 3:18 am
THE HOLLOW TEMPLATE
Enter The Hollow
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I. Basic Information
» Name: Sabertooth Striker
» Age: 4 months since death
» Gender: Female
» Race: Evolved Hollow
» Association: None
» Appearance Written: Sabertooth Striker is a large white hollow with an appearance that strikes something of a mix between a dragon and a sabertooth tiger. With a large body clocking in at around 6 meters in from tail to snout when fully puffed up, she generally cuts an imposing sight. Generally moving around on all fours, her forward limbs are a halfway between massive clawed paws and leathery wings. She has a long tail which alone is a solid three meters in length. Both the tail and the ends of the wings end in long spiky protrusions.
Her fur is a mix between true fur and hard scaly exterior, making her exterior shell seem both thick AND dangerous as it tends to form small dark spikes along her frame. Most notable is the feline visage complete with a gristly mask. Many presume that the long saberteeth are a part of the mask, but they are in fact a part of her skull rather than the mask itself despite appearing to be fused together. Her hollow hole is located through the navel just above the pelvic bone. When she flattens her fur, she becomes incredibly sleek and almost looking starved.
Since becomming a Menos Grande, some of Saber's more feline features have diminished and warped. Her fangs shrinking in size and a pair of large curling horns having frown from her skull as a result of the mix of souls in her body. She is now a towering 20 meters in height and shrouded in a large black cloak, though her thick, spiked hide is visible through it. She is rather small for a Gillian, and her Mask retains it's unique appearance as a symbol that Saber, or rather the mix and mesh of dominant consciousnesses inside of her, retain some semblance of sanity and cognizance.
II. Personality
» Personality:
Careful and Cunning. Originally a rather warm and optimistic woman, Sabertooth has learned nothing but caution and underhanded survival. Because of this, she has adopted a rather friendly and slyness to how she conducts herself. Often hunting particularly strong and spiritually aware humans and coercing them into putting their friends and loved ones into situations to be killed and eaten before ultimately devouring them as well.
This cruelty and lack of empathy has earned her a slight reputation among other hollows and earned her the nickname Sweet-tooth Striker. Beyond just her hunting tactics, Sabertooth is the sort of hollow that will be more vocal in altercations with enemies. Often feigning and putting on an air of innocence and fear and panic, playing the act of a victim who is merely struggling with their new hollow lifestyle. This tactic is generally used to lower the guards of others so that she can land a killing or crippling blow. Because of this, she often practices this tactic by striking up conversations with weak or unappetizing humans in an effort to hone her powers of deception and coercion.
Since becoming a Gillian, Sabertooth's personality has shifted slightly. While she retained much of her personality of caution and cunning, she has become much more aggressive. This is a combination of her newfound hunger at evolving, as well as from being affected by other souls fighting for control. While Sabertooth remains the dominant soul, se is not the same as she once was, as though some of the stronger competition have been mixed in.
III. History
» History:
Originally a young woman named Aya Yuna who had been born in Egypt before her Family moved to India. She grew to an adult and then traveled to Laos in order to study the Natives that survived in such a hostile environment with so many hollows. Unfortunately for her, she was severely unequipped to the task. After four months of struggling to survive and losing her phone during a hollow attack, Aya found herself taken in by a local village. It was there that she would suffer her death. With a group of larger hollows attacking the village and managing to slaughter most of those there, Aya was bitten in half by a large turtle-like Hollow before it was drawn by the scent of a nearby quincy.
As such, Aya was left, half-devoured and on dying. After the loss of her life, she became a corrupted plus. Having been infected by the hollow's Acidic touch, her spirit was damaged and was unable to retain it's form for very long. Within a few days, her chain of fate, tattered as it was, completely eroded and she hollowfied. The following three months were an absolute blur. Nothing but hatred, confusion, and sheer unadulterated hunger suffusing every thought in her mind. In those brief moments of lucidity she found herself wishing she simply hadn't. As she would find herself with some person in her mouth, either screaming or already dead.
When at last some semblance of Sanity returned to her, she found herself in a monstrous form and burdened with incredibly hunger, hunched over the bodies of countless hollows and a single shinigami that lay dead and half-devoured at her feet.
With this new existence, she found a new clarity. Watching her fellow hollow brethren being mowed down by local fighters, Sabertooth learned to use Garganta to hunt and even began developing her own innate hollow abilities in order to hunt carefully and with stealthily. She didn't understand her new existence, but she'd be damned if she was gonna die before she could sate this horrible hunger.
IV. Equipment
» Equipment:
V. Racial Techniques/Abilities/Skills
» Racial Abilities:
Acidic Touch:
Sabertooth's body exudes the same acidic touch that most hollows display, though hers is concentrated into her claws and claws. Rather than simply burning on touch, the acid touch is focused more on corrupting targets with her Reiryoku, causing debilitating damage to the limb or localized area of the point of contact, crippling targets rather than simply burning them.
VI. Powers
» Hollow Power:
Encantadora De Agua (Water Charmer)
Striker's core Hollow Power: the ability to manipulate water. At present, this ability has expressed in niche abilities such as her Water Veil and Flow granting her very unique abilities. Thanks to her increase in power, Sabertooth has extensive mastery over water around her (Within 25 meters, though it can be flung up to 50 meters) manipulating it with speed and strength equal to her Power Control. Additionally, thanks to her increase in power, she is also capable of producing water, up to 1 tonne (1000kg or about 260 gallons) of water per post.
Velo De Agua ( Water Veil):
Striker's special ability , creating a thin special film of water secreted from her body infused with her Reiryoku. This veil renders her almost completely invisible to the naked eye by bending light that passes through the water around her. This veil is potent in what it does, but not infallible, as it causes a shimmer around her frame that can still give away her general position. Additionally, while this ability is a near perfect visual veil, this ability does not shield any other senses from tracking her.
Cura de Oasis (Cure of the Oasis):
Striker's special physiology is capable of converting water she comes into contact with to sustain and fuel her body, allowing her to double the speed of her healing and recovery from negative effects while she is in contact with a water source. This also halves the energy drain of recovering while in contact with a water source (A water source is any body of water with volume at least equal to her body's volume).
Thanks to her increased control, Saber is capable of pumping energy into the water she herself produces and concentrating her healing abilities on one particular area of her body (An area no greater than 25% of her mass) to instantly heal the focus area. This ability has a 3 post cooldown, during which Saber will not be able to regenerate.
Flujo (Flow):
Striker's ability to partially liquefy her organs, allowing her to compress her body to incredibly thin dimensions allowing her to easily slip through spaces 1/5th her size.
Thanks to the liquid pressure buildup and the drop in mass thanks to how large she is, doing this causes her to experience a sudden spike in durability as her mass and reiryoku are compressed creating a powerful layered surface tension which acts in a manner similar to hierro (durability boost scales off her Mask Protection), as well as producing superheated steam to escape her body burning her immediate surroundings in a 5 meter radius. She can sustain this for up to 3 posts before needing to expand back to her normal size, and incurring a 4 post cooldown on compressing herself regardless for how long she was compressed.
I. Skill Sheet
General Skills
- Durability: Adept
- General Speed: Advanced
- Strength: Adept
- Martial Skill: Adept
Hollow Skills
- Evolution Stage: Advanced
- Hollow Power: Advanced
- Mask Protection: Adept
- Cero: Beginner
Will Skills
- Willpower/Determination: Adept
- Mental Deduction: Adept
- Focus: Adept
VIII. Role Play Sample
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Re: [Spirit Class 6 | Hazard E] Sabertooth Striker
Thu Apr 07, 2022 1:28 am
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Mental Deduction: If she's just smarter than your average hollow, she wouldn't be Advanced. She'd be Beginner. The average hollow is Untrained. Hell, most of them don't even speak.
Water Veil: Is her ability to refract light or make water? If the first, where does the water come from? Does it already have to exist? If she makes it, why? She doesn't have the power to make water, she has the power to refract light.
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Mental Deduction: If she's just smarter than your average hollow, she wouldn't be Advanced. She'd be Beginner. The average hollow is Untrained. Hell, most of them don't even speak.
Water Veil: Is her ability to refract light or make water? If the first, where does the water come from? Does it already have to exist? If she makes it, why? She doesn't have the power to make water, she has the power to refract light.
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Re: [Spirit Class 6 | Hazard E] Sabertooth Striker
Thu Apr 07, 2022 10:03 am
Water Veil:
Her ability is water based evident by her two other abilities which also revolve around water. But I have fixed the description to make that more obvious that this is simply her main signature move revolving around her water powers.
Mental Deduction:
I really don't see where this "Just smarter than your average hollow" is coming from? I don't see any portion of her history or personality that inclines itself to her only being "A bit smarter than your average hollow"
The only plausible metric I can think of you having possibly used is the fact that she is an Evolved hollow. In which case I would also continue to be perplexed as the examples of Evolved hollows include Metastacia and Grand Fisher. Hell Shrieker would probably only be an upper end Basic Hollow and maybe a lower end Evolved hollow and he was more than capable of formulating plans and deception.
I frankly can CERTAINLY understand that Advanced would be on the high end of things. While I do have a lot of backing and hoped it would be sufficient for Advanced, I could see it being whittled down to adept. But Beginner seems rather lowballed? Everything about her character is keened around her fighting smart rather than directly. She has no direct damage abilities, her abilities are centered around stealth, sneaking through spots, and recovering when she has the chance. Her entire personality is revolving around her deceptive nature and even going out of her way to practice tricking humans when she isn't hungry so that she can hone her abilities of deception. I Really don't think that Adept is out of the question.
If there is some further explanation you can give other than "She's a hollow, therefore she is stupid" I would be very interested in hearing it so that I can address whatever issue or tidbit of my history/personality that I might have overlooked.
Her ability is water based evident by her two other abilities which also revolve around water. But I have fixed the description to make that more obvious that this is simply her main signature move revolving around her water powers.
Mental Deduction:
I really don't see where this "Just smarter than your average hollow" is coming from? I don't see any portion of her history or personality that inclines itself to her only being "A bit smarter than your average hollow"
The only plausible metric I can think of you having possibly used is the fact that she is an Evolved hollow. In which case I would also continue to be perplexed as the examples of Evolved hollows include Metastacia and Grand Fisher. Hell Shrieker would probably only be an upper end Basic Hollow and maybe a lower end Evolved hollow and he was more than capable of formulating plans and deception.
I frankly can CERTAINLY understand that Advanced would be on the high end of things. While I do have a lot of backing and hoped it would be sufficient for Advanced, I could see it being whittled down to adept. But Beginner seems rather lowballed? Everything about her character is keened around her fighting smart rather than directly. She has no direct damage abilities, her abilities are centered around stealth, sneaking through spots, and recovering when she has the chance. Her entire personality is revolving around her deceptive nature and even going out of her way to practice tricking humans when she isn't hungry so that she can hone her abilities of deception. I Really don't think that Adept is out of the question.
If there is some further explanation you can give other than "She's a hollow, therefore she is stupid" I would be very interested in hearing it so that I can address whatever issue or tidbit of my history/personality that I might have overlooked.
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Re: [Spirit Class 6 | Hazard E] Sabertooth Striker
Thu Apr 14, 2022 12:17 pm
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As far as the abilities go, they are fine as is. Do note, however, that with no blatant section of water manipulation, outside of the applications written in the app the character cannot manipulate water in a freeform manner.
When it comes to Mental Deduction, via the written descriptions of Advanced Mental Deduction, it is reached through accumulated experience. Being 4 months old and having a small history, I don't think she has enough to show having gained this level of experience nor can I in good faith give this to the app as it is written.
That being said, per the hollow write up, the example given, Fishbone D, did not talk. Most fodder hollows from prior to the Rukia arc, did not talk outside of Grand Fisher and the Bird Hollow. Gillians don't talk and don't even show any form of agency or personality, to the point that they are easily controlled by any Arrancar. I'm not here to argue with you about this, but if you want more examples of where this grading came from, here you go.
And you're right: she isn't written to be smarter than an average hollow, there's no clear distinction between her and the average hollow. Developing hollow powers doesn't really require much Mental Deduction in the first place. So, I'm doubling down on the Beginner Mental Deduction ruling.
Grading will not be finished unless more is given to justify anything higher than Beginner or it is changed.
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As far as the abilities go, they are fine as is. Do note, however, that with no blatant section of water manipulation, outside of the applications written in the app the character cannot manipulate water in a freeform manner.
When it comes to Mental Deduction, via the written descriptions of Advanced Mental Deduction, it is reached through accumulated experience. Being 4 months old and having a small history, I don't think she has enough to show having gained this level of experience nor can I in good faith give this to the app as it is written.
That being said, per the hollow write up, the example given, Fishbone D, did not talk. Most fodder hollows from prior to the Rukia arc, did not talk outside of Grand Fisher and the Bird Hollow. Gillians don't talk and don't even show any form of agency or personality, to the point that they are easily controlled by any Arrancar. I'm not here to argue with you about this, but if you want more examples of where this grading came from, here you go.
And you're right: she isn't written to be smarter than an average hollow, there's no clear distinction between her and the average hollow. Developing hollow powers doesn't really require much Mental Deduction in the first place. So, I'm doubling down on the Beginner Mental Deduction ruling.
Grading will not be finished unless more is given to justify anything higher than Beginner or it is changed.
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Re: [Spirit Class 6 | Hazard E] Sabertooth Striker
Thu Apr 14, 2022 1:01 pm
Thank you for the catch, Added a Core Ability for water manipulation.
I didn't know experience was also a big part of the skill, hmmm. Fair enough, its been dropped down to beginner.
I didn't know experience was also a big part of the skill, hmmm. Fair enough, its been dropped down to beginner.
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Re: [Spirit Class 6 | Hazard E] Sabertooth Striker
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Re: [Spirit Class 6 | Hazard E] Sabertooth Striker
Thu May 05, 2022 7:50 pm
https://www.platinumhearts.net/t22998-spring-2022-burst-claim#157370
General Speed: Beginner-> Adept
General Speed: Beginner-> Adept
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Re: [Spirit Class 6 | Hazard E] Sabertooth Striker
Tue May 17, 2022 10:17 am
https://www.platinumhearts.net/t23015-2022-golden-week-burst-claim#157492
General Speed: Adept -> Advanced
Strength: Beginner -> Adept
General Speed: Adept -> Advanced
Strength: Beginner -> Adept
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Re: [Spirit Class 6 | Hazard E] Sabertooth Striker
Mon Oct 31, 2022 3:24 pm
https://www.platinumhearts.net/t23394-2022-spookyburst-claim#161820
Spookyburst 2022
Hollow Power: Adept -> Advanced
Tier: 5-1 -> 4-4
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Hollow Power: Adept -> Advanced
Tier: 5-1 -> 4-4
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Re: [Spirit Class 6 | Hazard E] Sabertooth Striker
Tue Jan 24, 2023 5:49 pm
https://www.platinumhearts.net/t23615-ceros-to-menos-saber-upgrade
Appearance/personality update
Mental Stat Regrade
4-4 -> 3-5
Evolution Stage: Adept -> Advanced
Martial Skills: Beginner-> Adept
Upgraded
Encantadora De Agua (Water Charmer)
Velo De Agua ( Water Veil)
Cura de Oasis (Cure of the Oasis)
Flujo (Flow)
Appearance/personality update
Mental Stat Regrade
4-4 -> 3-5
Evolution Stage: Adept -> Advanced
Martial Skills: Beginner-> Adept
Upgraded
Encantadora De Agua (Water Charmer)
Velo De Agua ( Water Veil)
Cura de Oasis (Cure of the Oasis)
Flujo (Flow)
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