Khun Tuto

Sun 27 Feb 2011, 11:15

Quincy Template

General Information

Name:Khun Tuto
Age: 13
Gender: Male

Overall Appearance

Personality:
Khun is very energetic kid who likes to play with people and just have fun. But things changes when he goes in combat he is still energetic like he was but he is a lot more serious. Khun can be cocky and really mean at sometimes. People, barely want to hang out with him cause of this. He just gets to hyper and cocky which becomes a annoyance to people he hands out with. Sometimes, Tuto can be very nice and clam when he needs to be.

Since he is ADHD and Dyslexia he takes pills to stop him from being hyper. He is also known as "Bruisey White Hair". But if someone calls Khun Tuto this he will get very mad and possible try to kill you,literally kill you. Tuto does not really care for anyone if the call him this anymore. Because when he was a kid he was not treated so he marks on him so the kids called him that. So if he gets in a rampage he will do anything to kill you. This Khun Tuto's Personailty.

Appearance: Khun Tuto Unknown_Quincy_by_Grango17

Height: 5'9"
Weight: 87 pounds

Natural Abilities

Quincy Powers

Quincy Bow Appearance:
Khun Tuto BleachQuincyCrossNecklace

This what his bow looks like but smaller
Quincy Bow Powers:
Just like any other Bows... its a bow and arrow it can only shoot 1 arrow per 9 seconds.

General Skills

Durability: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
General Speed: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Strength: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Weapon Skill: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner

Racial Skills

Marksmanship: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Gintou: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Hirenkyaku: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Reiryoku Absorption & Manipulation: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner

Background/Roleplay Sample

Background:
When Khun Tuto was young he was not treated right. He lived in a poor family,who abused him.

So Khun thought to runaway,he was 10 at this time. But,one day the family did not tell him but he found a cross in a box under his parents bed. Tuto thought to stay but hide it from his parents. He asked everyone he knew what was with this cross but NO-ONE knew what it was! So Khun walked to his parents who were making dinner and showed them. His parents gave him a long speech about this cross before getting to the point. Khun just thought they were stalling him until... he felt a pain in his which then moved to his hand where the cross was and a big elemental type bow appeared. His dad had a Cross just like him.

Khun's parents finally got to the point about what he is. His parents told him that he was a Quincy. Khun did not know what a Quincy was until his parents explained it all. Khun felt really powerful with a new power. He got over his head with power. Hes dad taught him how to shoot the Quincy bow and how to activate it. But, when Khun was 12 which was when 2 years past by he thought running away. Toto thought he could do anything and nothing can stop him. Khun Toto left the house and never to be seen with his parents again. Before he left he took a Quincy Book His father gave him and 2 full things of pills to clam himself down at sometimes. Now 1 year past and hes still out roaming about. What Can happend? We will find out!?

Role Play Sample: ALREADY HAVE 2CANONS!!!!!!!!

Sun 27 Feb 2011, 20:33

Mon 28 Feb 2011, 03:03

Application Checklist

Name [X]
Appropriate Age [X]
Gender [X]
Appearance Present [X]
Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
10 sentences for personality [X]
History is of appropriate length [X]
Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [X]
Powers are described reasonably enough [O]
Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [Omit]
Skills are not filled in [X]
RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) [Omit]
RP Sample is 10 sentences [Omit]

Comments/Notes: Well. Grammatically...the personality and the history could use some work when it comes to spelling, spacing, punctuation and phrasing. The powers also needed to be explained with details so we would know that you understand the powers of a Quincy and the options they have as opposed to Shinigami, Arrancars and Vizards. So, be understanding of what is needed and critique it.

I do assume that it was a first try turn-in rather than a draft or final draft. My best advice (as a fellow writer) is to double-check your work before turning it in while having peers look at it as a draft. That way you would come out more capable rather than something done with twiddling fingers.
Tier: INCOMPLETE