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Shinku Ashikaga [APPROVED, 3-5]
Wed Aug 23, 2017 9:52 pm
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I. Basic Information
» Name: Ashikaga, Shinku
» Alias: Shinku
» Age: 19
» Gender: Male
» Association: none
» Appearance Written:
Shinku is a slender build, male having an average height and a crimson red hair. He always wear a white smile mask having a black U shaped line resembling a rather overrated smile, red lines resembling eyes that are narrowed to slits, and a red Aka (Crimson) kanji on the left cheek of the mask. He is very simple in terms of clothing and does not wear any unique items.
» Appearance Image:
I. Personality
» Personality:
Shinku has a tendency to be very mysterious and is very rare to socialize with his squad mates. He is very determined in getting strong as to his strict discipline in his training. Most people find him snobbish and would only approach him if there is a very important matter they need of him. He is very diligent in doing tasks at hand, is considered the most active and buffed up in doing the job.
He is a very mysterious guy as no one around him ever know him personally. There is a very little story of his past that is known to his friends and he actually secludes himself more frequently than joining the others. He is known to have no actual knowledge of what emotion is and with his mask always worn, no one ever knew how he actually looks like nor what real emotion he actually shows in every situation.
He is always known to finish battle as quickly as possible. He is never seen to play with his opponents. He only considers battle as an obligation to be fulfilled more than anything else but in spite of this, he always prioritize the protection of other people.
When alone, he would often be seen playing with his shamisen (just an ordinary shamisen not his zanpakuto). He is rather fond of music particularly those with a serene melody.
He would very rarely be seen in a crowd rather, he always evade them. He’d rather take even long routes with very few people in it than shortcuts that are very crowded.
I. History
» History:
Flames are everywhere in a small village. People are screaming and a lot of corpses are seen lying on the ground. People are running everywhere being chased by marauders killing every person alive. A young boy can be seen lying unconscious being carried by her mother. The lady carefully finds a route outside the village being very careful not to be found. She was successfull in running deep into the forest but starting to feel very weak and her body slowly becomes numb that he made the boy drink a concoction which awakened the boy. The boy then saw her mother sitting and looked so depressed and weak. He saw blood flowing from her mother's arms and witness an arrow stabbed in his mother's left shoulder. "From here on you'd be by yourself", whispered by her mother as she gasped for air getting for more strength to utter some more words. "I know your a brave boy. Stay alive, look for people who can take care of you. Run away from this place and never come back...and remember that we always lo...." and no more words came from the lady's mouth as she slowly fall to the ground. The boy shook her mother trying to wake her up but to no avail. He wanted to cry but heard footsteps nearing. He silently ran on a bush nearby and hid himself as some bandits came to the corpse of her mother. "I guess that's the last of them!", reported one or the bandits "No one would ever know what we all did here". And so the bandits left the place. The boy just sat with tears falling from his eyes and his face forming a vengeful look against the bandits. Walking away, the boy who was later known by the name Shinku (crimson) lived with the oath of one day, being able to exact revenge with those who killed his family and clanmates.
I. Equipment
» Equipment:
Common Shamisen
Usually tied in his back, Shinku keeps a wooden shamisen that is generally dark maple brown in color with its body covered in white cat skin. It doesn't qualify much as a weapon but with Shinku's expertise in sound and music, he can use his Shamisen to detect any danger around him.
I. Racial Techniques/Abilities/Skills
» Racial Abilities:
Being a music lover, Shinku can have his battle capabilities slightly increased when he hears music while fighting. Being inspired by music, he can hit slightly harder, cast kido skills slightly faster and can sustain more damage, slightly more than his usual endurance.
I. Sealed Powers
» Zanpakutô Name: Tengoku no Shamisen [Heavenly Shamisen]
» Zanpakutô Spirit Appearance:
Tengoku no Shamisen in its spirit appearance resemble that of a japanese shrine maiden with a face that appears to be in her early twenties. She wears a white kimono tied with a red obi. Her long black hair freely falls to her waist, with a pink hairpin that resembles a cherry blossom placed at the left side of her hair, a few inches above her left ear.
» Inner World:
Tengoku no Shamisen's world is seen as a beautiful grassy meadow with a crystal clear lake on its edge. Butterflies frolic around the area where tall sunflowers grow. At the other edge is a thick dark forest that is gloomy in contrast with the meadow's lively appearance.
» Sealed Zanpakutô Appearance:
Tengoku no Shamisen (Heavenly Shamisen) in its sealed state is a common katana with a very thin blade almost resembling that of a rapier. Its hilt is round and is crimson red in color with the kanjis Oto (Sound) embedded in its left and Gei (Art) embedded in its right. It’s handle is white in color with shamisen strings coiled near the hilt and three bells tied in its base.
» Sealed Zanpakutô Power: In its sealed state, when Tengoku no Shamisen clashes with something, it produces a screeching sound that distracts those who hear it making them lose their focus for a while. Shinku, being used to the tune, is no longer affected by it's distracting sound.
I. Shikai
» Shikai Release Phrase: “Blow your enemies out of your way, Make them regret they ever heard you play” (Anata no hōhō no anata no teki o fukitobasu, Karera wa kōkai suru yō ni, karera wa kore made anata ga ensō o kii)
» Shikai Appearance:
In it's released state, Tengoku no Shamisen resembles Shamisen with white dō (shamisen body), sao (shamisen neck) and koma (shamisen bridge) and crimson red strings. Three golden bells are attached to the end of the dō adding extra tunes as the shamisen is being played.
» Shikai Abilities:
1st Melody: Kiyari Kuzushi (Kiyari Break)
Shinku plays a moderate tempo tune which boosts the flow of his reiatsu, allowing his skills to deal a half, more than their usual damage. The boost can only last a couple of minutes (3 posts).
2nd Melody: Kaze no kyōfū (Gales of Wind)
Shinku plays a rather playful tune summoning the spirit of Fujin. The summoned spirit then unleashes a violent wind traveling with the speed of almost 300 miles per hour, blowing whatever is caught in its path. The raging wind travels in a straight path, forming a one meter radius dealing light physical damage to a single target and pushing it back about 5 meters backward.
3rd Melody: Arashi (Tempest)
Shinku plays a dance tune summoning the spirit of Raijin. The summoned spirit then unleashes a bolt of lightning toward his enemy.
The lightning travels a straight path and deals deals moderate shock damage should it hit an enemy.
4th Melody: Melody of Seeking
As Shinku plays his shamisen, its sound mixes with his reiatsu. The sound permeates even through walls and even through sound proof seals thanks to the kido that allows his melody to ignore any barrier. The melody reaches up to a radius of 50 meters away from him, making the user aware of every object, creature, movement, anything within the area through a sonar like sense that is being projected back by the sound that he created. Through this ability, the user can easily map an area, detect hidden presence around him, sense every soul or living creature around him within the scope of his melody and even killing intents through the sound of their heartbeat.
I. Bankai
Kamigami no Shamisen (Shamisen of gods)
» Bankai Appearance:
Kamigami no Shamisen (Shamisen of gods) is distinguished by golden dusts spectacled all throughout the shamisen’s dō and sao. The strings then turns silver making shamisen very noticeably shiny when casted by a light. There is no noticeable change in the bankai’s size but once played produces a more vibrant tone than what the shikai state can produce and thus significantly increasing the power of all the melodies Shinku play by it.
» Bankai Abilities:
4th Melody: Iwaki (Rocky Castle)
Shinku plays a rather profound melody creating a rocky fortress, imprisoning Shinku within a 2 meter radius around him. The fortress serves as a defensive structure, protecting Shinku from any attack for 2 posts. The fortress can however, be destroyed by a single powerful attack.
5th Melody: Yuki (Snow)
Shinku plays a serene melody affecting the weather making it unleash a fierce snow storm covering a 10 meter radius, slowing and dealing heavy damage to those caught within the skill radius. It takes about half a minute (4 posts) to complete the spell and can be stopped when the user is distracted through any attack.
6th Melody: Shin Bushi (True Samurai)
Shinku plays a rather noble tone making his shamisen transform into dual swords both similar to his zanpakuto's sheathed form but with spectacles of gold. At this state, Shinku is able to move faster and react faster than usual.
I. Shikokai
[NOTE: This form is restricted until 0-3, and is not usually granted upon approval. This is ONLY for pureblood Shinigami! Refer to the racial specs for more information]
» Shikokai Abilities: [What abilities does your Shinigami attain in Shikokai?]
I. Skill Sheet
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Skill Sheet
General Skills
- Durability: Beginner
- General Speed: Adept
- Strength: Beginner
- Weapon Skill: Adept
Racial Skills
- Hoho: Adept
- Kidō: Beginner
- Zanjutsu: Adept
- Hakuda: Beginner
Will Skills
- Willpower: Beginner
- Mental Deduction: Beginner
- Pain Endurance: Beginner
- Focus: Adept
I. Role Play Sample
» Roleplay Sample:
From a barren wasteland, the world around him suddenly turned into a dark empty meadow with a beautiful forest in sight. The sound of light bells, similar to wind chimes being played upon by the candid winds fill the air around him, reaching through his ears.
".. this meadow is usually sunny..."
That voice, it was the beautiful voice of the lady that spoke to him earlier.
"...Only in times of great Distress, or confusion, do these fields grow dark with nightfall..."
"...I am named for this meadow...It is a Heaven of sorts..."
'Heaven(Tengoku)...isn't that what this creature called her earlier?'
'Tengoku, that's your name isn't it?' He spoke in his mind hoping that she, who spoke through his mind could hear him in his thought.
But 'tis not the time to wait for an answer for miraculously, his senses came back to him just in time as he felt the blade through the wind rushing to his neck.
"This is not the time to hold back" Quickly, he disappeared as if already adept in using the Flash Steps and appeared at the back of the creature slightly above it attacking in a downward slashing motion aiming at the creature's head.
"I'm sorry pal, but I have lot's of questions that need answering. And I figured that I would get what I need if you would disappear!"
The ever empty and cold heart of his emerged through his action, sacrificing whatever he needs to, in exchange of what he needs.
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Re: Shinku Ashikaga [APPROVED, 3-5]
Sun Aug 27, 2017 8:33 am
[mod]There needs to be a few changes before this can be approved:
This is a little strong to be used outside of a release. Please move it to Shikai or Bankai.
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Melody of Seeking
As Shinku plays his shamisen, its sound mixes with his reiatsu. The sound permeates even through walls and even through sound proof seals thanks to the kido that allows his melody to ignore any barrier. The melody reaches up to a radius of 50 meters away from him, making the user aware of every object, creature, movement, anything within the area through a sonar like sense that is being projected back by the sound that he created. Through this ability, the user can easily map an area, detect hidden presence around him, sense every soul or living creature around him within the scope of his melody and even killing intents through the sound of their heartbeat.
This is a little strong to be used outside of a release. Please move it to Shikai or Bankai.
There needs to be more explanation on what these do and their limits.1st Melody: Kiyari Kuzushi (Kiyari Break)
Shinku plays a moderate tempo tune which boosts the flow of his reiatsu making him able to deal more damage through spirit attacks
2nd Melody: Kaze no kyōfū (Gales of Wind)
Shinku plays a rather playful tune summoning the spirit of Fujin. The summoned spirit then unleashes a violent wind traveling with the speed of almost 300 miles per hour, blowing everything in its path.
3rd Melody: Arashi (Tempest)
Shinku plays a dance tune summoning the spirit of Raijin. The summoned spirit then unleashes bolts of lightning to his enemy
Both of these are far too strong. Both are reading as absolute powers—meaning they cannot be stopped, avoided, or countered.4th Melody: Iwaki (Rocky Castle)
Shinku plays a rather profound melody creating a rocky fortress imprisoning both Shinku and everyone within 1 mile radius around him. All opponents he has inside the fortress has both their physical and spiritual strength significantly decreased to half their original.
5th Melody: Yuki (Snow)
Shinku plays a serene melody affecting the weather making it unleash a fierce snow storm covering a 1 mile radius freezing everything within.
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Re: Shinku Ashikaga [APPROVED, 3-5]
Sun Aug 27, 2017 11:25 pm
App edited. hope I did it right.
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Re: Shinku Ashikaga [APPROVED, 3-5]
Sat Sep 02, 2017 8:34 pm
[mod]There are a few further issues.
Both of these need the real-time converted to posts. The closest equivalent would be about 4 posts.
And lastly, do not fill in your skill sheet. Your tier (and any potential approval notes) will determine what you can have as your skills. Upon approval, you will be given your Will Skill sheet.
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1st Melody: Kiyari Kuzushi (Kiyari Break)
Shinku plays a moderate tempo tune which boosts the flow of his reiatsu, allowing his skills to deal more damage than usual. The skill takes about half a minute to be completed and can be easily stopped once Shinku is distracted by any attack.
5th Melody: Yuki (Snow)
Shinku plays a serene melody affecting the weather making it unleash a fierce snow storm covering a 10 meter radius, slowing and dealing heavy damage to those caught within the skill radius. It takes about half a minute to complete the spell and can be stopped when the user is distracted through any attack.
Both of these need the real-time converted to posts. The closest equivalent would be about 4 posts.
This reads as an absolute ability. Can the rock be broken, or is it completely immune to damage? If it's the former, it should only last against a single attack.4th Melody: Iwaki (Rocky Castle)
Shinku plays a rather profound melody creating a rocky fortress, imprisoning Shinku within a 2 meter radius around him. The fortress serves as a defensive structure, protecting Shinku from any attack for 2 posts.
And lastly, do not fill in your skill sheet. Your tier (and any potential approval notes) will determine what you can have as your skills. Upon approval, you will be given your Will Skill sheet.
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Re: Shinku Ashikaga [APPROVED, 3-5]
Sun Sep 03, 2017 1:48 am
fixed!
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Re: Shinku Ashikaga [APPROVED, 3-5]
Wed Sep 06, 2017 12:17 am
Application Checklist
- Name [X]
- Appropriate Age [X]
- Gender [X]
- Appearance Present [X]
- Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
- Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
- 10 sentences for personality [X]
- History is of appropriate length [X]
- Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [X]
- Powers are described reasonably enough [X]
- Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
- Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[X]
- RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) [X]
- RP Sample is 10 sentences [X]
Will Skills
- Willpower/Determination: Beginner
- Mental Deduction: Beginner
- Pain Endurance: Beginner
- Focus: Adept
Comments/Notes: Everything has been fixed!
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