Momoka's Custom kido

Sat Jan 23, 2016 8:26 am

Custom Kidou

Name: Thunderfall

Type: Hadō

Number: 25

Effects: Forms a cloud above a target and from that cloud a lightning bolt strikes the target. The lightning bolt will either rip through the target if they're weak enough or stun them for a brief moment and the electricity damages the targets nerves making them more sluggish for a few minutes. The stronger the target the more likely they'll resist nerve damage and being stunned. (EG: a tier 3-5 cannot stun a tier 2-1)

Incantation: Strike with the fury of the heavens and rend thy enemies flesh.

Notes:

Sat Jan 23, 2016 5:44 pm

This seems approvable with just a few, small modifications. For one, since it's a kido, it needs to be from reiatsu, so adding in that the lightning bolt is made of spiritual energy is important. Along with t hat, there should be a bit more of a definite term for how the bolt works. Essentially, I'm asking for more details. Saying that the bolt is entirely based on tier negates the fact that there are skills and such. If the bolt strikes and a person doesn't have a good enough defense to defend, then I think it should have a base stun for a single post is the target is a full tier underneath, if they're equal or higher, then it could be a slow to deduce a tier from their speed skill. This is an ability that seems fine, just needs a bit more description, so add what you think is good in and it should be fine. Remember, this isn't magic, but a shinigami using spiritual energy to create an effect.

Wed Nov 23, 2016 12:34 am

[adm]Need to know what is going on here with this in the next three days, or I'll be putting it in the archives.[/adm]

Wed Apr 19, 2017 11:15 pm

[mod]Was gonna archive, but you returned so I'll post here as a reminder that you still have this @Kazerou . Any intentions on working over this again? Post in here in the next week to update us,
or I'll have to go through with its archival.[/mod]