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HIZAZEL'S UPGRADE SHEET
Mon Nov 10, 2014 2:56 am
- Name Of Character: HIZAEL SIMMONS
- Link To Character Profile: https://www.platinumhearts.net/t11830-hizazel-simmonsapproved-4-5
- Reasons For Upgradinghttps://www.platinumhearts.net/t12848p10-summoning-the-9-rings-of-hell-trainingsolo#82147
What Are You Upgrading: SKILLS AND TIER
TIER: (4-5) - (3-3)
SKILLS:
FRICTION FIRE:
FRICTION FIRE IS A FIRE THAT GETS STRONGER AS IT MOVES THROUGH SUBSTANCES. IT ALSO CARRIES A STATIC CHARGE THAT CAN CAUSE PARALYSIS TOWARDS IT'S VICTIM IF CONTACT IS MADE.
FOCUS-
NOR STREAM IS THE MANIFESTATION OF HIZAZEL'S CONFLICTING FEELINGS WITH HOLLOW'S. THOUGH HE FOR THE MOST PART DOESN'T LIKE THEM AND GOES AS FAR TO SAY AS TO FEAR THEM, PARTS OF HIM DO FEEL OTHER WAYS TOWARDS THEM AND BECAUSE OF THIS HE HAS SEVERAL EMOTIONS THAT CLASH AT ONCE.
ONCE BEATING NOR STREAM AND ACCEPTING THAT PART OF HIM HE'S ABLE TO TAP INTO THE "FRICTION" BETWEEN THE CLASHING EMOTIONS AND USE IT IN UNISON WITH HIS FIRE.
PARALYSIS-
THE PARALYSIS CAN COMPLETELY FREEZE THE MOVEMENTS OF THOSE AT OR BELOW HIZAZEL'S TIER. THOSE STRONGER THAN HIM WILL HAVE IMPARED MOVEMENTS.
GROUND SKATER-
HIZAZEL SENDS FIRE TOWARDS HIS VICTIM ON THE GROUND. AS THE FIRE MOVE FARTHER ACROSS THE GROUND IT GROWS BIGGER AND STAIC ERUPTS FROM IT REACHING FARTHER AND FARTHER OUT AROUND IT. THE FIRE REACHES 450 METERS AND GOES FROM THE SIZE OF A SIDE WALK TO THE SIZE OF A 4 WAY ROAD AS IT MOVES FORWARD. THE STATIC REACHES OUT FROM 4 TO 20 METERS AS THE FIRE MOVES FORWARD.
HE CAN CREATE TWO IN A ROW AND REQUIRES 2 POST COOL DOWN
SYSTEM CRASH-
HIZAZEL RELEASES A LARGE AMOUNT OF FRICTION FIRE INTO THE GROUND AND PUSHES IT OUT 75 METERS AROUND HIM. THE FIRE EXPLODES IN ALL DIRECTIONS VAPORIZING ANYTHING IT TOUCHES AS IT SPREADS OUT. IT ALSO SENDS OUT A LARGE ELECTRICAL DISCHARGE THAT SHORTS OUT ALL ELECTRONICS WITHING 120 METERS AND CAUSES ELECTRIC DAMAGE TO THOSE IT TOUCHES.
ELECTRO ASH:
HIZAZEL CREATES A SWARM OF ASH AROUND HIM THAT'S LACED IN STATIC ELECTRICITY FORMED BY HIS REISHI. HE SENDS THIS ASH TOWARDS HIS OPPONENT. THE ASH ITSELF CAN BURN THE OPPONENT AND AS THEY MOVE FORWARD THEY SEND STREAMS OF ELECTRICITY TOWARDS EACH OTHER FORMING A RANDOM LIKE LASER GRID. IF THE ENEMY IS HIT BY ONE OF THESE STREAMS THEY WILL BE ELECTRIFIED AND CAN BE INFLICTED WITH PARALYSIS.
REACHES 100 METERS
1 POST COOL DOWN
NOR STREAM-
HIZAZEL SUMMONS A LARGE AMOUNT OF FIRE AND CONDENSES IT INTO A SPHERE SLIGHTLY BIGGER THAN A BASEBALL. THIS CAUSES THE FIRE TO VIOLENTLY TWIST AROUND ITSELF AND SUMMONS A FRICTION THAT CAN CAUSE GRENADE LIKE EXPLOSIONS WHEN CONTACTIS MADE. HIZAZEL RELEASES THE FRICTION IN SMALL BURSTS ALLOWING HIM TO PARTIALLY AIM THE FRICTIO TOWARDS HIS TARGET.
THE TARGET IS MORE LIKELY TO BE ATTACKED THE MORE THEY'VE BEEN HIT WITH OTHER ATTACKS BY FRICTION FIRE
HIZAZEL HAS 3 POSTS TO RELEASE ALL THE ELECTRICITY FROM THE SPHERE BEFORE IT DISHARGES ON HIM AND EXPLODES SOMETHING SIMILAR TO A MORTAR.
STATIC SHIFT-
HIZAZEL MOVES AT THE SPEED OF LIGHT AND LEAVES A STATIC FILLED AFTER IMAGE OF HIMSELF IN HIS PREVIOUS POSITION. WHEN CONTACT IS MADE WITH THE IMAGE IT EXPLODES INTO STREAMS OF STATIC ELECTRICITY WITH A 17 METER RADIUS.
DANFIEN-
THIS IS A WEAPON THAT APPEARS IN HIZAZEL'S HAND AS HE FIGHTS. THIS IS A LARGE BLADE THAT REACHES 5 METERS AHEAD OF HIM. THE BLADE HIS SOLID YELLOW EXCEPT FOR THE BLACK HILT THAT CONNECTS TO A BURNNG YELLOW CHAIN THAT COMES FROM HIZAZEL'S CHAIN. DANFIEN TOUGH IT DOESN'T LOOK IT IS THE TEMPERATURE OF THE SUN AND AS HIZAZEL SWINGS IT THE BLADE GETS HOTTER AND REACHES A HEAT THAT CAN ONLY BE MATCHED BY THE HEAT OF 4 SUNS.
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SATAN ADRENILINE:
HIZAZEL IS ENGULFED IN AN ORANGE FLAME THAT TRIPLES ALL OF HIS PHYSICAL SKILLS FROM WHAT THEY ARE AT AT THE MOMENT IT'S USED. IT ALSO RELEASES HIZAZEL FROM FATIGUE.
FOCUS-
NOR BRUTE IS THE MANIFESTATION OF HIZAZEL'S DESIRE TO GET STRONGER. THIS FORM OF HIM WAS CREATED WHEN HE DECIDED TO GO WITH THE MAN WHO TAUGHT HIM TO USE FLASH BURN. BY ENDURING AN IMMENSE AMOUNT OF DAMAGE FROM HIM AND STILL BEING ABLE TO HOLD HIS OWN, IN A SENSE, HIZAZEL GAINED HIS RESPECT AND WAS ALLOWED TO ACCEPT NOR BRUTE, THUS CREATING SATAN ADRENILINE.
MONKEY CRY:
HIZAZEL SCREAMS INTO THE AIRAND EXPELLS A LARGE AMOUNT OF RESHI. THE FORCE BEHIND THIS ATTACK LEVELS BUILDINGS THAT'S AROUND HIM AND CAN SHATTER THE VERY GROUND HE STANDS ON FOR UP TO 200 METERS OUT. THE FORCE OF THE ATTACK WILL PUSH BACK HIS ENEMY BETWEEN 10-250 METERS DEPENDING HOW CLOSE THEY ARE TO HIM AND HOW STRONG THEY'RE FOOTING IS.
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FROST BITE:
THIS IS A BLUE FIRE THAT BURNS SO HOT IT "FREEZES" AND SHATTERS WHATEVER IT TOUCHES.
FOCUS-
NOR GELATORIUS WAS THE EMBODIMENT OF THE LONELYNESS HIZAZEL FEELS. THIS IS A PART OF HIZAZEL MOST PEOPE DON'T SEE. HIZAZEL DOESN'T ENJOY THIS FORM OF HIM AND EVEN AT TIMES TRIED TO SHUN IT AWAY. THIS IS HOW HE FEELS EVERYTIME HE THINKS ABOUT HOLLOWS AND HOW NOBODY WAS THERE TO SAVE HIM, OR EVEN ATTEMPT TO. THIS FEELING CAUSED HIZAZEL TO FEEL AS THOUGH NOBODY TRULY CARED ABOUT HIM AND LEFT A CHILLING FEELING IN HIS SOUL. THIS CHILLING FEELING GREW AS TIME WENT ON AND BECAME NOR FROST. BY FIGHTING AND ACCEPTING THIS PART OF HIM HE WAS ABLE TO TURN HIS LONLINESS INTO A FIRE THAT BURNS HOTTER THAN ANY OF HIS FIRE. BUT THE FIRE WAS MADE FROM HIS LONLINESS AND SO INSTEAD OF BURNING THINGS LIKE IT SHOULD THE FIRE TOOK A REVERSE AFFECT AND FROZE THINGS OVER.
PURLA-
THIS IS THE WEAPON THAT APPEARS WHEN HZAZEL USES FROST BITE. IT IS A 1 METER STEEL BAR WITH A LARGE BLUE SPEAR HEAD AT THE END. THE SPEAR HEAD REACHES OUT 3 METERS ON EACH SIDE AND IS AS THIN AS A SHEET OF PAPER. IF HELD AT THE RIGHT ANGLE IT LOOK AS THOUGH HIZAZEL IS HOLDING NOTHING BUT A STEEL BAR. IT ALSO REACHES 2 METERS OUT FROM THE STEEL BAR.
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PHANTOM TRICK:
A PURPLE THICK FIRE ERUPTS FROM HIZAZEL. THIS FIRE HAS THE ABILITY TO DRAIN ENERGY IF HIZAZEL MAKES CONTACT WITH THE PERSON'S BODY AND ALSO HAS THE ABILITY TO CATCH ATTACKS MADE OF ENERGY OR MANIPULATED BY ENERGY.
EX OF MANIPULATED ATTACK WOULD BE IF HIZAZEL'S OWN FIRE ITSELF.
FOCUS-
NOR FADE IS THE STRAIN HIZAZEL PUTS ON HIMSELF IN ORDER TO KEEP FROM MENTALLY BREAKING DOWN IN FRONT OF THOSE AROUND HIM. WHILE HE WAS FIGHTING THIS FORM OF HE HAD TO OVER COME A STRONG URGE TO GIVE UP ON EVERYTHING. THIS WAS MERELY BECAUSE HE WAS LITERALLY FIGHTING WHAT KEPT HIM TOGETHER MENTALLY IN HIS HEAD. BY RELEASING HIS EMOTIONS AND BEATING NOR FADE HE WAS ABLE TO TAKE HOLD OF A FIRE THAT WAS MADE SPECIFICALLY TO DRAIN THE ENERGY OF THOSE AROUND HIM, LIKE HE DID TO HIMSELF FOR YEARS. ALSO BY ACCEPTING THIS PART OF HIM HIZAZEL WAS ABLE TO RELAX AND LIGHTEN THE EMOTIONAL WEIGHT HE HELD. THIS ALLOWED HIM TO OPEN UP HIS BODY TO A FIGHTING STYLE THAT RELES SOLELY ON HIS REFLEXES. IT ALSO ALLOWED HIM TO TOUCH ENERGY BACKED BY EMOTION AND DRAIN THAT ENERGY AND RELEASE IT INTO THE AIR.
THE DRAIN-
THE FIRE AROUND HIM IS TIED TO THE HISTORY OF IT'S BEING. FOR YEARS HIZAZEL WOULD CONSUME LARGE AMOUNTS OF ENERGY INSIDE OF HIM IN ORDER TO KEEP HIS FEELINGS IN CHECK. BECAUSE OF THIS A SORT OF GATE KEEPER WAS BORN AND ALONG WITH IT A FIRE SPECIFICALLY MADE TO DRAIN ENERGY AND USE IT TO FUEL A SORT OF WALL CREATED IN HIZAZEL'S MIND TO BLOCK OUT UNWANTED EMOTIONS. WHEN HIZAZEL ACCEPTED NOR FADE HE GAINED ACCESS TO THIS FIRE AND IT'S ABILITY TO DRAIN ENERGY.
EMBARASSMENT-
WHEN HIZAZEL IS USING PHANTOM TRICK HE GAINS KNOWLEDGE OF A CERTAIN STYLE OF FIGHTING THAT ALLOWS HIM TO USE HIS OPPONENTS MOMENTUM AND POWER TO FUEL HIS OWN ATTACKS.
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BITTERSWEET BURNING-
THIS FIRE ALLOWS HIZAZEL TO HEAL HIS ALLIES, BUT NOT HE HIMSELF.
SMALL WOUNDS- HALF A POST
MIDDLE WOUNDS- 1 POSTS
LARGE WOUNDS- 1-2 POSTS
GRAVE WOUNDS- 2-2 1/2 POSTS
NEARLY FATAL WOUNDS- 3 POSTS
FATAL WOUNDS-6 POSTS(THE PERSON WHO IS DYING HAS TO HAVE THE DESIRE TO LIVE MORE THAN ANYTHING ELSE AT THE MOMENT HE'S BEING HEALED.
FOCUS-
NOR AID IS ONE OF THE PARTS OF HIZAZEL THAT ACTUALLY HOLDS NO ANGER TOWARDS HOLLOWS. INSTEAD IT HOLDS A DESIRE TO FIGURE OUT WHY THEY DO WHAT THEY DO AND HEAL THEM ONE DAY, IF SUCH A THING IS AT ALL POSSIBLE. ONE COULD SAY THIS IS THE MANIFESTATION OF HIZAZEL'S OPTIMISM FOR HOLLOWS AND HOW THEY COULD BE VICTIMS JUST AS HE WASBY THEM. HIZAZEL HAD TO ACCEPT THIS PART OF HIM IN ORDER TO HARNESS A FIRE MADE TO HEAL OTHERS THAT WERE SEEN AS VICTIMS, HOWEVER HE CAN'T HEAL HIMSELF. HIZAZEL HIMSELF ISN'T SURE WHY.
GAIA-
HIZAZEL GAINS THE ABILITY TO TALK TO THOSE WHO'RE ON THE BRINK OF DEATH. HE'S ALSO ABLE TO SEE HOW THE PEOPLE ON THE BATTLEFIELD ARE DOING FOR UP TOA 20 METER RADIUS AROUND HIM.
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ORIAN:
ORIAN IS A FIRE THAT BURNS WHITE AND ONLY SURROUNDS HIZAZELS HANDS.
FOCUS-
THIS IS THE MANIFESTATION OF HIZAZEL'S DESIRE TO PROTECT THOSE HE FINDS PRECIOUS TO HIM. IN ORDER FOR HIM TO HARNESS THIS FIRE HIZAZEL HAD TO ACCEPT THAT THERE WERE PEOPLE IN HIS LIFE THAT WERE PRECIOUS TO HIM AND THAT THERE WOULD BE MORE AS HIS LIFE CONTINUED ON.
STALINGRAD-
SPHERES OF WHITE FIRE ERUPT FROM HIZAZEL AND FLOAT AROUND HIM IN A ALL DIRECTIONS.
300 SPHERES
250 METER RADIUS
LUJO-
THE SPHERES TURN INTO GIANT PYRAMIDS AND SHOOT TOWARDS HIZAZEL'S ENEMY.
SCUR-
THE SPHERE'S ABSORB HIZAZELS BODY AND ALLOW HIM TO APPEAR ANYWHERE ONE OF THEM IS LOCATED. WHILE MOVING THROUGH THE SPHERE'S HIZAZEL IS SEEN AS A STREAM OF WHITE ENERGY.
SPAR-
HIZAZEL SENDS BLASTS OF HEAT INTO THE SPHERE'S AS ENERGY AND THEY SHOOT OUT THROUGH THE SPHERES RANDOMLY AS THEY CLOSE IN ON THEIR TARGET. HIZAZEL ALSO DOES THIS WHEN HE'S USING SCUR IN ORDER TO MAKE IT HARDER FOR SOMEONE WATCH HIS MOVEMENTS.
SHIELD-
THE FIRE AROUND HIZAZELS LEFT HAND HARDEN INTO A SPHERE OF REISHI. WHEN THE SPHERE MAKES CONTACT WITH SOMETHING IT SENDS OUT A PULSE OF ENERGY THAT PUSHES THROUGH THE OBJECT. THIS CAN CAUSE INTERNAL DAMAGE AS WELL AS EXTERNAL DAMAGE DEPENDING ON THE FORCE BEHIND THE ATTACK AND THE OBJECT HIT.
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SILENT BANG:
THIS IS A FIRE THAT CAUSES LARGE EXPLOSIONS WHEN IT MAKES CONTACT WITH OBJECTS. THE EXPLOSIONS THEMSELVES HAVE NO NOISE BUT THEY DO HAVE A FORCE BEHIND THEM THAT CAN KNOCK DOWN BUILDINGS NEARBY. SILENT BANG APPEARS IN SPHERES IN HIZAZEL'S HANDS THAT HE THROWS AND KICKS. THE SPHERE'S REACH 75 METERS AHEAD OF HIZAZEL AND HAVE A HOMING ABILITY THAT IS ACTIVATED WHEN HIZAZEL IS ABLE TO SENSE ONE'S STRENGTH.
FOCUS-
THIS IS THE EXPLOSIVE RAGE HIZAZEL FEELS AT A MOMENTS NOTICED. THIS RAGE WAS CREATED FROM ALL THE ENCOUNTERS HIZAZEL HAD THAT CAUSED HIM ANGER THAT HE KEPT INSIDE. THIS RAGE FED NOR BURST AND IN TURN ALLOWED HIM TO EVENTUALLY TAKE THE SHAPE OF HIZAZEL INTO ONE OF HIS OWN. BY BEATING AND ACCEPTING HIS RAGE HIZAZEL WAS ABLE TO HARNESS THE RAGE AND FORM SILENT BANG. SILENT BANG IS BASED OFF OF THE SILENT RAGE THAT GREW IN HIZAZEL UP TO THIS POINT IN TIME.
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HARMONY:
THIS ALLOWS HIZAZEL TO RAPIDLY SWITCH FROM ONE FIRE TO ANOTHER DURING A FIGHT GIVING HIM A VERY DIVERSE SET OF MOVES AND COMBINATIONS AT HIS DISPOSAL. THIS ABILITY IS BASED OFF OF THE SPIRITUAL HARMONY HIZAZEL FEELS NOW THAT HE'S ACCEPTED THESE PARTS OF HIMSELF.
- THE THREAD THAT THIS UPGRADE COME FROM ISN'T FINISHED AND ACCEPTING THESE PARTS OF HIM DOESN'T CHANGE HOW HE'D REACT IN CERTAIN SITUATIONS. EX: IF HE SAW A HOLLOW, THOUGH HE'S ACCEPTED THE PARTS OF HIM THAT DON'T THINK THAT HOLLOWS ARE COMPELTLEY EVIL, HE'D STILL FLIP OUT AND GO OVERBOARD WITH HIS POWER AS HE ATTEMPTED TO DESTROY THE CREATURE. (Anything else you want to add?)
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Re: HIZAZEL'S UPGRADE SHEET
Mon Nov 10, 2014 6:13 pm
I will be approving the tier upgrade from 4-5 to 4-2. I will state this before telling you about any issues with your abilities, reading the additional abilities it seems you have a lack of focus, i can tell that the main focus of the powers is fire but you talk about a fire with a thunder like ability. But you bring up an ability like frost bite where the focus of the fire becomes ice then you bring up a healing fire later on, you also bring up phantom trick a fire with the ability to drain and you even have an ability that lets you switch between the types of flames but i don’t understand the main focus and nature of your flames. From my point of view it seems you’re tossing a bunch of ideas together without having much to tie them together. This isn’t a big issue but I’m just letting you be aware so you can find a focus and use that to help guide your character instead of going every where
I think you should lower the distance and power of some of these abilities until you get higher in tier as your writing as if you’re a higher tier character in general.
Can you expand on this a bit more as how strong is the paralysis and up to what can it effect?
friction fire:
friction fire is a fire that gets stronger as it moves through substances. It also carries a static charge that can cause paralysis towards it's victim if contact is made.
How can it burn so hot it freezes? Also what is the range of its freezeing effect and whats its effect when hitting other characters
Frost bite:
this is a blue fire that burns so hot it "freezes" and shatters whatever it touches.
How can his reflexs be as high as other captain and Arrancar? That is determined by combination of tier and skill sheet. Also what gives you the knowledge and how? You have an ability for it yes but what does it derive from yet phantom trick by catch what does it mean and how does it do this? After it catches it does it drain the energy?
Phantom trick:
a purple thick fire erupts from hizazel. This fire has the ability to drain energy if hizazel makes contact with the person's body and also has the ability to catch attacks made of energy or manipulated by energy.
Ex of manipulated attack would be if hizazel's own fire itself.
Embarassment-
when hizazel is using phantom trick he gains knowledge of a certain style of fighting that allows him to use his opponents momentum and power to fuel his own attacks. His relfexes are also up their with captains and arrancar.
I think you should lower the distance and power of some of these abilities until you get higher in tier as your writing as if you’re a higher tier character in general.
Re: HIZAZEL'S UPGRADE SHEET
Fri Jan 02, 2015 12:23 pm
«CHECKING THIS THREAD RIGHT NOW»
Welp, seeing how there was no word from the original poster of this thread, and its been about two months ALMOST, I'll go ahead and move this into archives. If the guy is ready to remake a power upgrade thread for the stuff listed in his original post with the corrections Luda asked? Cool. Fine. You can do that. But this is taking up too much space in WIP upgrades and needs to GO.
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