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Re: Gintama Shiro [APPROVED 3-5]
Mon Jun 16, 2014 9:04 am
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- Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [O]
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Tier: Will Be Given Once Fixed.
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There is not much of a fault in other sections than your powers, so i'll list them out below and see how i crank this bby out, yo'.
About this, how does he going to strike the said 'points'? Does it by touching them? Stab? Chop them? Please be more specific with this, yo'.jetray78 wrote:Pressure Point Intuition: Shiro possesses immense knowledge of pressure points and nerve clusters, and can produce a variety of effects by striking said pressure points in just the right way, ranging from unconsciousness, paralysis, and even death. The only drawback is that this won't work on a person with a higher tier defense than Shiro's tier str. Since when striking these points he uses his hands only. I would say that his hands would be broken if he fought a person with tough body. So it all depends on his strength rather he will be able to even strike the points.
I don't recommend striking pressure point that causes death since that'll be an instant kill since he can just 'lolstrike' the specific pressure point and kill the character. If you are going to cause death by striking a pressure point, get permission from the owner of the character and specify the method of actually striking a pressure point that kills, not to mention if he were ever to achieve 0 tier, he can just kill everyone below his tier.
How long can he induce unconciousness, paralysis and etc after striking the pressure point, how long will it take for the effects to start and if he/she were to be striked at a pressure point, example, paralysis, how is he/she can stop it from taking effect because we don't really want the effects to auto-apply wihout having a method of stopping it if one got strike by Shiro. Specify that.
Be more specific about the tier defense, since if he is a 3 tier with, let's say, advanced strength and there is a 1 tier that has beginner or adept durability. Their gaps in tier is quite big but since he has lower durability, can he strike through his defenses then? Be more specific about the gaps in skill sheets/tiers.
You can't mimic all of existing martial arts, m8. Such as if a character specializes in martial arts and creates his own, you can't simply mimic it as if it is yours after seeing it once or twice. You may need to gain permission from the owner of that specific martial arts and please have a more reasonable drawback than just 'looking' at it. And i prefer if once he learns that specific martial arts [ If he gains permission ], he should start from the beginning until he masters it himself because having someone who just learns martial arts from looking and using them like a master user instantly is a no-no.jetray78 wrote:Martial Arts Intuition:With this ability, Shiro can mimic all existing Martial Arts, using them like the user trained them over years. Users of this ability are even able to be better than the original creators of the Martial Arts. The only draw back to this is that Shiro will have to observe the Marital Arts very closely. Also depending on how it goes, he would have to at least see the Martial Arts twice or more.
Look back about the fix with the Pressure Point Intuition. The same fix is applied to this. Reason? Because the drawback and the specifications of such ability is not detailed and reasonable enough.jetray78 wrote:Praying Mantis style: Praying Mantis is Internally and focuses on staying close to the enemy body and moving around it very fast, and striking points on body that mess up organs,and can do weird stuff like stop the body from doing a action. This is also used as a pushing and pulling and flipping bodies. Strikes are palmed or finger strikes. Drawback is also the same as Pressure Point Intuition.
How long can he let a specific enhancement last? Would he get in a side-effect of using the enhancement/ability too many times or too long? How far can he enhance the specific physical capability? If he is going to switch between the enhancements, example, if he augmented his strength and wants to switch to augmenting his durability, how long does the switch takes for the enhancement to start taking effect?jetray78 wrote:Chi Augmentation: Shiro can channel their own chi through their own body and enhance their physical abilities. Physical abilities such as Strength, speed,reflexes,senses, combat,durability,and agility. The only drawback is that he can only do one at a time. At mastery Shiro could be able to do all of them and gain something called Enhanced Condition.
What does the fire covering do? Does it attack opponents when it gets too close to him? If so, how powerful or how much damage can the flames do?jetray78 wrote:Awakened Powers: Shiro gains the ability to cover specific parts of his body in Fire. The only draw back here is that he cannot cover whole body and the fire covering can only last in the specific spots for only a one post. By the next post he would have to stop using fire and gather more chi. Once he has gathered chi,by the next post he can use fire covering again. Fire covering uses a lot of Chi,but the power is worth it.
Does it protect the user? If so, please specify how powerful of an attack can it block as does it protect that one specific area. Example, if an opponent shoots a wide-area blast like cero, can he block that amount of power and does it keep one part of his body from harm and damage the rest of his parts?
And that's all i can say. The rest can go unless other staffs says so, m8. Now fix 'em and i'll grade it again.
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Re: Gintama Shiro [APPROVED 3-5]
Tue Jun 17, 2014 12:53 am
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- History is of appropriate length [X]
- Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [O]
- Powers are described reasonably enough [O]
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- Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[X]
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JJust a little bit more, yo'
Nothing else with the rest of it. But its hard to keep track of an actual time in a thread, so i prefer if you could have beginner to last 1 post, Adept for 2 posts and etc, because its hard to keep track of 'minutes' on a single thread.jetray78 wrote:If Shiro's chi was at the beginner level and he enhanced one of these physical abilities. it would only take him about 3 min, before having to stop his enhancing. Three min being a whole post. So if he had Adept Chi it will increase to 5 mins, and if he had advanced it would be 10. Master would be 20, and Grand master would be 30. The time remains the same for all ranks tiers, because although you might be grand master with tier 0, and still have chi left, your body will be strained if you surpass time. A switch in one post would have to be split by. Like for example, if Shiro enhanced his speed for the half post and decided to switch to str in the other half, he would still have to stop and rest depending on how long he used them , with also the chi level into effect. For example, if he were to have beginner chi level and decided to switch at first post, he would have to do 2 mins of the half of the post and 1 min at the other half of post.
Otherwise, once its fixed, i'll hit you up with an approval.
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Re: Gintama Shiro [APPROVED 3-5]
Wed Jun 18, 2014 1:39 am
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- Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
- 10 sentences for personality [X]
- History is of appropriate length [X]
- Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [X]
- Powers are described reasonably enough [X]
- Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
- Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[X]
- RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) [X]
- RP Sample is 10 sentences [X]
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- Willpower/Determination: Advanced
- Mental Deduction: Adept
- Pain Endurance: Beginner
- Focus: Advanced
Comments/Notes: All is good unless the other staffs says otherwise.
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Re: Gintama Shiro [APPROVED 3-5]
Sat Sep 06, 2014 2:33 am
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I envy because of the heart.
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