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Ple12
Ple12
Starter Member
Joined : 2014-06-06
Posts : 10

Tisnw Empty Tisnw

Thu Jun 12, 2014 1:09 am
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Name:
Tisnw

Age:
As old as this application is.
(physically 19)

Gender:
Male

Personality:
He is the one of the few sane characters around. He is in fact so sane that other see him as being the most insane character on the site.

His main ability is full awareness of the fourth wall. As such he is constantly making references to characters and events both in and outside the universe he exist (I.E the forum). He will call a character by the name of their RPer, and think nothing of speaking directly to the RPer.

Because of his full awareness of being a character on a forum he shows no fear at all. Characters or situations that others run from he dances around and annoy. This is because he knows he is just an NPC belonging to another character and can thus be summoned back if he is killed.

Appearance
Tisnw Ngbbs490de43fbb50c

Tier:
2-0

What Race:
Human

Brief History:
The official story is that he is a man that suffers from schizophrenia so sever that he has confused the real world for a role play forum. He claims that everyone and everything we see are nothing more then words typed onto an online role playing forum.

Associated Character:
Eleven

Basic Powers:
4th wall breaking: He is fully aware the he and the entire world around him and the characters the inhabit it are all nothing more then words typed on a screen. This leads him to be constantly frustrated as he still has to follow the laws of physics of the world (I.E. the rules of the forum). Because of his awareness of the 4th wall he constantly makes references to lines, characters, and events outside the universe he resides it. This makes him seem completely out of his mind to every one else.


Hayuko
Hayuko
Bearer Of Hell
Joined : 2010-06-20
Posts : 714
Age : 28
Location : United States

Member Info
Platinum Points:
Tisnw Left_bar_bleue15/100Tisnw Empty_bar_bleue  (15/100)
Tiers:

Tisnw Empty Re: Tisnw

Mon Jun 16, 2014 2:47 am
Ple12 wrote:

Age:
As old as this application is.
(physically 19)

Technically that makes him about a day old? While it's okay to keep his age unknown; he can't be as old as this application itself.

Ple12 wrote:Personality:
He is the one of the few sane characters around. He is in fact so sane that other see him as being the most insane character on the site.

His main ability is full awareness of the fourth wall. As such he is constantly making references to characters and events both in and outside the universe he exist (I.E the forum). He will call a character by the name of their RPer, and think nothing of speaking directly to the RPer.

Because of his full awareness of being a character on a forum he shows no fear at all. Characters or situations that others run from he dances around and annoy. This is because he knows he is just an NPC belonging to another character and can thus be summoned back if he is killed.

I see several things wrong with his power, but well leave that for later. His personality doesn't exactly seem very personal? While its okay to be fearless, i somehow doubt that anybody would be okay with just dying; why would they keep living in that case?

How was he like before he had this "Schizophrenia", does he just try to annoy everybody is that his mission in life? It just seems very lacking.

Ple12 wrote:Brief History:
The official story is that he is a man that suffers from schizophrenia so sever that he has confused the real world for a role play forum. He claims that everyone and everything we see are nothing more then words typed onto an online role playing forum.
'

Does he have any history before the schizophrenia?

Ple12 wrote:Basic Powers:
4th wall breaking: He is fully aware the he and the entire world around him and the characters the inhabit it are all nothing more then words typed on a screen. This leads him to be constantly frustrated as he still has to follow the laws of physics of the world (I.E. the rules of the forum). Because of his awareness of the 4th wall he constantly makes references to lines, characters, and events outside the universe he resides it. This makes him seem completely out of his mind to every one else.

This whole ability is a total no, while were all for character with a goofy personality; were here to rp. As well as every character in the realm is concerned, they are their own entity. This won't change, even for the lulz. In what logical way would he know who each individual rper is anyways, this is born from schizophrenia.

How would this ability lead him to be a tier 2 if all he can do is know who the rpers are? As far as i know he's a delusional regular human being and nothing else.

Application Checklist
  • Name [x]
  • Appropriate Age [o]
  • Gender [x]
  • Appearance Present [x]
  • Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [x]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [?]
  • 10 sentences for personality [o]
  • History is of appropriate length [o]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowerd [o]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [o]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [o]
  • RP Sample is 10 sentences [o]


This App is Denied

Because of a character built around ideas that simply cannot be allowed on the site, you will not be allowed to edit him and resubmit him for a second try.

You are MORE THAN WELCOME to try a different approach of a character with a goofy personality, than one that acts goofy because he can break through the "4th wall" We are in an rp site, not a tv show
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