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GENERAL INFORMATION


:biohazard:Name: Beetle 06 Yuudeshi
:biohazard:Title: Beetle Yuudeshi, the 6th of the Main Series, The Opposite Of Nothing, Goddess Of Destruction
:biohazard:Age: Unknown, unspecified
:biohazard:Gender: Female
:biohazard:Affliation/Alignment: Kakine Yuudeshi, The Yuudeshi Clan, Gotei 13
:biohazard:Sexual Orientation: Bisexual
:biohazard:Race: Shinigami

:biohazard:Appearance Picture:
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:biohazard:Appearance Description: ---

PERSONALITY


:biohazard:Energetic & Outgoing: Beetle is a type of woman that is rather active and outgoing in many ways, and prefer to keep her surroundings lively no matter what the situation is, whether would it be social or a combat area, Beetle never seem to fail at livening up situations by putting up a conversation with anyone, enemy or ally. As active as she can be, Beetle is outside most of the time and is rarely seen in Soul Society unless it is urgent or there was a time to spare within the Soul Society, having a thing or two to handle. Otherwise, she is literally everywhere, and can be seen with Kakine if she has the time to tease him and crack jokes as much as she wants to, with a spare time in hand. If you're going to tire her out, make sure to drop her activity first, or you're going to suffer trying to keep her down, because Beetle would keep standing, running and running, from punches to kicks, even if she has not much spiritual energy left, she would rush at you and make sure her opponents are knocked out by fighting barehandedly.

:biohazard:Cool-headed: This is what you can expect from an opposite of Kakine, Beetle doesn't get annoyed too easily, and when it comes to stabbing her with amount of insults or even the biggest shit you can throw at her, Beetle would still keep herself calm and collected, not even the slightest wave of anger physically and mentally. She is a type who would stay calm regardless of the circumstances, and trying to cut off her nerves to break her on the inside is virtually impossible, and when it comes to breaking her emotions and mentality, it is a point where it gets hard. Her strong resolve and reasoning is what builds her cool head, calmness and collectivity when it comes in dealing with emotional manners, whether it would be the death of a comrade or an injured family. Although, there is one warning to be given, that you MUST NOT ever threaten her family, one threatening and you're off into the atlantic ocean in seconds.

:biohazard:Positive: While being able to feel and express negative emotions just like a human, Beetle is an individual that remains positive in any situations, which always fixes her mind and never to break into anger wihout any type of reasons that is needed. Beetle preferrably looks at the positive side rather than the negative side, evenly balancing the two odds and allowing her to think properly wihout inflicting herself with nervousness or fear. Fear is possible for her, but to prevent her thinking ability to run haywire, she keeps herself positively, otherwise, there may be some consequences around her.

BACKGROUND HISTORY


Its hard to describe her history, as in logical means, she has no past at all. The only past that Beetle remembered was that she used to be a fragment of an energy from Kakine's core, the 'fuel' of the CreationConstruction itself that allowed life to flourish with his power, and she was one of the fragments of its energy, and until now, she was 'born' when Kakine created her with his own powers, giving her the life to start exploring the world and opening her eyes to see what was outside of the realm. Never seem to have an actual name, Beetle eventually given herself a name, called 'Beetle 06', Beetle, its own meanings of a tough fighter with a durable outer shell, while 06 represents her number within the CRETS, meaning that she is the 6th Creation in the entire Main Series.

When she was created, Beetle was made along with the rest of the C.R.E.T.S as well, and she was one of them, although much different in a way of appearances, personality and most of all, differences in abilities. Even if their created structures are the same, Beetle are one of the very few C.R.E.T.S that has their own special cases, self-awareness, personality of oneself and so on, a creation that stands out differently from the rest. Not being able to remember the times when she was 'alive', all Beetle ever did was to assure that Kakine is her 'owner', a 'creator', that has given her a purpose in life. This drive and thoughts are what makes her different, giving her conciousness of reality, which allowed her to create her own goals to achieve, purpose to live for and decisions to make herself. Although she wasn't properly introduced to the Yuudeshi Clan, she is considered to be 'one of them' giving the fact she holds their inheritance and energy after being made by Kakine, who is a Yuudeshi himself, she was more or less like a family member of the Yuudeshi Clan as well.

Born and created as a shinigami, she was assigned to the Gotei 13 for further analysis of her abilities, and her DestructionDeconstruction ability was first discovered when she tried to grip a wooden sword, while learning Zanjutsu, and oddly, it was split apart when she gripped it too tightly. It was first a mishap, thinking that it may be a broken sword from the beginning, but each wooden sword she held was split again and again, and thinking back, she had this 'power' since her creation, putting her in a different league than the rest of the CRETS, while Kakine had CreationConstruction, she might have the opposite of it, DestructionDeconstruction, an ability passed down from her creator and it may be the dark side of Kakine's actual power as well, and eventually, Beetle began picking up the aspects of her ability and finally getting herself into hand-to-hand combat, since her ability relies on physical contact.

Not much to speak of about her history, she was nonetheless only a year or two since she was first created by Kakine. But it seems that Beetle was a rather fast learner herself despite herself being an embodiment of Kakine's power, Beetle herself has her own conciousness and mind to develope and think. Otherwise, her journey starts from here, only to reveal more mysteries about her own power and the true nature of the world itself.

NATURAL ATTRIBUTES


:biohazard:Expert Hand-to-Hand Combatant: The only attribute that Beetle seems to have was always hand-to-hand, whenever and wherever she goes, she always seems to prefer to fight with hands rather than a sword, and never had much of an ability of using weapons. Definitely, she can't handle weapons well. Because the nature of her ability that allows her to deconstruct anything as long as it is under her power, Beetle became a rather proficient hand-to-hand fighter, whether would it be hundreds or thousands of people, or raining down a bullet of energy, she always has a way to try and get past it with as little wound as possible. She might not be able to draw out her sword for combat, but she could punch the daylights out of you. Make sure you're skilled enough to deal with her, or she might try to have you go down before one gets to blink for a second.

:biohazard:Inhuman Strength: As the ability states, Beetle possesses strength beyond any other human, and even for her small stature, her body packs enough punch to break apart ribs that is reinforced or enhanced spiritually, that is, in normal cases wihout an influence from the 'network'. Her strength makes up what she lacks, speed. Unlike Kakine's speed that becomes faster overtime when influenced by the Yuudeshi Network, hers doesn't require any sort of external influence and relies mainly on the CRETS Network, a special link of brainwave network established by the 25 creations including herself, and because of the established network, Beetle can forcefully draw out more power and further increase her strength by draining spiritual energy from the 25 creations through the network and boosts herself further, if its used in strength aspects, and one of the very few Main Series that can use it at her own will, drawing power if needed.

› 20% Influence: Her strength would increase beyond normal, and there would be a slight hint of spiritual particles, glowing blue, across her arms and legs. Her blows would be beyond the average strength she possesses, enough to wipe out a building completely into dusts with a wave of her hand wihout the use of DD [ DestructionDeconstruction ] but her body would be more vulnerable of being damaged because of her unstable body since she is not a 'complete' being like Kakine.

› 50% Influence: By taking up half of the CRETS Network's power, it becomes a point where her strength would become beyond belief, her spiritual power would become visibly as her arms and legs can be visibly covered in blue spiritual energy. A single blow from Beetle is enough for her to rip a mountain to pieces wihout a sweat, and does not require any usage of DD. Though, her body's durability would further go down to a line where the damage she receives would be 2 times greater than normal, such as a damage that suppose to leave a 'small scratch' on her would burst into a wound.

› 80% Influence: Having her to reach at such potential is enough to drop a jaw or two against her fighters. Her strength would further increase, and such levels is enough for her to split up a small portion of an area, such as Karakura Forest, into two wihout an effort required. Instead of her arms and legs, Beetle's entire body would be engulfed by a considerable amount of spiritual energy, glowing in blue and her spiritual power is enough to induce suffocation to her victims just by getting close to her, if low enough tier. At this point, she can endure much more damage, just like having her Pain Endurance level increased, at least by one while her durability further drops down, in return, she receives more damage than usual, turning mere scratches into larger wounds.

› 100% Influence: The full power of the CRETS Network, and because of the instability of her body, there are chances that reaching a 100% influence would fail, but the chances are vary. But if she enters the state of 100% influence from the Network, her strength becomes so monstrous that she wouldn't require the DD anymore, a level enough for her fist to puncture through multiple Cero Oscuras and potentially destroying them, with a single punch and only a burn on her knuckles. Her body would be engulfed with blue spiritual power, fiercefully bursting upwards with energy and ripping apart the pebbles by the increase in power because of the CRETS Network, and completely using all the power and energy left within the Network itself, which would boost her power to the top and enough to make even lieutenants themselves to shiver in fear. However, the price paid for such an increase in power is that there are chances that the state that she enters are only for a single moment and be inflicted with hundreds of wounds because the instability of her body. Although IF she successfully goes through the entire process, her body's durability would suddenly increase, going through the opposite effect of the previous influences and it would be hard even for normal ceros shot by a Menos to pierce through it. The moment the influence is deactivated, her body would become drained, so weak that it would be tough to move a finger, not to mention standing up. It is estimated to last between 1 to 3 posts, due to the unstability of Beetle's body.

:biohazard:High Intellect: Not as smart as Kakine does, but her brain provides enough power to match itself against a supercomputer. Her intelligence allows her to create logical reasons, rebuilding concepts, analyzing datas, understanding them. Although, the main aspects her intelligence goes for is science, mainly physics and biology, since such aspects are important to her power that uses her supplies to take away the life of a concept, something that has life and is given one, and her ability gives her the potential to take that away from an object, an energy, anything possible that has life. Beetle isn't a genius just like Kakine but enough to provide a 'reason' that allows the usage of her powers and allowing it to exist within the form of the unknown itself.

SUPERNATURAL ATTRIBUTES


:biohazard:DestructionDeconstruction:
The ability that Beetle possesses is called DestructionDeconstruction and just like Kakine's, this is her main power as well. We can call it, the opposite of Kakine's CreationConstruction, while he is able to create anything out of nothing with his powers, in Beetle's case, she is able to deconstruct anything, whether it would be the unseen forces like gravity, molecules, gas, friction, momentum, physical force or other things like energy, elements, objects like swords and spear or buildings, it is almost an extreme feats of performance which her CreationDeconstruction can do in her everyday lives, and sometimes, it is used rather commonly in most social or combats depsite its ability to be able to deconstruct things only, but it has its own merits.

From the tip to toe, it is a power that is hard to comprehend, to be understood or researched in its ability to deconstruct anything that Beetle wills to, no matter how great one may be. The DestructionDeconstruction, under a theory, it represents the opposite coin of Kakine's true nature. While Kakine may be an angelic being and kind at heart, the ability of hers acts as the negativity of its creator, thus the ability spawned within her conciousness and body the moment she was created by Kakine's powers. For Beetle, this ability is a natural gift, and are naturally understood and acknowledged of, where even herself do not know where and how did she obtained it and how did the knowledge of it flows across her mind and body, and so, it became an ability that are made useful for her everyday lives. Just like Kakine's, it cannot be given and cannot be taught, and at the same time, it cannot be understood by the means of science and technology as well, although there are a few wielders just as capable as she is, but it is not an element or a type of energy, more like.. it is 'something but nothing'.

Before explaining it, her DestructionDeconstruction is like the complete opposite version of Kakine's CreationConstruction. While his were able to create anything out of nothing, from objects to energy, Beetle's ability allows her to deconstruct anything into nothing with a touch of her hand. Depending on the size of the said energy or object, its power and the complexity of the concept, the consumption of her spiritual energy may vary. As long as the concept is considered to 'exist', Beetle can throughoutly deconstruct it. It is unknown what she cannot construct but there are limits where she cannot deconstruct things that are unknown whether they have a concept or a 'life', such as space and time, since they are mysterious and unknown in nature where she cannot deconstruct them wihout a logical reason behind the concept of time and its origins, not to mention space itself. For short, she cannot deconstruct/destroy things that are 'lifeless', 'have no soul', 'does not have a concept/conceptless' and 'the unknowns that are not sure whether it is given a life or a lifeless concept' such as space and time. However, gravity, electromagnetism and friction are an exception for her since they have 'concepts' to create these natural or unnatural phenomena. She cannot deconstruct a human or a spiritual being either, although they are considered to be a concept with life, but their structure is too complex for her to deconstruct its existence completely and cannot simply kill them off with a touch. Not to mention, living beings. However, some exceptions are made to 'some' living beings, such as a summoned being, elemental or not, as long as they are part of a 'summoning' and are made out of spiritual power, it is possible for her to deconstruct just like any other things. Otherwise, she cannot deconstruct the rest like humans, animals and such.

Unlike Kakine, she has her own concepts in Destruction and Deconstruct, and it does not have its middle process for its direct deconstruction, just like a coin, a head at the start and the tail at the end, while the middle of the coin is a structure that holds the head and the tail, and is something that allows the coin to have the head and the tail. Deconstruction's concept is just like the opposite of Creation, that forms its concept, gives it life and allowing it to exist. Rather than to form a concept and bring it to life, her Destruction is that of removes its formed concept, taking away what has given it life and disallowing it to exist. To be more specific, Destruction is a portion of a process where she understands the concept, acknowledges the life of the concept itself and to completely deform the concept to remove its existence as if it were never there from the beginning.

As long as it is an existing concept, she could deconstruct them with a touch, breaking down its concept, taking away the life it was given and throughoutly removing its existence. Instead of Kakine's shikai, where he deconstructs them to a size so small that it cannot be considered to 'exist' anymore and almost non-existence, but in Beetle's case, she breaks down the particles, the concept, the shape, its energy, so much that its existence would completely vanish wihout even a trace of its atom left in the world to even see it, which in other case, unlike Kakine's deconstruction, she can completely remove the existence of a concept that has given it life and to never render it to exist anymore unless someone can bring a concept back to life again from its erased existence, someone like Kakine, of course.

Although it was stated that there was no 'middle coin' like Kakine's CreationConstruction, the process that allows him to give life to anything he wants to create, Beetle has theories and statements that she has processes just like Kakine. The middle of the two coins, it is unknown how she deconstructs objects and energies, but there is a statement of a method of how Beetle deconstructs these objects and energies using her own in exchange of creating a destruction of one's object or energy. The moment she touches something, unknowingly, her body would generate a bit of the 'opposing' force, energy, anything you can call it that creates the 'opposite' of the object or energy, just like Matter vs Anti-Matter, all she did was to subconciously generate an unknown type of the opposing energy or such against the object or energy, and using bits of amounts, she can break down the object/energy to a point where it cannot exist anymore, by using her own spiritual energy to create the 'opposition' of an object or such, and such method does cost her spiritual energy to be drained, depending on the size of the object/energy.

While most things that she deconstructs have permanent effect on them, there are things that lasts only temporarily, such as deconstruction of gravity, friction, electromagnetism, light and so on, as these natural forces have constant power and simply put, they are nature and laws that cannot be destroyed. When deconstructing something such as light, gravity or friction, unless they are manipulated or generated by another party such as a gravity manipulator, friction manipulator, magnetism manipulation or such that has the ability to manipulate fundamental forces or natural forces/laws, her deconstruction effects lasts no longer than 2 posts if they are not manipulated/generated through spiritual energy or by another party. Meaning that she can deconstruct gravity around her with a wave of her hand, but the effects will only last for 2 posts before the effects would stop. Deconstructing time is not included, since it is something unexplainable yet.

CYBERNETIC ENHANCEMENTS


:biohazard:CRETS Network: A brainwave network that provides a special link between all of the Main Series, CRETS and Beetle is one of the very few individuals that has the ability to manipulate and use the network at his/her own will. Applied to all of the series that is involved with the CRETS, the cybernetic enhancement, CRETS Network, is something fascinating among most of the networks, where all the CRETS would communicate, share information and provide experience for every CRETS to acknowledge of. Unlike most networks, anyone with the cybernetic enhancement, mainly called 'CRETS Network' installed to them can have access to the network but depending on their potential and synchronization with the network, their access may be limited to only communication, sometimes, advanced users with extended knowledge of the network such as Beetle herself, if enough, she can manipulate most, if not, the entirety of the network and use up its power to boost her own's.

Every positive emotions, negative emotions, feelings, experience and communications made by every CRETS, depending to the individual, these may be distributed throughout the network and such experiences can be felt by the rest of the series or individuals that are connected to the network. If one were to feel sadness and distribute it throughout the network, users of the network such as Beetle can feel the flow of sadness within her as well because of the distribution of the information itself. However, the good point of such distribution of information is that it can form new strategies, techniques and such through the experiences of the other CRETS or the users of the CRETS Network, providing them a great advantage if the same opponent is met.

The second function of the Network, is as described, the power of the Network itself. Though, very few individuals has gotten access to this ability, and Beetle is not the only one that has the access to the network itself and draw out its power. It allows the user to gain the ability to draw out power from the network by absorbing it from the users, and of course, some of them has the rights to deny the absorption as well but can be forced out depending on one's willpower and mental deduction. Such ability allows the user's overall spiritual power to increase, potentially boosting either their physical or mental capabilities the more influence they get from the CRETS Network. However, the price would be paid in exchange for more power. However, because of that, the user has a choice to pick which attributes they could only boost in exchange of something else. Under Beetle's case, she gains access to the network and begin absorbing the energy from the rest of the CRETS Network users, and potentially boosting her physical capability in strength which turned her into almost a monster to be reckoned with, in exchange for that power, Beetle willingly sacrifice her durability temporarily in order to further increase her strength at a higher rate.

This is the potential of how the CRETS Network can achieve, and truly, a 'special link' established by every CRETS within the list, all 25 of them. This enhancement can only be built in certain individuals that has been given permission from the Yuudeshi Clan, especially Kakine.

Zanpakutō


:biohazard:Zanpakutō Name: N/A
:biohazard:Zanpakutō's Appearance: Standing rather different from most shinigamis that would always have an 'appearance' for their zanpakutos, such as a dagger, a katana or a nodachi, but Beetle's Zanpakutō doesn't seem to possess any definite shape. Indeed, it is a rather rare case to have a Zanpakutō that does not have a definite shape or appearance, so simply put by Beetle's statement that her Zanpakutō is an 'air' itself, surrounding her and following her wherever she goes, and because of her lack of knowledgement and communication with her Zanpakutō, Beetle cannot draw out her Zanpakutō or use it. At the mean time, her Zanpakutō is in nothing but a form of air, wihout any ability or form to be drawn and attack. To be more specific, her Zanpakutō has no 'form', 'appearance' or 'shape' to attack.
:biohazard:Zanpakutō Spirit's Appearance: N/A
:biohazard:Inner World: N/A

:biohazard:Sealed Zanpakutō's Ability: N/A

SHIKAI


UNTIL A TRAINING IS CARRIED OUT, THIS WILL BE A SPACE TO FILL OUT SHIKAI ONCE IT IS GAINED.

BANKAI


SAME GOES TO THIS SECTION. WILL NOT BE FILLED UNTIL GAINED UNDER TRAINING.

EXTRAS


Will Skills
  • Willpower/Determination: Advanced
  • Mental Deduction: Advanced
  • Pain Endurance: Advanced
  • Focus: Adept


General Skills
  • Durability: Adept
  • General Speed: Beginner
  • Strength: Master
  • Weapon Skill: Beginner


Racial Skills
  • Hoho: Beginner
  • Kidō: Beginner
  • Zanjutsu: Beginner
  • Hakuda: Master





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※ITS FINALLY DONE※


After a month, she's finally finished. Dope. I expect quite some mistakes in this app since i derpingly typed in the details.


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Application Checklist
  • Name [X]
  • Appropriate Age [X]
  • Gender [X]
  • Appearance Present [X]
  • Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
  • 10 sentences for personality [X]
  • History is of appropriate length [X]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [O]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [O]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
  • Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[X]
  • RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) [X]
  • RP Sample is 10 sentences [X]


Will Skills
  • Willpower/Determination: Advanced
  • Mental Deduction: Advanced
  • Pain Endurance: Advanced
  • Focus: Adept


Comments/Notes: Don't really have any issues with much of this, however I do wish for DD to explain that she cannot simply erase people, that she either is incapable or that she needs to go through a process (meaning you'd need approval to use it or such)

Tier: 2-1+ when finished




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Sun May 25, 2014 9:50 am
with things being checked, discussed in Xat and done, Beetle is approved.




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✧MOVING THIS INTO ADOPTION NOW✦


Upon request, I'm going to go ahead and move this character in adoption. The reason for this is that it would be a shame for it to go to waste and I'll give someone the chance to pick it up. However, they must make an RP sample and I will review it when that time comes.

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GODDESS OF DESTRUCTION

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The wind gently blew across the Yuudeshi's face as she lay on the ground, staring ta the sky of the Living World. She didn't want to be trapped in Soul Society on a nice day like this! Smiling to herself, the girl slowly sat up, before leaping to her feet, full of energy, as always. Grinning and readying her fists, she figured that now would be a good time to get some practice in with her hands. While swordplay was not her forte, hand-to-hand combat most certainly was.

Approaching a tree with positive steps, the Yuudeshi reared her left arm back, before hurling it directly at the trunk of this tree. The immense strength of Beetle caused the tree to now have a small crater within the base. Not enough to completely destroy it, but definitely enough to cause some possible dangerous damage. Hurling more basic punches at the tree, the girl aimed to simple use this as a warm-up. Gotta get the blood pumping! With one final punch out of the ten that she had thrown, the tree soon fell, collapsing with a might thud.

As she turned around, she saw something interesting. A human was looking at her. What a funny face! With eyes as wide as pizzas, and jaw dropped low enough to fit a gas canister in the gaping maw, the Yuudeshi found this reaction to her inhuman strength quite funny. Raising her hand high above her head and waving it back and forth rapidly, the girl would greet the slack-jawed human with a simple waving of the hand.

Jogging over to the human and smiling, Beetle could see that even her greeting had not cooled him off from the shock that had came from witnessing her amazing strength. She was quite the strong girl, wasn't she? However, she had been holding back then. That was just a warm up! There was plenty more where than came from! Tilting her head to the side, the girl was confused why this human was still confused. Had he not seen someone as strong as he? Had he not seen her family?

"Why are you so shocked? It's 2416! There's lots of people that are like me!"

Hearing the voice of this girl would drive the human to snap out of his shock, and he quickly explained something. He had never seen someone like her do that. Oh! He probably thought that she was human! After all, he could see her! Shaking her head lightly, the girl spoke again, her voice filled with wisdom and intelligence over the subject she spoke of.

"That's because I'm not human! I'm a Shinigami! A Yuudeshi Shinigami! I can do this easy! I'm not that fast though, hehe!"

It was true. The girl may not have been fast, but her strength was most certainly something to fear if the opponent was not careful. However, there was also something else that the girl had up her sleeve. DestructionDeconstruction. The pure opposite of Kakine Yuudeshi's CreationConstruction. With the ability to destroy a large amount of things, this most certainly would be the second most powerful item in her arsenal that was natural to her.

With this human finally given an explanation of what just happened, the Yuudeshi would have to wonder how they would react....




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Welp, don't really have a problem with the character being used and the sample seemed fitting, so I'll just go ahead and approve this.



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[adm]Rechecking, per Henrex's request.

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This is fine for the most part, and thematically even pretty sick, but being able to punch through multiple Cero Oscuras is a bit extreme of a feat, especially at her level of power. I'd make this a more nebulous/vague descriptor that would be applicable at any level of strength.

Destruction Deconstruction

I can't really grade this without it seeing a fairly substantial rewrite. There are a lot of significant inconsistencies in its limitations and its functionality, along with some very confusing metaphors and a lot of reference to Kakine's abilities as a means of explanation. A few things that stood out, to help with direction on the major fixes;

-The first paragraph and third paragraph both describe the nature of its deconstruction, but do so in different terms. I'd say only the third is really necessary, but the limits it provides are also fairly inconsistent (what constitutes living, the nature of "soulless" despite concepts such as gravity being influenced, etc. etc.)

-References to Kakine in a few instances, particularly such things as referencing even Kakine's shikai, are more harmful than helpful, just by merit of them only cluttering any understanding of the ability considering Kakine's general irrelevance in the modern PH sphere.

-I genuinely don't understand the coin metaphor. I would say that probably needs some clarification.

-In general, while I know this ability is from an earlier age of Platinum Hearts, and I don't want to tell you to completely remove it since it's fairly core to the character, I would say its scope is just too large to really be approvable by modern PH standards. I would say it should probably be limited to more immediate things, and remove its incredible versatility over abstract and obscure concepts.

Zanpakuto

Is there any particular reason that she really needs to have this? Given she can't interact with it, use it, or see it in any real capacity, this feels almost like a footnote more than anything.[/adm]
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