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Tamari Osamerukami [APPROVED - HOST TIER: 3-1 - SPIRIT TIER: 3-1++]
Mon Aug 05, 2013 2:47 am
ZIAMICHI'S FROM THIS POINT ONWARD ARE TO BE GIVING DUAL OR TRIPLE TIERS FOR THE HOST/SPIRIT!
The Ziamichi Template
Basic Information
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» Name: Tamari Osamerukami
» Titles:
» Race: Human
» Age: 338 (looks 19)
» Gender: Female
» Affiliation/Rank: she has yet to join any groups
» Appearance Written: Tamari's white hair is cut short, curled around her head with a decent amount gathering in the back. Her skin has a completely smooth tan, giving her a bronze look. Brown eyes look out at the world before her, her 19 year old body does not seem overly strong as her muscles don't show that much. Currently, she wears an outfit made of leather and furs, the leather bound on to of the furs to keep it in place. The furs formed in to a fairly short skirt and cover her breasts. Leather is tied around her midsection, and forms as straps over her shoulders in order to keep the furs in place. Her hands and part of her lower arm are wrapped in some sort of cloth, the remains of her old clothes. Her feet are also wrapped in cloth, forming in to makeshift shoes.
» Appearance Picture:
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Personality Section
» Personality: Tamari contains a love for battle that she is never able to satiate completely. Every moment of every day she forces herself to fend off the craving for fighting in order to keep those around her safe from any harm she might inflict on them. She manages to do this due to her discipline, something ingrained in to her mind and body, her willpower constantly keeping these cravings in check. However, whenever she sees someone being taken advantage of, she is not afraid of letting this craving out to somewhat satiate it while she fights the aggressor. She will fight on one of two conditions only, the person is willing to fight her or they are taking advantage of others.
Tamari is a person who cares about all manner of beings, humans, shinigami, hollows, even demons. In her mind, no one should be harmed just because of what the majority of their race happens to do. Every being is entitled to a chance, but should they try to harm another being, she will not hesitate to exact justice upon them.
However, Tamari has her weaknesses. She is somewhat oblivious to the world around her, bumping in to people or things often. She apologizes every time she bumps in to someone, but she still seems somewhere far away, not quite entirely with the person. This happens whenever she talks, she will seem distant, far off, like she is thinking about something else. She does have trouble piecing things together; she isn’t too great with puzzles. Even if someone’s abilities are obviously stronger then her own, it would take her a fairly long time to realize this.
This tends to give her the advantage in fights where she is slightly the underdog, as she won’t give up when others would have. This can cause the fight to go on for longer periods of time, and perhaps give her the chance to emerge the victor.
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Background Section
» History:The girl with two souls
February 18, 2075 – that was the day that a miracle happened. On that very day, a child was born with two souls. Somehow, when Tamari was born her soul broke in two, another soul created within her. As Tamari grew up, her family noticed some strange things about her. For one, she seemed to grow slower than other children, her aging about half as fast as it should be. Another was that she always seemed to be talking to someone who was not there, like an imaginary friend. While this may have been cute for a little bit, when the imaginary friend was the same exact person for many, many years, it started to become freaky. So when she reached 12 years of age and was finally able to start first grade, her parents sent her off to a boarding school for special needs students, thinking that would be best for her.
At the boarding school, Tamari developed a very punk attitude, cut her white hair in to a spiky, ‘don’t mess with me’ hair cut, and started fighting with almost everyone there. She fought and fought, pushing her body to become better and better. In an attempt to contain her fighting, the staff at the school allowed her to take various martial arts classes, and it was during these that she became even stronger, quickly picking things up. Eventually they introduced her to tai chi and qi gong, hoping to calm her down with these classes. However, it did not work. She ended up being even more violent, like fighting was an addiction to her. These classes did serve her some good though, it is here that she realized her ability to use chi, a mystical energy, to heal herself and perform other seemingly superhuman tasks.
Realizing that she had almost no interest in normal classes, and that her taking martial arts classes resulted in less fighting outside of these classes, the staff at the school replaced almost her whole schedule with martial arts classes, only keeping in the minimum classes for her to pass. Aided by the fact that she aged half as fast as normal humans, injuries from her violence were almost removed from the school. During these classes though, she pushed herself to new heights, her body becoming stronger and stronger. During her 10th year at this school, she had pushed her body so far it seemed that she had reached her absolute limit, but she refused to give up, and it was then she awakened something within her. Her body underwent soul evolution, and she began pushing herself to new heights. Soon she had forged an anima stone for herself, one embedded within her own body. During the rest of her school life she pushed her evolution powers and her physical body forward, achieving superhuman abilities with it.
School ended eventually, and Tamari, now 36, could return to her family. Despite her age, she didn’t look at day older than 18. However, in her time at school her family had grown close while forgetful of her. Only her sister seemed to care for her, always wanting to talk and spend time with her. Perhaps it was because she could sense how lonely Tamari was, or for some other reason, Tamari would never know. She and her sister grew close, and in the end her sister was the only friend Tamari would gain besides for Sasha, the spirit inside her. However, Tamari could not stand her parent’s attitudes, their looks of disgust at her whenever they saw her. So, after spending two years with her family, Tamari left then behind, never to return to their house.
From their house, Tamari left for a massive forest, a place of the wild where strength ruled. There she was to live, alone in the woods with no way to be found, or so she thought. However, there was another reason for choosing this location for her residents, here she could converse with Sasha, her other soul, with no restrictions. Tamari had realized she had been pushing only one half of herself, and if she could obtain whatever powers Sasha had, and she knew she had some, she could surpass her previous limits.
It was child’s play to convince Sasha to lend her the powers she had obtained, however, Sasha’s powers were very weak, and it was extremely difficult for Tamari to bring them forth. So, the two of them both worked on Sasha’s abilities. Sasha progressed herself further and further, pushing her abilities she had gained. While Sasha was resting from her training, Tamari would train herself to manifest Sasha’s powers, first her weapon known as a zanpaktou. Then they went to work on the rest of Sasha’s abilities, her flash step, then Kidō, and then making her zanpaktou trust Tamari enough to utilize its powers. As the two worked together, many years passed, their power increasing dramatically from their cooperation. Sasha unlocked what was known as her zanpaktou’s shikai, and soon Tamari was able to use it as well. After three hundred years though, Tamari felt she should return to civilization. Packing up her things, she headed for karakura town to find her place in this world.
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Soul Evolution Powers
- Natural Attributes:
Well trained in martial arts: Tamari has trained in several martial arts disciplines since she was ten years old. Even during her three hundred years of isolation in the most forested parts of the world, she has kept up her martial arts practice, pushing her body. This has resulted in a level that is at least equivalent to a black belt in several martial arts.
Expert sword user: While not quite as well trained with a sword as she is with her fists, she is still well above the average sword user. She spent three hundred years in the most forested, out of the way places, training herself to utilize the powers of the spirit that dwelled within her. Included in this was mastering the spirit’s zanpaktou, their sword. This not only included mastering summoning the zanpaktou to her side at will, it meant mastering the swordplay style that came with it, it’s forms, and then adapting it to her own tastes. This ended with her being well versed in sword usage, no matter what blade she picks up. It does not matter whether it is a kitchen knife meant for cutting meat, a small blade, or a two handed sword, all are the same to her.
Danger Instincts: Having lived in a forest filled with hazards for animals and natural disasters, Tamari has developed an instinctual sense for when she is in danger. Though she may not be able to see, hear, or feel someone about to attack her, her instincts will always let her know when she is in danger.
- Racial Powers:
Anima Stone: While Tamari has been able to manifest an Anima Stone which was stored inside her, things changed when she started to work on her inner spirit’s powers. When she managed to manifest her spirit’s zanpaktou, her Anima Stone fused with the zanpaktou, boosting the power of the zanpaktou’s abilities. This effectively destroyed her Anima stone, however it left her with one small bonus. While she has manifested her spirit’s zanpaktou, she can use the mana within the anima stone to allow her to cast Kidō that her ziamichi spirit has the capability to cast. If her anima stone is separated from the zanpaktou it will disintegrate, causing her to lose access to Kidō and any soul sorcery.
- Evolution Powers:
Soul Strike: The most basic power she has gained from her soul evolution, this is the ability to empower a weapon or a part of her own body with her soul force in order to double the force behind the next attack with the empowered weapon or body part. This ability can be applied multiple times to the same item, multiplying it again for each additional time.
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Soul State Evolution
- Soul State Evolution Stage 1 Appearance: When she enters stage 1 her skin starts to glow green faintly and her hair turns a light blondish color.
- Soul State Evolution Stage 1 Abilities:
Soul Skin: This is an ability that is constantly active for her. Her whole body is wrapped in a thin defensive layer of her soul force while she is in her stage 1 release. This absorbs some of the force of blows she would take, as well as causing sharp objects to have a difficult time piercing her or cutting in to her. With the usual amount of protection it is fairly easy for her to grab regular blades that are being swung at her, and would dampen the force of one of her own punches by 5%. However, she can increase the strength of this protective layer, but doing so drains her soul force tremendously. She can bring it to where she could ignore even the most advanced bullets slamming in to her, or dampen one of her own punches by 80%, but this will completely drain her after a mere 5 seconds.
Soul Break: Using this technique, Tamari charges her hand with her soul force before punching her opponent in the chest. Should she make contact, her soul force will vibrate throughout the opponent's body for the next two rounds, disrupting their brain's signals to their muscles. This causes their general speed and strength to temporarily decrease by 1 rank while her soul force is vibrating through their body. This technique has a cool down of 1 post.
- Soul State Evolution Stage 2 Appearance: (Optional. Leave blank if you do not want powers.)
- Soul State Evolution Stage 2 Abilities: (Optional. Leave blank if you do not want powers.)- Soul State Evolution Stage 3 Appearance: (Optional. This will be at least 1 to 0 tier level characters, however. You may fill this out, but the app will ultimately be up to the staff member who reviews it)
- Soul State Evolution Stage 3 Abilities: (Optional. Leave blank if you do not want powers.)
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Chi Powers
(THIS SECTION IS COMPLETELY OPTIONAL! IF YOU DO NOT WANT IT FOR YOUR CHARACTER, JUST REMOVE IT!)
Information: If you need any help understanding Chi, please click this thread and read all the information. It is fully optional rather or not you want your character to use Chi. So if you choose not to have it, simply cross it out or remove it. Fully Awakened Humans have to be approved by [THEFROST] as they are extremely rare.
Powers
- Chi Powers:
Yin/Yang Surge: Tamari cannot use yin/yang surge at all, for some reason she is incapable of it.
Geppo: While Tamari is capable of performing Geppo, she has focused more on soul dash and flash step that her moon step is nothing compared to the other two.
Vindeca: Tamari’s chi healing abilities are the only real area she has focused on when it comes to chi. Due to her soul evolution abilities and her inner spirit’s zanpaktou requiring very close quarters combat, Tamari has learned to constantly heal her body with chi throughout a battle. This involves applying Vindeca to her whole body, causing slow regeneration of injuries in areas that sustain them, but if her body is not injured the chi used is wasted. She can keep this “Vindeca Cloak” going for 2 rounds plus one additional round for each rank in her vindeca skill.
Tekkai: As with Geppo, Tamari has barely trained this ability, thus making it fairly useless compared to her other abilities. Due to it not being able to be used in conjunction with her soul skin ability, she won’t use it if she is forced to utilize her soul state release(s). However, she might use it while in her base form, though she prefers to fight without it in most cases.- Awakened Appearance: (Please Describe how your character looks when they are in their awakened state)
- Awakened Powers: (Describe what type of powers your character gets from awakening.)- Fully Awakened Appearance: (Describe what your human looks like when Fully Awakened)
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The Spirit's Basic Information
» The Spirit's Name: Sasha Osamerukami
» The Spirit's Race: Shinigami
» The Spirit's Gender: Female
» The Spirit's Age: 338
» The Spirit's Pictured Appearance:
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The Spirit's Personality Section
» The Spirit's Personality: Sasha is not what you would expect from a spirit within Tamari. Sasha hates fighting, in fact, she hates anything done to harm another person, whether it be through words or actions. While she, like Tamari, cares about all types of beings, she adores animals above all the rest. This mostly pertains to domesticated animals such as dogs, cats, hamsters, and other such pets. Her favorite is by far cats, though she hides this deep within her. Unlike Tamari though, she is not oblivious to her surroundings, in fact she is very tuned in to what is happening around the two of them. Often times when Tamari is going to bump in to something Sasha will try to warn her, but she has never succeeded in getting Tamari to come back to earth. Sasha is quite submissive when it comes to Tamari though, she will do almost anything she asks. There is one deep, dark secret that Sasha will never tell anyone though, not even Tamari. This is that she actually feels in love with Tamari. It makes no sense whatsoever, and she knows that there is no chance that Tamari will ever feel the same way towards her. This causes her emotions to sometimes slip in to sadness and despair, and as time goes on she has been becoming increasingly emotionally unstable.
The Spirit's Background Section
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» The Spirit's History:The girl that nobody sawFebruary 18, 2075 – that was the day a curse happened. On that day, a child was born with two souls. When Tamari was born, somehow her soul broke in to two, the other half forming in to Sasha. Her existence would have been a painful, depressing existence had it not been for the kind heart of Tamari. Despite it making people think she was crazy, Tamari spoke with Sasha every day. For years she did this, letting it take over her life. Every day Sasha looked forward to those long hours when Tamari would speak to her and play with her as best the two could. After twelve years though, things changed. Tamari was sent off to a boarding school, her parents convince she was crazy. This meant Tamari could no longer openly talk to Sasha, having to leave her alone most of the time. The would talk at night, but now it was only for a few hours. This left Sasha’s days empty and lonely, a depressing existence once again. However, when she saw how hard Tamari was working to better herself, Sasha could not sit still. Thinking about it, somehow a door appeared in the corner. Walking through it, Sasha found herself in the Shinigami academy. However, no one could see her or touch her. Despite this, Sasha knew this was where she belonged. Walking through this door every day, Sasha began to train herself to become a Shinigami, pushing her spiritual powers farther and farther.
Slowly Sasha made her way through the academy courses day by day. It was as if the door knew what lesson she needed to learn to advance, opening to exactly what she needed. When Tamari had finished 8th grade, Sasha finally graduated the academy by going through the door. She obtained her zanpaktou and when she returned through the door, it vanished behind her. However, she knew her training was not over yet, she had not obtained anywhere near the power she needed. She continued to push herself, training in whatever way she could to obtain more power. Years past, and Tamari finally finished school, her training put on hold, and so Sasha decided to take a break as well. For two years Tamari stayed with her parents, but Sasha could see she was not happy, and only staying for her little sister. So it was no surprise to Sasha when Tamari decided to leave her parent’s house and be on her own.
After Tamari left her parent’s house, she ventured to a forested area, woods for miles around, a place of the wild. There, she requested that Sasha to lend her the powers she had gained. Blushing, Sasha quickly agreed. For some reason during these past years Sasha had fallen in love with Tamari. She would never tell anyone about this, not even Tamari, but she would help her in any way she could. However, her powers were weak, and it seemed Tamari was having difficulty bringing them forth. However, Sasha did not lose hope, nor did Tamari. Together they pushed each other forward, Sasha pushing her own abilities to the next level while Tamari learned to utilize them.
Their skills both improved at a rapid pace, and years past while they trained. After one hundred years of training, when Sasha closed her eyes, a voice whispered to her, “Remember this even should you die, for if you forget it you will forever lose any chance to move forward. My name is Spatium Exterminatore.” Her eyes fluttered open, looking around. Nothing was there, nothing to whisper to her. Looking over at her sword, she sat up, placing it on her lap as she began to meditate. Suddenly, she found herself in an endless black expanse, thousands of mirrors suspended in the area around her. She float around a bit until she noticed a black cat sitting on top of a mirror. It yawned, and its words came to her, loud and clear.
“Well, you’re here. That was quicker than I expected. Well, if you can answer this question in a satisfactory manner and you can still remember my name, I shall reward you with power beyond what you have now. The question is, why do you wish for more power?”
Sasha looked quizzically at the cat before her for a minute before answering the question.
“I wish to have the power to help and protect others. Others who would hurt people will gather power for the purpose of stopping anyone who would help those they wish to hurt. So I must gain power to counteract the power gathered by those who wish to hurt others.”
The cat stared for a minute, the let out a soft giggle, before responding.
“Very good, you have earned this power.”
With that, Sasha’s eyes opened, now she was no longer within her inner world. Looking to her lap, she saw the large blade that was her shikai lying in her lap. This was the power he had promised her, the power of shikai.
Many more years passed, the two training even harder. Eventually three hundred years had passed since they originally came to live in this forest, and now Tamari had decided it was time to return to civilization, and so they were going to head to karakura town.
The Spirit's Powers
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- Reiatsu Color: vibrant green
- Zanpakutô Spirit Name: spatium exterminatore
- Zanpakutô Spirit Appearance: A large black cat, its body alone comes up to the top of Sasha’s hair. Its eyes are green, and two tails sprout behind it, both black until the very end, where the last inch is a light green color. It seems to blink in and out of existence very rapidly, just slow enough so that one’s eyes can notice it.
- Inner World: Sasha’s inner world is an endless expanse of darkness with many, many mirrors floating through it. Within the mirrors are different images, some from Sasha or Tamari’s lives, others she has no idea what they are. She and whoever else is there float around in this darkness with no gravity to pull them down to anything.
- Sealed Zanpakutô Apperance : A fairly normal katana except for one feature, it has no guard on it. Its hilt is pure black and squarish. It seems to be covered by some kind of leather from the feel. The blade extends from one end, about five feet in length.
- Sealed Zanpakutô Abilities:
Basis: Her zanpaktou is based on spatial manipulation, the ability to manipulate space around her. More specifically, her abilities revolve around spatial displacement, the ability to move a specific area of space from one place to another. The only difference this makes while she is still in her sealed state is that when she swings her zanpaktou, she can extend its reach an additional 3 inches by binding the space 3 inches beyond her blade’s reach with the area containing her blade’s last 3 inches.
- Release: Slice, spatium exterminatore!
- Shikai Description:
- Shikai Abilities:
Spatial Slice: Using this ability she swings downward, and when her sword hits the ground, a green burst of energy spurts forth from the ground from her sword, going in a 20 feet line forward from it. This energy rises until it is 15 feet from the ground, and then the space on either side of this line, from the ground up to 30 feet in the air, is ripped apart, empty space left between it. Objects and beings above this line are ripped apart as the space is pushed aside on either side of the line. The empty space is 1 foot wide, and extends 30 feet in either direct (up and down). Physical defenses only work half as well against this ability, but one can use their willpower or energy to suppress it, allowing them time to move out of the way. This technique cannot be used more then once per post.
Spatial Transmission: When she uses this ability, a green box of energy surrounds her body and the space within 1 foot of her. Once the box forms, the box, along with anything it contains, is transported instantly up to 1000 meters away. While the ability is charging she cannot move at all, and if she is hit by anything the ability is lost immediately, although she takes no damage from whatever attack hit her. This ability has a cooldown of 2 posts.- Bankai Description: (You may fill out your Bankai Description, but unless you get staff permission, you may not use your Bankai right off the bat. There are expectations, however.)- Bankai Abilities: (You may fill out your Bankai Powers, but unless you get staff permission, you may not use your Bankai right off the bat. There are expectations, however.)
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Ziamichi Powers
» Unique Traits:
Zanpaktou manifestation: Tamari is capable of manisfesting her inner spirit’s zanpaktou in to her own hands. She can access all the forms her inner spirit can, and can train to obtain any her inner spirit hasn’t already managed to access. Due to her Anima Stone being fused with her inner spirit’s zanpaktou, when she manifests it she can utilize Kidō her inner spirit could normally use. Her Anima stone allows her to obtain the chants for all Kidō up to and including #20, but beyond that point she has to be personally taught the Kidō by someone who knows it.
Flash Step: She has learned how to utilize flash step just as well as Sasha can.
Flash Soul Step: A combination of flash step and soul dash, this technique is her fastest speed technique. By using elements of both, this technique is equivalent to a soul dash with her rank boosted 1, and also boosts her general speed by 1 rank until the end of the next post. However, this technique is not capable of being used for a short period of time afterwards due to the toll it would take on the body. It cannot be used again until 1 post after the general speed rank boost ends.
Senkaimon: Tamari is capable of opening the senkaimon, allowing her to travel to soul society despite being a living human. However, as she doesn't have a hell butterfly she will have to brave the restrictive current and the cleaner to get there.
» Forms: none, though she does gain access to all of Sasha’s zanpaktou forms (shikai, bankai, whatever).
» Drawbacks: none.
» Control: 10. Sasha is completely submissive to Tamari.
The Host's Skills
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NOTE: Ziamichi's will have three to four skill sheets possibly. One for general skills, one for racial skills, one for the host's skill and possibly one for the spirit's skills if they are a different race.
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Ziamichi General
» Ziamichi Host Class: (Ranging from E to the weakest and A to the strongest; With S being a special class of Ziamichi's. Don't do anything to this section, as staff will determine how strong your Ziamichi Class is from tier once approved. And yes, the Host can sometimes be stronger then the spirit.)
» Ziamichi Spirit Class: (Ranging from E to the weakest and A to the strongest; With S being a special class of Ziamichi's. Don't do anything to this section, as staff will determine how strong your Ziamichi Class is from tier once approved.)
Skills:
0 Tier is allowed 1 Master, 2 Advanced for each section
1 Tier is allowed 2 Advanced for each section
2 Tier is allowed 1 Advanced, 2 Adept for each section
3 Tier is allowed 1 Adept for each section
4 Tier and below only get beginner.
General Skills For Host
- Durability: Beginner
- General Speed: Adept
- Strength: Adept
- Weapon Skill: Adept
Human Skill Sheet
- Anima Stone Strength: Beginner
- Soul Sorcery: Adept
- Soul Dash: Adept
- Soul Detection: Adept
Chi Skills
- Geppo: Beginner
- Vindeca: Advanced
- Tekkai: Beginner
- Yang Surge: Beginner
Ziamichi Skills For Host
- Skill Of Ziamichi Powers: Adept
- Control Over Spirit: Adept
- Seal Strength: Beginner
- Sync-Rate: Adept
Will Skills For Host
- Willpower/Determination: Advanced
- Mental Deduction: Beginner
- Pain Endurance: Advanced
- Focus: Adept
The Spirit's Skills
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General Skills For Spirit
- Durability: Adept
- General Speed: Adept
- Strength: Adept
- Weapon Skill: Beginner
Racial Skills
- Hoho: Adept
- Kidō: Adept
- Zanjutsu: Adept
- Hakuda: Beginner
Will Skills For Spirit
- Willpower/Determination: Beginner
- Mental Deduction: Adept
- Pain Endurance: Adept
- Focus: Adept
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Re: Tamari Osamerukami [APPROVED - HOST TIER: 3-1 - SPIRIT TIER: 3-1++]
Mon Aug 05, 2013 7:50 pm
Aivee Clean-Up Time!
Movin g this to Unchecked for Tina! Pyun!
Re: Tamari Osamerukami [APPROVED - HOST TIER: 3-1 - SPIRIT TIER: 3-1++]
Mon Aug 05, 2013 9:04 pm
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- Appropriate Age [X]
- Gender [X]
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- 10 sentences for personality [X]
- History is of appropriate length [X]
- Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [O]
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« The Willsheet Checklist »
• And Comments/Fixes •
- Willpower/Determination: Advanced
- Mental Deduction: Beginner
- Pain Endurance: Advanced
- Focus: Adept
«The Ziamichi Spirit's Willsheet Checklist»
- Willpower/Determination: Beginner
- Mental Deduction: Adept
- Pain Endurance: Adept
- Focus: Adept
- Comments/Notes: I suppose we should get started with what's wrong in this app, eh?
Spatial Slice: Using this ability she swings downward, and when her sword hits the ground, a green burst of energy spurts forth from the ground from her sword, going in a 20 feet line forward from it. This energy rises until it is 15 feet from the ground, which takes about 30 seconds, and then the space on either side of this line, from the ground up to 30 feet in the air, is ripped apart, empty space left between it. Objects and beings above this line are ripped apart as the space is pushed aside on either side of the line. The empty space is 1 foot wide, and extends 30 feet in either direct (up and down). Physical defenses only work half as well against this ability, but one can use their willpower or energy to suppress it, allowing them time to move out of the way. This technique cannot be used more then once per post.
While I don't see much of a problem with this, the whole seconds things is really off-putting to how this site is founded. Therefore, you'll need to convert that into post. As time based power-ups wouldn't really work well with our system.
Spatial Transmission: When she uses this ability, a green box of energy surrounds her body and the space within 1 foot of her after charging up for half a minute. While the ability is charging, her body glows brightly with green light. Once the box forms, the box, along with anything it contains, is transported instantly up to 1000 meters away. While the ability is charging she cannot move at all, and if she is hit by anything the ability is lost immediately, although she takes no damage from whatever attack hit her. This ability has a cooldown of 2 posts.
Much like the post above, I believe you should convert that minute into a form of post. How long in post would it take for this to charge if you wish to have that limitation?
Flash Soul Step: A combination of flash step and soul dash, this technique is her fastest speed technique. By using elements of both, this technique is equivalent to a soul dash with her rank boosted for every rank above beginner her inner spirit has in hoho. This can only reach a point just below grandmaster rank, in otherwords she would be at the very peak of what someone with a master rank could do, but still below what grandmaster could do. However, this technique is not capable of being used for a short period of time afterwards due to the toll it would take on the body. It therefore has a cool down of 1 post.
Uhm, I don't like this one very much. Personally, I have no issues with combining both as I've done something similar. However, the problem lays in the fact that it boosts her speed level ranks up quite dramatically. In my opinion, to make things less confusing, I believe you should most likely only allow it to go up over one level of Hoho or Soul Step. Perhaps you can have it effect her General Speed? I just don't quite get this one. It may even be better to just say she has dramatically augmented speed for a short duration of time before fading out due to the drawbacks.
- Host Tier: 3-1
- Host Class: E
- Spirit Tier: 3-1++
- Spirit Class: E
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Re: Tamari Osamerukami [APPROVED - HOST TIER: 3-1 - SPIRIT TIER: 3-1++]
Mon Aug 05, 2013 9:59 pm
Alright, I made changes as specified above, noted below:
Spatial Slice and Spatial Transmission have had their time delays removed. Since they were meant to be small delays that allow for reactions to their activation, I feel it would be pointless to make them on a per post basis.
Flash Soul Step has been modified to be a soul dash 1 rank higher then otherwise, and also gives a 1 rank boost to general speed until the end of the next post. The cooldown has been extended to be 1 post after the general speed boost ends, thus giving her at least one post where she is using her normal speed stats. If you feel that more restrictions/downsides are needed, I am open to suggestions.
Edit: Just going to explain the original reason Spatial Slice and Spatial Transmission had time based delays and why I chose to remove them instead of replacing them with post based delays. I put in time delays because I wanted to point out that these techniques are not split second things. For Spatial Slice, it was like someone drawing a line from one point to another, that takes time. With Spatial Transmission, it forms a box around her, like drawing in 3 dimensions, that takes time. I probably didn't word it correctly, but it was just supposed to point out the small time delay caused by these two actions.
Spatial Slice and Spatial Transmission have had their time delays removed. Since they were meant to be small delays that allow for reactions to their activation, I feel it would be pointless to make them on a per post basis.
Flash Soul Step has been modified to be a soul dash 1 rank higher then otherwise, and also gives a 1 rank boost to general speed until the end of the next post. The cooldown has been extended to be 1 post after the general speed boost ends, thus giving her at least one post where she is using her normal speed stats. If you feel that more restrictions/downsides are needed, I am open to suggestions.
Edit: Just going to explain the original reason Spatial Slice and Spatial Transmission had time based delays and why I chose to remove them instead of replacing them with post based delays. I put in time delays because I wanted to point out that these techniques are not split second things. For Spatial Slice, it was like someone drawing a line from one point to another, that takes time. With Spatial Transmission, it forms a box around her, like drawing in 3 dimensions, that takes time. I probably didn't word it correctly, but it was just supposed to point out the small time delay caused by these two actions.
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Re: Tamari Osamerukami [APPROVED - HOST TIER: 3-1 - SPIRIT TIER: 3-1++]
Thu Aug 08, 2013 12:04 am
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- Willpower/Determination: Advanced
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- Focus: Adept
«The Ziamichi Spirit's Willsheet Checklist»
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- Mental Deduction: Adept
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- Focus: Adept
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- Host Tier: 3-1
- Host Class: E
- Spirit Tier: 3-1++
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