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Re: Saaishu Shudan
Mon Aug 05, 2013 7:39 pm
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- Name [X]
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- Gender [X]
- Appearance Present [X]
- Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
- Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
- 10 sentences for personality [X]
- History is of appropriate length [X]
- Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [X]
- Powers are described reasonably enough [X]
- Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
- Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[X]
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To start your FC for your Spirit is missing so fix those things first.
Hoho: Saaishu's Flash Steps are sublime. She can use Flash steps in odd ways, applying it to certain parts of her body. For example, a variation of Flash Step Saaishu had made was the "Flash Skip". She uses the flash step ability with one leg, as if skipping, which would allow her to maneuver in jagged steps, making her rather prominent at dodging attacks. Or, she could apply Hoho to her arms, allowing her to punch with extreme speed. Even without Flash Steps, Saaishu already has extremely fast speed, but she use hoho nearly all the time. The speed of her hoho is pretty standard, but the amount of times she can use it is incredibly high (you decide, but I most definitely want it to be much higher than the standard. MUCH higher.)
Kidō: Saaishu is also extremely proficient with Kidō, having the capability of probably having a seat in the 5th division.
Zanjutsu: Zanjutsu is one of the few things that Saaishu isn't quite good at. She knows how to properly use her sword, and is able to slice up a nigga, but she's just not that good with it. Heaving around a giant sword should make it more understandable. Naturally, the giant Zanpakutō reflects her massive reiryoku.
No offense, but No one I've seen has used nigga as a description, so can you change that to person or some other pronoun.
Hakuda: Hakuda is one of the many things Saaishu is good at. In fact, when combined with her ability to apply hoho to certain parts of her body, she's a master hand-to-hand combatant. okay, maybe not master, but she's pretty darn good at it, being able to preform a oni dekopin (she actually tries pretty hard to do it, but tries to act like it doesn't take anything. She gets sorta exhausted and her fingers usually feel sore after flicking). Thus, her strength is rather high as well, which is one of the reasons she's able to fling around her giant sword.
Uhm Just going to Say this now you can't be a master Hand to hand combatant, if you aren't trained properly.
Tier: N/A until fixes to be made.
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Re: Saaishu Shudan
Tue Aug 06, 2013 8:23 am
A description should not have contradictions in it, fix those contradictions and make this a serious character work on. I mean honestly if I were to tier her and such You wouldn't be leaving the lowest tier for people with spiritual power with those descriptions. If you're going to mention them, explain without contradictions how she's good in it, why is she good in it, how does her unreleased truly help her out in terms of those stats. Do you see why I had to point these out Kururai.
in short... Redo all of your descriptions because honestly it looks like a five year old is trying to look like they are hardcore.
in short... Redo all of your descriptions because honestly it looks like a five year old is trying to look like they are hardcore.
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Re: Saaishu Shudan
Sat Aug 17, 2013 4:52 am
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Re: Saaishu Shudan
Tue Sep 10, 2013 1:23 pm
Moving this app to Old WIP since it has been 2 weeks. if finished please refer to This thread or ask staff to move it.
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