Reiji Hagomora [APPROVED, 2-2-]

Mon Dec 05, 2011 5:35 pm

S H I N I G A M I

B A S I C I N F O R M A T I O N

Name: Reiji Hagomora
Gender: Male
Age: 430 yrs old
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P E R S O N A L I T Y

Personality: Reiji was once a lone shinigami no more and no less. The scientists upon his creation created & instructed his behavior patterns. He doesn't feel pity, remorse or fear but truthfully the shinigami does have a code of honor in protecting people. Sometimes he'll listen to reason but then walk away in regret. Reiji has a great desire to be the best & powerful shinigami on his own thinking the path of lone shinigami is his way of life. He'll often talk if necessary but very rarely he'll open his mouth and talk. After his near death, he felt pain and anger being betrayed by people he trusted left him in whirlwind of feelings of regrets and revenge over the people who tried to wipe him out. The feelings he had to that evil shinigami were cold and unsettling....he never did like the guy something evil about an shinigami. After finally being discovered alive, Reiji felt that he finally got his confidence back that he could serve and honor the Soul society with loyalty and servitude without any regrets of the past to stop him. He had a unstoppable rage of killing hollows or anybody that threaten the Soul society or the people serving under it. He does show a kind & caring attitude around his companion though.

Around Xaiomu, Reiji feels like he had a friend maybe just more then a companion but he tries to act according to the shinigami code around her. Even though he's serious and honorbound at times, Reiji does have a caring attitude despite his agressive programming from the scientists which he doesn't think himself as a tool but as a human being. Hopefully around his new friends maybe he can act like a normal shinigami then he was created to do. In short, Reiji had something of an half breed law abiding attitude but deep down the soul within him.
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B A C K G R O U N D

History/Background: After the creation of the bounts, Dr. Evelyn Necker one of shinigami scientists finally had enough tools to create another bount. Actually, some of the bount formula was unstable in order to maintain a balance in the creation some enzymes needed flulds. The process but the creation was being formed into a bount but malfunctions were taken place as the other bounts were trying to escape. The creation was losing life fast but it needed blood which the doctors gave samples of shinigami. Finally the creation was born breaking out of test tube but it looked more hollow then shinigami but the blood samples were holding it together. Reiji was born that day. Elena thought of giving her creation a name which she gave it yelling the name "Reiji Hagomora". They both escaped the lab while started going up in flames. Reiji had pain issues to due his half breed skin the scientists did developed experimental clothing making it easy for him. He would never have to eat, sleep, breath or even worry about the environment hurting him.

Dr. Elena Bosocrhe was banished from the Soul society along with a few others due to some problems. In the last minutes, Elena took a Zanpakutō given it Reiji hoping that he'll become strong as a shinigami. Reiji separated himself from the doctor training on his own with his dark desire for strength and power. These trainings would go on for days maybe years in a quiet and hidden area increasing his knowledge training with his Zanpakutō trying to be the best he can be. The only objective that he would do everyday would be train and sleep because the shinigami wasn't ready to deal with any hollow threat yet. The scientists progammed him to be the best and still nothing would stop him from achieving his goal not friendship or any human emotion. Reiji came out of hiding trained hard in body nearly ripped from ther many exercises done over the years. Hopefully, Reiji mastered all his lessons trained by himself on shinigami fighting styles and Zanpakutō fighting skills. Onlly time and effort will tell if the shinigami is ready for fighting. Months Later, The Soul society found out from one of the captured scientists about their creation the council called it an abomination. Learning that he was too dangerous to live and that the scientists and this abomination would have to be dealt with the punishment will be death. Reiji was living quietly alone until being disturbed by a squad of shinigami with their zanpakutos drawn out. Reiji didn't know what the hell was goig on until the order was given to have him executed. The shinigami squads attack but due to everything the scientists programmed and taught him, Reiji drew his blade and attack quickly. Hour pass and Reiji defeated the shinigami squads with his blade thinking they wanted him dead then wondering is his creator was alright. Reiji rushed to Elena's home to find her lying dead in pool of blood, Reiji couldn't believe it why would they do such a thing. Did his creator do something wrong to offend them? Everything that he cared about died that day taking on a serious but deadly attitude...he live by the shinigami's laws but he'll never trust them ever.

Both Squad 9 and 10 finally arrested Reiji sending him back into the Soul society where the council decision was to leave him within the maggot's nest until they could find the rightful punishment. Reiji was thinking about how things got so worse for him until Captain Jocasta and Mina read Reiji's file thinking he might make the perfect shinigami for squad nine. Captain Jocasta got the council ruling allowing Reiji to be free from the Maggot's nest to serve the Soul society which the guy had to go throw the academy all over again. Reiji obtained a new Zanpakutō and then immediately was recognized by Captain Mayonara which Reiji served under. Under some research Reiji was able to upgrade his appearance to look something like a hollow this unpleasant sight to Captain Mayonara but Rey would wear shinigami clothing. About 20 years later, Reiji became vice captain serving under Captain Mayaonara until the hollowification incident which under secret information that Captain Mayonara was the first person to have both hollow and shinigami powers. Captain Mayonora was suspected to be a traitor because of the using the hogyoku transformation many of people of the hollowification incident into these "vizards". The vizards were killed by the extermination squads. The council decided that Reiji Hagomora was going to be the new captain of Squad Nine but that only lasted for about ten months unknowingly Reiji was actually killed by unknown shinigami under orders allowing that persom to be the new captain of squad nine. Many people thought Reiji was dead that the nightmare of his creation by shinigami scientists was finally over but somehow the shinigami survived. During an execution, Reiji managed to hide within the Rukongai district for most of his life helping the people within the gigai body keeping most of his spiritual pressure hidden. This was the first time anybody saw his face out in the open. He felt many battles have taken place over at the Soul society but he wanted no part of it the guy was just hoping to have some peace.

Then finally he heard the rumors that this strong shinigami who started out as a human shinigami who trained hard within many places of the world finally killed the traitor. Reiji couldn't believe it the moment he heard that he was jumping up and down with joy most of the villagers thought he got happy news and it was great news hearing that the monster was gone. Reiji thought of coming back into the Soul society but still could he give up this new life so quickly but things were going to happen because. Within the soul society, some captains was reading files and records about past shinigami then Reiji's file came up reading about his fast healing process. The experimentation that was used to help increase Reiji body functions which the captain realized that Reiji was still alive.
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High Spiritual Power: As the Captain of the 9th Division, he did have a great amount of spiritual energy. But now returning back into the Soul Society it had diminished to with he trained to make it better. Now Reiji just has a very high amount of spiritual energy hoping one day it make better like before.

Master Swordsmanship Specialist: After some hardship and immense training procedures, Reiji had master his Zanpakutō blade to his full potential. He's learned many tricks & styles that even an captain of those vizards would know. Using both intel and agility making both master and Zanpakutō into one pure and deadly weapon against any enemy. Due of using his Zanpakutō really if Reiji had the chance he could about any sword to his advantage. An sword expert which took a half a decade to master everything about it.

Flash Step Learner: He trained constantly with his shunpo speeds. Really this was the first thing he trained for being faster then a vizard. He was improved his shunpo speeds to become faster then even a vice captain. He able to dodge attacks or appear behind/ in front of a person with his fast speed. After his return, he began training hard hoping to get back his flash step speeds back to the way it once since leaving the Soul society. He still no match against an captain's flash step speed maybe a vice captain even a former captain could lose something and never gain it back.

Master Hand-To-Hand Combatant: Without his Zanpakutō, he had learned to master unarmed combat at full potential the best weapons would be his hands. He has good boxing & Jiu jitsu styles which took months every art of hand to hand combat in offense techniques and defense techniques. Reiji can sufficiently block and attack others and is hard to actively lay a hand on unless he allows it

Learned Kidō: 1. Shō (衝, Thrust)
Pushes the target away from the caster.

4. Byakurai (白雷, Pale Lightning)
The user fires a concentrated, powerful lightning bolt from their finger.

11. Tsuzuri Raiden (製本雷, Bound Lightning)
Electric current flows through any object the user touches and
is able to lead electricity, damaging any target that is in contact
with the object the current runs through.

31. Shakkahō (赤火砲, Shot of Red Fire)
Fires a ball of red energy at a target.[34]:
Incantation: "Ye lord! Mask of blood and flesh, all
creation, flutter of wings, ye who bears the name of Man! Inferno and
pandemonium, the sea barrier surges, march on to the south!"

54. Haien (廃炎, Abolishing Flames)
Fires a blast of purple spiritual energy that will incinerate a target completely when it makes contact.

58.Tenran (闐嵐, Orchid Sky)
A widening tornado-like blast is fired towards the target.

63. Sōren Sōkatsui (双蓮蒼火墜, Twin Lotus Blue Fire, Crash Down)
Essentially a doubled version of #33 this spell fires two shots of blue fire with greater potency than the single-shot variety.
Incantation: "Ye lord! Mask of blood and flesh, all
creation, flutter of wings, ye who bears the name of Man! On the wall
of blue flame, inscribe a twin lotus. In the abyss of conflagration, wait at the far heavens."

Bakudou Kidō

1. Sai (塞, Restrain)
Locks a target's arms in place behind their back.

4. Hainawa (這縄, Crawling Rope)
An energy rope entangles the target's arms.

8. Seki (斥, Repulse)
Creates a round shield that seems to temporarily paralyze and repel whatever strikes it.

9. Geki (撃, Strike)
Engulfs the target in red light, completely paralyzing them.
Incantation: "Disintegrate, you black dog of Rondanini!! Look upon yourself with horror and then claw out your own throat!"

26. Kyokko (曲光, Curved Light)
Hides the target from sight, by bending light. The spell has the ability to totally hide the presence and reiatsu of the user orspecified object.

30. Shitotsu Sansen (嘴突三閃, Beak-Piercing Triple Beam)
Forming a golden triangle with one's finger, it shoots three beams of light that pin the target to one place on a surface, slamming into his or her body in three places in a shape of a perfect triangle.

37. Tsuriboshi (吊星, Suspending Star)
Creates a star-shaped cushion of Spiritual Energy, whichanchors it to nearby objects with "ropes" of reishi. It can stop falling objects, acting like a safety net.

58. Kakushitsuijaku (摑趾追雀, Summoning of the Tracking Sparrows)
Tracks and locates any spiritual force the user focuses on. To activate it, the user must draw a circle on the ground, cut into four parts with a specific character in each. The incantation animates the circle, causing various numbers to appear within until the specific setis found. The number set seems to be a variation on longitude andlatitude.
Incantation: "Heart of the south, eye of the north, fingertip of the west, foot of the east, arrive with the wind and depart with the rain."

61. Rikujōkōrō (六杖光牢, Six Rods Prison of Light)
Summons six thin, wide beams of light that slam into a target's midsection, holding them in place. The target is then unable to move any part of their body including the parts that were not struck b the beams

Zanpakutô Spirit Name: Boukun Enkou
Appearance: The spirit manifestion known as Boukun Enkou is somewhat a burning white dragon behemoth almost a big human who was engulfed in lava and now looking at a burning white monster. Boukun had a very serious attitude when Rieiji comes to talk or train with him really the spirit cares for his master hoping that nothing bad happens to him. He maybe cocky and battle harden in deep down he does care for his creator which took a long time throughtout the academy years to make the spirit.
Inner World: The monster's spirit world is a burning forest. The Burning Forest is an immolated forest located in the spirit realm of Reiji's Zanpakutō. There is a great fire in the center of the forest, as well as numerous lava-emitting spores. There is no green vegetation in this forest whatsoever

Sealed Zanpakutô Apperance : Boukun Enkou is a sword of basic size and construction. It’s designs are the most defining factor that distinguishes the Zanpakutō from all the rest. The scabbard encasing the sword is a plain bright crimson red, and extending from the bottom of the sheath is a white flame design that travels a quarter of the way up scabbard.

Sealed Zanpakutô Abilities: Hiten Mitsurugi-Ryu: Ryutsuisen(Dragon Hammer Slash) = Jumps up in the air really high and then strikes down hard from above.
Hiten Mitsurugi-Ryu: Ryu Kan Sen(Rising Wind Dragon Slash) = Lunges toward enemy using a very powerful twist of the body doing a sideways slash.

Hiten Mitsurugi-Ryu: Ryusosen(Double Dragon Slash) = Multiple Slashes against enemy.

Hiten Mitsurugi-Ryu: Kogarashi Tsumuji Arashi (no translation) = First he starts off turning around and doing one hit, then jumps and hits again, then uses the turning momentum to go into a spin and slicing again. Spin goes vertically, not horizontally. Now for the two most powerful techniques that Kenshin learns from his master Hiko Seijuuro in the series.

Hiten Mitsurugi-Ryu: Ouki Ama Kakeru Ryu No Hirameki(Heaven's Soaring Dragon Slash) = THE SUCCESION TECHNIQUE. Normally when using the Battojutsu, the right leg is placed in front of the left leg so as not to cut one's leg off when drawing your sword from the left, but with this one put his or her left leg in front giving your attack the most power it can get, and he or she must twist his or her body at the right time so as not to cut his or her leg off. In order to do this he must have a strong will to live. This move is actually a combination of two, because if this move is executed properly, if the first hit is blocked, then the person spins around, and slices again. It works because apparently after the first strike, the sword somehow makes a kindof vortex, sucking in the enemy, allowing the person to be close enough to be sliced again, kind of like a vacuum.

PhatomTech: (Does your character have a PhatomTech brain installed? If so, you'll be able to qualify for upgrade at the Cybermind or add other Cybernetic parts to your character to make them stronger)

Release: "Light The Way & Burn Boukun Enkou"

Shikai Description: The shikai of the sword known as Boukun Enkou, has a form that suits it’s dark name. Taking the shape of large serrated scimitar roughly 5 feet in length and 3 inches in width. It bares considerable weight and adding momentum to it’s destructive potential. Along its dark steel sides are small designs of little white wisps of flames streaming all the way to where a hand-guard should be present. It’s handle is merely wrapped tightly together by a dark crimson fabric, with a metal ring roughly 4 inches in diameter severing as the pommel to this malicious weapon

Shikai Abilities: Kashou Renda: With a simple spin of the Zanpakutō, Boukon can create about seven burning rocks from the air swirling around the blade. They appears small at first but once the Zanpakutō points at his enemy. The one the burning rocks starts developing heavy mass becoming stonger once it hits it feel like being hit with hot lava. The blast radius is about 2 yards which it feels like 20 big grenades all hitting at once. The pain from it is strictly painful. Reiji can only can use the attack three times yet he can summon 7 rocks the first time, 6 the second and and 5 the third time.

Nenshousupea: The blade will start to glow red and then six medium size fireballs will started circling around the sword. Then Reiji will start to point at the opponent then one of the fireballs with reshaping itself into a medium sized spear and quickly attack the enemy in a devastating burning spearlike blast attack. It had range 25 feet almost like a modified targeted fire arrow but the downsize about it is it needs to be shot just right for th impact to hit with accuracy. This can produce extreme damage to an enemy when shot correctly if isn't shot correctly then several damage will be done. It feels like a shape punch to gut when one of these spears hit the enemy. To stronger enemies it feels like a pinching stab attack.

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R P S A M P L E

Roleplay Sample: The guy was having trouble sleeping...
Reiji was having nightmares again still he couldn't understand what they meant maybe it was all the experimentation that he went through over the years. He was fearing that most of his memories were not his and that they belong to someone else. He remembers a human by the name Balzar Shadirath who was maybe similiar to Soi Fon but a medum size elf midget. Dark Balzar and then he shook Balzar's hand and then Balzar started waking up from his dream then Haji started clapping yet telling him that he just passed the first part of the test. Haji told Balzar that his temptation of the soul training was completed that the dark reiatsu was within his system now. Yet that Haji summoned of his disciples to join them then somebody started walking to them. Haji called him Taimak yey this was goigng to be Balzar's training partner for the beginning of this training. He gave up all friendship to learn this ancient evil power so their was no turning back for him now. Balzar started getting into a fighting stance and Taimak finally got into his fighting stance too. This was going to be a hard battle as the student started charging directly at the young warrior using hammering blows and hitting him on his backside. Balzar punched Taimak in the face throwing the guy to the ground but the ninja was back to his feet using some judo kicks knocking the young warrior to the ground. Rage started building up with the young warrior he wanted to kicks this guy's ass and then he charged at Taimak. He started to mount himself doing some hard punching to the student's face and started using this into something like a combo. Taimak kicked off Balzar allowing himself to fire some fireball attacks directly at the young warrior and balzar tried dodging. Haji shook his head alerting Balzar to stop and then he wonders why as Taimak's attack struck Balzar's backside. Something he wasn't expecting and then Haji appraoch Balzar hoping to give him some direction. He told him in order for his evil power to work he must endure some pain, Balzar didn't think much of it at the time but still he wanted this power. Haji thought Balzar needed enough pain in order to draw out the first form of this power the reiatsu and the user must be angry. Then he thought the pillars of fire would be the best way to summon out the first form. Balzar was instructed to sit down and endure the pain then the young warrior started to sit down. Then for some reason it started to get hot and Balzar didn't like it but Haji told him to sit back down and take the pain. The guy gave a dirty look to Balzar but however the young warrior sat back at the heat was becoming harder and hotter on his body. Then his muscles started to ache a bit then he started feeling a weird sensation within his reiatsu. Haji knew his body was ready and then he asked Balzar to bring forth the child of darkness bring him and his reiatsu out into the open. Balzar slowly started to meditate returning into his dream state and then saw that Dark Balzar was gone. But somebodye else took his place and then the guy looked angry yet he started looking around until he sees Balzar. The teenager started getting up and drawing his sword directly but Balzar started to realize who this kid was something from the technique he was learning maybe he was a dark part of him. Balzar started alkign over the teenager seeing what he was wanting and why was his hair on fire. The teenager wanted to know his own name and then he started getting a headache but then he started looking at Balzar thinking he was the enemy. The teenager started grabbing his flame sword and he looked pretty cool but this guy was angry. He started using his flame sword and Balzar blocked his attack with his amerasu flame sword wondering what happen the guy wanted to know his name. He started attacking Balzar quickly and sharp thrusts with his black sword and then he manages to trip Balzar as the young warrior started to loose his footing. Balzar got back on point and started attacking the guy with his own flame sword but the guy was quicker then Balzar realized. Balzar managed to touch him but he started feeling his hand burning and then quickly he backs away trying to cool down his hand. The flame teenager started charging looking angry then Balzar smack his head thinking he remembers this guy. Then the flame teenager started charging at him as Balzar looked at the flame teenager and then he said his name. Balzar called him Necro then the teenager stops feeling his headache was gone and seeming more calm then before. He lowers his sword feeling a bit better but he draws his sword at Balzar saying this wasn't over that he must take on three challenges before achieving Haji's acceptance and the power of the Satsui no Hadō. Necro was first challenge and now that he knew his name Balzar would have to fight him and then the teenager got ready attacking Balzar with some swift movements and then Balzar kept blocking with his flame sword. Balzar started to noctice the speed on this guy and yet this person was a part of him, he calms down and continues fighting this flame teenager. Then the guy started using a flame technique which Balzar never heard of before and then flames started coming out like a machine gun. Balzar knew now that he would have to fight him as he was running for cover the flame teenager started looking for him. Balzar was in hiding and then he started remembering his training that he would have to embrace his dark side. Finally the flame teenager found him and slash Balzar directly in the leg which Balzar finally decided to give up his friendship to some of his friends and embrace his dark side. It wasn't easy for him just to say goodbye to everything he cared deeply about but then his red eyes started glowing. He attacked the flame teenager, Balzar embraced the dark reiatsu attacking the flame teenager in a rage. The flame teenager started backing away attacking balzar with the same attack from before but Balzar actually dodged the attack with some quick reflexes from his years of judo training. He managed to punch the guy directly in the face but the flames were burning his hand yet again. Balzar remembers Haji talking about pain that he must endure but then he grabs the flame sword within his other hand and then starts to pierce the teenager's stomach forcing it through. Then Necro looks at Balzar saying the lesson was and that the temptation of the soul training was complete. The last part of the training was for Balzar to accept Necro to become as one. Balzar thought long and hard about this and then talked about people pushing him around when he was a child and he taked about with Necro on his side that people won't talk about him anymore. Balzar again talked about every hero has a dark side and Necro was just the beginning. Necro started looking at Balzar thinking that he was kinda crazy but he must have a reason for creating him. Reiji wakes up in cold sweat yelling yet hoping to wonder if he was once Balzar maybe it was a fragment to his past or something of a warning which he needed to watch out for.

Xiaomu started jumping on the bed hoping to wake him up but she sees that he was awoke maybe he was having bad dream again an needed some help. She asked if he was having that dream again and he nods, Reiji told Xiaomu that maybe just myabe that he was once human and that these nightmares were fragment of his past. He does remember being human and receiving something evil and it was training maybe to become evil, Reiji started crying he didn't want this is was a horrible memory. Xiaomu started rubbing his back hoping to calm him down telling him that everything was goign to be alright that it was just a memory nothing more
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S K I L L S H E E T

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General Skills

Durability: Beginner
General Speed: Adept/
Strength: Adept
Weapon Skill: Advanced

Racial Skills

Hoho: Adept
Kidō: Advanced
Zanjutsu: Adept
Hakuda: Beginner

Wed Dec 14, 2011 10:48 am

He's finished

Fri Dec 23, 2011 8:48 pm

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First off, I'd like to say this- If your going to take the time to copy/paste your abilities, Please take the time to correct any names that aren't associated with the move or person that's being applied to.

Hiten Mitsurugi-Ryu: Kuzuryusen (Nine Headed Dragon Flash) = Attack learned before the most powerful succesion technique. Strikes with the sword nine times on the 9 vital points, head, right leg, left leg, right arm, left arm, between the legs, the chest, right shoulder, and left shoulder, making this move virtually impossible to block.

Zefonse: ....That looks familiar... But, I'm not too sure....

Kashou Renda: With a simple spin of the zanpakuto, Boukon can create about seven burning rocks from the air swirling around the blade. They appears small at first but once the zanpakuto points at his enemy. The one the burning rocks starts developing heavy mass becoming stonger once it hits it feel like being hit with hot lava. The pain from it is strictly painful. He can only use this only seven times

How many of them can you summon at once ? Do they have a blast radius if connected with the ground or an enemy ?

Kashou Oshibakuha: This attack is accomplished by finding the black burning fissure between colliding burning flames. Once this fissure is found, the wielder of zanpakuto can swing the sword into the fissure, which releases a powerful pressure wave that has the strength to kill hollows or
seriously hurt enemies.

How high is the wave that your firing ? For that matter, How large is the fissure you're creating ? Explanations are a must!!!!

Nenshousupea: The blade will start to glow red and then six medium size fireballs will started circling around the sword. Then Reiji will start to point at the opponent then one of the fireballs with reshaping itself into a medium sized spear and quickly attack the enemy in a devastating burning spearlike blast attack. It had range 75 feet almost like a modified targeted fire arrow but the downsize about it is it needs to be shot just right for th impact to hit with accuracy. This can produce extreme damage to an enemy when shot correctly if isn't shot correctly then several damage will be done. It feels like a shape punch to gut when one of these spears hit the enemy. To stronger enemies it feels like a pinching stab attack.

Because you don't have a Bankai anymore due to your story, I would Imagine having a blast radius of 75 feet would be a bit over the top. Tone down the AOE.

Until Then!

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Tue Dec 27, 2011 10:48 am

Ok I've fixed him.....

Thu Dec 29, 2011 8:06 pm

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Kashou
Oshibakuha: This attack is accomplished by finding the black burning
fissure between colliding burning flames. Once this fissure is found,
the wielder of zanpakuto can swing the sword into the fissure, which
releases a powerful pressure flame wave that has the strength to kill
hollows or seriously hurt enemies. The pressure wave is almost a fast
lightning flame attack once the blade hits the fissure unleashing it
fury. The fissure looks like a shattered dimensional gateway of fire and
shadow fire.

As Yuri has said before how high is it and how large is the fissure? I'm only seeing what it looks like and how the pressure is, not how high. Give something to compare to these too but not too large.
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Fri Dec 30, 2011 12:56 pm

Alright I've removed the move it was causing too much problems

Fri Dec 30, 2011 5:31 pm

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Tier: 2-2-