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Jellal Fernandes
Tue Nov 15, 2011 3:10 am
[ V i z a r d T e m p l a t e ]
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General Information
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Name: Jellal Fernandes
Appearance Age: 26
True Age:567
Gender: Male
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Overall Apperance
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Appearance:
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He is 170 cm tall and weighs 55 kg. He has blue hair and a reddish tattoo across his right eye.He usually wears a white jacket which has long sleeves and a collar which black in colour and has an arrow pattern on it. He wears long white trousers and black shoes. Under his white jacket is a purple singlet which is made out of fire proof material. He also wears a dark blue coat outside his clothes.
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Personality
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Personality:
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Jellal was a cold and an unfriendly person.He does not like to get involve with other people's problem.He would hit anyone who provoked him, and cursed anyone who bothered him. This made him hated by other people , especially their friends. But , his parents still love him so his parents decided to teach him to be nice and polite. They had thought him everything they know and Jellal was slowly progressing. His parents tried to not pushing him too far. As the years passed by , his parents effort was quite futile. He was partly rude and cold and nice and polite. His friends also helped his parents to teach him a lesson. After a few years , his friends and parents did changed him. Now , most would consider his personality to be very laid back and friendly. He is almost always polite, and will still and listen to just about anyone. Always thinking of the lives of others before himself, he often puts himself in harm's way for other people's sakes.He is seen as a true gentleman throughout his ventures, but he hides the most strife and anger.
He is usually nice and polite unless he was in battle. If he were to be in battle , he will get very serious. He tries to prove his strength and always try to find out his opponent's weaknesses but unless he was in a party. He will give chances to his allies. He is also helpful. He just loves to help other people. If there were many enemies against him alone , he can easily beat up his enemies but if he was in a party , he will let his friends to kill some.Deep down he is a rather thoughtful person who enjoys the tiny pleasures of others. He is happier watching happy interactions between his friends then jumping right in the middle of things, only piping in when talked to directly. There is also a tiny sarcastic, snaky streak at his heart. He loves to embarrass or shock others, all while down playing what he is doing. He can say some rather crude things, but in such a way that it’s hard to tell. He get’s a kick out of playing subtle games with others.
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Zanpukto
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Zanpakuto Name: Tengoku (天国, Heaven)
Zanpakuto Spirit Appearance:
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Zanpakuto Spirit Personality: He is an individual of great resolve to protect the companions he has
made, doing whatever must be done. Later he is depicted as comfortable
with leadership, as Jellal look to him for decisions
he dispenses without hesitation.
There have been many parallels between Jellal and his Zanpakuto Spirit, Tengoku,
including physical appearance, Fighting Techniques, and Weapons used.
Both of their personalities are likely to be very similar as it has been
shown that they have similar goals and ways of standards.
Inner World:
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His Inner World is like a place which floats above the skies. The are a few broken pieces of land floating everywhere. There seems to be blue crystal-like gems below the land. Are are living things such as plants and a water resource which falls like a waterfall. Each land has rock pillars on it.Usually the wind blows in the area, giving off a cool windy breeze.
Sealed Zanpakuto Appearance:
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His sealed Zanpakuto looks like a normal katana. It is black in color and it also has a black sheath. The length of its blade is about 1 meter and the width of its blade is 5 centimeters.
Release Phrase: Came from the Heavenly Skies,Tengoku
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Shikai Information
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Shikai Appearance:
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In his Shikai, he does not change in appearance. When he is in Shikai, his sealed Zanpakuto decipates into thin air. On both of his hands, a pair of gloves will show up. The gloves weigh at least 5 kg each.Although they weigh that much, to him it as light as a feather. The gloves are made out of fire proof material and on the gloves are strong durable iron. Although the gloves have iron on it, the iron does not conduct electricity.
Shikai Abilities:
Heavenly Beams-User releases from his/her hands several beams that attack his/her target. If the target is fast enough, the target will be able to dodge it.Should the target attempt to escape, the beams will subsequently follow the target.
Heavenly Blast-User closes his fist, except for two fingers and swipes them backwards. A big sphere of yellow Spiritual Energy appears and rushes towards the target.The sphere moves at 80 km/h and has a range of 2 meters maximum.
Heaven Breakdown-By using Spiritual Energy, the user swipes his hand and the ground in front of him breaks, making everything on top of it fall.It only has a range of 1 meter and it can be dodged if the target is able to fly/levitate or run very fast to an area more than a 1 meter distance.
Sacred Song-The user creates five Spiritual seals on top of the target, using his fingers, which release a concentrated beam of magical energy directly below it, attacking the target. It will take a while for the user to prepare this technique so an ally must distract the target or the target must be unconscious for a while.
Heaven Palm-User grabs his arm with his other hand, and straightens his palm. A ball of Spiritual Energy appears in his palm, which then is shot at the target to push it as an invisible wall.It travels at least 50 km/h.
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Bankai Information
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Bankai Appearance:In his Bankai, his Shikai gloves will decipate in thin air. Then, five staves suddenly appear in front of him. If needed, he keeps al his five staves on his back with a green sash to hold it.First staff is a long wooden staff like others and its head seems like a joker hat.Second staff is a long wooden staff like others and its head had a huge one red eye that has a yellow sphere.Third staff is a long wooden staff like others and its head is fan-shaped. This is his primary staff.Fourth staff is a long wooden staff like others and its head is a three-spiked fork.Fifth staff is a long wooden staff like others and it has two head. Second head has a three rings.
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Bankai Abilities:
Meteor-The user's body is surrounded by Spiritual Energy, allowing him to move through the air at incredible speeds. Even if someone could detect his trajectory, it is near impossible to catch him. With his speed, the user assaults his opponents with quick but powerful melee attacks.
Grand Chariot-The user summons seven pillars of light from the sky and strikes the enemy with all of them at once. It takes a big amount of Spiritual Energy but the damage caused by the technique is severe.
Altairis -The user crosses his arms above his head to begin casting the technique. As he prepares to fire the technique, all nearby shadows are drawn towards him. The user then unleashes a black orb with small white lights, similar to the night sky. The orb appears to be incredibly dense, and may hold a tremendous amount of gravity to crush its opponents. Its power is said to be comparable to the power of an actual meteor.It takes a while for the user to finish charging the technique.
Heavenly Arrows-A technique that is similar to Heavenly Beams. User puts both his/her hands to his/her sides from where he/she releases several arrows of Spiritual Energy towards his/her target. It is more stronger and faster than Heavenly Beams.
Skyscraper-The user first plants his five staves into the ground, creating the illusion that the ground is destroyed and the enemy is propelled several hundred meters into space. The enemy is then tied up with four belts and a frog-like, dragonic demon opens a hole in space and comes out of it, reaching to attack the enemy. This technique is used to break down the mind of the enemy or distract them long enough to prepare another attack.
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Inner Hollow & Mask
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Inner Hollow Description:
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His inner Hollow is 165 cm tall and weighs 45 kg. He has yellow hair which spikes backward and black eyes. There is a lightning bolt scar across his right eye. He wears a black sleeveless shirt and black pants which ends below his knees. He also wears a pair of black shoes and a long whitish belt on his waist.
Inner Hollow Personality: His inner hollow is quiet, reserved, and generally goes with the flow. He can be a pretty
chill guy and quite easy to get along with, once you look past the whole
'man of a few words' thing. He reaches out to others and gains their
trust. He forms bonds with others and helps them out, pretty much only
when he is asked to, sometimes even at the cost of himself. He is all
right with the fact he is either used as an emotional crutch or even a
sacrifice. He knows when to give people space when confronted with their
own problems.
Like his power, he is everything and nothing at the same
time. However, despite all the bonds and friendships he is
made, he is still a loner. He is content on leading his missions in
life alone and seems to be fine with this. Any burden, problem, or
internal conflict he is got, he bears silently. He opens himself to let others approach, but he never really lets anyone in. Even
in the end, only a very small handful of people somewhat understand him.
Inner Hollow Powers:
Lightning Body-User is able to transform their body into a lightning bolt that can move around freely at high speed, avoid enemy strikes, and attack anything it touches.
Lightning Heavenward Halberd-User lifts his/her hands and forms lightning between them, creating a very large spear out of it. He/she then hurls such spear at the enemy.
Lightning Breakdown Fist-User extends his/her clenched fist forward as if he/she were punching while generating his/her Spiritual Energy, from which a larger version of his/her fist composed of lighting is created and sent towards the opponent at high speed, generating a massive sparking explosion on contact.
Lightning Roar-User gathers lightning in his/her mouth and releases it in a concentrated, destructive blast, capable of destroying everything in a wide area in front of him/her. The special effect of this attack is that, even if the targets survive, the lightning paralyzes them, preventing them from escaping the user's next attack. By moving his/her head around as he/she casts it, user can also employ this spell in an arched trajectory, in order to hit enemies which aren't directly in front of him/her.
Raging Bolt-The user raises his clenched fist in the air and a large bolt of lightning will then descend upon the target, possibly completely vaporizing him.
Hollow Mask Appearance:
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His Hollow Mask looks like an average round hollow mask. It has red pattern markings around its head and has grey pattern marking above its teeth. It has holes at the eye position where the wielder can see through it. There are two white fangs sticking out below its chin.
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Visored Powers
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Visored Powers:
Enhanced Speed-While wearing his mask, his already formidable speed is greatly enhanced. His attacks also become so fast that the opponent cannot even perceive them until after they are hit. He also becomes fast enough to outrun his own energy attacks, allowing him to strike and enhance them or launch simultaneous attacks at the opponent from different angles.
Cero (虚閃 (セロ), sero; Spanish for "Zero", Japanese for "Hollow Flash", Doom Blast in the Viz translation, "Empty Disaster" if the kanji is literally translated) is a form of attack used by Menos, Arrancar and Visored. As a standard energy blast, it consists of firing a powerful blast of concentrated spiritual energy at the target. While in most cases it is fired from the mouth, some Arrancar and Visored are capable of firing Cero from their hands, fingers and other parts of their bodies. This often requires the user to under take a specific pose, with Coyote Starrk being the only exception.
Enhanced Spiritual Power-While wearing the mask, the spiritual power he possesses becomes even greater than before. It has been noted multiple times that with the mask on his spiritual energy changes into something similar to that of a Hollow.
Enhanced Strength-While using the Hollow mask, he gains a substantial increase in strength.
Abilities-When he turns to his masked state, all the abilities that his Inner Hollow,Shikai and Bankai has will be able to be used by him.
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Resurreccion
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Resurreccion Appearance:
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His Resureccion looks like a Nine Tailed Demon Fox. His Resurreccion takes form of a fox with black fur. It has the characteristics of a fox such as its sharp claws and teeth. It also has nine long black tails. On his shoulders there is an iron armor on each side. The armor is very durable and it is as light as a feather. The armor cannot be broken by anyone who is lower tier than him but an evenly tier may crack it. Only someone who is two tiers or higher than him can break the armor.
Resurreccion Abilities:
Enhanced Cero-His cero has become exceedingly more powerful, capable of causing large scale destruction to large portion of the surroundings.
Enhanced Spiritual Power-His spiritual power is unknown, but his already immense spiritual power increases drastically.
Immense Strength-He is able to effortlessly throw a large portion of rock with his single hand. The strength of all the abilities of his Shikai, Bankai and Inner Hollow will be increased by x3.
High-Speed Regeneration: Like some Hollows, this form shows the ability to instantly regenerate any wound and even a missing limb.
Enhanced Speed: While in this state, his speed also increases greatly and he manages to move at exceedingly incredible speeds
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History
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~Alive Arc~
Jellal was born on 25th December in a normal family. His mother works as a teacher, and his father works as a manager in a company. Jellal wanted to follow his
father's footsteps as a manager in a company , especially a food
company because he loves to eat food. Since his father and mother are
always busy , Jellal only walks to school. The school is a stone's throw
from his house. Although they are busy , they also spends most of their
time on their son during weekends.One day , his house was on fire while his mother was cooking. She left the oil too long that it caused a fire. The fire soon reached the gas tank and the gas tank implode.
Luckily, Jellal and his family is somewhere far. When they came back to their house, they saw that their house was on fire. Their neighbors quickly called the fire department. The firefighters arrived and tried to put out the fire , but it was too late. Their house had turned into ashes. The fire also spread to the other houses but only some parts of the house was destroy. They had no choice as they had no where to live so they decided to move to their cousins who live in the city. All was fine but the tragic incident still haunts Jellal. It seemed that Jellal's existence was just futile as another incident happed to him. He got kidnapped by a
mysterious person who wore a ski mask , a jacket , and a pair of gloves. His parents took a few weeks to find him. They then
found him in an old cabin. As his parents about to approach Jellal,
the mysterious person shoots Jellal's parents, in front of his eyes. He
felt angry so he quickly beat the person who shoot his parents. Later ,
that person died. As the years pass by , he decided to
move to his uncle who live in a quiet place. His uncle was a police officer
and sometimes Jellal would help him in his investigation.
~Death Arc~
Jellal was helping his uncle in one of his investigation. The investigation
was about a robbery in a bank. There was a robber secretly hiding in a
secret place because he had no time to run away. Jellal was alone
investigating an area. The robber saw him was about to shoot him but his
gun was out of ammo. When the robber refills his gun , Jellal quickly
heard it and he quickly beat him up before the robber had a chance to
shoot him. Then , the robber's allies quickly came.Jellal beat them all
hands down but there was another robber hiding. Without wasting anytime ,
the robber shoots Jellal.He ignored the pain and quickly beat up the
robber. He was coughing blood and blood was dripping from his body.
In a few minutes , his uncle came. He saw Jellal was bleeding and quickly called the ambulance. The ambulance quickly came and brought Jellal to the hospital. There , he was recovering from his wounds and injuries. Later, he was discharged from the hospital but he could not help his uncle in a while. After a month , he was cured and was in a pink of health.
One day , a postman came to send some mails. His cousin was alone that time as Jellal had gone to school. His cousin opened the door and greeted the postman. Without wasting any time , the postman quickly took his cousin away and brought her as far as possible. Soon , school ended and Jellal went home. As soon as he reached home , he saw no one was around so he decided to call his friends. After a while , his friends came and quickly tried to find his cousin. His friends suspected that she might be lost. Jellal saw a letter in the mailbox and quickly opened it.The letter said that "If you want to see her. Please meet me alone in XXXXX". After seeing this , he quickly showed it to everyone. Everyone suggested that he should not go alone. He decided to bring his uncle, his friends and the other police to the scene. Ass soon as he reached the place , everyone was hiding. Only Jellal,the postman and his cousin. The postman said that should Jellal do anything suspicious, he will kill his cousin. After hearing this , all the police came out and attacked the postman. The postman felt very angry and shoot Jellal. His sight was getting blurry and he had hard time to breathe. Soon , he died while blood was flowing out from his body.
~Wandering soul arc~
Jellal was a
wandering soul since the day of his death. He just wonders around the
world but sometimes , he just goes to his grave. Looking at his parents' grave and remember the good time and the bad times that had passed. He also just goes to the bar or pub just to sit as he cannot do anything as a soul. The good thing is that he can go anywhere he wanted to. He went to all the historic sites and sometimes play in fun fairs. He loved playing the roller coaster as it is very thrilling to play with. Going up and down which was very exiting. Looking at the happy faces of the people around him. One day , he was at
his grave , sitting.
Suddenly , he heard loud footsteps approaching
him. He felt scared when he heard it so he quickly ran. He ran as fast
as he could to escape but it was futile as it was the footsteps are
getting nearer and nearer, became louder and louder. Suddenly , he fell
on the ground because he tripped over a stone. The loud was coming from a
hollow. He was about to be eaten by the hollow . Suddenly , there was a
soul wearing a black Shihakusho appeared in front of him and the
hollow. The person told Jellal that he is a Shinigami. The shinigami
also told him that shinigami are supposed to kill hollows. Without
wasting anytime , the shinigami killed the hollow . Later , Jellal was
passed on to Rukongai.
~Shino Academy arc~
Since he was
passed on to Rukongai , he lived there for a hundred years.He wanted to
become like the shinigami that saved him from a hollow on that fateful
day. One day , he went to a shop to buy some groceries. Unexpectedly ,
there was a shinigami in that certain shop. It is the same shinigami
that saved him the other day. The shinigami felt intense presence from Jellal's soul.The shinigami asked him if he wanted to go to the Shino
Academy to become a shinigami. He refused and went back home. When
he was on the way back , he heard an explosion. It was from one of the
house that was next to his. Then the fire spread to his house and burn
into ashes. Jellal felt very sad but his neighbors asked him to stay with them for the mean time until the house was rebuild. He felt that living in there is almost has the same environment as his house.
After a week or so , the house was completely rebuild. It looked brand new. He went back to his house and continued to live there. One day , he was hanging out with his friends. They were about to play with one another in the forest. The forest which was dark and quite spooky. After a while, the skies turned dark as it was about to rain. The wind blew strongly which looked like a thunderstorm was about to come.Suddenly, many people came and they brought swords. Soon , they tried to kill Jellal and his friends. They quickly ran as fast as they can to avoid their death.Soon, he remembered that the Shinigami asked him to go to the Shino Academy to become a shinigami. So , he decided to go to Shino Academy to become a shinigami. At the Academy, he was very skillful. The boundaries among Jellal and the others was large. He was very skillful in Zanjutsu but especially Hakuda and Hoho. His combo of Zanjutsu and Hoho or Hakuda and Hoho were very amazing. Kido on the other hand, he just suck at it. Although, he was able to graduate. It turns out that his Zanjutsu,Hakuda and Hoho was just enough to make him graduated but as time passed by , he tried to overcome his weak Kido and it turns out that he did made it. He cannot wait to joined a division.
~Shinigami Arc~
Jellal was a shinigami.After his graduation , he joined the 2nd Division as he had wanted to join that division since the Shinigami that saved him was the captain of the very same division. He was an unseated officer. He worked hard to become a seated officer. He was upset that he was an unseated officer even though he trained so hard. So, he decided to try even harder to get a spot as a seated officer,especially the 3rd Seat.One day , he decided to train his Shikai. It took him years to even learn the name of his Zanpaktou. Suddenly , as he was training ,he heard someone talking. He stopped and looked around to see who was that. After since there was no one around , he ignored it and continued training. Suddenly , he was brought to another world. Then , a shadow coming towards him. The shadow soon to reveal their identity , one standing 165 centimetres tall and weighs 45 kg. It turned out to be some kind of manifested spirit in Jellal's Zanpakuto. After introducing each other , he was brought to the place where he was before. Completely ignoring it , he quickly continued training. Soon , he felt an intense presence coming from his zanpakuto. Spiritual energy appears on the sword and suddenly all around his body. Then his zanpakuto's spirit told him the name and the incantation to release the Shikai. After a while , he released his Shikai.His zanpaktou changes into a new form. Feeling exited about it and telling to others. The captain heard about it and the captain quickly made him the 3rd Seat.
Although , Jellal had achieved his goal, he now wanted to become Vice-Captain and to master Shikai because he felt unpleasant just as a 3rd seat. He decided to train to master his Shikai. He even will risk his life just to master his Shikai. He trained in the inner world and he trained with his zanpaktou's spirits. His training is just like bankai training but a bit easier. He trained hard enough to master his Shikai.After a few years , he mastered his Shikai. He wanted to train for Bankai but he cannot as he currently has not enough power to master Bankai. The captain tested his Skills and the captain was realy impressed. Few months later, the captain and the vice captain fought with a group of hollows. It was tough as there were also vasto lorde level hollows. Unfortunately, the vice-captain for the 2nd Division died because he was killed by a vasto lorde. Everyone attended his funeral and the captain decided not to pick a new vice captain for the mean time. A few years later,the captain decided to pick a new vice-captain. He chose Jellal as the new Vice-Captain of the 2nd Division because of his skills and his contribution as the 3rd Seat of the Division.
~Vizard Arc~
He was the new Vice Captain of the 2nd Division. He trained everyday to become Captain of the Division. There is a field which is especially for the 2nd Division's members because the 2nd Division is also known as Onmitsukido. There he trained and trained because long ago, his prime target was to achieve Bankai before becoming Captain. He trained outside and inside his Inner World. He trained with the Captain outside and his Zanpakuto spirit inside. After years of working hard, he finally achieve Bankai and it was not long then he mastered it. His Captain was very impressed, making him the prime candidate to become a Captain of a Division. Years after serving as the Vice Captain, he decided to fight a group of very strong hollows. He fought hard and finally he was able to defeat them all. He wanted to become stronger so he decided to train with a Kido user. The Kido user used a lot of high ranked Kido but everything was no match for Jellal.
Unfortunately, one Kido got a flaw it in. When the Kido user casted a Kido on him, Hollow Spiritual Energy started to gather around him and tried to hollow him. He was almost turned into a hollow but he was strong enough to prevent that, leaving only a mask on his face which later disappeared. After that, he left the Soul Society and stepped down from the ranked Vice Captain. He trained and trained everyday in his Inner World. There, he found his Hollow Side. They started to fight and the fight was very intense. The sound of swords clashed towards each other was ringing in everyone's ear. Later, he was able to defeat his Hollow side and came to an agreement. Soon, he was able to use the mask more freely, longer and efficiently. He currently looking for the other Vizards in the Spiritual World.
RP Sample
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Role Play Sample:
- From a Naruto site:
The bandits were powerful indeed. They did put up a fight for Itachi but for him, it was just a piece of cake. He threw some kunai and shuriken towards the bandits which they later fell for the trap as they dodged the attack. He wanted them to dodge the kunai and shuriken because as soon as he threw them, he did some hand signs and casted a fire jutsu which did injured the bandits badly.The other bandits who were a bit injured retreated because they were scared that they will have the same fate as the others. After that, he went back to the Hokage Building to report about the mission's progress. The Hokage rewarded him for completing the mission. The next day, there were no bandits heard coming back. Later, he headed back to the Hokage Building to get another mission. The mission was quite simple as it was a mission to deliver some things to the other village. On the way there, he was stopped by some bandits. It also seemed that they wanted revenge. Although, they were still no match for Itachi as they were badly hurt as soon as he casted a jutsu on them. Then, he continued on the mission. The things were safe and sound as he sended the items to the village. He went back to Konohagakure to report the mission's progress to the Hokage. This time, the Hokage was not in the room nor in the building. He was somewhere in the village. Not long later, the Hokage came back and rewarded Itachi for completing the mission, again.
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Skill Sheet
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- Durability: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
- General Speed: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
- Strength: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
- Weapon Skill: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Racial Skills
- Hoho: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
- Cero/Bala/Kidou: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
- Zanjutsu: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
- Hakuda: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
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Hrm...
Heavenly Beams-User releases from his/her hands several beams that attack his/her target. If the target is fast enough, the target will be able to dodge it.Should the target attempt to escape, the beams will subsequently follow the target.
There needs to be a maximum time/distance that the beams can follow the target. If it just follows them forever, as implied here, that's not allowed.
Meteor-The user's body is surrounded by Spiritual Energy, allowing him to move through the air at incredible speeds. Even if someone could detect his trajectory, it is near impossible to catch him. With his speed, the user assaults his opponents with quick but powerful melee attacks.
Erm.. this is completely pointless, as they are EASILY tracked and caught, since if they're surrounded by spirit energy, any decent-level shinigami, arrancar, or what have you can trace that reiatsu.
Grand Chariot-The user summons seven pillars of light from the sky and strikes the enemy with all of them at once. It takes a big amount of Spiritual Energy but the damage caused by the technique is severe.
Altairis -The user crosses his arms above his head to begin casting the technique. As he prepares to fire the technique, all nearby shadows are drawn towards him. The user then unleashes a black orb with small white lights, similar to the night sky. The orb appears to be incredibly dense, and may hold a tremendous amount of gravity to crush its opponents. Its power is said to be comparable to the power of an actual meteor.It takes a while for the user to finish charging the technique.
All these need to have ways to dodge/evade/negate them listed.
Skyscraper-The user first plants his five staves into the ground, creating the illusion that the ground is destroyed and the enemy is propelled several hundred meters into space. The enemy is then tied up with four belts and a frog-like, dragonic demon opens a hole in space and comes out of it, reaching to attack the enemy. This technique is used to break down the mind of the enemy or distract them long enough to prepare another attack.
Lightning Body-User is able to transform their body into a lightning bolt that can move around freely at high speed, avoid enemy strikes, and attack anything it touches.
This is just.. no. I don't know what kind of irrelevant drivel is being spouted here, but.. no.
Lightning Roar-User gathers lightning in his/her mouth and releases it in a concentrated, destructive blast, capable of destroying everything in a wide area in front of him/her. The special effect of this attack is that, even if the targets survive, the lightning paralyzes them, preventing them from escaping the user's next attack. By moving his/her head around as he/she casts it, user can also employ this spell in an arched trajectory, in order to hit enemies which aren't directly in front of him/her.
Raging Bolt-The user raises his clenched fist in the air and a large bolt of lightning will then descend upon the target, possibly completely vaporizing him.
Besides the obvious stupidity, these abilities have OP wording and are.. badly planned in general, really. Yeah, that's a huge no. Plus, completely vaporizing? Uh... are you retarded? You need to list the effects on what different tiers would be, and NO complete vaporization.
Enhanced Speed-While wearing his mask, his already formidable speed is greatly enhanced. His attacks also become so fast that the opponent cannot even perceive them until after they are hit. He also becomes fast enough to outrun his own energy attacks, allowing him to strike and enhance them or launch simultaneous attacks at the opponent from different angles.
Too fast. Tone that WAY down. You don't get the luxury of being TEH FASTEST EVAR when people like shadin are around.
The armor is very durable and it is as light as a feather. The armor cannot be broken by anyone who is lower tier than him but an evenly tier may crack it. Only someone who is two tiers or higher than him can break the armor.
Erm.. that's.. too strong.. Really. Even for ress, tone it down. Sure, add this upgrade later when you're a higher tier, but you can't even HAVE auto-ress. OR bankai for that matter, so don't worry about it (wt)
Immense Strength-He is able to effortlessly throw a large portion of rock with his single hand. The strength of all the abilities of his Shikai, Bankai and Inner Hollow will be increased by x3.
Again, too strong. Tone that x3 down.
Now.. for history.. oh god..
He got kidnapped by a
mysterious person who wore a ski mask , a jacket , and a pair of gloves. His parents took a few weeks to find him. They then
found him in an old cabin. As his parents about to approach Jellal,
the mysterious person shoots Jellal's parents, in front of his eyes. He
felt angry so he quickly beat the person who shoot his parents.
If he could so easily beat the guy up... why not do it BEFORE his parents got shot? This is a REALLY petty and oblivious reason to give your character righteous anger. I don't like that at all.
There was a robber secretly hiding in a
secret place because he had no time to run away. Jellal was alone
investigating an area. The robber saw him was about to shoot him but his
gun was out of ammo. When the robber refills his gun , Jellal quickly
heard it and he quickly beat him up before the robber had a chance to
shoot him. Then , the robber's allies quickly came.Jellal beat them all
hands down but there was another robber hiding. Without wasting anytime ,
the robber shoots Jellal.He ignored the pain and quickly beat up the
robber. He was coughing blood and blood was dripping from his body.
In a few minutes , his uncle came. He saw Jellal was bleeding and quickly called the ambulance. The ambulance quickly came and brought Jellal to the hospital. There , he was recovering from his wounds and injuries. Later, he was discharged from the hospital but he could not help his uncle in a while. After a month , he was cured and was in a pink of health.
One day , a postman came to send some mails. His cousin was alone that time as Jellal had gone to school. His cousin opened the door and greeted the postman. Without wasting any time , the postman quickly took his cousin away and brought her as far as possible. Soon , school ended and Jellal went home. As soon as he reached home , he saw no one was around so he decided to call his friends. After a while , his friends came and quickly tried to find his cousin. His friends suspected that she might be lost. Jellal saw a letter in the mailbox and quickly opened it.The letter said that "If you want to see her. Please meet me alone in XXXXX". After seeing this , he quickly showed it to everyone. Everyone suggested that he should not go alone. He decided to bring his uncle, his friends and the other police to the scene. Ass soon as he reached the place , everyone was hiding. Only Jellal,the postman and his cousin. The postman said that should Jellal do anything suspicious, he will kill his cousin. After hearing this , all the police came out and attacked the postman. The postman felt very angry and shoot Jellal. His sight was getting blurry and he had hard time to breathe. Soon , he died while blood was flowing out from his body.
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YOU KNOW WHAT? FUCK THIS! I CAN'T EVEN STAND READING THE REST OF THIS TRIPE-CICLE. I CAN'T EVEN.. WHAT DID I JUST READ? EVERYONE ON THIS SITE HAS NOW LOST IQ JUST FROM THIS BEING HERE.
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IN OTHER WORDS.
I envy because of the heart.
I glutton because of the heart.
I covet because of the heart.
I am prideful because of the heart.
I sloth because of the heart.
I rage because of the heart.
Because of the heart...
I lust for everything about you.
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I glutton because of the heart.
I covet because of the heart.
I am prideful because of the heart.
I sloth because of the heart.
I rage because of the heart.
Because of the heart...
I lust for everything about you.
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Re: Jellal Fernandes
Wed Oct 03, 2012 8:57 pm
Moved to archives because this user has left!
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