Hana Kuroda (finished)

Tue May 03, 2011 11:39 pm

S HI N I G A M I

B A S I C I N F O R M A T I O N

Name: Hana Kuroda (First, Last)
Gender: Female
Age: 700
Appearance:

Hana is a bodaciously busty woman. She looks about twenty
years in age. An average facial structure. Perhaps a slightly smaller nose than
more girls. It’s more button sized than anything. She’s got a few freckles on
her nose as well. Though you can’t see them unless you look hard. She’s got a
small, tan birthmark on her neck as well. It’s heart shaped and about half the
size of a nickel.

Hana’s bust is about a D size. She does her makeup yes, though she only puts
eyeliner and a bit of lipgloss on. She’s really not the type of girl to spend
hours in front of the mirror. She finds doing that a waste of time. She’d
rather spend ten minutes getting ready, which includes getting dressed, washing
face, doing makeup, and finally doing her hair.

She’s got a rather shapely rear as well. She’s got long legs and rather large
feet for a girl. She has a strange habit of painting her fingernails. At least
once a week she feels the need to change the color. Perhaps to bring her
happiness or to symbolize something. Nobody knows. She has a habit of
favoriting new things. A new nail polish will win over all her others. That is
until she finds another new one. Then she’ll use that more often.

She also has a thing about panties. The girl has to have expensive and sexy
panties or none at all. But not only that they must be comfortable and light.
At home she likes to walk around in panties and a T-shirt. If someone decides
to visit she’ll throw a robe on. Also she doesn’t have very much muscle in her
upper body. She jokes that it goes to her breasts. Though her legs are a bit
more muscely than other shinigami women. This gives her more speed than
anything else.

She has blonde hair and blue eyes as well.

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P E R S O N A L I T Y

Personality: She’s got a flirty personality and loves to have fun. She’s very manipulative. She can be very untrusting as well
though she tries not to show that she doesn't trust someone too much. Because obviously then there would be a problem. It's better to have people think they are your friends than your enemies. This is an example of her manipulative nature. Even if she doesn't care about someone she'll still tease them. Making her appear to be the sisterly type. Which is perfectly fine with her. She prefers attention and popularity. Which shows the shallow side of her. She can hold a grudge. She still has some from her time in the Rukongai district. Quite a few are still in need of some castration. Though that wouldn't be enough for them.

At times she can be very fragile though she really tries
to cover it up. She's quite good at it. She hasn't had a weak moment in over two hundred years. Basically she does let her feelings get in the way of things. One trait she couldn't get rid of unfortunately. She can be a bitch if she doesn't like someone. Basically wanting to make their life hell for annoying her. She hates guys with sticks up their asses. One thing she found was that those kind of guys get annoyed by sex jokes. So, while everyone else is paying attention she'll come onto them. Though when it's just the two of them she'll try to make their life hell. She can't stand those types of guys if they rub her the wrong way.

One of her worst traits is her stubbornness. She refuses to lose.
She’ll fight until she is broken and bloody but she’ll still fight. She also seems very happy go lucky with everyone. Though of course on the inside she worries. About many things. She loves to tease guys and girls on occasion. She's not bisexual but making other straight females awkward is just too fun! Sex is also a drive for her. The
girl is just as easily seduced as she is seductive. She likes to use her looks
to manipulate. What good are those big breasts if you don't use them?

She's not loyal to the Sereitei. But she likes to remain powerful. She figures the Sereitei has the most power at the moment. Not to mention it's quite peaceful and not chaotic. She needs a safe place to go for R and R. In her mind the Sereitei is just too uptight. She likes to create her own little fun.

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B A C K G R O U N D

History/Background:

Living as a human:

Well Hana was born to a normal household. She lived in Salem. Her personality was completely different. She was shy, dull, and a was looked at as the model daughter to the whole town. She had a secret of course. She could speak to ghosts. At the time, she knew she could be trialed as a witch. Like any sane person at the time, (there weren't many) she kept this to herself and tried to ignore the dead. Though it's quite hard to ignore creepy people stalking you all the time. She got sick of it and at one point screamed in the face of a very persistent ghost. Unfortunately, there were other humans around at the time. Leading them to believe she was a witch. She was put no trial and sentenced to hanging with many of the other members of town. Her life ended at fifteen.

Rukongai:

The young woman awoke to find herself in one of the strangest places she had ever been. Rukongai had thieves, brutes, and many other unmentionable people as well. Growing up in a small religious town wasn't good for her. She had a hard time surviving. Not to mention being told she was dead and not being in "heaven" made her feel as if she really was damned as a witch. She did all she could to survive. Her personality changed drastically. She was cold and didn't care about anything except "living". She drank constantly. She became more fearless with her near death experiences. She didn't have any hope. Though a small ray of light shone. Once night a shinigami decided to hit the streets and head to the whore houses.

She wondered what he was doing there and who he was. Curiosity got the better of her and she asked around. She got more information on the shinigami and their lifestyle. She wanted in. This was her only hope. The sereitei would give her safety, security, and most of all something to live for. Killing hollows sounded nice as well. All her human life she had been weak. She wanted to be powerful. What else did she have to do? Stay in the Rukongai and waste away? She wasn't going to die. Unless killed of course. It would take time but she was going to be a shinigami no matter what.

The Rukon had changed her completely. She didn't care about anyone but herself. She didn't even care if she was damned. Her past life was behind her. She fought to live and tried to reach her goals. Letting nobody stop her. At this time she didnt let loose but enjoyed manipulating people, a skill she picked up quickly. She'd do anything to survive. Things like manipulating people who had clothes or money.

New life as a Shinigami:

After much hard work and practice, after about a hundred years Hana was finally able to make it into the shinigami academy. Her work had paid off. Not to mention it gave her something to live for and do in the Rukongai. Working towards a goal and actually getting there meant everything to Hana. Her personality began to change a bit more. She was now a bit more confident in her abilities. She was still cold and pretty average in everything at the academy. Though she began to let loose and have a bit more fun.

Graduation:

Hana had found the life in the Sereitei peaceful. She was still confident. But now she was happier and kinder. Though she was nothing like her human self. She had grown up more. She knew people could betray her and she decided not to trust anyone. She no longer thought as herself as damned. She was a free woman. As free as she could be. She loved every moment of it. The young shinigami was assigned as a tenth seat to squad three. Once again her hard work had paid off. She had snagged herself a seated position right after graduating. Not many got that chance.

Getting used to the Shinigami life:

Hana was ranking up slowly. It seemed like almost every fifty years she would gain herself another seat. Of course ranking up like this she was sent to other free spots in other divisions. She didn't mind. She wanted to gain a captains seat. THAT was her ultimate goal. To get to the top and to be able to have everyone look up to her. Also being able to be one of the strongest and have so much confidence in herself would also make her happy and feel accomplished. Hana watched as her friends from the academy chose one squad and stayed with it. Staying absolutely loyal to their captain. Hana DID want that. But her main goal was more important. She wasn't loyal to the Sereitei but she wouldn't mind being loyal to a great man or woman.

The mission:

Age: 367

This was a time where a small clan of Quincy's that had survived the Shinigami and Quincy war rebelled. They began gaining up on lowly Shinigami that left the Sereitei for hollow extermination missions. Hana and two others were still slightly wet behind the ears at this time. The three were ambushed. Hana was able to escape but barely. She had to lie low in the human world until backup arrived. Though the leader of the small group of Quincy's, Kimi Toudou, found her. The two had a bloody and brutal battle. At the time the Quincy woman was probably two seats more powerful than Hana. So the young Shinigami had to resort to other methods. She used her mind to trick the Quincy into attacking her. There Hana used her wits and her skills with her zanpakuto to lead the Quincy into her trap. There she used her rose technique to suck the rest of the woman's energy out. They had been fighting for so long. Both were equal in strength until Hana had taken the some of Kimi's energy and used it as her own. Thus she was able to gain more of an advantage and defeat the woman. With her head held high she came back to the Sereitei as a hero and gained a seat in rank. After the defeat of the leader reinforcements arrived to help.

Battling as a soldier against Aizen:

As the higher ups were battling Aizen Hana had the job of protecting normal citizens of Karakura from weaker Arrancar and hollows. It was a tough fight. As the waves of hollows continued Hana grew more tired. She was a fifth seat now. She continued to steal energy from her enemies with her zanpakuto ability. Though she was losing flowers fast. Her roses were almost gone. Hana then began to lead the hollows into a trap she set. Hana was pushed past her limits in this fight. Though she was able to overcome her enemies with the help of her squad members.

The present:

Hana has changed quite a bit. She's still a hard worker and is slowly getting closer to her dream. She's found one person who deserves her loyalty. She's more wild now She still acts like a horny teenager at times too. She's a bit wiser than before. She's still working towards her goal as captain too.
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Zanpakutô Spirit Name: Roonibara
Appearance: Hana Kuroda (finished) EDIT-AKAITENSHI

Roonibara is a redhead. She's not as well endowed as Hana though
her body is more muscular. She's smaller than Hana by a few centimeters. She
has dark green eyes. She wears a black outfit. Also her personality is more
tomboyish and more intense than Hana. She loves to fight and doesn't like
cowardly tactics. She's honorable and loyal.

Inner World: She resides in a field of tall and luscious green grass
that seems to go on for mile and miles. The sky is a bright blue with no clouds
or other coloring. The only things visible are the grass, sky, and the sun.

Sealed Zanpakutô : Hana Kuroda (finished) Red_warrior_katana_sword_dragon_540

Hana Kuroda (finished) Red_warrior_katana_sword_dragon_540

It’s normal in length as to other zanpakuto.

PhatomTech: N/A

Release: Slice Roonibara!

Shikai Description: Hana Kuroda (finished) 155804

Shikai Abilities:

The Roonibara gives the user the ability to produce many roses at will.
The roses have the ability to eat away at anything they touch, besides
the user. The roses eat away at a users slowly, so they are best used in
a mass supply.

The roses have tiny spiritual beings on them, that eat away at whatever they touch. They cannot leave the roses, or they will have no effect on the target. These beings have the same spiritual energy as the user, thus they will not harm the user.

The roses also have the power to eat away at a spiritual beings energy, and then the user can transfer some of that energy to their own. Through a whole battle they can only take about fifteen percent of their energy. Only about thirty buds could grow. The roses can be planted in the ground, as a safe guard, so that people cannot get into a close range. This will only last a two posts. With three cooldown posts. It's not exactly a shield. More like it's just a barrier.

Someone could get over it but she'd be able to protect herself. The roses are as sharp as the Shinigamis sword, so they can easily pierce through the skin of most beings. There are only about sixty roses in all. Though the thorns are sharp they are still roses. A zanpakuto could easily cut them. Though if they did the petals would fly everywhere giving Hana an advantage. So their weakness is that they can be cut by anyone. It doesn't matter how strong they are.

Bankai Description: N/A (is subject to change)[strike]

[strike]Bankai Abilities:N/A

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R P S A M P L E

Roleplay Sample:

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Spoiler:

A rp sample that is the best of my abilities:

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S K I L L S H E E T

{Please do not fill out the following until your character has a tier}

General Skills

Durability: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
General Speed: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Strength: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Weapon Skill: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner

Racial Skills

Hoho: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Kidou: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Zanjutsu: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Hakuda: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner

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Wed May 04, 2011 1:52 pm

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Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [x]
Appearance is Not Claimed [x]
10 sentences for personality [x]
History is of appropriate length [o]
Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [x]
Powers are described reasonably enough [x]
Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [o]
Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[x]
RP Sample Present (Omit if this is not the first character) [x]
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Comments/Notes: App is fine, but the history isn't. First off, you dont write in First person, you write in third, and its too short aswell. Look at other apps and how they are wrote. That will be a big help to you.
Tier: 2-3+ when fixed

Wed May 04, 2011 2:51 pm

Haha, sorry about that. I always seem to have trouble with the history. (rubs back of head) But it's fixed now. I think it's much better now that I've gotten sleep.

Wed May 04, 2011 3:04 pm

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History is of appropriate length [x]
Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [x]
Powers are described reasonably enough [o]
Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [x]
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JUGGERNAUT GOTTA STOP YOU TIM! *HALTS PORTAL*

Comments/Notes: Alright, Portal said I could come in here look over this App. Now in your Appearance you just explaining why she has a thing for panties which would be going down into personality. The personality is a bit too much mary sue more then anything I seen. First she are flirty, Hyper active she don't like to stay in one spot too much, she basically don't want to make enemies when through your character, and can be sweet at times as well. Along with the case she is extremely stubborn & willing to pick a fight when drunk.. *scratches her head* Make your personality more broad then Mary Sueness... *nods*

Your powers as well, explain them more. If you are aiming for the vice-captain spot this not going to make it very far. Seeing no rival or major battles, she going to be weak plus the fact that your personality and your history are a bit... off when they rub together

Tier: 4-1 Due to lack of deal about anything in your history.

Wed May 04, 2011 8:20 pm

Okay I gave her more flaws and more details in the personality. Hopefully she isn't sueish anymore.

I changed my powers. Though I may need a bit of help if they still aren't explained enough. Like are there any specific things you need to know about them?

I was thinking of finding rivals through RP for now. I added in some major battles she had.

I showed how her personality changed through her past as well. Showing how she went from a religious weak little human to the person she is today.

One more thing... (cries) I couldn't get some parts like on the zanpakuto font size and color to go back to the original template. I tried. (sniffles) So if you could change it back for me that would be great. Or show me how to change it back myself.

Anyway thank you!

Wed May 04, 2011 9:18 pm

((I will soon but grading comes first))

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History is of appropriate length [x]
Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [x]
Powers are described reasonably enough [o]
Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [x]
Skills are not filled in (Omit if a Hollow)[x]
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Notes: Now that is a bit god-mod of powers. The fact they are adsorbing energy not any given amount or percentage of how much energy is taken away nor can it be higher then or near 50%. How many rose bud are allowed to grow *They must be limited*. How long would the bush last? *It can't stay forever* How long would the safegaurd last? *Post wise; like how many post do protection last; what if the person of greater tier then yourself and trying to bash you head, how long would the shield last which a 0-2 bashing at it? How long will a 2-5 tier character was going at it. You need to detail your powers more thick and clean.

Tier: 3-2+ Possibly if she fixes up this power with greater detail

Wed May 04, 2011 10:44 pm

Mmk hun. I did everything you asked. ^^ Though I'm sorry for my app being so messy. I tried to clean it up but for some reason my Microsoft Word isn't compatible... (glares at the damned post options that do not help me) Why do you torture me you damned buttons you? lol

Thu May 05, 2011 3:10 pm

Alright, I have read the application and whatnot and have come across things im not understanding.

1) Shikai Description. What is that? Do you get the entire armour and sword and hair and body change or whatever? id like to see a description written in words about that So I can easily see what the Shikai is doing. Usually a shikai only affects the sword and the bankai does the whole body.

2) I spy Contradiction in your powers. Looking at it, you state that 'Only 30 buds can grow'. Well that's all swell till I get to the next paragraph and read that its suddenly 60. What just happened there? Did they all suddenly explode and multiply or is this an entirely new move? Cause 30 buds = 30 roses you see xD