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Yoshitsune Kobayashi 小林 [Tier: 1-3/Hazard Rank: B| Race: Vizard] Empty Yoshitsune Kobayashi 小林 [Tier: 1-3/Hazard Rank: B| Race: Vizard]

Tue Sep 01, 2020 7:08 pm



Yoshitsune Kobayashi 小林 [Tier: 1-3/Hazard Rank: B| Race: Vizard] 6EdIfMt



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Artist: Carrotwine - Song: Dark Side Of The Road


General Information



Former Family Matters: He was named the youngest leader in the history of his clan. Maintaining his grip on control as a young man up until he ended up leaving the Gotei 13. Being one of the Captains who became a Vizard for some reason. Jaeden had pushed himself far to become better but didn't find much success in that pathway. His family has strived on and become something entirely different from its original set up. As their youngest leader, he's strived to bring a stable nature to his martial arts-based clan. Finding many of his powers and skills to be better. He found out the dark history of the Crow Family and his true origin. However, it seems most of that was just a lie to brainwash him into his actions. He's found proof and now stands stable and ready. While this journey of self-imposed exile for he and his clan has brought much. Jaeden's return signaled a new future for the man who vanished without a trace. He was refreshed and ready for a new journey to unfold for him. Something new and untold was about to begin.


Kobayashi Family Matters: He was adopted into the family formally upon clearing red tape. Making some of this disappear did fall upon the Captain Commander Abalia. The man once known by Jaeden vanished behind a new name and new things. He was joining a family that prided themselves for excellence in swordsmanship. Little else aside from some ceremony as to why he was brought in. The Crow family genetics was desirable to provide a stronger heir.

Jaeden's skills were dormant before joining the family and activated afterward due to some training undertaken. Now he's arrived joining them as Yoshitsune, becoming a member of the family that don't hold claim to the majority of anything. The desire for change and their desire for a potent future conspired in this match made for the future.

His rank is undetermined by them as they've yet to decide where to place him due to family traditions.

Name:Yoshitsune Kobayashi 小林
Age Appearance: Early Thirties
Real Age: 640
Alias: Yoshi
Blood Type:O Positive
Height:One Hundred and Seventy-Three Centimeters (5'8 )
Weight:One Hundred and Forty Pounds
Eye Color: Yellow
Hair Color: Black
Affilation: Gotei United
Squad/Rank:Squad Four/None
Clan Rank: Unknown
Sexual Orientation: Heterosexual
Martial Status: Single
Theme Song:
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Physical Information




Physical Build/Scars: His body while not changed much does have scars from sword wounds. Wearing plenty along his torso to make someone gag. He doesn't mind keeping them despite a replacement being entirely possible. The removal of them would prevent the purpose they serve as reminders. The memories of who he was before he took this name. A small marking of the Crow Family indicating which of the four beasts he was born under. Yoshitsune fell under the Seiryu sign.

Though this is of little import and does nothing to his physical body. He doesn't tower over most people but is imposing in his own way with his yellow eyes. This adds to the prestige one could get from bringing him into their family. Upon joining the family discussions began of the family process of marking him. And discussing where he'd fall in the family tree. As part of his joining his hair was brought back to its original color.

And his hair set up in the traditional style of the family. This while not entirely comfortable as part of their honor.

Attire: The family he joined sports a combat attire almost always. The clothing is designed to be form-fitting and very flexible. Allowing for precise movement. Each piece has representation among the Kobayashi family. From top to the bottom each piece holds importance. Small bits of armor are weaved into the clothing. Providing some practical use and not just-style.

The family are warriors before all things and don't suggest joining lightly. As the clothing the user wears is weighted with a hundred lbs extra on the body. Making it purposely heavy. His gear is special so two hundred lbs were added to it. As they wanted him to undergo the most hardship possible in joining.

They aren't a family of soft people, they train to fight on the frontlines of the Soul Society. To defend and honor the past with the traditions of the future. It is why for each honorable kill as a Kobyashi, a tattoo is added on their back. Designed in a special way that can evoke courage or fear in their enemies. This is as much part of the attire as the clothing one wears to sleep.

But Yoshitsune has killed no men as a Kobayashi yet. So he lacks this on his body or person.



Mental Information



Laid Back: His mindset and way have always been less strict then others. He doesn't view the world as a place where that works. People need to adapt and bend or they risk breaking. So he's always even before becoming this person been that way. He does hide this trait now more often, not wishing to dishonor the combat family he joined. So he strives to hide this part of his demeanor publically.

Though small traits shine through, slouching when not doing anything. Removing his arms from his sleeves and resting them on his obi sash. These are small habits he shows on occasion. Others including just not taking things entirely seriously when it comes to it. People not even noticing he is wearing a weighted top and sandals. These used to slow down the speedster and prevent him from using his primary skill.

It's not laziness but something about him that doesn't change his attitude towards things. He sees his only need to become more serious during combat situations. This is something that will permit him to grow physically stronger and mentally.

Quiet: He speaks very little these days, trying to be quiet and say little. Only because this is a new act to him. He must present as a noble even if it's a minor house. So he tries to act similar to others nobles he has met. But keeping a certain air of confidence around him. Quiet but assured of himself and what he must do. This is the method he's taken towards things.

Less and less of his time has been spent speaking or talking. Say what you must, but make it important. The words must have impact and meaning, don't speak lightly. He doesn't mince words or waste them. Doing his best to become a member of the Kobayashi family. Accepting the doctrine that they put forward. It's something that he still hasn't become good at. The simple fact is he's used to offering more input.

But in this regard, he has fully embraced the silent enigma he needs to be. Someone difficult to get a read on for the sake of his family. Making him hard to see through for nobles or diplomatic enemies alike. He wears a mask beyond the mask, getting through them all would take many years. Finding the man behind the mystery who left behind a trail of bodies. Wouldn't be easy for anyone to decode. Yoshitsune is an anthill, the layers are complex and too deep to read.

Dedicated: He was a Knight under Zin Yuudeshi, one who fought beside Colin. His entire job and beliefs are to carry on the flame Zin passed to him and Colin. He's extremely dedicated to whatever he sets out. When he plants his feet he will not run or back down. This is a simple matter of truth and fact.

He has never once backed away from his word or his beliefs. When a promise is made it is kept. By blood or death, he will not fail in this regard. It shows within his training and how much he's learned over time. Not mimicking but growing into himself. Being not Jaeden but Yoshitsune, the man who got a second chance. After everything Iriko did and so many of his kin did. This change was a welcome one.

The Kobayashi has a loyal warrior now, someone who will fight and embrace their ways while leaving his own behind. Becoming more developed and skilled as a warrior of the family. That is the purpose of the merger and it allows him to show his dedication to the Gotei. By being an ear within Central 46 as it rebuilds.

Intelligent: While this point may not be worth much in some eyes. He did provide the clue to the Wind road that Mirja needed and Ulv used further. And once again with Yoriko, he provided insight with little to go on but what the girl needed. He's shown wisdom and intelligence when it comes to reading situations. Studying and being aware of his surroundings and what must be.

While he is nowhere remotely close to the levels of intellect the higher leveled people show. He is a quick study and astute in his study and vision of things. It's not like he can invent or detect things. He's simply good at doing what must be down. And tries to remain three or four moves ahead of the game.

While this doesn't always work and sometimes leads to his failure. It's something that he has grown good at doing. Over his long life, he's proven himself a tenacious and capable man. Even when the odds have been against him, it's shown a tremendous level of insight for him to execute orders or strategies, changing tactics on the fly.

As seen with Hebi and Honey who'd been captured. He judged the situation to be serious, requiring the release of a Zanpakuto and a combination of his hollow powers. To cut the man's arm off in the end forcing the retreat of Hebi. Though he believes more lingered beneath the surface.


Likes




Swordsmanship: He always feels more at ease when training with his sword. It's rare to see him without one on his person. As even when resting he keeps it at his side. Something about this calms his nerves and relaxes him. While he does wear a mask and complicates reading him. One thing is clear he treats his Zanpakuto well.

He can be found polishing and tending to the blade or hilt. Modifying them slightly to help him in combat. While he does little to the blade it is with the hilt most work went. He doesn't claim to be an expert but he does have a vision. Something he uses to help him get it designed. Or try to get something added on to his equipment. While he doesn't use a lot of equipment, he does carry some.

His Zanpakuto and training since a boy taught him to trust his blade over anything. That it is the one truth in this world that is an iron clade. That the blade will only betray him should he betray it.


Good Fights: He always longs for a worthy challenge, seeking them out to better himself. For in combat he finds himself further and further evolving. Discovering that the short road he once saw. Is so much longer and twisting, it excites him. Makes his blood run wild with enjoyment as it comes.

While he is normally uncaring and tries to keep himself away from boring activities. He does still honor his duty and fight, oftentimes fighting clan members. Accepting random challenges just for the fun of it. He'd not had a good fight in a long time. Having had it been ages since he did enjoy a good one. Tsukiyomi being the last one he enjoyed a blade clash with.

While he has fought Damien a number of times and others, he never gets to sink his teeth in and enjoy the fight. Something always prevents him from relaxing into it. Be it his duties or outside sources that distract.



Kobayashi family: He likes the family that adopted him, because not only did they challenge him. But made him change things to improve himself. To realize people did rely on him again, not just he and his hollow. It was a sensation he'd forgotten. So to them, he holds a special love in his heart.


While no bride has been selected by the clan due to some lackluster problems in that area. For the Kobayashi, the women are the protectors and strong. So trying to find a suitable partner who clicks with him has been an issue. They decided to formally adopt him, while the matter was worked on.

But it must be noted, that among the Kobayashi the women are the dominant force. The men while they are there, they don't stand out as much as he does. Making it harder than general to marry him to someone. As most of the current residents at the Head House don't match him well enough. But perhaps someday one will emerge.



Dislikes



Sour Things: He's always been a sort of picky eater not liking anything sour. The taste is often bitter to him, thus he's not a big tea drinker either. Those flavors are both unenjoyable for him in the long run. And Vait seems to enjoy the bitter things complicating matters. As his taste buds have altered slightly. Bitter foods taste better, but the degree to which he finds them tolerable in small amounts.

So he can drink tea but finds it and coffee revolting. While he won't say it out loud inside he lets it be known. Vait calls it his one weakness of legendary statues that is able to break him down. Yoshi considers it an annoyance that will never go away. It's something that has bothered him since he was young.

His parents insisted on these sour bean noodle dishes that drove him insane. He was lucky to not have gone mad eating those things or gain a permanent squint.

Relationships



The Crow Family:It can best be described as a failed time for him. Where everything and everyone died or faded away. Not one member remains of the family. They are a mirror, the reflection an unknown figure in the distance.

Many of the faces and names aren't forgotten but etched clear into stone. As a time where he was naive and unprepared for it. The burden of leadership that came from it. This was something you only gain through experience. While his exact relationships with each member are gone. This is something he remains mindful of.

Even today he looks back with a grimace at choices made and chances abandoned. This is the price one pays for failure. Such drastic and undeniable failure is something one must accept. To live by virtues and beliefs you must accept the mistakes. But not be crushed by them, failures are a chance to learn. He looks back with some melancholy. But understands that it made him who he is today.

The Kobayashi Family: While this is a generalization of his new family. He's seen as the head of the males for the family. As none of them come close to his power or skills. Making him stand out among them even. While the Kobayashi is trying something different here. Originally men were seen as only good for children.

He was brought in because he was a good catch for many reasons. He understands that this street provided them both. He needed a new start, redemption for the failures. Where better than the Family who lives among the Rukongai as Minor Nobles. They aren't among the five and perhaps never will be. Something about that is alluring to him.

He doesn't seek fame, fortune, or status. He merely seeks to right the many wrongs. By being himself and growing as a purpose. While his relationship with the family has yet to be carved out in full. It's known that he is the strongest male member at this moment.

Vait: The most complicated but most important relationship. That with his Inner Hollow, while his Zanpakuto and he don't have such a bond. His Hollow and he have been together for a long time. Developing respect and even a bond surpassing normal limitations. They are practically a singular being, past stages of losing control.

Vait understands and honors Yoshi's desires even the change of name. They both needed something new and fresh. To no longer be haunted by the mirror images of life. They are beyond being simply two beings, they've embraced and become one. It's at a point where they both will protect the other.

Not just from the world around them but everything. If a larger connection exists in the world. He's yet to discover one that has come as natural or feeling as right as Vait. This is the darkness that doesn't damage the soul. But heals it from the mistakes and helps you up.

They've had struggles in the friendship and developing further. But it has become one where Vait not only respects Yoshitsune but freely submits to him and follows his lead. It is friendship but one where he has become fully connected to his inner hollow. Developing skills that are now combining the nature of his Zanpakuto and his Hollow as a result.



Hoho




Kiroku Utsusemi: Meaning Recorded Cast Off Cicada Shells in it's full translation. This technique requires his mask on to utilize. This technique lets him execute the technique for dodging twice in rapid succession. The gray outline is visible and this does consume a charge of his recorded time.

While this isn't special in the long run, it is a specialized technique that only he can utilize in this function. As it's grey reishi of the recorded time is spent. Making it an effective method for developing and furthering his own skills and practices.

He is considered by many a master of Hoho. Having given hints or shown people the path to making their own way. With Mirja and Ulv it was the Wind Road. With Yoriko it has been her earth power.

Recorded Time Explained: Recorded time, is something his vizard powers allow him to do. The recording only works on a move used in the thread and must be done after the move is cast and before another one is used. Meaning if he used Utsusem it will record that use and then execute it when he plays the recorded move out. In short, he is able to use Utsusem twice by casting off his recorded version.


Speed Clone: Jaeden can make fifteen clones at most with his speed. Capable of performing feats with his shunpo that few others can. This has made him into a rather quick impressive fighter in that regard. By creating solid clones he can fight his enemy in this way. But Jaeden's gone beyond that and came up with new ways to use the Shunpo.

While he does study the older Shinigami's ways. He does believe firmly that the past put them on the right path for the future. That is the skills are done correctly a person can become even greater. Jaeden has taken this and put it into practice with his shunpo. Developing both new moves and keeping the old one dear to his heart. Most of them are flawless moves that are useful in many ways. Innovation would lead to newer finds that this skill known as Shunpo could be so much more.

Given the chance to grow, Speed Clones could lead to great advances in just how fast one could go. Moving at that speed to create fifteen clones with your speed alone was impressive. But what about going beyond that to something more.

These are solid clones and thus he can take damage from what they take. But also he is able to only perform this for two posts only.

He is linked to them in the physical sense where he combines energy into them to create physical speed clones.


Kage Hoho: The Shadow stepping method, something he invented and came up with himself. This allows the user to jump from shadows and travel within them. This technique would be useful for those performing the more dishonorable acts.

It does require a Master or a Grandmaster to perform successfully. It's extremely precise and requires melding yourself to the darkness. It doesn't require a darkness type power or such to perform. Merely the understanding of using Kido and Hoho in concert.

This will let the person merge into the shadow and step, this allows them to hide spiritual pressure and their presence to all but the extremely sensitive. Those able to pick up or discern location on a mere dime. The trick to this is understanding at the pace of the step.

The energy drain is continued for as long as they are in the shadow and to be capable of sensing them within Advanced Focus or Mental Deduction is required.


Ryūsui no Ugoki This is the last creation he has made to date. This doesn't use speed clones or such things. It begins at a leisurely pace and quickly begins swapping. The movements create images around a person, going to fifteen. These aren't real and are mere copies. The rapidly changing pace and the movement he creates leaves behind duplicates.

By switching his speed frequently he's able to confuse some of his enemies. Enabling him to attack from a blindside or an opening. This isn't constant movement like that of creating a speed clone. These are meant to distract and find an opening. One weakness is mass attacks. Something that wipes out entire areas.

These are the types of moves that will make this difficult to deal with. But maybe in that way it works better. People with keen insight won't be fooled and will find the real one. This comes down to their focus and mental deduction, these two skills determine how fast you pick up on it.


Cero


Eye Cero: By focusing the cero into his eyes, he is able to create a highly dens small blast. Able to crack through rock and boulders with ease. The shots are similar to sniper rounds. Fired into something with a highly precise aim. This did take some practice but came naturally.

This came down to his Tengu Genetic skill that his previous family had. It allowed him to channel reishi to his eyes and body effectively better than most. While this isn't fancy too many people as many people can do this feat.

The degree at which is done is where the differences do lie. This technique does require formal training to teach others. As the risk to blow your own skull off is present. So practice is important in regard to this effect.


Sword Cero:He's able to extend the glow of the cero along his blade. Covering it in the attack to use for many purposes. Being able to fire from his sword or use it as an explosion when the contact comes.

This allows for the release of blasts behind his less powerful frame to introduce some damage. An example would be when his sword meets enemies or something used to block it. A Cero blast is released towards the direction he swung his sword.

This works in a similar part to many slash blast attacks that cut and leave a massive amount of damage behind them. This can be used more precisely and thinned out by controlling the edge of his cero.

Making it paper-thin along only the edge of his sword. But this does take away from the blast and focus on cutting.


Gravity Cero: Combination of his hollow and Zanpakuto powers. He's able to release a cero and add intense weight behind the orb. Making it push down on the direction it is traveling in.

This weighted heaviness makes it harder to avoid for those caught in its path. This is the only combination he's done involving ceroes. Since they aren't a specialty of his in the long run.

These are part of his hollow and vizard self though. The part that he accepts and makes the most of with what he has.

The gravity of it is x5 that of Earth's gravity. It would need to be in two arm's reach for the effect to begin.


Recorded Cero: By taking a single charge he is able to release a recorded version of a cero he performed. Holding on to it for that moment so he can release it later. This allows for double cero or other effects.

While it is entirely noticeable when the second one forms. As a gray figure emerges from his body firing the object. Showing a recording that resembles his inner hollow.

This is the power that he is granted through his mask, requiring it to be on for performance to happen. That is the key to any recording he creates of his prior movements.

So in recording, he uses a single recording to do this feat with a cero. And it can be used one at a time until he runs out of charges on his recorded time power listed in his hollow section.

The Tengu Factor



What it means: This is a special genetic trait born into the family. Those with the blood coursing through their veins are able to channel to extreme precision the Reishi they control. Able to influence and bend it to their will. While nowhere near the level of a Quincy, they've shown the capabilities to heighten skills or physical attributes with this genetic trait.

They learn from a young age how to fluidly coat themselves or weapons such as Zanpakuto in reishi. It's considered second nature the same as breathing, though used to only enhance physical attributes. This is the only function Yoshitsune has available to him.


Swordsmanship



Sword Mastery: He has a reputation as an extremely skilled swordsman. Able to take on many of the best with his blade. Even sharing hand in many styles and forms. He was able to fluidly make a new one. Something he could pass down.

While he doesn't claim or boast his skill in the area. Yoshitsune is considered and respected by his peers. For not only his skills or the amount of them. But also the fact that he can use many of them in concert.

It must be noted as he is a pure swordsman in many regards to the word. His Zanpakuto powers only influence Gravity and he's learned to deal with the lack of usage of it. By embracing the weapon of the sword and martial combat in of itself.

That is the path he's chosen to walk among the Kobayashi.


Shigure Shinrin Ryu-Shower in the Forest:



    First Form: Yari no Ame* This is the first school of technique that is in this style. The user will coat the sword in energy, using whatever method suits them best. They will then come towards the target performing a thrusting attack.

    This will, in turn, release the energy from the tip of the blade. Creating a piercing effect capable of going through a building or further depending on tier and mastery.


    Second Form: Kabe Ame* Meaning Wall Rain in its translation, the technique involves the user bringing the sword in front of them. Releasing energy towards the front of their body. This lets them begin to create a wall of reishi and defense towards the front side.

    This does make their back weaker in turn, but it is meant to help to withstand attacks. Things the user normally cannot handle being struck by. The form is more rigid with this one, making it harder to perform right. This doesn't negate damage, only lessen it. By a small margin so the user doesn't die.

    Third Form: Asa no Ame* Morning of Rain, is the name of the third form. The user will lower the sword to their side bringing it down so the sword is by their knee. After this, they will slash upwards sending a blast of energy and concussive force at the enemy.

    This cut is able to go through solid rock and buildings but is a straight line slash able to be seen and avoided. Thus making it a fairly simple one to avoid given the proper preparation.

    Fourth Form: Kokyū no Ame* Breath of Rain is a technique used for higher mobility. It's fantastic for people like Yoshitsune who rely on speed instead of power. This allows him to control his breathing to highly precise levels. Able to reduce the lost stamina by keeping his breathing under control.

    This refines his movements and does help in that sense. But this is a non-offensive form. Requiring focus and careful control to match your breathing. To your enemy's movements and their pulse.

    It lets a person sync up to the person they are fighting better. Though this isn't easy and doesn't work for everyone. As even if you do sync with someone, some people will merely crush you.


    Fifth Form: Hansha no Ame* Reflection of Rain is the name of this technique and involves using an after image-based Hoho clone. Creating the effect of a feint in the attack. While it may not work on everyone, the next strike comes from below.

    Releasing an upwards slash as they go into the sky. Creating a massive force upwards by using their energy to cut upwards. Hopefully doing some damage to the target. This is helpful for finding openings against tougher enemies. But does require some skill in Hoho to pull off.


    Sixth Form: Kaiten no Ame* Rotation of Rain, this is a defensive technique. The user will use Hoho to quickly step creating a high-velocity spin capable of knocking back attacks. The number of steps and power of them depends on the user.

    Commonly the blade is held out giving the area created around them an edge. Which will help them use the momentum to send things off to the side or wound attackers? It must be noted that these steps are short in distance but precise and quick, they do tax the body for those unable to handle it.


    Severnth Form: Nejire no Ame* Twisting of Rain as it is known, is a technique that is both a thrusting and stationary technique. The user will twist the blade counter-clockwise or clockwise with their wrist. Releasing a spinning vortex blast towards their enemy, this is done by thrusting as they twist.

    The attack appears like a drill spinning at its target. Making it effective against some energy attacks, though this can be avoided as it only goes one direction being straight. Even then depending on the user avoiding may not be needed.


    Eighth Form: Dekishi no Ame* Drowning of Rain is the name of the Eighth technique. This is a very quick double energy blast creating a cross slash. This also is extremely heavy in its force.

    Making it capable of carving and crushing rock beneath it. This is a favored technique of Yoshitsune. Being one he goes to the most when it comes down to it. Though it must be noted that he is very capable of using any of them. This attack can use Cero or Reishi based energy. Just depends on the user.


    Ninth Form: Kage no Ame* Shadow of Rain being the name of this move, the user will first swing their sword downwards creating a dust cloud or debris field with the ground. This blast of force then lets them cover the movement and create a clone.

    The user comes from behind having used the moment and high speeds to relocate while hiding their presence. Again this won't work on everyone but is an effective sword technique for the school. And one Yoshitsune himself could use in this function.


    Tenth Form: Shinrin Jisatsu* Forests Suicide is the name, the user will use energy or a cero in Yoshitsune's case. To cover their entire body in the volatile element. Using it as both an increase to speed and their physical attack.

    It is a high amount able to destroy things in the user's path. As they move at intensely high speeds covered in the field. This will go off outwards upon reaching the target. It's known as Forests Suicide because it is risky. The user is charging at an enemy without a plan or thought.

    This move can also backfire and bring injury to the user. Giving it a far greater risk than most techniques used in the school.

    The element will depend on the user, in his case Cero or Gravity based powers would fit into the mold. In short, he has surrounded himself in an explosion that will detonate on impact. Increases will be equal to that of his current Cero or Zanjutsu power. Meaning whatever rank they are is how much is done to him and those in turn, also the physical increase can be measured by combining them with his physical strength and speed.

    The increase is by forty% to his stats of speed and strength for this singular attack.


    Eleventh Form: Shinrin Kaze* Forest Breeze is the name given to the Eleventh Offensive form. The user will thrust one thousand times with the sword. Creating one thousand energy thrusts or sword-based blows coated with energy. This cannot be done multiple times in quick succession.

    It has a three post cooldown and is a good opener but a bad closer for a fight. Because while it does fire blasts, it's not potent blasts. These are lesser due to the number of them. This causes the technique to lack in this regard.

    The blasts are a combination of Cero and Swordsmanship in this case and one lower then both of them combined in terms of skill rank. That will give out the damage as to what they are. When combined for example Elite + Elite = Elite, it doesn't cross the threshold into GM. If one is lower it will be Elite slightly stronger then normal.

    Can only be used twice a thread and has a five turn cooldown. While taxing his energy majorly to perform the feat.

    Twelth Form: Uta no Shinrin* Song of the Forest is the last technique Yoshitsune made, declaring himself done with it. As whoever came next would have to create more or go there own way. This move has two techniques within it and both follow up the other generally.

    The first of the two is a cero and gravity infused slashes that are quickly tossed out into the air. Covering the battlefield in these, where they will explode if struck. Doing a considerable amount of damage. To those who happen to run into the glowing lines of energy. These function as slash landmines, being dangerous to the touch.

    The second or part of this technique is the use of Yoshitsune's gravity power and his hollow mask powers. Creating a push that sends the entire landmines at his enemies, with up to five hundred of them total. This can create a massive blast, the recorded portion of this is everything he's just done.

    He is able to release the recordings of this within a single move without having to do both beforehand. The final technique is performed scorching the earth and creating damage equal to several city blocks.



    Equipment



    Weighted Clothing: His clothing in certain places is weighed down spiritually and physically. Coming out to 200 pounds of weight for him to wear. This is a method of constant training, never staying the same but always growing to push the limitations.

    Breaking through with raw determination and guts is what it takes. To embody the sheer flames of trying your hardest to succeed. That is what Yoshitsune hopes to carry on the will of Zin Yuudeshi by constantly training in his day to day.







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Artist: Carrotwine - Song: Dark Side Of The Road




Zanapkuto




Zanpakuto Name:Bakagiri (馬鹿義理. Foolish Burden)

Reiatsu Color: Gray
Zanpakuto Appearance: She takes the form of a lithe girl wearing gray and torn clothing. With many black chain balls connected to her representing the gravity. Her body seems almost frail to the touch her dirty blond hair falls and her eyes are covered by a bandage. Her teeth are razor-sharp like a sharks.

She spends most of her time being a very languid girl. The shackles on her represent the locks placed on her Bankai. Something that Yoshitsune has created physical manifestations of. She complains often that even breathing is a chore. Unwilling to care about her appearance or anything. She is a side of him that does exist and does represent the laziness within him very clearly.


Inner World Appearance: His world is consistent of space in it's vastness and emptiness. Nothing to draw attention aside from the numerous galaxies at your fingertips. This is part of what makes his inner world not so different from most.

It represents a clear emptiness that existed within him. Something that had been long since forgotten and alone. The darkness of an abyss stares into your soul. That is his inner world, despite the endless abyss it is. This place does have some destruction of stares dying occasionally. Or meteor showers that come into the place.


Sealed Form Appearance: HIs Zanpakuot has a fairly normal appearance like any other katana. `With cylinder guard made of gold with one piece jutting out to the side. The wrap is traditional keeping the standard way Katana's are made. The weapon does shine and seems almost alive to onlookers.

The level of caretaking care of the weapon done by the person Yoshitsune is remarkable. The weapon is always polished and well-tended too. This is part of what makes him an excellent swordsman and Zanpakuto user.



Sealed Powers:




    Gravity Connect* This is the only power his Zanpakuto has in sealed. It lets him alter the gravity of someone or something for five turns. He can either raise the weight on them by five hundred lbs or lower it by five hundred. He's able to do this to himself as he has contact with the Zanpakuto constantly. But there is no time limit for himself.

    This form of power is simple and just something that he's able to do with his Zanpakuto in it's sealed form. Some forms of Gravity slashing are possible. But in terms of raw power, they won't be as strong as the connection of lowering and raising it.

    This does include powers that he uses as they are connected to him by his energy. But that is all he can accomplish within the sealed form. To use this power he requires a physical connection to that person. Contact through swords doesn't work though he can increase a sword's gravity.

    The best way to avoid this is to fight him at a distance as he can't affect the gravity of those close. Also, keep in mind this doesn't mean much to some people as they can muscle through with Reishi or Reiatsu.




Shikai Appearance: His Zanpakuto splits into two Kabutowari the size of Katana. The weight isn't an issue due to them being lightweight One hundred meters of the extendable and retractable chain is between them. This can be sent out or used in multiple ways.

The swords are very much connected, the chain can be extended and fed through the blades. Shooting it towards people as a projectile when desired. Though the design is simple, they are both effective weapons for what they are. This true form is a comfortable one for Yoshitsune. One that he finds a deep-seated comfort and delicate sense of peace in.His Zanpakuto splits into two Kabutowari the size of Katana. The weight isn't an issue due to them being lightweight One hundred meters of the extendable and retractable chain is between them. This can be sent out or used in multiple ways.

The swords are very much connected, the chain can be extended and fed through the blades. Shooting it towards people as a projectile when desired. Though the design is simple, they are both effective weapons for what they are. This true form is a comfortable one for Yoshitsune. One that he finds a deep-seated comfort and delicate sense of peace in.

Shikai Powers:



    Yuzuzai Kusari: Otherwise known as the Guilty Chain, this is a basic skill. It allows him to manipulate the gravity of his chains connected to either sword. These can go up to 100 meters in length, being manipulated with a gravity strength of upwards of 5 times that of earth. This effect allows him to manipulate these chains to cover large distances.

    These chains look like regular black iron chains. Once again it must be stated, that this gravity manipulation may appear like telekinesis at times. Though this merely meant to fool people and trick them to the nature of his Sword. This could be called the Shikai's Special Ability, something that is automatically possible. But it did take training, which he will continue to have to perform in order to progress.

    The gravity is the weight of the burden being manipulated by him. Though it's not perfect, he does have a sizable control on the movement and effect of his weapon.

    Seihon: The chains rapidly shoot through or past the blade to engulf a target. Consuming them in the binding of metal and chains. This allows for a follow-up strike or a throw of some sort. The chains can be used to constrict as well, crushing the enemy beneath them. Dodging them or avoiding them is the easiest way out.

    Keeping in mind these are connected to him, so one could feed attacks along with them as well. Though this move is simple, binding his target or allowing him to grab multiple things with it.

    Omoni: Damage he takes will begin shattering and breaking the chains. This doesn't mean the damage doesn't happen, this just means he shares the damage to his Zanpakuto's chains. These pieces break off and leave shards along the way. Causing a debris-like field to form as he moves around.

    While this is of no danger on its own, it is something to note when dealing with him or his weapon. Keep a vigil watch on the broken pieces of the chain for something may happen.

    These chains can be used to create an attack, the broken pieces can be sprung on those he is fighting. Fired like javelins at the enemies he selects.



Bankai Power:



    Bankai Name:Bakagiri Batōmyōō [馬鹿義理 馬頭明王, Avalokiteśvara's Foolish Burden]

    Bankai Appearance: His Bankai takes the figure of a being coming from the air or ground behind him. It is large, towering over five-story buildings with relative ease. The scope of it and its figure takes the appearance of Kannon but in its Horse adjourned state.

    Massive chains that could wrap around buildings or large objects are seen. These six chains linger hanging down the body of the massive being. In its six arms, it has blades and is holding chains in several.

    Able to offensively fight with Yoshitsune, though that isn't the purpose of the large Bankai by any measure. Its power doesn't lie in appearance or stature though these are intimidating matters.

    Bankai Power: All damage he takes, be it energy or physical based. Is shared with the Bankai itself and stored as damage. This doesn't take away his pain or help him regenerate. In of its own essence, it will take damage beginning to crack and show signs of damage to its form.

    Cracks begin forming, in the swords and chains themselves. As well as the large body of the Horse-Headed Kannon. Eventually, it will hit a climatic amount and release all the damage it has absorbed and taken. This damage is released all at once in a massive thirty-mile radius circle going thirty miles in all directions.

    Those struck will experience injuries akin to a blade, being sliced rapidly and cut with the attack if struck. Those beyond that area will avoid the slicing whirlwind. The sound does have a howling to it, which does give some warning beforehand.

    It must be noted he can use his Bankai to fight with him or defend himself. It must be noted this isn't the final form of his Bankai, only the early stages of its growth.



Hollow/Vizard



Inner Hollow Name:Vaitspiritas
Inner Hollow Reiatsu Color: Grey

Inner Hollow Appearance: The figure of his Innerhollow has a face similar to Yoshitsune's. Almost like a black image of himself, wearing what he wears but everything is grey in color and appearance. The two resemble one another in part due to a drastic connection between them.

Though he could be called the opposite of Yoshitsune. There are some differences in the negative image people see. The way he walks and carry's himself with something like a darker impression of his partner.

In every sense of the word, it is like someone took an image of Yoshitsune and hit the negative button in an art program. Turning on the inverted color and showing something that doesn't think or feel within the normal sense.

Though Vait is different from his partner, the two have a strong bond and relationship. To the point that in his day to day, sometimes Yoshitsune looks like Vait. Showing just how far and connected the two of them really are.


Inner Hollow Personality: Once upon a time he was lamentable and sad, driving Jaede into depression. Focusing on the past that burned the man over and over. The memory and replaying of tragic events over and over. He sought to effectively cause guilt to crush his partner.

Though in some periods after the two met and bonded, this stopped. Though it didn't change his personality. Sometimes he couldn't help but dig that dagger in. Now that he looks back on it, he feels regret. That he hurt a friend and ally so dearly.

But Yoshitsune and he both changed, they buried the past behind them. Embracing a future that they could build. With their hands together, pushing past the normal limitations of Vizard an Inner Hollow. They set out to knock down those walls.

Vait acknowledges and fully respects Yoshitsune and will honor anything the male chooses to do. In his stead or otherwise, they fight not alone but as one.


Vizard Mask: Upon the formation of it an hourglass crown appears over his head. A sign of the power his hollow wields. Rounded and creating the skeleton figure that almost appears like a demeanted Samurai mask. It forms over his face complete with small jagged horns coming from the two points on the side of the mask.

Making the appearence of a demon Samurai appear as it slowly deforms with the top pieces hourglass. Behind the black empty eye holes soon a bright glow fills them as his eyes are shown. Luminated in a radioactive yellow glow.




Powers:





    Recorded Time*Jaeden's hollow is able to create a recording of his previous move. This let's Jaeden record one instance of something he has done. He may only do one at a time not able to record multiple at a time. Or record other people's techniques. Jaeden's able to unleash these however at any moment he selects. These create a grey/black colored reiatsu. Making it possible for others to see the effect occurring.

    This represents the darkness and grief of the past haunting Jaeden. So while his mask is active Jaeden has 30 charges of this power at his usage. Though these aren't perfect effects and can't use other people's techniques. When activated a second black and white form will become momentarily visible from Jaeden's body. This in essence is the recorded move in time, to keen observes it will be easily noticed to others it will merely blend in with his reiatsu.

    This can copy Kido, Cero/Bala, Hoho, Sword techniques, and regular melee skills. But they must be Jaeden's and no one else.

    How it Works: This doesn't allow him to reach out to distant threads. He has to have just used the power in that thread. And while the cost is slightly less then last time it isn't free. It will still cost him energy to perform it again, the difference is it doesn't have the wind-up time or motion that others do. A gray ghost of him will appear physically near him and perform the end effect.

    This gives ample time to see it coming and avoid it, once the move is executed the charge is effectively used. Taking it from 30 to 29 or more depending on how many that skill costs to reuse. But in essence, once the 30 are out, he can no longer use this power for that thread. Later versions of this are intended to be used as a healing mechanism for him as a regeneration based Vizard. This is merely the base level, the powers do not gain strength or become better.

    They are merely recorded and kept until he chooses to use them from that thread. When activated he could be performing a different move. Making this an effective way to use two moves at once, but it isn't free.





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History


Jaeden was born to Mizuki Crow and Kazuya Crow. The mother and father both were impressed with their child in his first moments of birth, they instantly knew he was going to be special. Jaeden showed signs of greatness early on, Mizuki and Kazuya were both concerned as one should be when their child in the Branch family shows such deadly skills. Jaeden was showing signs of being a true swordsman at the young age of one. His father was frightened and so he had Jaeden's powers sealed, the boy's hair used to be white like snow. His Mahogany eyes remained, but his hair turned brown slowly. Letting the color of white that once was vanish. His nature seemed to change ever so slightly, something that the father was warned about. Because sealing the amount of power away that was would lock everything. His Zanpakutō, his hollow, things they would never know about.

Jaeden's childhood was simple and fun at times, but he was picked on by the main house often. Told he would die, someday he would pay for it. He had a single friend, her name was Rin Crow. She was a fun little girl who was full of fire. She could scare even the most well let's say, strong adult. Rin was a fireball of personality, she was going to be sent out with Jaeden one day to fight till they died. This was known, his father thought perhaps he could save Jaeden if he locked away the Dragon. Shackling its power that was so great that even he trembled at the first sight of it. Jaeden and Rin played together remaining close as they seemed to try and avoid the Main House. The two were a fierce pair, the Main House sent their best to test them as children. Jaeden and Rin killed them all, it wasn't something that anyone ever learned about. It was spread that that swordsman simply left. But the fact remained that they were able to kill trained professionals just on a slight amount of skill.

It was decided about five years later when Jaeden was ten that he Rin and several other children were going out there to die. They were sent out, but the strangest thing happened. Jaeden's friends and he were living and killing hollows without an effort, Menos Grande Gillians were losing to mere children. Jaeden directed them and lead them as a true Leader, at the age of ten he was showing the promise of a leader capable of bringing about change to a level that no one would ever truly understand. They fought for days without rest, showing stamina that few had. But it was there that it happened, something worse than a Gillian appeared and it tore them apart. Jaeden lost himself in rage, consumed by it, he killed the creature. Striking it down and several others, while he sat wounded and bloody at his friend and only love Rin's side. He picked her up and began to walk back, the others had died but he remained. Not letting go of the one precious person in his life, Jaeden killed thousands of hollows on his way back. He only used one arm to do it when he began this.

The Dragon's Fury was evident, Jaeden didn't stop there it seemed his rage had been triggered and Jaeden would avenge those people his peers without fail. He went to the main house slaughtering them all, he killed thousands of them in a single night. The Main House members barely escaped with their lives intact. Jaeden had brought about such pain that no one would ever forget, he hadn't realized it at the time but the entire Branch Family had begun fighting with him. He'd killed two hundred Main House members in a single evening. Jaeden wept openly as he knew it wouldn't bring Rin back, his father Kazuya thanked god his son had stopped. The War of the Crows was going to begin soon and Jaeden would play a role in this for the rest of his life No one would be ready for how much of the Dragons Fury would be felt, his eyes of such a strange color seemed to burn with fury as he readied himself for it.

Second Arc; War of Crows


Shortly after the fight against the hollows, Jaeden decided he would wage a war and end this Main House and Branch Family system. Still only ten years old he began his war against the Main House, this war would last for the better part of Five Hundred Years. Jaeden's father spread rumors that his son was really Two Thousand Years old as a tactic, it was to make people fear him on the enemy side and respect him on their side. Jaeden hated the idea of lying to people, but it worked and he decided to obey his father. Kazuya sighed of a relief when he learned his son would listen to him. Jaeden's training began and the things his father forbid him to do went up, the styles he made were not allowed. His father ordered him to remain in the normal style, the truth was Kazuya was fearful of his son's powers. He cared that Jaeden would kill this entire clan. Kazuya was known to be a great seal user and Kidō specialist.

His spell lasted five hundred years after all. Jaeden waged this war without end, he'd never before fought like this. He fought in wars and won, known for his strength when fighting against hundreds of enemies twice his age. This made him a fierce swordsman, even more, the war of the Crow Clan was something bloody and the stories hit several of the people around the Rukongai. They were a skillful bunch of people who did do things differently, Jaeden showed the eyes of a tactical mind. He picked spots where people wouldn't be in harm, he moved the location of battles and made his enemy go where he wanted them. He pushed them back over and over before he finally managed to draw the enemy into ambushes and so on. Jaeden's skills were something so frightening that upon the last battle the Main House made a choice they would regret for the rest of their lives.

They decided to kill Kazuya and Mizuki, slaying both of them in the belief that Jaeden's skills were something that was from them. His mother had been pregnant when slain, making a miscarriage happen. The Dragon's Fury was something coming up again, Jaeden killed the pregnant wife of the Main House Leader. Whom asked him why his age when this happened was around Three Hundred. Jaeden's days of youth were gone and he became what one would call a dangerous man. He killed in anger, though it wasn't like he lost his nerve or became someone or something else. The Dragon simply avenged his people without giving up, however someday the fury that he gave out wouldn't be enough. Jaeden's brown hair would be forgotten someday and he would never forget the days of War. All because a friend was taken from him, justice seemed served in the end. Jaeden's final battle with the Main House Head was one that seemed to last forever, he fought for days with the man. They both exchanged blows for what seemed like days, but finally Jaeden took the upper hand and killed the elder of the Main House. Thus ended the War of Crows, blood, and thousands of the clan were dead by the end of it.

Third Arc; A Captain is Born and Killed


Jaeden under the words of his friend the former Siren Captain Kaminari took a job as the leader of Squad Eight. His first mission he got threatened by Central 46, that his age and family would be shown to be killers and slain unless he did the task. He tried his best to hide it, but when he needed to pick people. He ended up picking Kaminari and someone else named Shinji though Jaeden wasn't able to remember boy's name. He didn't really care, it was here his friend and he were left without a means to figure things out any further. Jaeden seemed to be lost, missions that came and went were constant. After that man who was his former was declared a traitor he was sent in to do the job himself to the Zaraki district. Jaeden did the mission with a great deal of heartbreak. His world seemed ever changing and ever evolving.
Kimiko and his vice Captain, those two were the most interesting of people. Jaeden swore he would guard them no matter what it took. Jaeden was on a mission with Kimiko when the female got hurt by his Zanpakutō, he decided to take her to the Fourth Division. Showing signs of his Kidō skills when he decided that he'd done enough damage, he set the female down and left her there. Jaeden seemed to be in a depression, Shunsui Kyoraku did his best to encourage his replacement that things were alright. Jaeden and the former Captain spoke very frequently and Jaeden trained with him a couple times. Shunsui figured out he was sealed as well, commenting that being shackled wasn't good for the health. Jaeden learned from these sessions that he wasn't alone, him and Seiryu had another friend within. Azael rested within him, the hollow got him hurt badly at one mission which Jaeden was covering for his Squad. He no longer wanted them to be involved in clan matters.

He was badly hurt to the extent that Kaminari had seen him and decided she would have a match with him, Jaeden had to acknowledge her powers of combat. He studied her and got the feeling that his powers weren't at their best right then. Azael was taking to much power to control, it wasn't easy keeping the beast within him back and trying to fight her was an even harder task than that. Jaeden wasn't even at half his full power when he fought her. Feeling his form had suffered greatly from fighting her, she seemed to have a grudge against those who considered her like a friend. He never did understand it, but Jaeden's career as a Captain was remembered by his men and Kyoraku. They kept in mind that he was a fine leader and put others before himself constantly, it was what lead to him becoming what he did. Jaeden had managed to take control of Azael before his battle with Zefonse, he made a couple choices upon speaking with those within himself. That Jaeden would be leaving the Gotei 13 and he would make it look as though he followed.

When it happened against Zefonse, Jaeden felt the time was ripe to do it. He knew Zefonse would be able to shut down that form, he could make it look official at least. The hollow even took control to make it look realistic. Jaeden had decided however within his inner world that this had gone far enough, he would follow his father no longer. And when this choice was made after he took a beating that no man should, the seal that once held the Dragon back broke in half. Jaeden's memory of things is foggy at best and he cannot remember what happened. But it was after the battle he joined the Vizard Corps because a former Captain is such a skilled creature for anyone to have. Jaeden cannot remember details from his fight with Zefonse, his memories are still recovering from the sheer damage taken. He trained with the founder of his family Damien Crow. The very first Crow to walk, he learned and surpassed his teacher with ease.

The Dragon's Journey would only continue forward from here on.


End of Crow History


A New Future: It is now and here that a new future can be grasped. He cut off Doctor Hebi's arm, forcing the mad scientist to retreat. Sending him back on his heels. While the details of what happened there are still being gathered.

He did act swiftly and correctly in the Gotei's interests. Showing decisive intellect and skill when the moment called for it. Though this has been something as time marched on he did better.

Earning praise from the new Captain Commander and managing to outshine his current Captain. While he has no plans on exiting or leaving the Gotei. A strange letter would arrive. Following a summons with Captain-Commander Abalia. A request was brought in to adopt him into a Minor Noble family.

They sought him as he was strong genetically and otherwise. He'd earned a reputation as the true last of his line. Leaving none alone anymore who could carry his genetics.

The Kobayashi, though a Matriarchal society decided to jump for him. While they do seek more powerful women to undertake the blood ritual and join. They were more than happy to snap him up as the Patriarchal society within had yielded less than stellar results.

So with this request given to him, he made the choice to join them and abandon the name once given. To leave behind the Crow and the family he'd lost. A new start was what the Commander had promised and he took it.

Redemption by keeping an eye on a family within Central 46. And earning prestige to raise his rank and name now, he would fight and honor the Gotei and the Kobayashi name. This is the new start to his story, the new beginning, the new hope.





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General Skills
  • Durability: Advanced
  • General Speed: Elite
  • Strength:Advanced
  • Martial Skill: Elite


Racial Skills
  • Power Augmentation Elite
  • Cero: Advanced
  • Mask Protection:: Advanced
  • Hollow Control: Elite


Hollow Skills
  • Acid Skill: None
  • Garganta : Beginner
  • Cero/Bala: Advanced
  • Regeneration: Elite


Shinigami Skills

  • Hoho:Master
  • Kidō: Advanced
  • Zanjutsu:Advanced
  • Hakuda:Advanced

Will Skills
  • Willpower/Determination: Elite
  • Mental Deduction:Advanced
  • Focus: Advanced


Hazard Ranking
  • Overall: A
  • Power:A
  • Influence:B
  • Resources: A




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For sake of helping out stuff, I will include the previous app as Jaeden Crow right here below it and can use this post for something at a later date.

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Application Checklist
  • Name [X]
  • Appropriate Age [X]
  • Gender [X]
  • Appearance Present [X]
  • Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
  • 10 sentences for personality [X]
  • History is of appropriate length [X]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [o]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [o]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
  • Skills are not filled in[X]


Will Skills
  • Willpower/Determination: N/A
  • Mental Deduction: N/A
  • Focus: N/A


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  • [b]Power: N/A
  • Influence: N/A
  • Resources: N/A


Fixes:
Hoho


Kiroku Utsusemi: What is recorded time? And how does this translate into energy spent? Is there anything that makes this special, and different from simply utilizing hoho twice in rapid succession?

Speed Clones: What does this actually do beyond creating 15 afterimages of himself? How does he take damage when one of these are hit? Is he actually in 15 places at once, or are these manifestations linked to him and given substance by energy? The ability itself is written in a way that is convoluted and hard to understand, which makes it so that it’s hard to grasp how the ability functions as a whole. The above questions where just a few of those i had when gauging the functionality/ practicality and fairness of this ability. These things need addressed and the ability needs re-written.

Kage hono: (shadow step?): How does melding into the shadows functionally allow him to hide his energy signature from combatants. How does one determine when they would be considered “capable” of sensing him? These two questions need to be answered in this ability, and a subsequent energy drain indicator needs to be added, or some sort of counter-affect that would hinder an individual from spamming this infinitely.

cero

Gravity Cero: How much weight does this have to it? What is the range that the excess weight will affect others? Does this have more energy drain than his average cero?

Recorded cero: You need to specify how much record time this uses. How long a cooldown it has after use.

Swordmanship


Tenth Form: Shinrin Jisatsu: You need to define how much of an increase he gains from this “volatile element” as well as specify the repercussions of utilizing the technique (you do specify if can backfire and injure the user, but this is too vague for purposes of what you want the ability to do). As it is right now, the sword technique is far to vague to actually gain a good grasp on how potent (or weak) it is.

Eleventh Form: Shinrin Kaze: how potent are these sword blows? Are they weak, or does he put considerable effort into them? How much energy or stamina does it cost for him to rapidly strike a thousand times in a very brief period of time? These are the things i need to be added to the ability before i can gauge if it’s approvable. As it is, the ability is too vague to approve.

Zanpakuto

Gravity connect: Define how he is able to pick someone out to use the ability on (is it via vision, direction of his hands, etc) Define how someone might counteract this, because as it is right now it technically falls under the realm of absolutes. Define energy consumption.

Shikai


Gravity compression: How much energy does this drain? I also need to see a cooldown for this ability.

Bankai


Mass Gravity push: First off, the ability in itself is completely unapprovable as it is. As it stands the one off ability would encompass something slightly larger than half the size of texas or over 400,000 square kilometers. Even if it left him severely weakened the character in question simply wouldn’t have the reserves to pull off a feat of that scale given even at 0-5 a characters max potential can only affect an island. Even without that being an issue the ability itself is far to vague in affect and potency to approve as it is.

Vizard Powers

Recorded time: How does he manipulate time to affect his own abilities and store them? Does he have to utilize this in a previous thread to store the ability and then he has to note which thread he stored it from? Or can he just use this to use extra abilities with no energy drain? Since if it’s the former then this ability would be fine, you’d just need to rewrite it to include that clause. If it’s the latter then it’s unapprovable because it gives him an unfair advantage over others, seeing as being able to utilize 30 different abilities without any energy drain or cooldown is game-breaking in many different ways. In short you need to elaborate more on how he stores his own abilities, and then give further explanation on what requirements there are to then reconjure that ability via recorded time.

Tier: N/A (pending changes)
Hazard Rating: N/A
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Everything has been addressed if the Bankai still requires a change I will acquiesce.
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Hazard Rating: N/A [/justify][/mod]
Shizuo wrote:[mod]

Application Checklist
  • Name [X]
  • Appropriate Age [X]
  • Gender [X]
  • Appearance Present [X]
  • Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
  • 10 sentences for personality [X]
  • History is of appropriate length [X]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [o]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [o]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
  • Skills are not filled in[X]


Will Skills
  • Willpower/Determination: N/A
  • Mental Deduction: N/A
  • Focus: N/A


Hazard Rankings
  • [b]Power: N/A
  • Influence: N/A
  • Resources: N/A


Fixes:
Hoho


Gravity Cero: Define the distance in which a individual has to be from it for the gravitational flux to affect them.

Tenth Form: Shinrin Jisatsu*: By an increase i mean give a descriptor of how much faster it makes him. Like “He’s now able to move 30% faster, etc. “ It’s hard to gauge how potent the ability is if I don’t know how strong the boost itself is.

Eleventh Form: Shinrin Kaze*: Increase cooldown so that i can only be used twice a thread with a 5 turn cooldown. If he’s able to do a thousand cero in the span of a second I’d assume that this would be something extremely taxing for him to do. As well it would be fairly draining on his reserves.

Gravity Well*: Define radius of affect.


Tier: N/A (pending changes)
Hazard Rating: N/A
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[quote="Shizuo"][mod]

Application Checklist
  • Name [X]
  • Appropriate Age [X]
  • Gender [X]
  • Appearance Present [X]
  • Appearance Described in Appropriate Length OR Picture is Visible [X]
  • Appearance is Not Claimed [X]
  • 10 sentences for personality [X]
  • History is of appropriate length [X]
  • Powers are not Godmod/Overpowered [X]
  • Powers are described reasonably enough [X]
  • Application/RP Sample is not in First Person [X]
  • Skills are not filled in[X]


Will Skills
  • Willpower/Determination: Elite
  • Mental Deduction: Advanced
  • Focus: Advanced


Hazard Rankings
  • [b]Power: A
  • Influence: C
  • Resources: D


Fixes:

Tier: 1-4++
Hazard Rating: B
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