Tindera

Sat Feb 12, 2011 2:55 pm

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Name: Tindera
Age: He look's 15 but he is really 500
Gender:Male

Shifter Appearance:

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True Appearance:

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Personality: Tindera is very laid back not having a problem with most people or thing's. He could care less what every one else is doing unless it involve's him. And if it does involve him he still does not take serious. For life is meant to be fun a lived to the funniest way possible. Tindera can usually be found training. For he love to stay in shape. So that he can show people how buff he is. Since he is very full of him self some time's. But it does not stop people from liking him. Since he is very fun to be around. Since he loves to make people Laugh.

He love's playing joke's one people like by taking there close. When they are in the shower or gluing them to there chair's. But never anything to serous that might get some body hurt or mad. Even tho a lot of people do get mad at his joke's. But even with his laid back joking side. Tindera can get very serious when the time call's for it . Since he know's to never joke when life's are on the line.

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History .
Birth
Tindera was born to Zanza and Kira. His Mom Kira was a fine doctor one of the best in the clan, and his Father Zanza was one of the clan's best Fighter's in the world. Being able to take 3 people of his own skill all at one time. Which was also the reason he was selected as the back up leader of the clan. Beining in charge of a the thing's that the leader could not handle if he got to busy or if he where to die and they had not yet found a new leader . They where a small familly of six. All Boy's Tindera was the youngest of the six. But he was a very interjetic kid alway's running around and playing. Pretending to be a great Ninja like his father and other people in his village with his friend's. And with all of his brother's on there way to being great Ninja there was a lot of presshure on him to follow after them. Since Most of them where busy he did not get to see of hang out with them a lot. So he spent most of his time with his slightly older brother Niashi or Sashi for short who had just finished the ninja exam's. So Sashi would spend most of his free time he had training Tindera in the way of the ninja.Like alway's staying in the shadow's and only fight when forced to. So that he would be ready for his time to start the Ninja Academy in a couple of month's

As Tindera started the ninja training he was one of many kid's he where starting the training. Of the 18 Kid's who started Tindera looked the most promosing the teacher's thought. Being that his family was none for being great ninja. And that every one could tell that he realy wanted this by the way that he acted. He tried his hardest with each and every thing he did . Never giving up no matter how many time's he failed. He was dedicated and being one of the few Graceling that had the true knowledge of the clan ability's. So Tindera 's instructor's tried to give him harder work then the rest of his class to test his ability's. That started to make some of the parent's made that they where giving Tindera special attention. So they had to stop giving him harder work then the rest of the class. So he started to get restliss at the Academy and just stoped paying attention and started disrutping the class with prank's and other usless thing's. This was something that the instructor's started to get angery at. So they did the only thing they could they told Tindera's Parent's but this did not help. For Tindera saw know point in him just going to the Academy any more he could do all the thing's they where teaching him with know problem. So what what was the point of him siting there and learning what he could allready do. It made not point to him. But no one could get into Tindera's head that there where a lot of thing's he was not ready for. So they did the only thing they could think of they proved that he was wrong and that he did not know every thing he needid to know. So they got his older brother ninja in his age group. So he Tried to talk some since into his brother but he could not get into his brother's hard headed head. For his brother was mad at him for leaving him and going of to be a great ninja with out him. So as Tindera looked at Niashi . Black and white's eye's , and told him "why should i listen to you.

All you did was leave me here to rought after you told me we would alway's be side by side". As Tindera said this he started to build up anger. Then he lunged at Niashi with a Kuni in his hand Screaming "Die you back stabing trader"! So Niashi did the only thing he could do he fought back. As Tindera was inche's away from him Niashi pulled out a small knife. Then he ducked as Tinder thrusted the kuni at his throught and hit him right in the stomach with the knife. As Niashi did this Tindera would fall to the ground trimbling. As Niashi looked at his brother's trimbling body he could only think that he had took it to far. So he Picked up his brother and ran back to there house in the village. As Niashi entered the living room of there house holding his trembling brother's body. His Mother Kira went into a tremble of shock as she looked at her youngest son Tindera Trembling on his brother's shoulder's dripping blood . She then took a instint look at her other son Niashi and in very angry tone said " Niashi what have you done to my baby boy. Niashi looking at his mom with a very worried face said " well i wint to talk some sinse into him but he attcked me so i stabbed him with a knife , but i may have over done it just a little bit. So you may have to heal him before he die's mother". With a very evil look Kira looked at her older son Naishi and said "Lay him down on the couch and get me some hot towl's and. ice cold water". "And Niashi i am not threw with you just remember that. With that Tindera's mother Kira started using the clan's secret style medicine on him to heal up the main part of the ingery. Then took a dry towl and put in the bucket of ice cold water and put it on tindera's forhead. To cool down his fever. As Niashi whached his mother healing his little brother. He could only think of what she would do to him when she was threw. Niashi new that his mother was crazy and come up with a harsh and tuff punishment. Like the time she left him and his older brother Zanji in the desert for lying to her. But she did come back for them after two week's. But those two week's in the desert realy did change Niashi and his brother Zanji they learned how to diffind for them self and not take stuff for granted. But Niash did not want to leave his brother Tindera's side after he was the one to do this to him. It took Tindera's mother Kira a little longer then she had thought it would to heal Tindera but she did it. As Tindera Started to wake he could not remember anything after he lunged at his Brother Niashi. Then all Tindera could think of was that he had acadentlly killed his brother. But then he heard his brother's voice and could see the bandage's around his Stomach. And he new that Niashi had done some thing to him. So as Tindera tried to get up from the bed his mother and brother walked in and told him not to strain the wound he was not completly dead yet. So he set back down and ad his mother and brother told him what had happened. And then Tindera knew that he was not ready. So he would start paying attention at the dojo again and train hard to beat Niashi One day. But Tindera could not get stronger on his own to beat his brother. Know matter how hard he tried. So one day when he was training a strange man showed up. This man Could tell That Tindera wanted power. So he walked over to him and said " I can give you what ever you want i can make you the most powerful person in the world. If you do a small favor for me in return for all that power". As Tindera herd This man speak these word's he could only think of beating his brother. So before The man could finish he said yes. So the man gave him a pin and and a contract and told him to sign it. But with out even reading it Tindera signed. And next thing he New he was this man's guard. Forced to do what ever he was told. This was how Tindera got into the demon world. But lucky Tindera the contract was only for 500 year's. So know he getting ready to start his own life a s demon

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Natural Abilities: all of the Demon ability

Unique Abilities: Fire Ability: The pyrokinetic ability to create and control fire .Fire is the element of power, consisting of overpowering force tempered by the unflinching will to accomplish tasks and desires. The Fire ability use the internal body heat as a source to create fire. With this ability The user is able to shoot Fire stream's make fire Blade's ,Fire shield's and other thing's. He can also control the size and intensity of any nearby flames and can draw them in and manipulate them at wil. The Fire is 300 C

Shishi Mōdo Appearance:

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Shishi Mōdo Abilities: The Earth Ability:the geokinetic ability to manipulate earth and rock, in all its various forms. With the earth ability Tindera is able toevitating nearby pieces of earth and stone of numerous sizes. Also can forcibly sink his opponents into the ground, imprisoning them or even suffocating them in earth. he can cause Earthquakes/Fissures. And much More like shaping earth into item's and even create a wave of earth that they ride on and use as a form of transportation.

Lava Ability : By putting his fire and Earth ability together Tindera get the ability of lave. He can do all the same the thing's with earth and fire with this one like Making a Lava wave that burn's everything that it touches. this ability is 1000 C

Satsugai Tsūru: Spoiler:

Mukō Jōtai Appearance: He look's the same

Mukō Jōtai Abilities: Plasma ability: . The user is capable of calling moderate [8-10 ft.] sized waves of Plasma at a time to their will as well an virtually manipulating it into shapes and objects of will. He can make A ball, the size of a typical baseball, of Plasma is formed into the user's hand. The ball is condensed through squeezing until it's the size is that of a normal tennis ball. It is then thrown or dropped wherever the user wishes. It will blow up within a couple of seconds of being released from the user's hand. The ball of condensed plasma will literally explode due to the already excited atoms being compressed and looking for a way to escape. The explosion releases a combination of flame and static with the magnitude of an actual frag grenade. He can also make it rain plasma and many other thing's. The Plasma is 1500 C

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Role Play Sample:[link]http://narutodivinity.darkbb.com/t272-entering-the-village [/link] ( i am oblivion )

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(DO NOT FILL THESE OUT UNTIL TIER IS GIVEN!!!!)

Racial Skills

Za Koa Manipulation: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Spells/Summonings: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Jigoku Sokudo Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Akuma Kyōdo: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner

General Skills

Durability: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
General Speed: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Strength: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner
Weapon Skill: Master/Advanced/Adept/Beginner

Sat Feb 12, 2011 3:24 pm

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Comments/Notes:
I do not like what I see here. First, and foremost, this isn't Naruto. DO NOT include any Naruto related things in your history. Thus, your history is unacceptable. Not to mention that you DIDN'T mention how he ended up becoming a demon. Did he die? did someone transform him into a demon through ritual. Where is he now, and how did he get to where he is now in the Demon World? Remove ALL Naruto related things (Jutsu, Ninja rankings, Ninja villages, etc), and model the style after Bleach. I do reccomend reading up on some history of this site so you know how to properly develop his history.

Second of all, for powers, you need to DESCRIBE MORE. How exactly does he use fire? Does he shoot out fireballs? Does he surround himself in a ring of fire. Does he burst into flames? How strong is his fire? How well can he control it? Put MORE DETAIL. At least a couple of good paragraphs to describe how he can use fire. Same thing with Shishi Mōdo Abilities. More detail must be put on how he manipulates plasma, lava, and the shadows. Exactly WHAT demons can he summon to his side? What can they do. A single line will just not work.

DESCRIBE YOUR WEAPON if you say he gets a "Sword". Is it a broadsword, a Katana? Put a picture so that people can get an idea what the sword looks like.

Overall, this app is DENIED., please try again.
[B]Tier:Once you fix your app.